Australian rePublic wrote:Australian rePublic wrote:
complains @@RANDOMNAME@@, a citizen who is disgusted by the idea.
Can you give this speaker some more character please?
How?
Most citizens would be disgusted by the idea, why is it this one John Doe gets to meet LEADER? Give him some kind of job or a specific interest that would make his invitation to the office plausible.
Also, option 2 feels like the dismiss button. The speaker isn't proposing that LEADER take any new action. He has to propose something.
Australian rePublic wrote:who captains tourist expeditions on replicas of Medieval ships for the @@ANIMAL@@ City Maritime Museum
I would just say "who captains tourist excursions on replicas of Medieval ships around @@ANIMAL@@ City harbour."
Also, option 3 is a bit long. Can you take the scissors to it?