How about this:
"Creating and managing channels of communication for Lazarenes that lasted from 2016 until the fall of the illegitimate Khanate coup government in 2018"
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by The Python » Wed Apr 14, 2021 11:52 pm
by Bhang Bhang Duc » Wed Apr 14, 2021 11:57 pm
The Python wrote:Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:No, just be creative. “Creating and managing secret channels of communication.....” would work.
How about this:
"Creating and managing channels of communication for Lazarenes that lasted from 2016 until the fall of the illegitimate Khanate coup government in 2018"
Pierconium wrote:I see Funk as an opportunistic manipulator that utilises the means available to him to reach his goals. In other words, a nation after my own heart.
RiderSyl wrote:If an enchantress made it so one raid could bring about world peace, Unibot would ask raiders to just sign a petition instead.
Sedgistan wrote:The SC has just has a spate of really shitty ones recently from Northumbria, his Watermelon fanboy…..
by The Python » Fri Apr 16, 2021 10:15 pm
by Warzone Codger » Sat Apr 17, 2021 7:40 pm
by The Python » Sat Apr 17, 2021 8:10 pm
Warzone Codger wrote:Support. Altmoras is a leading moralist of our time.
by The Python » Thu Apr 22, 2021 3:23 pm
by ROM » Fri Apr 23, 2021 11:52 am
by HumanSanity » Fri Apr 23, 2021 12:35 pm
ROM wrote:Personally I feel like Alt is right there where a really good draft would make me support it, but I think he still has plenty of GP stuff he is yet to do that could be eventually be included on a Commend draft so idk if now is the best time for this.
Sandaoguo wrote:HS is worth 100 times more than the insubstantial (to borderline non-existent) benefits the TNP-TSP “alliance” has created over the last several years.
by Fauxia » Fri Apr 23, 2021 1:55 pm
ROM wrote:Okay - while I think Altmoras could be Commended, I'm not sure if this is the draft that will do that. It just comes off as clunky, doesn't really go into detail the things that are Commend-worthy... like as others have mentioned, go into more detail in his involvement in Hell, and idk if Alt's time in Lazarus really needs to be here either. Personally I feel like Alt is right there where a really good draft would make me support it, but I think he still has plenty of GP stuff he is yet to do that could be eventually be included on a Commend draft so idk if now is the best time for this.
by The Python » Mon Apr 26, 2021 4:24 pm
FixedHumanSanity wrote:In the Hell clause, I think more on Horsemen of the Apocalypse, Altmoras' role in it, and why it is Commendable would be appropriate. Consistently leading a faction of that size, success, and activity can merit its own independent clause. Then you can eliminate the bullet points in the Hell clause (they're needlessly clunky) and increase some argumentation in the Hell clause about why service to Hell is Commendable. You've also misspelled the word "accurately".
To be honest, I'd need to do more research on Alt's achievements as delegate of Lazarus and Leader of the LCA.HumanSanity wrote:The Lazarus clause is a clause that, in my opinion, has conceptual potential but could use some work. I think some spare words in the LLA clause could be eliminated (e.g. "following Funkadelia's resignation" and "across NationStates"). This clause also can/should be expanded to include more about what resources the LLA generally brought to the table during Alt's leadership, what improvements Alt made to the LLA's structure/leadership, and maybe 1-2 more operations the LLA was involved in. The Delegate bullet point should be extrapolated to include at least 1 accomplishment as Delegate. I'm also unsure why saying that Funk proceeded to coup the region helps your argument.
Would this be better for Warden-Commander part?HumanSanity wrote:For the TGW clause, you need to push this beyond positions alone to include roles and accomplishments. What did/does Altmoras do as a Warden-Commander? You do this to some extent in the High Constable clause, but more detail wouldn't hurt anyone.
Is this better?HumanSanity wrote:I think the Singapore clause should be reframed to focus more on Alt's role in coordinating with the natives of Singapore to set up a Delegate imposed password as part of an effort supporting broader defending. Liberations/Liberation Repeals aren't actually difficult to write, it's more about the work that goes into setting them up and coordinating with natives and the connection of that work to the cause overall. The resolution should be referenced as more of a footnote than the centerpiece.
Fauxia wrote:ROM wrote:Okay - while I think Altmoras could be Commended, I'm not sure if this is the draft that will do that. It just comes off as clunky, doesn't really go into detail the things that are Commend-worthy... like as others have mentioned, go into more detail in his involvement in Hell, and idk if Alt's time in Lazarus really needs to be here either. Personally I feel like Alt is right there where a really good draft would make me support it, but I think he still has plenty of GP stuff he is yet to do that could be eventually be included on a Commend draft so idk if now is the best time for this.
is Alt super involved anywhere that I don't know about? Because how much more is there to say about TGW and Hell? Asking honestly.
Anyway, that objection is usually used for young players. Alt has been around a while and I think there is probably enough for a good draft.
by The Python » Mon May 03, 2021 5:13 pm
by HumanSanity » Sat May 08, 2021 5:55 pm
Sandaoguo wrote:HS is worth 100 times more than the insubstantial (to borderline non-existent) benefits the TNP-TSP “alliance” has created over the last several years.
by The Python » Thu May 13, 2021 4:35 pm
by Tinhampton » Thu May 13, 2021 5:50 pm
by Fauxia » Fri May 14, 2021 7:55 am
by The Python » Mon May 17, 2021 4:38 pm
Fauxia wrote:Oh yeah, I agree with Tin on that. I don't think mentioning CAIN is a very good idea.
by The Stalker » Thu May 20, 2021 4:43 pm
by Outer Sparta » Thu May 20, 2021 4:45 pm
The Python wrote:This has been submitted.
by The Python » Thu May 20, 2021 5:40 pm
Outer Sparta wrote:The Python wrote:This has been submitted.
Draft looks well-written and their accomplishments are detailed. Support.
The Stalker wrote:Strong support for this, Alt is a great dude and Hell wouldn't be what it is without him. He has more than earned his Commending in my eyes.
by The Python » Thu May 20, 2021 9:00 pm
by Bhang Bhang Duc » Thu May 20, 2021 11:16 pm
Pierconium wrote:I see Funk as an opportunistic manipulator that utilises the means available to him to reach his goals. In other words, a nation after my own heart.
RiderSyl wrote:If an enchantress made it so one raid could bring about world peace, Unibot would ask raiders to just sign a petition instead.
Sedgistan wrote:The SC has just has a spate of really shitty ones recently from Northumbria, his Watermelon fanboy…..
by Bears Armed » Fri May 21, 2021 2:20 am
The Stalker wrote:Hell wouldn't be what it is without him.
by Northern Connecticut » Fri May 21, 2021 5:16 am
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