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by Unitaristic Regions » Tue Jul 23, 2013 12:07 am
by Page » Tue Jul 23, 2013 1:43 am
“Approximately 160,000 ferals occupy the southern continent. Data from explorer drones indicate all tech from the initial habitation has been lost. Primitive warfare occurs incessantly and nothing of value remains. Zythyl canisters will deployed – all ferals will be purged.”
by Unitaristic Regions » Tue Jul 23, 2013 2:10 am
Page wrote:Okay guys, I took advantage of my sleepless night to whip one up just for this.
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Three lunar cycles had passed since the fall of the Highlands; two since the occupiers’ tribunal condemned Cordan to die. By the winter solstice, the designated day of reckoning for the man called deviant, war criminal and heretic, the once proud city of Bryn saw only four hours of daylight. Dust and debris had been stirred up not only by the battle for the capital which marked the Highlands’ last stand, but also by the punitive burnings of surrounding plantations, meaning that many people residing in the subjugated city were beginning to forget what a true day looked like.
For most, this was just another source of misery, yet Cordan found it strangely comforting to lose track of time. At least the narrow window of his cell and the darkened landscape limited his view of the indignities inflicted upon his Bryn; the structures shelled into rubble which the occupiers had not even begun to rebuild, the scorched vestiges of collapsed bridges, the crude filling in of Cordan’s silos with cement. Worst of all for most Highlanders was the fact that leviathan oil was wasted illuminating the occupiers’ crimson flags draped all over the city every hour of the night, while medicine had gone unsyntheized in Bryn ever since the war’s end. A constant reminder: “Woe to the vanquished.”
Although Cordan was, when he wore a general’s uniform, one of the Chieftan’s most adored, and although he as a Highlander professed his love of country loudly and publicly as all virtuous citizens should, the patriotic hatred that should boil in his blood on the day of his execution was actually rather trivial at this point. He was only plagued by the sorrow of his personal failure – how close he had come to victory, only to have it torn from his grasp days before his life’s work would come to fruition. Perhaps this was why he took his death sentence in such stride; for he had lost a battle with time already, the only one which truly mattered.
To breathe life into the rocket would have been so much more than a milestone in the history of this species, Cordan knew it would have been ascension to a new era that would have made all civilization thus far seem primitive. Indeed, he promised the Chieftan as the tide of war turned against the Highlanders that his creation would reduce Arma, the Meadow Clan’s capital, to ashes and bring them a victory unlike any other. Yet what would winning the war be except a means to an end? Why use the rocket only to kill, when it could one day let men walk among the stars?
The last vestiges of Cordan’s sense of duty to his country crumbled with Bryn’s walls. Truthfully, he would have gladly served the Meadow Clan, the occupiers, if only he could continue his noble work. He and Alyzia offered them this chance. But the foul fundamentalists refused, and repaid the offer of friendship with charges of heresy. Their priests held that the sky was the Creator’s blanket, the most merciful blessing ever given, to shield all from the Void and the demons within. To even dream to leave the confines of the dome above, to rise above the clouds and touch the Void; that was a crime that eclipsed the worst atrocities of the war.
No doubt, every priest, clan-elder, and “scientist” the occupiers summoned to testify concluded that Cordan and Alyzia would have doomed every soul, brought forth an extinction event, had they not been stopped.
The din of the crowd gathered in the city square grew louder, and Cordan smiled in his cell as he listened. This would be over soon. Then, he heard another sound: the unmistakable footsteps of the occupiers. Cordan was perplexed, for he did not expect to be passed another meal through the iron door after last night’s, but knew his executioner was not to escort him outside until high noon. So what had they come for?
Even when unlocked, the cell door took a considerable amount of strength to move, and Cordan feared for a moment that his last hour of life would involve watching it open inch by inch. But after a moment, the necessary force slid it all the way down the track. Three figures stood before the filthy, unshaven prisoner. Two were Meadow-clan soldiers. The other, Cordan thought, must be a hallucination. But she spoke, and he believed.
“Our conquerors have granted my last request.”
Alyzia looked only slightly less dreadful than he did. She no longer wore the black lipstick that was one of the most memorable sights at the silo. Her hair was greasy and had too many knots to count. Her eyes were sunken in and open wounds lined the circumference of her wrists where she had so often been chained.
But Cordan forced his half-atrophied legs to allow himself to rise to greet her.
“I’d thought they burned you already” he told her.
“I asked that we die together” Alyzia replied.
“Why?” Cordan asked as he laced his fingers in hers, looking past her at the occupiers who glared with disgust but said nothing. “We have been intertwined seventeen cycles. It only seems fitting” she answered.
“No, why does the Meadow Clan indulge any desire of yours or mine at all?” Cordan clarified. Alyzia laughed, weakly but distinctly, and speculated “those who will rewrite history might one day find it useful to appear magnanimous. I’ve heard they will even throw bread to the justice-seekers who attend our execution.”
“We defied the Creator, Alyzia. And still they must feed the masses just to get them to watch us die? For a crime so unforgivable, you would think they’d trample one another just to catch a glance of our pyre.”
With a dark grin, Alyzia turned toward the soldiers and raised her voice to say “there is no Creator.” Predictably, they recoiled; the one holding the keys even lost color in his face and looked as if he were about to vomit. Defiance was all Alyzia had left.
This is what Cordan admired so much about her. No presence was so exquisitely corrupting as hers. He was a general, she was a scientist. Cordan could think unconventionally, but she could blaspheme. There is no doubt Cordan was a talented inventor in his own right, but without Alyzia the rocket would scarcely have been more than a dream.
In retrospect, Cordan could not even recall whether their ambitions fueled their lust for one another, or whether their lust fueled their ambitions. She would paralyze his inhibitions with wine, and whisper to him in bed an illicit, occult doctrine; to envision one’s destiny while locked in carnal union would make it come to pass. At the start of the next cycle following that night, there was no need for wine; and as Cordan and Alyzia climaxed, they proclaimed they would deny the bonds of gravity and touch the Void. Whatever demons may come, let them, for theirs is Knowledge.
There were no more chances for that; only the privilege to burn together. Still, Alyzia expressed one more wish. “When they walk us to the pyre, Cordan, I believe we should clasp hands and take a bow. And if you can will it, smile as they curse us and chant for us to burn. They will see us die, but they need not see us regret.”
Cordan nodded and quietly said “I have already accepted my end.” He turned his left arm up toward her and revealed fresh scars on the underside. They spelled out words: “Woe to the vanquished.”
“You should have carved that into the wall of your cell rather than your arm, for posterity. For your skin will soon be ashes” Alyzia suggested. Cordan had a riddle to offer in return.
“If a book is to burn, are the words on the last page to touch the fire more attuned to posterity’s needs?”
Alyzia was glad that Cordan would walk to his death with pride rather than cowardice, but disappointed that he had lost his faith in the destiny they wished together.
“No execution can frighten a populace into submission forever. Another will rise and achieve what we did not, of that, I am sure” she admonished him.
“I would disagree, Alyzia. They will forever be afraid. Not of punishment, no. They will fear their own potential, and they will all die. When the red oceans rise eons from now, they will overtake Arma and Bryn. And this world will be a mausoleum for beings that knew there was one way forward, but refused it.”
The moment of silence lasted as long as the Meadow Clan soldiers would allow it to. But they moved to drag the condemned outside if they had to, so Alyzia left Cordan the last word and took his hand.
Minutes later, the most hated beings to ever draw breath were on full display for all the justice seekers and bread seekers gathered. A priest on the stage was handed a scroll while the condemned were bound. Eager executioners held their torches. Their moment would come as soon as the priest’s proclamation had finished.
“All ye assembled hear our judgment! There is no graver crime, no darker sin, than daring to invite the Void’s demons down upon us…”------
Vessel X62 of the Reclamation Fleet idled in the thermosphere of the planet called Atikyr. Imperial officials called it an “edge world”, though it was actually closer to the galactic center than the capital, Sumeria Prime. It was deemed such because it was habitable, but undesirable.
Fourteen million colonists were about to enter this solar system. Their terraforming resources were meager, and life on Atikyr would be hard; but the frontier offered them more hope than the hiveworlds from which they emigrated.
Admiral Vallan reflected as he stood on the bridge of X62 that he was grateful this arid world was not to be his home. The three-hundred eighty-six year old war hero had just one more tour of duty to complete before the gleaming palaces of Titan would be his to walk freely among the Assembly’s aristocracy. Overseeing this sector’s Reclamation Fleet was little more than a reward career; it required virtually no exertion at all.
After all, ever since the Assembly won the Final War, times of strife were behind the human race. Thousands of years of internal rebellion meant losing contact with lesser colonies like Atikyr. The Reclamation Fleet’s task was simple – assess the condition of a planet, see if there is anything worth salvaging, and prepare it for the immigrants.
The report Admiral Vallan sent back to Sumeria Prime read thus:
“Approximately 160,000 ferals occupy the southern continent. Data from explorer drones indicate all tech from the initial habitation has been lost. Primitive warfare occurs incessantly and nothing of value remains. Zythyl canisters will deployed – all ferals will be purged.”
And the Void’s demons did so.
by Mkuki » Tue Jul 23, 2013 4:43 am
John Rawls wrote:In justice as fairness, the concept of right is prior to that of the good.
by Conserative Morality » Tue Jul 23, 2013 8:11 am
by Nazi Flower Power » Tue Jul 23, 2013 8:36 am
Mkuki wrote:A little something I wrote for my Creative Writing class last year. Hope you guys enjoy.Werther Vieth slowly lifted himself off of the ground. The Hauptsturmführer’s ears were ringing and red was tinging the edges of his eyes. Remembering his training the SS soldier quickly began looking around for his helmet. Staying low the young soldier crawled across the debris-ridden floor and spotted his helmet lying next to a body. On it was the, now grimy, ‘SS’ emblem of two runes.
Remembering to stay below the eyesight of his enemies, the tall, blonde Aryan dashed across the room he was in and over to his helmet. Placing it securely on his head, Werther grabbed a weapon, a Kar98K bolt-action rifle, next to a body -corpse, actually- and hastened over to a windowsill.
Hazarding a peek above the sill Werther saw that the Russians were moving up the street. “I’ll be damned if I give up this house without a fight.” He muttered to himself. Silently reciting his pledge to defend the Vaterland, Werther popped up from below the windowsill, pulled the rifle’s trigger, and loosed a shot at the communist dogs advancing up the road.
Not wishing to lose his head just yet Werther ducked back under the windowsill and worked his rifle’s bolt, chambering the next round. Werther looked around him. The room, café actually, he and his SS comrades were holed up in was all, but destroyed. There was a hole in the ceiling, debris, chunks of wood, and various body parts were scattered all over the room, and, to make everything worse, the Jews and communists he was fighting with had goddamn panzers. What type he wasn’t sure of exactly. Luckily for Werther some of the other SS men in the café with him were pulling themselves up as well.
It was then that God decided to return sound to his ear. Whereas before all Werther could here was a ringing silence, now he could hear the sounds of battle flooding in. Covering his ears to stymie the flood of noise, Werther shouted at the remaining SS soldiers in the café to grab their weapons and stop the Russians from capturing the café.
After a few moments, the Hauptsturmführer uncovered his ears and decided to take his own orders. Clutching his rifle close to his chest Werther quickly raised himself above the windowsill, aimed at one of the enemy soldaten and fired a bullet. Almost instantly one of the Russians crumpled to the ground. The SS soldier whooped before ducking under the windowsill again.
Beside him one of his closest friends, Eckbert Friedrich, rose above a hole in the café’s wall and loosed a stream of bullets from his MP 40. As the Untersturmführer came down a grim look overcame his face. “Werther!”, he yelled over the din of battle, “The Russians! They are bringing up a howitzer!”
Werther cursed. Looking around he spotted Rolf Peter, the company’s radio operator, and called him over. “Peter! Get on the funkgerät! Tell the colonel that the Russians are bringing up artillery and that we need covering fire.” Rolf gave a nod of agreement and began working the radio.
“Everyone else!”, he called out, “We’re falling back! Let the communists have this collapsing building. We’ll stop them on the next street!” His fellow soldiers gave a loud cheer.
Taking the lead Werther ran over to one of the doors, doorframe now, leading out of the café. About twenty meters ahead was another building. Luckily Russian bombers had blasted a hole into the building's wall. From what he could see there was also a crater where the floor must have been. Unfortunately there was very little cover on the street itself. Other than a burnt car or two the street was empty and barren. Giving another curse, Werther backed away from the door.
“Reiner! Volker!” Werther called for the two machine gunners he'd picked back in Seelow Heights. “Yes, Hauptsturmführer?”, questioned Volker Prinz, the taller of the two. “We're crossing this street. While the rest of us are giving you guys cover fire I want you two to get behind that car and set up the MG42. On my signal you will blast those atheists back to hell. Verstandenen?”
The two SS machine gunners nodded and, with their machine gun in hand, stepped out of the café and dashed to an overturned car. Werther turned back to the thirty six soldiers under his command. These were the remnants of the company he’d been commanding ever since the former Hauptsturmführer, Eugen Bernat, had been hauled off by the Gestapo to only God knows where. Most of the soldiers, including Werther himself, were of the consensus that he wasn’t half as good as Eugen had been.
The Hauptsturmführer shrugged. What was done was done. No one could change the past. All they could do now was serve the Fürher to their dying breath.
Werther looked back to the two machine gunners. The MG 42 was set up on the rear tire of the vehicles charred chassis. Bracing himself, he pulled up the whistle hanging around his neck and gave a loud blow. Luckily the two machine gunners were able to hear the shrill sound over the din of battle and began spewing hot lead at the advancing Russians.
The men in the café let out a cheer as Russian bodies began toppling over. “Let’s go!”, yelled Werther at the top of his lungs while waving his arms at the door. “Stay low and don’t shoot!” He paused for a second. “Also, watch out for friendly artillery fire!”
As if on cue with what he was saying the familiar sound of artillery shells whistled overhead. Within seconds the shells began slamming into the ground before exploding amid the Russians, sending shrapnel and death at them.
Following his own advice, Werther, followed closely by Eckbert Friedrich, hunched himself over and stepped out onto the street. Within seconds bullets were whizzing past the column of SS soldiers, but, for the most part, the bullets were either too high or too low to cause any real damage. As he ran across the road, out of the corner of his eye Werther saw a fireball erupt in the middle of the Russian column. Fuckin’ tankers! Serves them right, he thought savagely.
Werther was the third one who made it across the street and into the wrecked building. Taking care to not get his head blown off, Werther peaked over some rubble. There were a few German bodies lying on the street. Two of the bodies were the machine gunners who had been giving them cover. They were obviously dead. In fact, the corpse of Reiner Schmitt was missing the entire lower half of its body.
Ducking back down Werther looked at the remaining soldiers in his care. They all looked gaunt and emaciated. What food they’d been able to scrounge up had looked disgusting and was clearly not fit for human consumption. Even the kikes got better rations than what he’d been eating since the Wehrmacht had been pushed back into Berlin.
“Hauptsturmführer!”, called out Manfred Kaüfer, “What now?”
Werther sighed and slid down the crater inside the smashed building, little bits of debris rolling down the small slope. There were two ways to get out of the building. The first way was out of a backdoor that surely led to another street. The other way was to climb out of the building and go back out to the Russians. Werther weighed his options and gave his decision.
“It’s either back out to the damned Russians or out that back door and possibly connecting with other units. I think it’d be best to go out the back door. Let’s go.”
Werther hoisted himself up and scrambled up the opposite side of the crater before prying the door open. One after the other, Werther helped pull the SS men out of the crater and onto the street. As the last came up and over the ledge Werther turned around and saw that most of the soldiers were holed up in various buildings along the street. Werther smiled. If the Russians wanted to take Berlin, they’d have to step over piles of their own godless corpses to do it.
Hefting his rifle over his shoulder, Werther ran over towards a small hotel. As he walked inside, the young man noticed that this particular building seemed to be unaffected by the war. The main lobby was almost impeccably clean. Everything in the lobby screamed adoration for the Führer. From paintings to photos to the flag of the NSDAP, the lobby was, basically, a shrine to the Führer. In fact there was a large painting of the Führer himself by, what Werther assumed was, the reception desk.
Moving into a central hallway, Werther was met with paintings and photos of various government officials like Joachim Ribbentropp, Joseph Goebbels, and Albert Speer. Up ahead he spotted a spiral staircase and quickly climbed up it, skipping steps in the process. As he walked up the last step, Werther noticed the other machine gun crew he had with him had hoisted up their own MG 42 onto a window sill.
After he nodded his approval the SS soldier walked down the hallway and spotted a room with an open door. As he walked in Werther was pleased to see that the room had two wide, open windows. The room he was in was fairly modest. To the front of the room, by the door, there was a fairly large nightstand with a radio set on it. On the opposite side of the room was a mattress with a low-lying dresser next to it. Near one of the windows was a circular, dining table with two chairs parked underneath it.
Smiling, the SS man lowered himself by one of the windows, chambered a round in his Kar98K, and placed the rifle’s barrel on the window sill.
Seconds later a shot was fired. It sounded like it had come from a Gewehr 43. Werther looked through the window and saw a body crumpled on the ground 100 meters away. Before he could say anything another Russian came into view.
Looking through the sights of his rifle, Werther carefully aimed and pulled the trigger. The bullet smashed through the window, leaving a jagged hole in the glass, and struck its target. The man hunched forward and clutched his shoulder. “Shit!” Werther cursed. “I missed.” Angrily, he worked the bolt on his rifle and aimed at the Russian he’d wounded earlier. Taking more care he waited a couple seconds before firing.
The shot rang out and this time the Russian’s head flew right off. Werther worked the bolt of his rifle again. He had three rounds left before he had to put in a new clip. As he scanned the street for more of the kommunisten a bullet whizzed right past his ear and lodged itself into the wall behind him.
Werther cursed again as he ducked under the window sill. He’d stayed in view for too long. Deciding to abandon the room, Werther laid himself flat on the ground and began crawling to the door.
As he approached the doorway leading out of the room Werther heard a soft thud by the window he’d just moved from. The soldier turned to see what had landed in the room. To his horror, the object was a grenade. With the quickness of a cheetah, Werther grabbed the nearby nightstand and toppled it over so it could take the brunt of the grenade’s blast.
Within an instant the grenade exploded. The soldier clutched his ears tightly. His head was filled with ringing for the second time that day. His surroundings had rapidly transformed into shades of gray. Within instants the pain started flowing in. First it was his left leg, closely followed by his left arm.
Gritting his teeth, Werther slowly, but surely, pulled himself up off of the floor and out of the devastated room. Limping down the hotel’s pristine hallway, the young Aryan looked around for another open door. Unfortunately all of the doors seemed to be closed. Werther cursed again and turned back around to go down the spiral staircase he’d climbed up earlier.
As he neared the staircase the ground shook and nearly sent Werther tumbling down the stairs. After catching himself on the staircase rail, the Hauptsturmführer limped over to a nearby window. Outside was a fucking panzer! Suitably alarmed, Werther quickly half-limped half-stumbled down the stairway and out of the hotel.
Down the street was one of those horrific Stalin tanks. He’d learned, mostly from interrogating Russian prisoners, that the Stalin tank, or IS-2, was nicknamed the Shchuka, or “Pike”, by her crews. From what Werther could tell, those prisoners had been absolutely right. The tank’s gun was just monstrous. It hung just over three meters above the ground and looked to be over five meters in length. The whole machine appeared to be a play toy for some long dead mythical giant.
Werther let out a curse and hid behind the hotel’s exterior. He reached for his Kar98K, but grabbed air. Looking down in surprise, the SS soldier realized that he’d left his rifle in that room on the hotel’s second floor. Cursing again, Werther spotted an StG-44 assault rifle in the middle of the street. Unfortunately, there was not a single object on the street to cover his attempt to get the weapon.
After a moment of thought, Werther resigned himself to a decision and ran out onto the road. As he neared the weapon a stream of bullets hit the asphalt street he was running on. “Verdammte kommunisten.”, he sneered as he dove for and gripped the rifle. The Aryan rolled off his shoulder and onto his feet before he pivoted and raced back to the hotel; all while Russian ammunition whooshed past him and his vital organs.
Just as he stepped over the curb of the sidewalk by the hotel Werther was abruptly lifted off the ground and sent flying forward. Crashing back onto the ground, Werther’s ears, for the third time that day, began to ring. His eyesight began to gray out and he suddenly felt woozy, almost light headed. He tried to lift himself off of the ground, but collapsed back onto the pavement. He groaned and began to crawl forward over the rubble-strewn sidewalk.
As he approached the front door leading into the hotel, the SS soldiers who were occupying the building came running out. Most ran past him, but one, Eckbert Friedrich, spotted him and lifted Werther up by his armpit.
“Werther,” yelled his long-time friend, “are you okay?” Werther just looked at his friend with a questioning eye. He could see Eckbert’s mouth moving, but hear no words. Instead of replying, Werther just pointed his head toward the hotel’s door. Acknowledging the silent command, Eckbert carried the Hauptsturmführer into the hotel lobby.
Just as the Werther was set down on the floor of the hotel, He decided to return Werther’s ability to hear. The sudden rush of sounds pierced into Werther and nearly caused him to scream in pain. With a vacant look in his eyes Werther stared at Eckbert, who was trying to patch up Werther’s wounds, and placed a hand on his comrade’s shoulder.
Eckbert gave him a questioning look. Werther just shook his head and slowly pushed Eckbert away from him.
“Go.” He whispered blankly. “You can’t fix me up, Eckbert. Not now. Not with the kommunisten this close.” A tear welled up in his eye. “I’ll hold them off for as long as I can while you guys get away. You’re in charge of the company now.”
“Yeah, right!”, chuckled Eckbert. “You didn’t abandon me when I got shot back in Stalingrad. I’m not leaving you. I’ll fix right you up and-”
SLAP!
Werther slapped his friend hard across the cheek. “You will do no such thing!” he said sharply. “Follow my orders, you idiot. Take care of everyone else and don’t stop fighting. Not if I die and not if you die. Got that?” Eckbert solemnly nodded.
“Good. Now hand me my weapon and get the hell out of here.” Eckbert rose off of the ground and handed the weapon Werther. “Thanks. Now get going.” With a stiff salute, Eckbert was out of the door and back to dodging bullets.
Looking around, Werther crawled behind the reception desk of the hotel’s lobby and managed to pull himself up on his knees while coughing up red hot blood. With his StG-44 in hand he faced the hotel’s doors and waited for his enemies to come inside.
As he waited, Werther began thinking back to when he’d joined the Waffen-SS at the tender age of eighteen. That was back in 1936. Almost nine years he’d served the Führer faithfully. Not one moment did he regret. From torturing Jews, like the schwein that they were, to shooting Russians who’d had the gall to surrender, it had been a splendid run. As long as the Führer is still fighting, I will still fight, he thought peacefully.
After a quick prayer, Werther crossed himself and waited for a Russian to come through the door in front of him. Not even a minute later his wish came to pass. One of the godless atheists ambled into the hotel and, with a smile that could scare Satan himself, Werther pulled the trigger of his rifle and loosed a stream of bullets at the unlucky bastard. The soldier never knew what hit him as he was sent flying out of the hotel.
Outside, Werther could hear Russian soldiers yelling in their unintelligible language. He smiled to himself. “Stupid, kommunisten.”, he sneered under his breath. “Bring it on.” As if to answer his challenge two soldiers burst into the hotel lobby, screaming and spraying bullets down the first floor hallway. Werther gave a crooked smile. Since he was off to the left side of the room they hadn’t seen him. Yet.
With a cool hand, the Hauptsturmführer loosed another stream of bullets. Like the one before them the soldiers toppled onto the floor, unaware of who had killed them and from where. Suddenly, just barely over the din of battle, Werther heard a soft plink.
Before he could identify the sound, the world exploded in a flash of colors. First, a blinding white flash blinded SS soldier before shades of orange, yellow, and red danced across his vision. After that came the pain. Werther began to scream and curse before he looked down at his body, where most of the pain was originating. Half of his left leg was gone and his right foot was barely hanging onto his ankle.
“Holy Mother of God!” he cursed out loud.
Just then, to Werther’s everlasting luck, a whole bunch of the Russians barged into the room. One of them, the leader of the group judging by his insignia, spotted Werther and stomped over to the mortally wounded soldier. The old soldier looked like a relic from the last world war. His hair may have been graying, but his eyes had fire in them. Before the Russian could grab what remained of Werther Vieth, one of the soldiers called to the seemingly grizzled veteran.
“Commisar,” called out a soldier who was holding up Werther’s helmet, “SS.”
The Commisar whipped around to face Werther and quickly drew his pistol. His eyes were cold. No longer was the fire there. No. Now his eyes spoke hatred. Pure, unadulterated hatred. Werther shivered under the Commisar’s gaze.
Werther steeled himself and hawked a big wad of saliva at the Russian’s shoes. The old man just glanced down at his boots before pulling the trigger of his pistol.
As long as the Führer is still fighting, I will still fight, were his last thoughts.
“Adolf,” whined a soft, feminine voice. “Are you sure you want to do this? We can easily continue the fight in Bavaria. In the Berghof.”
“Nein, Eva.”, Adolf said simply as he paced across the bunker’s floor. “The people of Germany were too weak. They were not worthy of our fight, mein fraulein. The jüdisch and kommunist sympathizers betrayed us. Just like the Great War, the people stabbed us in the back. They are undeserving of freedom. They deserve to die like the dogs they truly are.”
“You are right, as always.”, agreed Eva as she got off and wrapped herself around her new husband. “But still, we could run away. Maybe escape to South America. It’s nice and warm there, you know.”
“Again, nein.”, disagreed Adolf. “If we are hunted down the juden and kommunisten will surely torture and mutilate us. You, my dear, are too pretty to be tortured.”
Eva giggled and pulled her husband into a deep kiss. “Okay,” she said as their lips departed for air, “let’s do it.”
Smiling, Adolf walked over to a desk with a telephone on it and picked up the receiver. “Bring them up. Eva is in full agreement and I’d like to do this before the damned Russians can get to us.” The voice on the other end of the call acknowledged Adolf’s request and not thirty seconds later, Adolf heard a knock on the heavy steel door near the back of the room.
“Come in.” called Adolf.
The steel door slowly opened and a young SS soldier holding a tray appeared from behind. “Mein führer,” said the soldier, “here are the pills and pistol you asked for. If there is anything more I can do for you, just ask me and I will do it no matter the cost.”
Adolf waved him away with a “thanks”, took the tray and shut the steel door. On the tray was a glass of water, two cyanide pills and a small Walther PPK pistol. Adolf set the tray on the nearby desk and dropped the two cyanide pills into the glass of water before handing the glass to Eva.
“My dear,” he said, clinking his pistol to Eva’s glass, “I shall see you again in heaven.” Eva smiled and drank down the water and pills. Adolf lovingly stared at his wife before he set the pistol’s barrel to his temple.
“My vengeance is complete.”, were his last words before he pulled the trigger.
by Mkuki » Tue Jul 23, 2013 8:38 am
Nazi Flower Power wrote:Mkuki wrote:A little something I wrote for my Creative Writing class last year. Hope you guys enjoy.Werther Vieth slowly lifted himself off of the ground. The Hauptsturmführer’s ears were ringing and red was tinging the edges of his eyes. Remembering his training the SS soldier quickly began looking around for his helmet. Staying low the young soldier crawled across the debris-ridden floor and spotted his helmet lying next to a body. On it was the, now grimy, ‘SS’ emblem of two runes.
Remembering to stay below the eyesight of his enemies, the tall, blonde Aryan dashed across the room he was in and over to his helmet. Placing it securely on his head, Werther grabbed a weapon, a Kar98K bolt-action rifle, next to a body -corpse, actually- and hastened over to a windowsill.
Hazarding a peek above the sill Werther saw that the Russians were moving up the street. “I’ll be damned if I give up this house without a fight.” He muttered to himself. Silently reciting his pledge to defend the Vaterland, Werther popped up from below the windowsill, pulled the rifle’s trigger, and loosed a shot at the communist dogs advancing up the road.
Not wishing to lose his head just yet Werther ducked back under the windowsill and worked his rifle’s bolt, chambering the next round. Werther looked around him. The room, café actually, he and his SS comrades were holed up in was all, but destroyed. There was a hole in the ceiling, debris, chunks of wood, and various body parts were scattered all over the room, and, to make everything worse, the Jews and communists he was fighting with had goddamn panzers. What type he wasn’t sure of exactly. Luckily for Werther some of the other SS men in the café with him were pulling themselves up as well.
It was then that God decided to return sound to his ear. Whereas before all Werther could here was a ringing silence, now he could hear the sounds of battle flooding in. Covering his ears to stymie the flood of noise, Werther shouted at the remaining SS soldiers in the café to grab their weapons and stop the Russians from capturing the café.
After a few moments, the Hauptsturmführer uncovered his ears and decided to take his own orders. Clutching his rifle close to his chest Werther quickly raised himself above the windowsill, aimed at one of the enemy soldaten and fired a bullet. Almost instantly one of the Russians crumpled to the ground. The SS soldier whooped before ducking under the windowsill again.
Beside him one of his closest friends, Eckbert Friedrich, rose above a hole in the café’s wall and loosed a stream of bullets from his MP 40. As the Untersturmführer came down a grim look overcame his face. “Werther!”, he yelled over the din of battle, “The Russians! They are bringing up a howitzer!”
Werther cursed. Looking around he spotted Rolf Peter, the company’s radio operator, and called him over. “Peter! Get on the funkgerät! Tell the colonel that the Russians are bringing up artillery and that we need covering fire.” Rolf gave a nod of agreement and began working the radio.
“Everyone else!”, he called out, “We’re falling back! Let the communists have this collapsing building. We’ll stop them on the next street!” His fellow soldiers gave a loud cheer.
Taking the lead Werther ran over to one of the doors, doorframe now, leading out of the café. About twenty meters ahead was another building. Luckily Russian bombers had blasted a hole into the building's wall. From what he could see there was also a crater where the floor must have been. Unfortunately there was very little cover on the street itself. Other than a burnt car or two the street was empty and barren. Giving another curse, Werther backed away from the door.
“Reiner! Volker!” Werther called for the two machine gunners he'd picked back in Seelow Heights. “Yes, Hauptsturmführer?”, questioned Volker Prinz, the taller of the two. “We're crossing this street. While the rest of us are giving you guys cover fire I want you two to get behind that car and set up the MG42. On my signal you will blast those atheists back to hell. Verstandenen?”
The two SS machine gunners nodded and, with their machine gun in hand, stepped out of the café and dashed to an overturned car. Werther turned back to the thirty six soldiers under his command. These were the remnants of the company he’d been commanding ever since the former Hauptsturmführer, Eugen Bernat, had been hauled off by the Gestapo to only God knows where. Most of the soldiers, including Werther himself, were of the consensus that he wasn’t half as good as Eugen had been.
The Hauptsturmführer shrugged. What was done was done. No one could change the past. All they could do now was serve the Fürher to their dying breath.
Werther looked back to the two machine gunners. The MG 42 was set up on the rear tire of the vehicles charred chassis. Bracing himself, he pulled up the whistle hanging around his neck and gave a loud blow. Luckily the two machine gunners were able to hear the shrill sound over the din of battle and began spewing hot lead at the advancing Russians.
The men in the café let out a cheer as Russian bodies began toppling over. “Let’s go!”, yelled Werther at the top of his lungs while waving his arms at the door. “Stay low and don’t shoot!” He paused for a second. “Also, watch out for friendly artillery fire!”
As if on cue with what he was saying the familiar sound of artillery shells whistled overhead. Within seconds the shells began slamming into the ground before exploding amid the Russians, sending shrapnel and death at them.
Following his own advice, Werther, followed closely by Eckbert Friedrich, hunched himself over and stepped out onto the street. Within seconds bullets were whizzing past the column of SS soldiers, but, for the most part, the bullets were either too high or too low to cause any real damage. As he ran across the road, out of the corner of his eye Werther saw a fireball erupt in the middle of the Russian column. Fuckin’ tankers! Serves them right, he thought savagely.
Werther was the third one who made it across the street and into the wrecked building. Taking care to not get his head blown off, Werther peaked over some rubble. There were a few German bodies lying on the street. Two of the bodies were the machine gunners who had been giving them cover. They were obviously dead. In fact, the corpse of Reiner Schmitt was missing the entire lower half of its body.
Ducking back down Werther looked at the remaining soldiers in his care. They all looked gaunt and emaciated. What food they’d been able to scrounge up had looked disgusting and was clearly not fit for human consumption. Even the kikes got better rations than what he’d been eating since the Wehrmacht had been pushed back into Berlin.
“Hauptsturmführer!”, called out Manfred Kaüfer, “What now?”
Werther sighed and slid down the crater inside the smashed building, little bits of debris rolling down the small slope. There were two ways to get out of the building. The first way was out of a backdoor that surely led to another street. The other way was to climb out of the building and go back out to the Russians. Werther weighed his options and gave his decision.
“It’s either back out to the damned Russians or out that back door and possibly connecting with other units. I think it’d be best to go out the back door. Let’s go.”
Werther hoisted himself up and scrambled up the opposite side of the crater before prying the door open. One after the other, Werther helped pull the SS men out of the crater and onto the street. As the last came up and over the ledge Werther turned around and saw that most of the soldiers were holed up in various buildings along the street. Werther smiled. If the Russians wanted to take Berlin, they’d have to step over piles of their own godless corpses to do it.
Hefting his rifle over his shoulder, Werther ran over towards a small hotel. As he walked inside, the young man noticed that this particular building seemed to be unaffected by the war. The main lobby was almost impeccably clean. Everything in the lobby screamed adoration for the Führer. From paintings to photos to the flag of the NSDAP, the lobby was, basically, a shrine to the Führer. In fact there was a large painting of the Führer himself by, what Werther assumed was, the reception desk.
Moving into a central hallway, Werther was met with paintings and photos of various government officials like Joachim Ribbentropp, Joseph Goebbels, and Albert Speer. Up ahead he spotted a spiral staircase and quickly climbed up it, skipping steps in the process. As he walked up the last step, Werther noticed the other machine gun crew he had with him had hoisted up their own MG 42 onto a window sill.
After he nodded his approval the SS soldier walked down the hallway and spotted a room with an open door. As he walked in Werther was pleased to see that the room had two wide, open windows. The room he was in was fairly modest. To the front of the room, by the door, there was a fairly large nightstand with a radio set on it. On the opposite side of the room was a mattress with a low-lying dresser next to it. Near one of the windows was a circular, dining table with two chairs parked underneath it.
Smiling, the SS man lowered himself by one of the windows, chambered a round in his Kar98K, and placed the rifle’s barrel on the window sill.
Seconds later a shot was fired. It sounded like it had come from a Gewehr 43. Werther looked through the window and saw a body crumpled on the ground 100 meters away. Before he could say anything another Russian came into view.
Looking through the sights of his rifle, Werther carefully aimed and pulled the trigger. The bullet smashed through the window, leaving a jagged hole in the glass, and struck its target. The man hunched forward and clutched his shoulder. “Shit!” Werther cursed. “I missed.” Angrily, he worked the bolt on his rifle and aimed at the Russian he’d wounded earlier. Taking more care he waited a couple seconds before firing.
The shot rang out and this time the Russian’s head flew right off. Werther worked the bolt of his rifle again. He had three rounds left before he had to put in a new clip. As he scanned the street for more of the kommunisten a bullet whizzed right past his ear and lodged itself into the wall behind him.
Werther cursed again as he ducked under the window sill. He’d stayed in view for too long. Deciding to abandon the room, Werther laid himself flat on the ground and began crawling to the door.
As he approached the doorway leading out of the room Werther heard a soft thud by the window he’d just moved from. The soldier turned to see what had landed in the room. To his horror, the object was a grenade. With the quickness of a cheetah, Werther grabbed the nearby nightstand and toppled it over so it could take the brunt of the grenade’s blast.
Within an instant the grenade exploded. The soldier clutched his ears tightly. His head was filled with ringing for the second time that day. His surroundings had rapidly transformed into shades of gray. Within instants the pain started flowing in. First it was his left leg, closely followed by his left arm.
Gritting his teeth, Werther slowly, but surely, pulled himself up off of the floor and out of the devastated room. Limping down the hotel’s pristine hallway, the young Aryan looked around for another open door. Unfortunately all of the doors seemed to be closed. Werther cursed again and turned back around to go down the spiral staircase he’d climbed up earlier.
As he neared the staircase the ground shook and nearly sent Werther tumbling down the stairs. After catching himself on the staircase rail, the Hauptsturmführer limped over to a nearby window. Outside was a fucking panzer! Suitably alarmed, Werther quickly half-limped half-stumbled down the stairway and out of the hotel.
Down the street was one of those horrific Stalin tanks. He’d learned, mostly from interrogating Russian prisoners, that the Stalin tank, or IS-2, was nicknamed the Shchuka, or “Pike”, by her crews. From what Werther could tell, those prisoners had been absolutely right. The tank’s gun was just monstrous. It hung just over three meters above the ground and looked to be over five meters in length. The whole machine appeared to be a play toy for some long dead mythical giant.
Werther let out a curse and hid behind the hotel’s exterior. He reached for his Kar98K, but grabbed air. Looking down in surprise, the SS soldier realized that he’d left his rifle in that room on the hotel’s second floor. Cursing again, Werther spotted an StG-44 assault rifle in the middle of the street. Unfortunately, there was not a single object on the street to cover his attempt to get the weapon.
After a moment of thought, Werther resigned himself to a decision and ran out onto the road. As he neared the weapon a stream of bullets hit the asphalt street he was running on. “Verdammte kommunisten.”, he sneered as he dove for and gripped the rifle. The Aryan rolled off his shoulder and onto his feet before he pivoted and raced back to the hotel; all while Russian ammunition whooshed past him and his vital organs.
Just as he stepped over the curb of the sidewalk by the hotel Werther was abruptly lifted off the ground and sent flying forward. Crashing back onto the ground, Werther’s ears, for the third time that day, began to ring. His eyesight began to gray out and he suddenly felt woozy, almost light headed. He tried to lift himself off of the ground, but collapsed back onto the pavement. He groaned and began to crawl forward over the rubble-strewn sidewalk.
As he approached the front door leading into the hotel, the SS soldiers who were occupying the building came running out. Most ran past him, but one, Eckbert Friedrich, spotted him and lifted Werther up by his armpit.
“Werther,” yelled his long-time friend, “are you okay?” Werther just looked at his friend with a questioning eye. He could see Eckbert’s mouth moving, but hear no words. Instead of replying, Werther just pointed his head toward the hotel’s door. Acknowledging the silent command, Eckbert carried the Hauptsturmführer into the hotel lobby.
Just as the Werther was set down on the floor of the hotel, He decided to return Werther’s ability to hear. The sudden rush of sounds pierced into Werther and nearly caused him to scream in pain. With a vacant look in his eyes Werther stared at Eckbert, who was trying to patch up Werther’s wounds, and placed a hand on his comrade’s shoulder.
Eckbert gave him a questioning look. Werther just shook his head and slowly pushed Eckbert away from him.
“Go.” He whispered blankly. “You can’t fix me up, Eckbert. Not now. Not with the kommunisten this close.” A tear welled up in his eye. “I’ll hold them off for as long as I can while you guys get away. You’re in charge of the company now.”
“Yeah, right!”, chuckled Eckbert. “You didn’t abandon me when I got shot back in Stalingrad. I’m not leaving you. I’ll fix right you up and-”
SLAP!
Werther slapped his friend hard across the cheek. “You will do no such thing!” he said sharply. “Follow my orders, you idiot. Take care of everyone else and don’t stop fighting. Not if I die and not if you die. Got that?” Eckbert solemnly nodded.
“Good. Now hand me my weapon and get the hell out of here.” Eckbert rose off of the ground and handed the weapon Werther. “Thanks. Now get going.” With a stiff salute, Eckbert was out of the door and back to dodging bullets.
Looking around, Werther crawled behind the reception desk of the hotel’s lobby and managed to pull himself up on his knees while coughing up red hot blood. With his StG-44 in hand he faced the hotel’s doors and waited for his enemies to come inside.
As he waited, Werther began thinking back to when he’d joined the Waffen-SS at the tender age of eighteen. That was back in 1936. Almost nine years he’d served the Führer faithfully. Not one moment did he regret. From torturing Jews, like the schwein that they were, to shooting Russians who’d had the gall to surrender, it had been a splendid run. As long as the Führer is still fighting, I will still fight, he thought peacefully.
After a quick prayer, Werther crossed himself and waited for a Russian to come through the door in front of him. Not even a minute later his wish came to pass. One of the godless atheists ambled into the hotel and, with a smile that could scare Satan himself, Werther pulled the trigger of his rifle and loosed a stream of bullets at the unlucky bastard. The soldier never knew what hit him as he was sent flying out of the hotel.
Outside, Werther could hear Russian soldiers yelling in their unintelligible language. He smiled to himself. “Stupid, kommunisten.”, he sneered under his breath. “Bring it on.” As if to answer his challenge two soldiers burst into the hotel lobby, screaming and spraying bullets down the first floor hallway. Werther gave a crooked smile. Since he was off to the left side of the room they hadn’t seen him. Yet.
With a cool hand, the Hauptsturmführer loosed another stream of bullets. Like the one before them the soldiers toppled onto the floor, unaware of who had killed them and from where. Suddenly, just barely over the din of battle, Werther heard a soft plink.
Before he could identify the sound, the world exploded in a flash of colors. First, a blinding white flash blinded SS soldier before shades of orange, yellow, and red danced across his vision. After that came the pain. Werther began to scream and curse before he looked down at his body, where most of the pain was originating. Half of his left leg was gone and his right foot was barely hanging onto his ankle.
“Holy Mother of God!” he cursed out loud.
Just then, to Werther’s everlasting luck, a whole bunch of the Russians barged into the room. One of them, the leader of the group judging by his insignia, spotted Werther and stomped over to the mortally wounded soldier. The old soldier looked like a relic from the last world war. His hair may have been graying, but his eyes had fire in them. Before the Russian could grab what remained of Werther Vieth, one of the soldiers called to the seemingly grizzled veteran.
“Commisar,” called out a soldier who was holding up Werther’s helmet, “SS.”
The Commisar whipped around to face Werther and quickly drew his pistol. His eyes were cold. No longer was the fire there. No. Now his eyes spoke hatred. Pure, unadulterated hatred. Werther shivered under the Commisar’s gaze.
Werther steeled himself and hawked a big wad of saliva at the Russian’s shoes. The old man just glanced down at his boots before pulling the trigger of his pistol.
As long as the Führer is still fighting, I will still fight, were his last thoughts.
“Adolf,” whined a soft, feminine voice. “Are you sure you want to do this? We can easily continue the fight in Bavaria. In the Berghof.”
“Nein, Eva.”, Adolf said simply as he paced across the bunker’s floor. “The people of Germany were too weak. They were not worthy of our fight, mein fraulein. The jüdisch and kommunist sympathizers betrayed us. Just like the Great War, the people stabbed us in the back. They are undeserving of freedom. They deserve to die like the dogs they truly are.”
“You are right, as always.”, agreed Eva as she got off and wrapped herself around her new husband. “But still, we could run away. Maybe escape to South America. It’s nice and warm there, you know.”
“Again, nein.”, disagreed Adolf. “If we are hunted down the juden and kommunisten will surely torture and mutilate us. You, my dear, are too pretty to be tortured.”
Eva giggled and pulled her husband into a deep kiss. “Okay,” she said as their lips departed for air, “let’s do it.”
Smiling, Adolf walked over to a desk with a telephone on it and picked up the receiver. “Bring them up. Eva is in full agreement and I’d like to do this before the damned Russians can get to us.” The voice on the other end of the call acknowledged Adolf’s request and not thirty seconds later, Adolf heard a knock on the heavy steel door near the back of the room.
“Come in.” called Adolf.
The steel door slowly opened and a young SS soldier holding a tray appeared from behind. “Mein führer,” said the soldier, “here are the pills and pistol you asked for. If there is anything more I can do for you, just ask me and I will do it no matter the cost.”
Adolf waved him away with a “thanks”, took the tray and shut the steel door. On the tray was a glass of water, two cyanide pills and a small Walther PPK pistol. Adolf set the tray on the nearby desk and dropped the two cyanide pills into the glass of water before handing the glass to Eva.
“My dear,” he said, clinking his pistol to Eva’s glass, “I shall see you again in heaven.” Eva smiled and drank down the water and pills. Adolf lovingly stared at his wife before he set the pistol’s barrel to his temple.
“My vengeance is complete.”, were his last words before he pulled the trigger.
For once I write something that DOESN'T involve Nazis, and then you go an enter this... The Nazis are occupying A&F! Grab your guns everyone!
John Rawls wrote:In justice as fairness, the concept of right is prior to that of the good.
by Unitaristic Regions » Tue Jul 23, 2013 8:45 am
Conserative Morality wrote:Two days until judging starts! Any last minute submissions should probably head in soon.
Also, we're going off of Pacific time, just because.
by Afalia » Tue Jul 23, 2013 9:21 am
by Nazi Flower Power » Tue Jul 23, 2013 9:21 am
by Mkuki » Tue Jul 23, 2013 9:55 am
John Rawls wrote:In justice as fairness, the concept of right is prior to that of the good.
by Page » Tue Jul 23, 2013 10:06 am
Unitaristic Regions wrote:Page wrote:Okay guys, I took advantage of my sleepless night to whip one up just for this.
Click and enjoy!
Three lunar cycles had passed since the fall of the Highlands; two since the occupiers’ tribunal condemned Cordan to die. By the winter solstice, the designated day of reckoning for the man called deviant, war criminal and heretic, the once proud city of Bryn saw only four hours of daylight. Dust and debris had been stirred up not only by the battle for the capital which marked the Highlands’ last stand, but also by the punitive burnings of surrounding plantations, meaning that many people residing in the subjugated city were beginning to forget what a true day looked like.
For most, this was just another source of misery, yet Cordan found it strangely comforting to lose track of time. At least the narrow window of his cell and the darkened landscape limited his view of the indignities inflicted upon his Bryn; the structures shelled into rubble which the occupiers had not even begun to rebuild, the scorched vestiges of collapsed bridges, the crude filling in of Cordan’s silos with cement. Worst of all for most Highlanders was the fact that leviathan oil was wasted illuminating the occupiers’ crimson flags draped all over the city every hour of the night, while medicine had gone unsyntheized in Bryn ever since the war’s end. A constant reminder: “Woe to the vanquished.”
Although Cordan was, when he wore a general’s uniform, one of the Chieftan’s most adored, and although he as a Highlander professed his love of country loudly and publicly as all virtuous citizens should, the patriotic hatred that should boil in his blood on the day of his execution was actually rather trivial at this point. He was only plagued by the sorrow of his personal failure – how close he had come to victory, only to have it torn from his grasp days before his life’s work would come to fruition. Perhaps this was why he took his death sentence in such stride; for he had lost a battle with time already, the only one which truly mattered.
To breathe life into the rocket would have been so much more than a milestone in the history of this species, Cordan knew it would have been ascension to a new era that would have made all civilization thus far seem primitive. Indeed, he promised the Chieftan as the tide of war turned against the Highlanders that his creation would reduce Arma, the Meadow Clan’s capital, to ashes and bring them a victory unlike any other. Yet what would winning the war be except a means to an end? Why use the rocket only to kill, when it could one day let men walk among the stars?
The last vestiges of Cordan’s sense of duty to his country crumbled with Bryn’s walls. Truthfully, he would have gladly served the Meadow Clan, the occupiers, if only he could continue his noble work. He and Alyzia offered them this chance. But the foul fundamentalists refused, and repaid the offer of friendship with charges of heresy. Their priests held that the sky was the Creator’s blanket, the most merciful blessing ever given, to shield all from the Void and the demons within. To even dream to leave the confines of the dome above, to rise above the clouds and touch the Void; that was a crime that eclipsed the worst atrocities of the war.
No doubt, every priest, clan-elder, and “scientist” the occupiers summoned to testify concluded that Cordan and Alyzia would have doomed every soul, brought forth an extinction event, had they not been stopped.
The din of the crowd gathered in the city square grew louder, and Cordan smiled in his cell as he listened. This would be over soon. Then, he heard another sound: the unmistakable footsteps of the occupiers. Cordan was perplexed, for he did not expect to be passed another meal through the iron door after last night’s, but knew his executioner was not to escort him outside until high noon. So what had they come for?
Even when unlocked, the cell door took a considerable amount of strength to move, and Cordan feared for a moment that his last hour of life would involve watching it open inch by inch. But after a moment, the necessary force slid it all the way down the track. Three figures stood before the filthy, unshaven prisoner. Two were Meadow-clan soldiers. The other, Cordan thought, must be a hallucination. But she spoke, and he believed.
“Our conquerors have granted my last request.”
Alyzia looked only slightly less dreadful than he did. She no longer wore the black lipstick that was one of the most memorable sights at the silo. Her hair was greasy and had too many knots to count. Her eyes were sunken in and open wounds lined the circumference of her wrists where she had so often been chained.
But Cordan forced his half-atrophied legs to allow himself to rise to greet her.
“I’d thought they burned you already” he told her.
“I asked that we die together” Alyzia replied.
“Why?” Cordan asked as he laced his fingers in hers, looking past her at the occupiers who glared with disgust but said nothing. “We have been intertwined seventeen cycles. It only seems fitting” she answered.
“No, why does the Meadow Clan indulge any desire of yours or mine at all?” Cordan clarified. Alyzia laughed, weakly but distinctly, and speculated “those who will rewrite history might one day find it useful to appear magnanimous. I’ve heard they will even throw bread to the justice-seekers who attend our execution.”
“We defied the Creator, Alyzia. And still they must feed the masses just to get them to watch us die? For a crime so unforgivable, you would think they’d trample one another just to catch a glance of our pyre.”
With a dark grin, Alyzia turned toward the soldiers and raised her voice to say “there is no Creator.” Predictably, they recoiled; the one holding the keys even lost color in his face and looked as if he were about to vomit. Defiance was all Alyzia had left.
This is what Cordan admired so much about her. No presence was so exquisitely corrupting as hers. He was a general, she was a scientist. Cordan could think unconventionally, but she could blaspheme. There is no doubt Cordan was a talented inventor in his own right, but without Alyzia the rocket would scarcely have been more than a dream.
In retrospect, Cordan could not even recall whether their ambitions fueled their lust for one another, or whether their lust fueled their ambitions. She would paralyze his inhibitions with wine, and whisper to him in bed an illicit, occult doctrine; to envision one’s destiny while locked in carnal union would make it come to pass. At the start of the next cycle following that night, there was no need for wine; and as Cordan and Alyzia climaxed, they proclaimed they would deny the bonds of gravity and touch the Void. Whatever demons may come, let them, for theirs is Knowledge.
There were no more chances for that; only the privilege to burn together. Still, Alyzia expressed one more wish. “When they walk us to the pyre, Cordan, I believe we should clasp hands and take a bow. And if you can will it, smile as they curse us and chant for us to burn. They will see us die, but they need not see us regret.”
Cordan nodded and quietly said “I have already accepted my end.” He turned his left arm up toward her and revealed fresh scars on the underside. They spelled out words: “Woe to the vanquished.”
“You should have carved that into the wall of your cell rather than your arm, for posterity. For your skin will soon be ashes” Alyzia suggested. Cordan had a riddle to offer in return.
“If a book is to burn, are the words on the last page to touch the fire more attuned to posterity’s needs?”
Alyzia was glad that Cordan would walk to his death with pride rather than cowardice, but disappointed that he had lost his faith in the destiny they wished together.
“No execution can frighten a populace into submission forever. Another will rise and achieve what we did not, of that, I am sure” she admonished him.
“I would disagree, Alyzia. They will forever be afraid. Not of punishment, no. They will fear their own potential, and they will all die. When the red oceans rise eons from now, they will overtake Arma and Bryn. And this world will be a mausoleum for beings that knew there was one way forward, but refused it.”
The moment of silence lasted as long as the Meadow Clan soldiers would allow it to. But they moved to drag the condemned outside if they had to, so Alyzia left Cordan the last word and took his hand.
Minutes later, the most hated beings to ever draw breath were on full display for all the justice seekers and bread seekers gathered. A priest on the stage was handed a scroll while the condemned were bound. Eager executioners held their torches. Their moment would come as soon as the priest’s proclamation had finished.
“All ye assembled hear our judgment! There is no graver crime, no darker sin, than daring to invite the Void’s demons down upon us…”------
Vessel X62 of the Reclamation Fleet idled in the thermosphere of the planet called Atikyr. Imperial officials called it an “edge world”, though it was actually closer to the galactic center than the capital, Sumeria Prime. It was deemed such because it was habitable, but undesirable.
Fourteen million colonists were about to enter this solar system. Their terraforming resources were meager, and life on Atikyr would be hard; but the frontier offered them more hope than the hiveworlds from which they emigrated.
Admiral Vallan reflected as he stood on the bridge of X62 that he was grateful this arid world was not to be his home. The three-hundred eighty-six year old war hero had just one more tour of duty to complete before the gleaming palaces of Titan would be his to walk freely among the Assembly’s aristocracy. Overseeing this sector’s Reclamation Fleet was little more than a reward career; it required virtually no exertion at all.
After all, ever since the Assembly won the Final War, times of strife were behind the human race. Thousands of years of internal rebellion meant losing contact with lesser colonies like Atikyr. The Reclamation Fleet’s task was simple – assess the condition of a planet, see if there is anything worth salvaging, and prepare it for the immigrants.
The report Admiral Vallan sent back to Sumeria Prime read thus:
And the Void’s demons did so.
I do not entirely get it, but I like it
by Unitaristic Regions » Tue Jul 23, 2013 10:38 am
Page wrote:Unitaristic Regions wrote:
I do not entirely get it, but I like it
It's inspired by an episode of "The History of Sex" I watched which talked about John Whiteside Parsons and his obsession with sex magick and thelema, but it also comes from imagining the last days of World War 2 in Europe and Nazi Germany's use of V2 rockets. The endingis kind of a dark joke, that the ignorant religious people executing Cordan and Alyzia because they're afraid there's something in space that's going to kill them turn out to be accidentally right.
Basically it's a "the universe is even colder than you thought" story though.
by Occupied Deutschland » Tue Jul 23, 2013 2:39 pm
Nazi Flower Power wrote:Occupied Deutschland wrote:James seems to have a veneer of not really CARING about his values and being more into politics for the winning (especially in the earlier portions before he is an old man), but I’m not sure if this is what you were going for or not. It does seem like a good character, this guy who’s balancing his values and his desire for ‘winning’ in politics, but a little more display of him would seem appropriate. Especially if this wasn’t what you were going for. I’m just not sure quite how I was supposed to read the guy.
You mean if you're supposed to like him or not? Or what? He's meant to be somewhat sympathetic, but also somewhat flawed and corrupted by power.
by Wisconsin9 » Tue Jul 23, 2013 2:48 pm
by Unitaristic Regions » Wed Jul 24, 2013 4:33 am
by Occupied Deutschland » Wed Jul 24, 2013 10:57 pm
by Page » Wed Jul 24, 2013 11:14 pm
by Occupied Deutschland » Wed Jul 24, 2013 11:20 pm
Page wrote:I do have to admit that Vallan is more a plot device than a character and that is probably a flaw. Originally I was going to have the narrative go back and forth between the fleet and the surface, and instead of a seasoned admiral I was going to have a young soldier with a girlfriend somewhere across the galaxy who he missed, and he was going to be casually contemplating the moral implications of "purges." But that took away from the "twist" value so I couldn't really do it that way.
Most of your critiques probably relate back to the general idea that it's hard to tell a story of two people about to be executed without relying too much on the omniscient narrator. If I rewrote it I think I'd let the dialogue tell more of the story, and I'd make it longer to that end.
The story does pretty much reflect my writing style though, I'm somewhat minimalist and try to leave it to the reader to fill in the gaps. Like, the first few paragraphs, I just wanted to establish that Bryn is a very bleak place. Some people might see 1945 Berlin and some people might see Dunwall from Dishonored and some might see something out of Mad Max or Terminator, to me it matters less what they see it as and more what kind of feeling they get.
So that is kind of how I'd measure the success of the story, in this case I think it should leave the reader feeling a bit colder and emptier.
Anyway some things you are very perceptive about and other things are just my way of writing for better or worse, but I appreciate your critique and thank you for reading.
by Nazi Flower Power » Wed Jul 24, 2013 11:59 pm
by Nazi Flower Power » Thu Jul 25, 2013 12:16 am
Occupied Deutschland wrote:Nazi Flower Power wrote:
You mean if you're supposed to like him or not? Or what? He's meant to be somewhat sympathetic, but also somewhat flawed and corrupted by power.
In that case it came off exactly as you intended. I suppose my complaint would be then that I wasn't certain if that was what the character was supposed to seem like. Might be partially the length once again and my personal discomfort with short stories, but I felt/feel like there just wasn't enough display of him as being this somewhat sympathetic character (but, we do get a good deal of this, so this complaint might be rather nitpicky and more based on personal discomfort with too little character development as is required in a short story rather than an actual problem so take from this what you will).
by Frisivisia » Thu Jul 25, 2013 12:19 am
by Nazi Flower Power » Thu Jul 25, 2013 12:20 am
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by Unitaristic Regions » Thu Jul 25, 2013 12:55 am
Nazi Flower Power wrote:Occupied Deutschland wrote:*Occupied Deutschland is not a critic. Nor, in fact, is he a judge or, in all honesty, a sane and functioning member of the human race. Occupied Deutschland is not related with the judges of the Summer Short Story Contest and is providing this for entertainment purposes only. Occupied Deutschland should not be taken with alcohol. If one experiences chest pains or mood swings from reading Occupied Deutschland's critiques one should promptly quit reading his critics and send him an angry telegram instead. Occupied Deutschland is unaffiliated with the Bundesrepublik auf Deutschland and they should not be sent angry letters that are meant for Occupied Deutschland. Women who are smoking, pregnant, or may become pregnant are A-OK to Occupied Deutschland, especially that last one. Call me ladies.
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