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by Bormiar » Wed Nov 18, 2020 6:55 pm
by Refuge Isle » Thu Nov 19, 2020 1:16 am
Bormiar wrote:Reads like any Empire condemnation or — perhaps this is a better way of saying it — the most gameplay-y gameplay proposal. I think people are sick of that, at least if semi-recent resolutions like those of Morover, Noahs Second Country, mine, and others are any indication. If you want a proposal that's going to get overlooked, this really is it.
by Sedgistan » Thu Nov 19, 2020 1:58 am
Bormiar wrote:I'm hesitant to suggest this, but maybe throw in something subtle but fun (such as a running joke with NeeNee)? Subtle humanization could go a long way with a nominee like this (distant from the major SC community, empire). If you don't think that works (or the nominee doesn't like it), I'd leave it as is.
by Honeydewistania » Thu Nov 19, 2020 2:40 am
Bormiar wrote:Reads like any Empire condemnation or — perhaps this is a better way of saying it — the most gameplay-y gameplay proposal. I think people are sick of that, at least if semi-recent resolutions like those of Morover, Noahs Second Country, mine, and others are any indication. If you want a proposal that's going to get overlooked, this really is it.
I don't mean that to insult you or your draft. Your writing is great, but maybe the style is outmoded? Or maybe it was just boring from the start.
I'm hesitant to suggest this, but maybe throw in something subtle but fun (such as a running joke with NeeNee)? Subtle humanization could go a long way with a nominee like this (distant from the major SC community, empire). If you don't think that works (or the nominee doesn't like it), I'd leave it as is.
Alger wrote:if you have egoquotes in your signature, touch grass
by Xoriet » Thu Nov 19, 2020 4:56 am
Bormiar wrote:Reads like any Empire condemnation or — perhaps this is a better way of saying it — the most gameplay-y gameplay proposal. I think people are sick of that, at least if semi-recent resolutions like those of Morover, Noahs Second Country, mine, and others are any indication. If you want a proposal that's going to get overlooked, this really is it.
I don't mean that to insult you or your draft. Your writing is great, but maybe the style is outmoded? Or maybe it was just boring from the start.
I'm hesitant to suggest this, but maybe throw in something subtle but fun (such as a running joke with NeeNee)? Subtle humanization could go a long way with a nominee like this (distant from the major SC community, empire). If you don't think that works (or the nominee doesn't like it), I'd leave it as is.
by Bhang Bhang Duc » Thu Nov 19, 2020 5:24 am
Refuge Isle wrote:Bormiar wrote:Reads like any Empire condemnation or — perhaps this is a better way of saying it — the most gameplay-y gameplay proposal. I think people are sick of that, at least if semi-recent resolutions like those of Morover, Noahs Second Country, mine, and others are any indication. If you want a proposal that's going to get overlooked, this really is it.
Interest in the security council starting to pass more than just gameplay resolutions does not mean that people are sick of gameplay resolutions, or that gameplay resolutions are out of style.
As indicated by the passage of everything outside of your examples.
Pierconium wrote:I see Funk as an opportunistic manipulator that utilises the means available to him to reach his goals. In other words, a nation after my own heart.
RiderSyl wrote:If an enchantress made it so one raid could bring about world peace, Unibot would ask raiders to just sign a petition instead.
Sedgistan wrote:The SC has just has a spate of really shitty ones recently from Northumbria, his Watermelon fanboy…..
by Unibot III » Thu Nov 19, 2020 9:27 am
Xoriet wrote:Bormiar wrote:Reads like any Empire condemnation or — perhaps this is a better way of saying it — the most gameplay-y gameplay proposal. I think people are sick of that, at least if semi-recent resolutions like those of Morover, Noahs Second Country, mine, and others are any indication. If you want a proposal that's going to get overlooked, this really is it.
I don't mean that to insult you or your draft. Your writing is great, but maybe the style is outmoded? Or maybe it was just boring from the start.
I'm hesitant to suggest this, but maybe throw in something subtle but fun (such as a running joke with NeeNee)? Subtle humanization could go a long way with a nominee like this (distant from the major SC community, empire). If you don't think that works (or the nominee doesn't like it), I'd leave it as is.
The main options include the glittering and the cookie hoarding, for two. A lot of other running jokes are more OOC based and putting them in would be pushing a meta angle which I'd prefer not to do.
The only thing with inserting humor into a fairly serious proposal is that, as Unibot indicated earlier, Empire was taken pretty seriously because of everything they accomplished in terms of region couping or attempts to do so. Mixing seriousness with humor is doable but also might detract as much as add a new angle.
[violet] wrote:I mean this in the best possible way,
but Unibot is not a typical NS player.
Milograd wrote:You're a caring, resolute lunatic
with the best of intentions.
by Evil Wolf » Tue Nov 24, 2020 6:03 am
Unibot III wrote:Can you condemn Evil Wolf without condemning LWU?
Kryozerkia wrote:In the good old days raiding was illegal
Crazy Girl wrote:Invading was never illegal
[violet] wrote:There is supposed to be an invasion game.
by Unibot III » Tue Nov 24, 2020 10:22 am
[violet] wrote:I mean this in the best possible way,
but Unibot is not a typical NS player.
Milograd wrote:You're a caring, resolute lunatic
with the best of intentions.
by Bormiar » Fri Nov 27, 2020 8:59 am
Deeply concerned by the coup of The East Pacific executed on August 16, 2008, through the satellite nation Lady Phedre and under the aegis of the newly formed Empire. The coup ended some two months after the initial seizure of the region from the sitting legal Delegate, Gnidrah, by gathering endorsements unlawfully until Gnidrah was replaced and the satellite nation of Lady Phedre controlled The East Pacific. Over one-hundred nations were banned from The East Pacific during the coup.
Further disturbed by the execution of the unlawful seizure of Osiris in 2012 from the legitimately elected Pharaoh, an effort which was spearheaded by Minineenee’s Empire allies Dalimbar and New Kervoskia but driven by Minineenee.
Alarmed that Minineenee was further caught attempting to coup several other regions across their time, namely concentrating these efforts in the Sinker regions. Two such regions which Minineenee attempted to coup were:
• The Rejected Realms, both in 2011 and early 2015, attempted by subtly gathering endorsements from unwitting natives of the region through the use of hitherto-unknown satellite nations. Both efforts were outed before they could succeed.
• Lazarus during its Anarchy phase in 2018, an effort made before a stabilized new regime could be enacted by the native populace and which was ultimately thwarted by the then-current delegate, Imkiville.
Introducing the first of the coups by Minineenee with the overthrow of The West Pacific onNovember 2, 2005, wherein Minineenee and their allies in the Core held absolute power under a declaration of martial law following the announcement of dissolution of the constitution with Minineenee as the sitting Delegate. The coup led to a period of instability and chaos in The West Pacific that persisted for many years after.
by Xoriet » Wed Dec 09, 2020 6:14 am
by Fauxia » Wed Dec 09, 2020 9:11 am
by Unibot III » Thu Dec 10, 2020 10:50 am
[violet] wrote:I mean this in the best possible way,
but Unibot is not a typical NS player.
Milograd wrote:You're a caring, resolute lunatic
with the best of intentions.
by Bormiar » Thu Dec 10, 2020 3:25 pm
Deeply concerned by the coup of The East Pacific which was executed on August 16, 2008, through the satellite nation Lady Phedre and under the aegis of the newly formed Empire. Through the unlawful gathering of endorsements, Minineenee built up to the coup until Gnidrah was finally replaced and the satellite nation of Lady Phedre controlled The East Pacific. Minineenee's roles were as the ringleader of the group and as the head of the illegitimate government, where they most notably served as the Delegate of the coup government of The East Pacific for the duration of the operation. The coup ended some two months after the initial seizure of the region from the sitting legal Delegate, Gnidrah. Over one-hundred nations were banned from The East Pacific during the coup.
Further disturbed by the execution of the unlawful seizure of Osiris in 2012 from the legitimately elected Pharaoh, an effort which was publicly spearheaded by Minineenee’s Empire allies Dalimbar and New Kervoskia but encouraged and driven by Minineenee behind the scenes, as credit for the inspiration and eventual execution was eventually attributed to Minineenee by the executors of the coup.
by Xoriet » Fri Dec 11, 2020 5:50 am
Unibot III wrote:Looking good. And ASBS is back? *waves !!!*
Bormiar wrote:Excellent changes here. These clauses went from filler to genuinely substantive. Nice job.
I'm not a fan of condemning members of the Empire, but I just might have to vote for on principal. Seeing a well-written, patiently drafted proposal is very refreshing.
by Praeceps » Tue Dec 15, 2020 11:26 am
by Bhang Bhang Duc » Tue Dec 15, 2020 1:16 pm
Pierconium wrote:I see Funk as an opportunistic manipulator that utilises the means available to him to reach his goals. In other words, a nation after my own heart.
RiderSyl wrote:If an enchantress made it so one raid could bring about world peace, Unibot would ask raiders to just sign a petition instead.
Sedgistan wrote:The SC has just has a spate of really shitty ones recently from Northumbria, his Watermelon fanboy…..
by Pluvie » Fri Dec 18, 2020 9:28 pm
by Bhang Bhang Duc » Sat Dec 19, 2020 8:09 am
Observing that Minineenee spearheaded the formation of Empire, a notorious organization which operated under the cloak of anonymity which was achieved by the promotion of satellite nations to conceal their true identities. Minineenee wasthe forefront andleader of this group, drove its formation, and contributed greatly to the selection of regions targeted as well as the execution of each of these operations. Empire would go on to execute multiple coups or conduct such attempts on many significant regions across the world from 2008 onwards.
Pierconium wrote:I see Funk as an opportunistic manipulator that utilises the means available to him to reach his goals. In other words, a nation after my own heart.
RiderSyl wrote:If an enchantress made it so one raid could bring about world peace, Unibot would ask raiders to just sign a petition instead.
Sedgistan wrote:The SC has just has a spate of really shitty ones recently from Northumbria, his Watermelon fanboy…..
by Xoriet » Mon Dec 21, 2020 6:41 am
Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Some minor suggestions.Observing that Minineenee spearheaded the formation of Empire, a notorious organization which operated under the cloak of anonymity which was achieved by the promotion of satellite nations to conceal their true identities. Minineenee wasthe forefront andleader of this group, drove its formation, and contributed greatly to the selection of regions targeted as well as the execution of each of these operations. Empire would go on to execute multiple coups or conduct such attempts on many significant regions across the world from 2008 onwards.
I would suggest that if you're the leader of the group then you are at the forefront - use of forefront possibly superfluous.
For the three paragraphs starting with the one above "execute" or "executed" are used a number of times, just a bit jarring to my eyes. Maybe substitute other words for some of these uses.
These are very minor changes - it is an excellent piece of work.
by Xoriet » Mon Jan 04, 2021 5:19 am
by Honeydewistania » Mon Jan 04, 2021 5:22 am
Alger wrote:if you have egoquotes in your signature, touch grass
by Xoriet » Mon Jan 04, 2021 6:15 am
Honeydewistania wrote:Maybe you could elaborate more on how Minineenee tried to coup Lazarus in 2018? Otherwise this is excellent, I'll support.
by Bormiar » Mon Jan 04, 2021 1:43 pm
by Xoriet » Tue Jan 05, 2021 5:06 am
Bormiar wrote:You're a bit of a perfectionist, so I figure I should tell you that using "introducing" and "beginning" as preambulatory phrases seems like the resolution equivalent of "in conclusion".
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