Imperialisium wrote:So far really well put together, but a few critiques/changes
You aren't the first Primarch discovered. Earliest you can go is the 4th Primarch discovered which puts you right around the 830-850 era.
We need some character flaws.
Venus and Sedna aren't available as Legionary Homeworlds (Sedna itself was destroyed and lost).
No Pariahs.
The Emperor's Children/Alpha Legion schtick you're mixing together is fine. But lets keep it focused to that since theres some whiplash back and forth between wanting to fight psykers and wanting to be commando oriented. We have a few psykers and an anti-psyker legion already. So preferably narrow down to the commando side of things as your Legion specialization would be optimal.
Thank you for your suggestions and pointers! And can do on those changes! Little sad about no Venus or psyker shenanigans, but I'll make do