Upon asking them if they'd like me to join in a co-authorship, they agreed, and I've tweaked it a bit to read as the following!
If Yotongrek ever feels like backing out and going back to their original piece, I am obliged to let them and discard co-authorship.
Similarly, if Yotongrek has any suggestions or edits they wish to make, then they shall be done!
Hope you enjoy; I very much enjoyed the premise.
Note: I also recall they wanted to characters to have more... character. Any suggestions?
(also, if you've got better title suggestions... )
Draft 2.21
Title: A Really Sour Lemon
The Issue: While walking down the street, you notice a lemonade stand, displaying a prominent sign reading "Closed for not meeting standard economic safety and health regulations".
Validity: (Co-Authors Jutsa and Yotongrek) Must have communism OR Followup to #705.1/#705.3
Option 1: A plucky, small child approaches you while holding a yellow drink and a sticky cash jar. "Do you want some lemonade? I'll gladly give you a cup for free!" @@HE@@ looks at @@HIS@@ stand. "The big scary man who shut down my stand said I can't sell any, but... my money goes to my family! Can me and my friends please sell things to adults? We don't know how to follow reg...reglutions?"
[effect] ambitious "businessmen" use their children to sell and advertize their products
Validity: Capitalism
Option 2a: "Ahah! I'm glad I caught you, @@LEADER@@. This stand has failed to comply with our policy on public health and safety," a sharply-dressed and perspiring @@RANDOMNAME@@ cries while pulling a copy of the @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ business tax code. "Law demands that no matter the age, product, or price, business must meet with public safety codes. The stand itself could collapse at any moment, and I'm convinced the drink smells like it's already been drunk once before. Lemon-Ade certainly had to comply — why shouldn't the kids? If anything, we should be penalizing these smart little punks for even daring to attempt such a thing."
[effect] children grow up before the paperwork for their lemonade stands can be sorted out
Validity: Socialism
Option 2b: "Ahah! I'm glad I caught you, @@LEADER@@. This stand has failed to comply with our policy against the dreaded enemy capitalism," a sharply-dressed and perspiring @@RANDOMNAME@@ angrily cries while pulling a copy of the @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ industrial assignment plans. "Law demands that no matter the age, product, or price, business must be stamped out. The stand itself could promote capitalist revolutionaries, and besides, I'm convinced the drink smells like it's already been drunk once before. Lemon-Ade certainly had to shut down in place of Lemon-Comrade — why shouldn't this? If anything, we should be penalizing these smart little punks for even daring to attempt such a thing."
[effect] children grow up before the paperwork for their lemonade stands can be sorted out
Option 3: "Heh, don't be such a sourpus; it wouldn't kill you to buy one of these, y'know," suggests @@RANDOMNAME@@, swiping the lemonade out of the kid's hand. "In fact, I don't see why children should get special treatment. As long as people aren't making a buttload of money off of somethin', people of all ages should be able to sell products unregulated! And maybe ease off of some of the other hundred-something regulations you have while you're at it." @@HE@@ chokes and accidentally dismantles the lemonade stand upon drinking the sour fluid.
[effect] low-level bartering of poor-quality goods has managed to undercut the otherwise organized economy
[Flag Change] Removes Socialism (if socialist)