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by Occupied Deutschland » Sun Jul 21, 2013 12:47 am
by Xoriet » Sun Jul 21, 2013 10:43 am
by Unitaristic Regions » Sun Jul 21, 2013 2:03 pm
by Wisconsin9 » Sun Jul 21, 2013 2:05 pm
Unitaristic Regions wrote:Shame I only saw this contest now, otherwise I'd have joined
by -Pinkville » Sun Jul 21, 2013 2:21 pm
by Unitaristic Regions » Sun Jul 21, 2013 2:28 pm
by Jello Biafra » Sun Jul 21, 2013 6:10 pm
by Nazi Flower Power » Mon Jul 22, 2013 9:27 am
Xoriet wrote: Marblehead was a branch of Salem, but it was a poor fishing district rather than a true extension of a prosperous town.
by Wisconsin9 » Mon Jul 22, 2013 9:54 am
by Old Tyrannia » Mon Jul 22, 2013 10:10 am
by Xoriet » Mon Jul 22, 2013 10:15 am
by Occupied Deutschland » Mon Jul 22, 2013 6:49 pm
by Occupied Deutschland » Mon Jul 22, 2013 8:53 pm
Bodobol wrote:Where's your review of my short story?
by Nazi Flower Power » Mon Jul 22, 2013 9:19 pm
by Page » Mon Jul 22, 2013 9:25 pm
by Costa Alegria » Mon Jul 22, 2013 9:43 pm
by Occupied Deutschland » Mon Jul 22, 2013 9:47 pm
Costa Alegria wrote:Wait one cotton picking minute, has the judging already started?
by Nazi Flower Power » Mon Jul 22, 2013 9:51 pm
Occupied Deutschland wrote:James seems to have a veneer of not really CARING about his values and being more into politics for the winning (especially in the earlier portions before he is an old man), but I’m not sure if this is what you were going for or not. It does seem like a good character, this guy who’s balancing his values and his desire for ‘winning’ in politics, but a little more display of him would seem appropriate. Especially if this wasn’t what you were going for. I’m just not sure quite how I was supposed to read the guy.
Plot - 20/25
It’s a familiar tale (less respectable person loses item More respectable person finds item redemption of original loser), but at the same time the tongue-in-cheek symbology of the Gerrymander (which I really like, by the way) makes it different enough to hold interest.
by Bodobol » Mon Jul 22, 2013 11:10 pm
Occupied Deutschland wrote:Bodobol wrote:Where's your review of my short story?
Oh, missed it in the rush. Pardon me sir.Characters - 19/25
Simply brilliant establishing this 'man' sir. The characterization of him in relation with his ugliness was a particularly masterful stroke, and I must proclaim my vociferous love for the character you have established. That said, we are limited in our appreciation of him by the limited length you have chosen. In addition, more interplay between this character and the setting he finds himself in would serve to more deliberately quantify and display his character.
Plot - 20/25
A simple and poignant tale of the fragility and aestheticness of life itself.
Setting - 10/15
Here I must dock you sir, as we have little indication for where this 'man' is. However, I feel you may have purposefully done this in order to further display your vision of mankind as a whole as a vile and base creature obsessed with visual appearance. As such, the deliberate exclusion of visual objects and appearance besides that related to the man is surely the product of your undeniable genius.
Creativity - 12/15
Bravo sir in crafting a story such as this. Few other authors are fully able to capture the complexity of the human condition in relation to our visual appearances.
Style - 15/15
Short and brutal. Much like an angry midget armed with a shovel.
Grammar/spelling - 5/5
I saw nothing.
Overall - Baw, I am certain such an ingenious mind as yours balks at a simple scoring system based on something as visual and ugly as numbers. I give it four angry dwarves with shovels out of five.
by Unitaristic Regions » Mon Jul 22, 2013 11:10 pm
by The Tiger Kingdom » Tue Jul 23, 2013 12:01 am
by Unitaristic Regions » Tue Jul 23, 2013 12:02 am
The Tiger Kingdom wrote:Yeah, this is really not happening. I came to realize that a) the likelihood of my turning out a worthy story in the remaining time was very low, and b) any story that I feel inspired to write atm would likely be centered around the RP that I run, to the point where it would be insensible out of context.
Maybe next time.
by The Tiger Kingdom » Tue Jul 23, 2013 12:06 am
Unitaristic Regions wrote:The Tiger Kingdom wrote:Yeah, this is really not happening. I came to realize that a) the likelihood of my turning out a worthy story in the remaining time was very low, and b) any story that I feel inspired to write atm would likely be centered around the RP that I run, to the point where it would be insensible out of context.
Maybe next time.
You could just go for short but good...
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