[DRAFT] Mutant Protection [Draft v2]

[Mutants]

First time giving this a go. Happy to hear feedback...

Updated draft 3 May 2024
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The World Assembly,

Declares that discrimination against mutants is a violation of human rights and fundamental freedoms.

1) Defines "mutant" as a person containing a new genetic form resulting from natural/synthetically induced mutation, which clearly alters their physical appearance, grants them abilities and characteristics not previously associated with the homo-sapiens species.

2) Calls upon Member States to enact comprehensive anti-discrimination legislation that specifically protects the rights of mutants in local contexts, ensuring that mutants are safeguarded from discrimination and have access to effective remedies in cases of violations;

4) Encourages Member States to provide support and assistance to mutants who face marginalization or persecution, including access to legal aid, psychosocial services, and other forms of assistance as appropriate;

5) Allows Member States to allow the formation of Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) comprised of mutants, with the purpose of safeguarding the rights and security of the mutant community, under appropriate legal frameworks and oversight mechanisms;

6) Ensure Member States to ensure that Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) operate in accordance with international human rights standards and principles, including respect for the rule of law, non-discrimination, and accountability for any abuses committed;

7) Provide support and resources to Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) to enhance their capacity to protect mutants from discrimination, persecution, and violence, and to collaborate with relevant authorities in maintaining public safety and security;

The World Assembly,

Reaffirming the principles of equal rights and dignity of all individuals,

Recognizing the unique challenges faced by mutants and the need to protect their rights,

Acknowledging the contributions of mutants to society,

Deeply concerned by discrimination, persecution, and violence against mutants,

Emphasizes the importance of promoting tolerance and acceptance of diversity.

1) Declares that discrimination against mutants, including but not limited to social exclusion, denial of employment and education opportunities, and hate crimes, constitutes a violation of human rights and fundamental freedoms;

2) Urges all Member States to take effective measures to prevent and combat discrimination against mutants, including through legislative, administrative, and educational initiatives, and to ensure that perpetrators of such discrimination are held accountable;

3) Calls upon Member States to enact comprehensive anti-discrimination legislation that specifically protects the rights of mutants in local contexts, ensuring that mutants are safeguarded from discrimination and have access to effective remedies in cases of violations;

4) Compels Member States to establish designated "Mutant Safe Zones" in urban areas, where mutants can seek refuge and protection from discrimination, persecution, and violence, and where they can access essential services and support networks;

5) Encourages Member States to provide support and assistance to mutants who face marginalization or persecution, including access to legal aid, psychosocial services, and other forms of assistance as appropriate;

6) Allows Member States to allow the formation of Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) comprised of mutants, with the purpose of safeguarding the rights and security of the mutant community, under appropriate legal frameworks and oversight mechanisms;

7) Ensure Member States to ensure that Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) operate in accordance with international human rights standards and principles, including respect for the rule of law, non-discrimination, and accountability for any abuses committed;

Provide support and resources to Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) to enhance their capacity to protect mutants from discrimination, persecution, and violence, and to collaborate with relevant authorities in maintaining public safety and security;.

[The Ice States]

Welcome to the forums! The best way to get a proposal to the floor is to send a telegram to all WA Delegates asking them to approve your proposal; I wrote a guide for this here (scroll down to "Approval campaigning").

That said, I think in general it might be worth withdrawing this so that you can draft on the forums; that way more experienced players can give comments to help improve the proposal! The first things that come to mind is that Section 2 doesn't specify how they should be held accountable, as well as that Section 3 doesn't specify what actual legislation is to be enacted; therefore member nations can just enact weak measures to comply with the provisions, as opposed to anything necessarily strong or effective. Since submitted proposals can't be edited I'd be happy to give more detailed comments if this is temporarily pulled from the queue.

Good luck!

[Mutants]

Appreciate the guidance. Withdrawn!

[Tesseris]

We can't support this, mutants are non-human classification and are not protected under human rights in our nation or whatever equivalent we use

[The Overmind]

We can't support this, mutants are non-human classification and are not protected under human rights in our nation or whatever equivalent we use

This increasingly well-worn crusade of yours against equal rights remains tedious in a body which has long since codified that the rights of all sapient beings are no less than that of a humans.

[Tesseris]

We can't support this, mutants are non-human classification and are not protected under human rights in our nation or whatever equivalent we use

This increasingly well-worn crusade of yours against equal rights remains tedious in a body which has long since codified that the rights of all sapient beings are no less than that of a humans.

Equal rights for non-humans is dumb. Will work on repeals for all these ludicrous legislation.

[The Overmind]

This increasingly well-worn crusade of yours against equal rights remains tedious in a body which has long since codified that the rights of all sapient beings are no less than that of a humans.

Equal rights for non-humans is dumb. Will work on repeals for all these ludicrous legislation.

Stunning arguments for this totally sane crusade, as always.

[The Overmind]

As The Ice States said, welcome. I think this proposal tries to do a lot, and a lot of it is probably retreading passed resolutions, but I don't have time, at the moment, to dissect this proposal. Instead, I am going to point out that, as a new author, you may want to go with a more standard formula for writing proposals, which you can get a better sense of by looking at past resolutions, specifically more recently passed ones and ones having to do with similar topics to your own. You can use the thread of passed resolutions to more easily find similar legislation. It is also advised that you take a good look at the rules comprendium to ensure that you are following all of the rules for resolutions, and to get some tips on how to improve. Finally, you will want to look at other drafting threads to get a sense of what goes in to getting a proposal ready for submission, and the general timeline for how long that usually takes.

Here is a template that many proposals more-or-less follow. You can be as creative as you want with your formating, but realize that you already fight an uphill battle as a new author, and being too creative where you don't need to be can get in the way. The take-away is that if you're going to be creative with your formatting, you have to do so skillfully and with purpose:

The World Assembly,

Arguing that [preamble clause 1]

Recognizing that [preamble clause 2]

Asserting that [preamble clause 3]

Hereby enacts as follows,

1. [Operative clause 1]
   
   1. [Subclause 1]
   2. [Subclause 2]
   3. [Subclause 3]
2. [Operative clause 2]
   
   1. [Subclause 1]
   2. [Subclause 2]
   3. [Subclause 3]

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The World Assembly,

Arguing that [preamble clause 1]

Recognizing that [preamble clause 2]

Asserting that [preamble clause 3]

Hereby enacts as follows,

[List=I][*][Operative clause 1]
[List=1][*][Subclause 1]
[*][Subclause 2]
[*][Subclause 3][/List]

[*][Operative clause 2]
[List=1][*][Subclause 1]
[*][Subclause 2]
[*][Subclause 3][/List][/List]

Additionally, most keep a list of their prior drafts in a reply to their drafting thread, like so:

Your draft here.

Your draft here.

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[Spoiler=Draft 1]Your draft here.[/Spoiler]
[Spoiler=Draft 2]Your draft here.[/Spoiler]

Whereas they keep their most current draft in their OP by editing it as they go.

[Astrobolt]

Out of character: I have a feeling that most of this is already covered in other legislation, but I think crucially, its not explained what a ‘mutant’ is.

[Second Sovereignty]

OOC:
Is this, what, an attempt to get an X-Men reference into law? There's a thread for joke proposals.

[The Overmind]

OOC:
Is this, what, an attempt to get an X-Men reference into law? There's a thread for joke proposals.

This is the third time I've seen you suggest that someone take a clearly earnestly written proposal and put it in the thread for joke proposals.

[Second Sovereignty]

This is the third time I've seen you suggest that someone take a clearly earnestly written proposal and put it in the thread for joke proposals.

OOC:
Good for you; but this isn't really the place for that discussion.

[The Overmind]

This is the third time I've seen you suggest that someone take a clearly earnestly written proposal and put it in the thread for joke proposals.

OOC:
Good for you; but this isn't really the place for that discussion.

Oh, I'm sorry. You're right. I forgot to frame this in the manner that would be most useful to the author in drafting this proposal. Let me rephrase:

Ignore Second Sovereignty. She has a habit of telling people who are earnestly trying to get feedback on their proposals to put them in the joke thread instead.

[The Ice States]

I think I agree with Astrobolt that "mutant" should be defined. As to the rest, hopefully the below will help!

3) Calls upon Member States to enact comprehensive anti-discrimination legislation that specifically protects the rights of mutants in local contexts, ensuring that mutants are safeguarded from discrimination and have access to effective remedies in cases of violations;

As touched on earlier, you should make it clear what specific legislation member nations must enact. Immediate policies that come to mind for what you should require member nations to do are prohibiting discrimination in employment as well as in receiving goods and services (eg housing and healthcare). It may also be worth requiring member nations to make an active effort to remedy discrimination, although it might be worth considering how; do you want just plain affirmative action, or perhaps government support of some form? It's worth being careful about not legislating to too much detail if you want to do this, specifically to avoid opposition from more national sovereignty-oriented players (of which I am not one). The main factor worth considering in this regard is: in a nation where discrimination against mutants is not particularly an issue, is it still appropriate for the nation to have those measures in place?

4) Compels Member States to establish designated "Mutant Safe Zones" in urban areas, where mutants can seek refuge and protection from discrimination, persecution, and violence, and where they can access essential services and support networks;

I don't see the need for this; nations acting in bad faith could use this to enforce essentially segregation, and ideally these policies should apply in the entire member nation, not just specific safe zones.

6) Allows Member States to allow the formation of Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) comprised of mutants, with the purpose of safeguarding the rights and security of the mutant community, under appropriate legal frameworks and oversight mechanisms;

7) Ensure Member States to ensure that Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) operate in accordance with international human rights standards and principles, including respect for the rule of law, non-discrimination, and accountability for any abuses committed;

Provide support and resources to Mutant Security Organizations (MSOs) to enhance their capacity to protect mutants from discrimination, persecution, and violence, and to collaborate with relevant authorities in maintaining public safety and security;

This seems a bit tangential, particularly in nations where it may be less of an issue; ideally all police forces would adhere to these standards. There was a resolution, LEO Force Restrictions, which addressed this issue; however it has since been repealed and various replacement efforts in progress have not yet passed. I would advise removing this part.

I think the most important aspect of this resolution is Section 2, which as mentioned needs more elaboration.

Good luck!

[Tigrisia]

As touched on earlier, you should make it clear what specific legislation member nations must enact. Immediate policies that come to mind for what you should require member nations to do are prohibiting discrimination in employment as well as in receiving goods and services (eg housing and healthcare).

Actually, we believe that a general clause is very important when creating such a regulation. Only creating an extensive list of measures that member states shall take may be counter-productive as measures that are not coordinated with each other may actually reduce the effectiveness of each other. Hence, we welcome a general clause.


For the delegation of the Federal Republic of Tigrisia at the World Assembly
Vice-Ambassador Claus Sato
Chargé d'affaires

[Tinhampton]

How are mutants not already sapient and hence covered by GA#355?

Also, does this not read like a ChatGPT-generated resolution? Your proposal has a waffly pretitle in general. A systematic violation of rights in the WA is normally referred to as discrimination against an arbitrary and reductive characteristic, rather than a simple "violation of human rights and fundamental freedoms" as you do in Article 1. "rights of mutants in local contexts" (Article 3) is an unusual phrase to use when resolutions normally affect member states rather than subnational areas. "legislative, administrative, and educational initiatives" (Article 2), "appropriate legal frameworks and oversight mechanisms" (Article 6), and "collaborate with relevant authorities in maintaining public safety and security" (Article are all also red flags.

[Simone Republic]

I agree with Tin here. Probably won't work given GA355.

[Mutants]

As The Ice States said, welcome. I think this proposal tries to do a lot, and a lot of it is probably retreading passed resolutions, but I don't have time, at the moment, to dissect this proposal. Instead, I am going to point out that, as a new author, you may want to go with a more standard formula for writing proposals, which you can get a better sense of by looking at past resolutions, specifically more recently passed ones and ones having to do with similar topics to your own. You can use the draft of passed resolutions to more easily find similar legislation. It is also advised that you take a good look at the rules comprendium to ensure that you are following all of the rules for resolutions, and to get some tips on how to improve. Finally, you will want to look at other drafting threads to get a sense of what goes in to getting a proposal ready for submission, and the general timeline for how long that usually takes.

Here is a template that many proposals more-or-less follow. You can be as creative as you want with your formating, but realize that you already fight an uphill battle as a new author, and being too creative where you don't need to be can get in the way. The take-away is that if you're going to be creative with your formatting, you have to do so skillfully and with purpose:

The World Assembly,

Arguing that [preamble clause 1]

Recognizing that [preamble clause 2]

Asserting that [preamble clause 3]

Hereby enacts as follows,

1. [Operative clause 1]
   
   1. [Subclause 1]
   2. [Subclause 2]
   3. [Subclause 3]
2. [Operative clause 2]
   
   1. [Subclause 1]
   2. [Subclause 2]
   3. [Subclause 3]

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The World Assembly,

Arguing that [preamble clause 1]

Recognizing that [preamble clause 2]

Asserting that [preamble clause 3]

Hereby enacts as follows,

[List=I][*][Operative clause 1]
[List=1][*][Subclause 1]
[*][Subclause 2]
[*][Subclause 3][/List]

[*][Operative clause 2]
[List=1][*][Subclause 1]
[*][Subclause 2]
[*][Subclause 3][/List][/List]

Additionally, most keep a list of their prior drafts in a reply to their drafting thread, like so:

Your draft here.

Your draft here.

Code: Select all

[Spoiler=Draft 1]Your draft here.[/Spoiler]
[Spoiler=Draft 2]Your draft here.[/Spoiler]

Whereas they keep their most current draft in their OP by editing it as they go.

Really really appreciate this. Incorporating it immediately in my formatting. Much love.

[Mutants]

How are mutants not already sapient and hence covered by GA#355?

Also, does this not read like a ChatGPT-generated resolution? Your proposal has a waffly pretitle in general. A systematic violation of rights in the WA is normally referred to as discrimination against an arbitrary and reductive characteristic, rather than a simple "violation of human rights and fundamental freedoms" as you do in Article 1. "rights of mutants in local contexts" (Article 3) is an unusual phrase to use when resolutions normally affect member states rather than subnational areas. "legislative, administrative, and educational initiatives" (Article 2), "appropriate legal frameworks and oversight mechanisms" (Article 6), and "collaborate with relevant authorities in maintaining public safety and security" (Article are all also red flags.

I can simplify. I only used AI to clean up as English is not my strong suit.

[Mutants]

OOC:
Is this, what, an attempt to get an X-Men reference into law? There's a thread for joke proposals.

There are such folk in my nation, and others too I presume. Not a joke - but a question! But thank you

[The Ice States]

As touched on earlier, you should make it clear what specific legislation member nations must enact. Immediate policies that come to mind for what you should require member nations to do are prohibiting discrimination in employment as well as in receiving goods and services (eg housing and healthcare).

Actually, we believe that a general clause is very important when creating such a regulation. Only creating an extensive list of measures that member states shall take may be counter-productive as measures that are not coordinated with each other may actually reduce the effectiveness of each other. Hence, we welcome a general clause.


For the delegation of the Federal Republic of Tigrisia at the World Assembly
Vice-Ambassador Claus Sato
Chargé d'affaires

"We would have no objections to the resolution containing a general clause combined with more specific provisions."

~Robert Desak,
World Assembly Ambassador,
The Eternal Union of Devonia and the Ice States.

[Mutants]

Actually, we believe that a general clause is very important when creating such a regulation. Only creating an extensive list of measures that member states shall take may be counter-productive as measures that are not coordinated with each other may actually reduce the effectiveness of each other. Hence, we welcome a general clause.


For the delegation of the Federal Republic of Tigrisia at the World Assembly
Vice-Ambassador Claus Sato
Chargé d'affaires

"We would have no objections to the resolution containing a general clause combined with more specific provisions."

~Robert Desak,
World Assembly Ambassador,
The Eternal Union of Devonia and the Ice States.

Thanks for the feedback. Give me a bit of time.

[Neo-Hermitius]

Against. super mutants keep killing me in fallout I aint giving them rights