New Proposal

[Chishiki No Kuni]

Hey, I am going to post a new proposal about condemning DEN. If anyone wants to support it, go to the security council proposals. It should be up soon after this is posted.

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

Well it's been pulled so it must have contained illegalities.

Edit: I see in the Mod forum that you asked for it to be pulled, good to see that you realised it was illegal. Very few new proposal writers do that.

[Wrapper]

You should post a draft here on this forum, label it with the subject "[DRAFT] Condemn/Commend/Liberate ___________" (whatever you're trying to do, and who the target nation or region is), solicit comments, and make (or discard) suggested changes, prior to submitting it. There are a lot of experienced resolution authors here who are willing to help, and will help you avoid submitting illegal proposals.

[Wrapper]

10 minutes ago: The Dictatorship of Chishiki No Kuni submitted a proposal to the Security Council Condemnation Board entitled "Condemn DEN".

Or not.

[Chishiki No Kuni]

Well it's been pulled so it must have contained illegalities.

Edit: I see in the Mod forum that you asked for it to be pulled, good to see that you realised it was illegal. Very few new proposal writers do that.

Thank you

[We Are Not the NSA]

Several things:
1) Put the title of the proposal in the title of the thread.
2) Put the text of the proposal in the OP.
3)

NOTES that DEN has commonly used password griefing

What exactly is password grieving? Are you referring to locking an occupied region or something like guessing a locked region's password?

UNDERSTANDS that DEN has caused much grief throughout regions

AGREES that DEN is a notorious, and quickly growing, military region, deserving to be condemned for their actions

This is just a personal opinion, but I hate the use of the word 'agrees" here. There are so many words that would fit better, like 'recognizing' or 'observing'.

KNOWS that password grefing is seriously frowned upon

Depending on the answer to the above question, I may or may not have a retort for this.

CONDEMNS the region DEN for the previously stated

...what? For the previously stated what? (that is my way of saying add a word or two to the end, or take out everything after 'DEN')

Overall, it isn't a bad proposal, it just seems to be missing quite a bit. There is no mention of specific raids, or details of the actions that are worthy of being condemned. It doesn't mention the previous incarnations of DEN, and worst of all the word 'raid' is never mentioned once.

[Dark Commander]

Against.

[Oozeturkistania]

Several things:
1) Put the title of the proposal in the title of the thread.
2) Put the text of the proposal in the OP.
3)

NOTES that DEN has commonly used password griefing

What exactly is password grieving? Are you referring to locking an occupied region or something like guessing a locked region's password?

UNDERSTANDS that DEN has caused much grief throughout regions

AGREES that DEN is a notorious, and quickly growing, military region, deserving to be condemned for their actions

This is just a personal opinion, but I hate the use of the word 'agrees" here. There are so many words that would fit better, like 'recognizing' or 'observing'.

KNOWS that password grefing is seriously frowned upon

Depending on the answer to the above question, I may or may not have a retort for this.

CONDEMNS the region DEN for the previously stated

...what? For the previously stated what? (that is my way of saying add a word or two to the end, or take out everything after 'DEN')

Overall, it isn't a bad proposal, it just seems to be missing quite a bit. There is no mention of specific raids, or details of the actions that are worthy of being condemned. It doesn't mention the previous incarnations of DEN, and worst of all the word 'raid' is never mentioned once.

How come in over 24 hours these questions haven't been answered?

EDIT: Just realised it was over 48 hours, actually.

[Sedgistan]

Because Chishiki No Kuni hasn't got around to replying yet. There's no obligation to answer questions immediately, or even at all.

[Mieraskya]

We agree to this

[Crazy girl]

That's nice, but please check when the last post was made before grave digging a thread without actually adding any content. Thank you.

Locking this as it seems to be abandoned, if the OP wishes to continue he can contact us to reopen it.