Star Wars: The Jedi Lords (OOC and sign up thread)

[The Olog-Hai]

So, in an act of anger, I throw the Hutt at him.


Koja the Hutt, I chooooose youuu!

Flying hutt.
Gotta remember not to shoot the hutt.
I'll post with some more shots coming your way.

[The first Galactic Republic]

Since the conversation has turned to writing is mine okay? Be honest. I'm always up for improvement.

I can't improve my internet but I can improve what I use it for. Defs not porn

[Imperial Xenon]

And another mobile post.

The mediocrity continues.

90% of everything I've typed so far has been mobile posts.

Same familia

[Imperial Xenon]

Since the conversation has turned to writing is mine okay? Be honest. I'm always up for improvement.

I can't improve my internet but I can improve what I use it for. Defs not porn

I like it, I think breaking your paragraphs like this

A

B

Would be better than

A
B

Which you seem to do, just my thoughts on making it look a bit cleaner.

[Parcia]

Since the conversation has turned to writing is mine okay? Be honest. I'm always up for improvement.

I can't improve my internet but I can improve what I use it for. Defs not porn

Yes, your writing is fine.

Deh porn is a trap!

[Pantorrum]

https://youtu.be/UdkgWxdIs5U

Great Teamwork, lol

[The first Galactic Republic]

Since the conversation has turned to writing is mine okay? Be honest. I'm always up for improvement.

I can't improve my internet but I can improve what I use it for. Defs not porn

I like it, I think breaking your paragraphs like this

A

B

Would be better than

A
B

Which you seem to do, just my thoughts on making it look a bit cleaner.

I only do that because of the quotes and to break up the length of the auction scene. I usually like to organize my writing like you said to. I'll keep that in mind though.

[Parcia]

https://youtu.be/UdkgWxdIs5U

Great Teamwork, lol

link something like that again, and I sear I will throw another Hutt at you.

[The Republic of Atria]

BOOM. First post.

[The first Galactic Republic]

Hate to nitpick Atria, and you may not have seen it because there are so many posts in the IC from when I posted it, but how did you get past the giant metal wall covering the entirety of the stage? Not that it's impassable but it would have given the slavers some time to move the merchandise. The slaver leader could still be there sure but you'd have to chase down the slaves to have a chance at freeing them.

[Parcia]

Also, im looking for some good music to punctuate our fight with.

Think I found it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5KKgTgUUTgE

Hutt Ball.

Yea, like (American) foot ball, but with force users throwing a Hutt around.

[Ism]

Also, im looking for some good music to punctuate our fight with.

Think I found it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5KKgTgUUTgE

Hutt Ball.

Yea, like (American) foot ball, but with force users throwing a Hutt around.

I dislike this game.

[Parcia]

Also, im looking for some good music to punctuate our fight with.

Think I found it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5KKgTgUUTgE

Hutt Ball.

Yea, like (American) foot ball, but with force users throwing a Hutt around.

I dislike this game.

No one asked you, ball

-Force punts-

jk don't hurt me plz

[The Imperium Empires]

So wait are hurts being thrown around now. Also who wants to meet with the syndicate?

[Imperial Xenon]

I like it, I think breaking your paragraphs like this

A

B

Would be better than

A
B

Which you seem to do, just my thoughts on making it look a bit cleaner.

I only do that because of the quotes and to break up the length of the auction scene. I usually like to organize my writing like you said to. I'll keep that in mind though.

Oh that makes sense then! No problem man, I noticed you do put breaks in your paragraphs like that, I just never realized why you didn't at times.

[Parcia]

Once he bolts, hes going to be gone.

And with the Finch's speed, I mean Gone.

Any last chances of interaction?

[The Republic of Atria]

Hate to nitpick Atria, and you may not have seen it because there are so many posts in the IC from when I posted it, but how did you get past the giant metal wall covering the entirety of the stage? Not that it's impassable but it would have given the slavers some time to move the merchandise. The slaver leader could still be there sure but you'd have to chase down the slaves to have a chance at freeing them.

I definitely did not see that part. IC is a fustercluck.

However. My defense is that the slaver he intimidated led him to the entrance and opened it for him.

[The Imperium Empires]

Arkius wants to speak to Ziam personally and it's not about his debt

[The Olog-Hai]

Once he bolts, hes going to be gone.

And with the Finch's speed, I mean Gone.

Any last chances of interaction?

Race to the spaceport!
As the crow flies vs. city streets!

[The first Galactic Republic]

Hate to nitpick Atria, and you may not have seen it because there are so many posts in the IC from when I posted it, but how did you get past the giant metal wall covering the entirety of the stage? Not that it's impassable but it would have given the slavers some time to move the merchandise. The slaver leader could still be there sure but you'd have to chase down the slaves to have a chance at freeing them.

I definitely did not see that part. IC is a fustercluck.

However. My defense is that the slaver he intimidated led him to the entrance and opened it for him.

Okay but how did you catch up to the slaves and then get the slaver leader?

It's looking like it's one or the other.

[Parcia]

Arkius wants to speak to Ziam personally and it's not about his debt

If he catches him before he leaves, then sure.

[Zoblus]

So, is my app accepted?

[The Republic of Atria]

I definitely did not see that part. IC is a fustercluck.

However. My defense is that the slaver he intimidated led him to the entrance and opened it for him.

Okay but how did you catch up to the slaves and then get the slaver leader?

It's looking like it's one or the other.

The ones that weren't considered as valuable were left behind, allowing him to catch up to bossman.

[The first Galactic Republic]

Character Name: Ahostso Khaisis
Species: Sith Pureblood (true form), Bothan (illusionary disguise)
Age: Over 4000 years old
Sex: Male
Physical Appearance: Possesses typical Sith Pureblood traits, such as piercing yellow eyes, dark red skin, pronounced eyebrow ridges, facial tendrils, clawed fingers, and an innate connection with the dark side of the Force. Ahostso also possesses short brown hair, though it has grayed somewhat in his lifetime, as well as extremely menacing sharp teeth. However, this all has to do with his true appearance, as his spirit has possessed the body of a Bothan Jedi knight.
Affiliation: Old Sith Empire (formerly), Rogue Sith (currently)
Occupation: Sith Sorcerer/Alchemist
Equipment:

• Lightsaber, Red
• Sith Holocron, Korriban
• Sith Amulet, Shaped like an Eye

Powers and Abilities:

• Sith Alchemy: Used to strengthen objects and imbue them with dark side properties, as well as adding some new traits. Can also be used to create potent potions and elixirs.
• False Lightside Aura: Long forgotten Sith magic that allows its user to conceal their dark energies in a false aura of light. Has been used in the past to infiltrate jedi controlled areas, with one user even having infiltrated the Jedi Temple.
• Transfer Essence: Ancient Sith magic that allows its user to escape death by transferring their essence into a vessel infused with the Force. Requires great concentration, deep meditation, and the use of amulets and/or talismans, though particularly gifted sorcerers can do this only using meditation.
• Dark Side Tendrils: Summoned through Sith magic, these manifestations of pure malevolent Force energy rise from the ground in the form of a black mist. Forming into tentacles, they destroy most anything they come into contact with, while living targets are ensnared and feel the full force of the void of the dark side.
• Odojinya: When used successfully, this power would summon strands of dark side energy that would wrap around the target and ensnare them in an unbreakable mesh. The lattice of dark energy would then effectively sever the being's connection to the Force and continuously sap their strength as well.
• Qâzoi Kyantuska: A form of Sith magic, it allows the user to invade the mind of any individual and give them the power to control them as they please. Gifted sorcerers can control multiple individuals at the same time, though most can control one or two people only.
• Sutta Chwituskak: Also known as the Bolt of Hatred, it is an ancient Sith technique conjured through magic which allows the Force user to create a radiant sphere of pure hatred which they could hurl at any target in their direct line of sight.

Backstory (Optional):

RS - Leave this for organizational purposes

A few issues with this.

How is your character 4,000 years old?

You should also describe your abilities more. How do they work exactly and how will your character use them.

It's just your character seems kind of overpowered and you need to explain why this isn't the case.

[The first Galactic Republic]

Okay but how did you catch up to the slaves and then get the slaver leader?

It's looking like it's one or the other.

The ones that weren't considered as valuable were left behind, allowing him to catch up to bossman.

Okay that sounds reasonable.