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by Stratarin » Fri Oct 28, 2016 9:13 pm
by Zekeinistan » Sat Nov 05, 2016 8:34 am
Stratarin wrote:Critiques encouraged!
Name: Anatoly Baryshnikov
Occupation: Minister of Defense and War in the Serene Republic of Stratarin
Gender: Male
Height: 5'10
Eyes: Green
Hair: Brown
Age: 23
Backstory: When Anatoly was a young boy, he would dream of battles, conflicts, and skirmishes, his imagination fueled by the stories of his father, a military veteran. As he grew, he studied more and more concerning battle strategies, famous clashes of armies, and tactical generals. What with the direction of his study, he soon became rather adept at strategy. As is Stratarin's custom, he was drafted into the military at age 17. He was exuberant. Finally, his chance to put all his knowledge into good use for the good of his country had presented itself. His superiors noticed a certain spark in him, and he rose through the ranks quickly. By the time he was 19, although he had already gained command of his own platoon, Anatoly had begun to grow weary. War, though fascinating in study, was grim in reality. He even had some guilt due to the lives he had taken in combat. He didn't let it show, though, and was known for his cheerfulness. Plus, his goal had never changed: he still worked for the good of his country. In his 22nd year, the largest revolution, called rather originally The Great Revolution, rocked the nation of Stratarin. By that time, he had a sizeable force under his command, and had several incredibly successful military operations under his belt. Due to Anatoly's skill, his command was deployed to end the revolution. Which he did. He ultimately crushed the Revolution in a single battle, despite having much less manpower, and followed up with several skirmishes that eliminated any remnants. Feeding off the fear that such a revolution had distilled in the populace, a new dictator named General Secretary Drugov rose to power (a different backstory for a different time). Noting Anatoly's talent that he deemed wasted, and being able to do whatever he pleased because he is a dictator, Drugov had Anatoly promoted to the office of the Minister of Defense and War, one of the higher honors that could be achieved. By this time, however, Anatoly's victory felt hollow. For it was not an enemy nation that he had bested, but his own kin. One year later, he still fights. He still smiles, he still tries to make Stratarin a better place. But he has started to wonder whether or not he is doing it the right way. Whether he killed enemies in battle or murdered men who stood up and paid the price. Whether he deserves his position or he deserves death.
Thoughts?
by Rhodevus » Sat Nov 05, 2016 5:12 pm
Habna wrote:Could I get some aid?
Ill warn you though; my characters are furries
Rodrania wrote:Rhod, I f*cking love you, man. <3
Divergia wrote:The Canadian Polar-Potato-Moose-Cat has spoken!
Beiluxia wrote:Is it just me, or does your name keep getting better the more I see it?
by The Alexanderians » Sun Nov 06, 2016 6:01 am
Galloism wrote:Or we can go with feminism doesn't exist. We all imagined it. Collectively.
by Halvarda » Sun Nov 06, 2016 8:28 am
by Zekeinistan » Sun Nov 06, 2016 8:58 am
Halvarda wrote:I've seen people posting pictures of characters like the ones on OP's post, but I can't find any links to such character maker. I'm also too lazy to go through the whole thread. Can someone post a link? I'd really appreciate it.
by Rhodevus » Sun Nov 06, 2016 2:42 pm
Rodrania wrote:Rhod, I f*cking love you, man. <3
Divergia wrote:The Canadian Polar-Potato-Moose-Cat has spoken!
Beiluxia wrote:Is it just me, or does your name keep getting better the more I see it?
by Habna » Sun Nov 06, 2016 2:57 pm
by Rhodevus » Sun Nov 06, 2016 3:08 pm
Habna wrote:Rhodevus wrote:
all you must do it post it here. No need to ask for permission
Well my first character
He is 16 years old and he is a loner but still pretty talkative and
He once did this thing where he stole candy from annoying little kids and sold them to foreign countries to I guess be sold to children there...he also temporarily ruled a small obscure nation but doesn't any more because it was boring I guess...
You can see it's really scattered.
He lives in the fictional us state of Fur Island in a town called Glassvale
Also he has the ability to explode and reform unless he's in a specific story where cant for reasons to keep things different... I don't know.
But usually he can just reform after exploding a horrible weird furry inflation death,
What do you think is he too edgy? I can't see how he could be marry sue because doesn't that require it to be a fanfiction?
Rodrania wrote:Rhod, I f*cking love you, man. <3
Divergia wrote:The Canadian Polar-Potato-Moose-Cat has spoken!
Beiluxia wrote:Is it just me, or does your name keep getting better the more I see it?
by Habna » Sun Nov 06, 2016 3:16 pm
Rhodevus wrote:Habna wrote:
Well my first character
He is 16 years old and he is a loner but still pretty talkative and
He once did this thing where he stole candy from annoying little kids and sold them to foreign countries to I guess be sold to children there...he also temporarily ruled a small obscure nation but doesn't any more because it was boring I guess...
You can see it's really scattered.
He lives in the fictional us state of Fur Island in a town called Glassvale
Also he has the ability to explode and reform unless he's in a specific story where cant for reasons to keep things different... I don't know.
But usually he can just reform after exploding a horrible weird furry inflation death,
What do you think is he too edgy? I can't see how he could be marry sue because doesn't that require it to be a fanfiction?
okay, so he is a 16 year old talkative loner who steals candy from children and sells them to foreign countries? And, at the age of 16, he temporarily ruled a small country?
It is definitely all over the place. Big question: why is he stealing candy from children and selling it to other countries? More importantly, why are other countries buying his stolen candy? (how much candy is he stealing that countries would want to buy it?)
And he ruled a country? How did a 16 year old kid rule a country?
and who's sue?
by Rhodevus » Sun Nov 06, 2016 3:34 pm
Habna wrote:Rhodevus wrote:
okay, so he is a 16 year old talkative loner who steals candy from children and sells them to foreign countries? And, at the age of 16, he temporarily ruled a small country?
It is definitely all over the place. Big question: why is he stealing candy from children and selling it to other countries? More importantly, why are other countries buying his stolen candy? (how much candy is he stealing that countries would want to buy it?)
And he ruled a country? How did a 16 year old kid rule a country?
and who's sue?
A marry sue is a character who invades an already established story and tries to be important in a contrived way.
Swarvia was the country he once ruled by winning a lottery,
He then sent it back to communism because even that is better than a lottocracy,
Then he just abandoned the country- however Swarvia is one of the main Countries he sold the stolen candy too
Rodrania wrote:Rhod, I f*cking love you, man. <3
Divergia wrote:The Canadian Polar-Potato-Moose-Cat has spoken!
Beiluxia wrote:Is it just me, or does your name keep getting better the more I see it?
by Habna » Sun Nov 06, 2016 3:53 pm
Rhodevus wrote:Habna wrote:
A marry sue is a character who invades an already established story and tries to be important in a contrived way.
Swarvia was the country he once ruled by winning a lottery,
He then sent it back to communism because even that is better than a lottocracy,
Then he just abandoned the country- however Swarvia is one of the main Countries he sold the stolen candy too
Oh! A Mary Sue. I thought you meant that he was marrying someone named Sue.
Why is selling candy to a country such a big thing? And how is he possibly able to obtain enough candy that a country would want to buy it? It's not like countries buy a basket or two of candy.
and what story are you trying to put this character into?
by The Irish County of the Beare-Mor » Sun Nov 06, 2016 3:59 pm
by Rhodevus » Sun Nov 06, 2016 4:10 pm
Habna wrote:Rhodevus wrote:
Oh! A Mary Sue. I thought you meant that he was marrying someone named Sue.
Why is selling candy to a country such a big thing? And how is he possibly able to obtain enough candy that a country would want to buy it? It's not like countries buy a basket or two of candy.
and what story are you trying to put this character into?
No! To people in those countries!
Rodrania wrote:Rhod, I f*cking love you, man. <3
Divergia wrote:The Canadian Polar-Potato-Moose-Cat has spoken!
Beiluxia wrote:Is it just me, or does your name keep getting better the more I see it?
by Western Marson » Mon Nov 21, 2016 11:28 am
Zekeinistan wrote:Stratarin wrote:Critiques encouraged!
Name: Anatoly Baryshnikov
Occupation: Minister of Defense and War in the Serene Republic of Stratarin
Gender: Male
Height: 5'10
Eyes: Green
Hair: Brown
Age: 23
Backstory: When Anatoly was a young boy, he would dream of battles, conflicts, and skirmishes, his imagination fueled by the stories of his father, a military veteran. As he grew, he studied more and more concerning battle strategies, famous clashes of armies, and tactical generals. What with the direction of his study, he soon became rather adept at strategy. As is Stratarin's custom, he was drafted into the military at age 17. He was exuberant. Finally, his chance to put all his knowledge into good use for the good of his country had presented itself. His superiors noticed a certain spark in him, and he rose through the ranks quickly. By the time he was 19, although he had already gained command of his own platoon, Anatoly had begun to grow weary. War, though fascinating in study, was grim in reality. He even had some guilt due to the lives he had taken in combat. He didn't let it show, though, and was known for his cheerfulness. Plus, his goal had never changed: he still worked for the good of his country. In his 22nd year, the largest revolution, called rather originally The Great Revolution, rocked the nation of Stratarin. By that time, he had a sizeable force under his command, and had several incredibly successful military operations under his belt. Due to Anatoly's skill, his command was deployed to end the revolution. Which he did. He ultimately crushed the Revolution in a single battle, despite having much less manpower, and followed up with several skirmishes that eliminated any remnants. Feeding off the fear that such a revolution had distilled in the populace, a new dictator named General Secretary Drugov rose to power (a different backstory for a different time). Noting Anatoly's talent that he deemed wasted, and being able to do whatever he pleased because he is a dictator, Drugov had Anatoly promoted to the office of the Minister of Defense and War, one of the higher honors that could be achieved. By this time, however, Anatoly's victory felt hollow. For it was not an enemy nation that he had bested, but his own kin. One year later, he still fights. He still smiles, he still tries to make Stratarin a better place. But he has started to wonder whether or not he is doing it the right way. Whether he killed enemies in battle or murdered men who stood up and paid the price. Whether he deserves his position or he deserves death.
Thoughts?
Anatoly definitely moved through those ranks way too quickly, even if he was obsessed with the military his entire childhood.
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by Rhodevus » Thu Dec 01, 2016 1:16 pm
Rodrania wrote:Rhod, I f*cking love you, man. <3
Divergia wrote:The Canadian Polar-Potato-Moose-Cat has spoken!
Beiluxia wrote:Is it just me, or does your name keep getting better the more I see it?
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