Disclaimer: correct me if I'm wrong on the summary.
Summary:
There was a plague that infected various creatures of the wilds, driving them mad and hostile. The Werewolves were the only group of creatures left that were not infected. The Wolves being the defender of all living things, stands ready to defend a human settlement under imminent threat. Artimis awaits the ogre invasion besides her mother, nervous, but excited. They successfully repelled the invasion, albeit with some casualties. Artimis' mother was injured. However, the ogres managed to sneak through and passed the border, killing some humans along their way. Artimis' friend White Water, along with her River Runs pack went outeliminate the enemy. They saved a human child, but the fight was brutal and the ogres killed White Water's mother. Artimis and her pack finally arrived to assist them, but it was too late. The leader of the River Runs pack was killed and White Water was injured. Only a baby remains from a family of 5 humans. Artimis had to leave the baby in the human settlement. She left carrying White Water and her mother's body.
Characters - 14/25
I feel that there is little to go about the characterization in here. There are some details about what the characters look like, but it was hard to discover the traits or anything at all really. You need to give more life to the characters. Make them more detailed. I gave you points because there was some sense of emotions, even if it was at times, confusing.
Plot - 13/25
It could be better. It gives little background to what was really going on. If a critic doesn't know what the context of the story is, the plot becomes muddled and butchered. And I understand that this is an extension to a previous story you made (right?), but I can only review what you're submitting.
Setting - 7/15
Your description of the local color is great, but the setting changes really quickly for me. I know that there are some trees and meadows somewhere, but that's all I can remember. Of course, your story was hard to read, so I might have missed something. The use of motif (lightning) to divide the story into sections is great though. Makes the plot flows to an extent.
Creativity - 6/15
I'm not really seeing a lot of creativity here.
Style - 5/15
Too much ellipses. I do think you are trying to attempt some sort of Native American storytelling, but it just didn't work out in the end. Sorry.
Grammar/spelling - 0/5
Terrible. Really need to use proper grammar and spelling. Especially on character names.
A warning to you all: I'm not a great reader. If your story have bad spelling or grammar, it WILL be hard for me to both decipher the language you're using and understand the story.
