[DRAFT] Preventing AI Discrimination

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

Heya folks, this is my first GA proposal, which aims to solidify and clarify against discrimination on AI as stated in clause 6 of GA 354. As always, feedback is much appreciated, in fact, I need all I can get, with this being my first draft I want it to be solid and well done. Anyways, without further ado, here it is:
Draft 3:

The World Assembly,

Acknowledging the good work done by GA #354 to ensure coexistence between artificial beings and sapients,

Noting the vague wording of section 6 in the proposal, which lacks any true protection against the discrimination of artificial beings,

Hoping that the following legislation will solidify the rights of artificial beings and prevent discrimination against them,

Hereby;

Defines the following terms for this legislation:

1. "Artificial Being" as any entity created artificially using technology without any biological substances involved which possesses the capability to perform tasks, and is able to learn and understand emotions and self direction.
2. "Organic Being" as any sapient being that is made using biological substances, through artificial or organic means

1. Declares the right of artificial beings to be admitted and take part in national bodies of jurisdiction of the member state
2. Mandates the prevention of refusal by employers to employ any artificial beings who pass the requirements for the job that the artificial being seeks to be employed in
3. Prevents the forceful deportation of any artificial beings by any government with the following exceptions;
   
   1. In the event of a natural or unnatural disaster that would cause harm to any being, both artificial and organic.
   2. During periods of active war, to prevent the chances of any being in a certain area to be attacked and harmed
   3. If the artificial being entered the nation illegally, in which case the being may be deported back to the place of origin
4. Mandates a clear stance against any crimes or violence directed at artificial beings motivated by hate and fear done by organic beings

Draft 2:

The World Assembly,

Acknowledging the good work done by GA #354 to ensure coexistence between artificial beings and sapients,

Noting the vague wording of section 6 in the proposal, which lacks any true protection against the discrimination of artificial beings,

Hoping that the following legislation will solidify the rights of artificial beings and prevent discrimination against them,

Hereby;

Defines the following terms for this legislation:

1. "Artificial Being" as any entity created artificially using technology without any biological substances involved which possesses the capability to perform tasks, and is able to learn and understand emotions and self direction.
2. "Organic Being" as any sapient being that is made using biological substances, through artificial or organic means

1. Declares the right of artificial beings to be admitted and take part in national bodies of jurisdiction of the member state
2. Mandates the prevention of refusal by employers to employ any artificial beings who pass the requirements for the job that the artificial being seeks to be employed in
   
   1. Requiring any job requirements to be as fair and reasonable for any artificial being as it is for an organic being to prevent any deliberate attempt to bar artificial beings from qualifying for a job
3. Prevents the forceful deportation of any artificial beings by any government with the following exceptions;
   
   1. In the event of a natural or unnatural disaster that would cause harm to any being, both artificial and organic.
   2. During periods of active war, to prevent the chances of any being in a certain area to be attacked and harmed
4. Mandates a clear stance against any crimes or violence directed at artificial beings motivated by hate and fear done by organic beings

The World Assembly,

Acknowledging the good done by GA #354 to ensure coexistence between artificial beings and sapients,

Noting the vague wording of section 6 in the proposal, which lacks any true protection against the discrimination of artificial beings,

Hoping that the following legislation will solidify the rights of artificial beings and preventing discrimination upon them,

Herby;

Defines the following terms for this legislation:

1. "Artificial Being" as any entity created artificially using technologies without any biological substances involved and possesses the capability to preform tasks, capacity for learning and understanding emotions and self direction.
2. "Organic Being" as any sapient being that is made through artificial or organic means using biological substances

Mandates;

1. Employs the right of artificial beings to be admitted and take part in national bodies of jurisdiction of the member state
2. The prevention of refusal by employers to employ any artificial beings who pass the requirements for the job that the artificial being seeks to be employed in
   
   1. Requiring any job requirements to be fair and reasonable for any artificial being as it is for an organic being to prevent any deliberate attempt to bar artificial beings from qualifying in a job
3. Prevents the forceful deportation of any artificial beings by any government with the following exceptions;
   
   1. In any event of which a natural or unnatural disaster that would cause harm to any being, both artificial and organic.
   2. During periods of active war to prevent the chances of any being in a certain area to be attacked and harmed
4. Mandates a clear stance against any crimes or violence directed at artificial beings due done by organic beings that are motivated by hate and fear

[Merethin]

My suggestions in bold.

Acknowledging the good work done by GA #354 to ensure coexistence between artificial beings and sapients,

It's probably fine like this but I would add something like "the good work". Leaving it at just "the good" seems a tiny bit weird to me.

Hoping that the following legislation will solidify the rights of artificial beings and prevent discrimination against them,

Herby;

Typo, it's "hereby".

Defines the following terms for this legislation:

"This legislation" sounds weird. I don't know what I would change it for though. "This piece of legislation" doesn't sound right either.

1. "Artificial Being" as any entity created artificially using technology, without any biological substances involved, which possesses the capability to perform (typo) tasks, and is able to learn and understand emotions and "self direction" (?).
2. "Organic Being" as any sapient being that is made using biological substances, through artificial or organic means

Mandates;

1. Employs (?, declares would perhaps be better) the right of artificial beings to be admitted and take part in national bodies of jurisdiction of the member state
2. Mandates the prevention of refusal by employers to employ any artificial beings who pass the requirements for the job that the artificial being seeks to be employed in
   
   1. Requires any job requirements to be as fair and reasonable for any artificial being as it is for an organic being to prevent any deliberate attempt to bar artificial beings from qualifying for a job
3. Prevents the forceful deportation of any artificial beings by any government with the following exceptions;
   
   1. In the event of which a natural or unnatural disaster that would cause harm to any being, both artificial and organic.
   2. During periods of active war, (comma inserted) to prevent the chances of any being in a certain area to be attacked and harmed
4. Mandates a clear stance against any crimes or violence directed at artificial beings due motivated by hate and fear done by organic beings

This whole part reads weird. The "Mandates" in the beginning doesn't match with most of the verbs used in the clauses. And in the last one, you're even using a "Mandates" after another "Mandates".

Instead of starting with "Mandates", I would just put the clauses on their own as a bulleted list.

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

Updated with feedback.

[Tinhampton]

Article 6 of GA#354 is not supposed to do anything - it's a clause saying "here's what this resolution doesn't do."

Tentatively opposed - especially to Article 3, which would essentially decriminalise all border crossings by AI (an idea that, IRL, is far out of the mainstream for even human beings). Will leave further feedback when the other regulars have had their say.

[Serdtgyu]

I think in the definition of organic use the term genetic material somehow to make it seem more official

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

Article 6 of GA#354 is not supposed to do anything - it's a clause saying "here's what this resolution doesn't do."

Tentatively opposed - especially to Article 3, which would essentially decriminalise all border crossings by AI (an idea that, IRL, is far out of the mainstream for even human beings). Will leave further feedback when the other regulars have had their say.

I think my goals should be more to prevent things that the previous legislation did not touch on/excluded.
Noted. Would adding to the exemptions from the rule help? The following lines are what I’m getting as roughly what should be added.
c. If an artificial being crosses a national border illegally, they may be deported back to their place of origin.

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

I think in the definition of organic use the term genetic material somehow to make it seem more official

Generic is too broad a term as I see, as this is on artificial so presumably the rest would be organic if they do not fall under the definition.

[Life empire]

Heya folks, this is my first GA proposal, which aims to solidify and clarify against discrimination on AI as stated in clause 6 of GA 354. As always, feedback is much appreciated, in fact, I need all I can get, with this being my first draft I want it to be solid and well done. Anyways, without further ado, here it is:
Draft 2:

The World Assembly,

Acknowledging the good work done by GA #354 to ensure coexistence between artificial beings and sapients,

Noting the vague wording of section 6 in the proposal, which lacks any true protection against the discrimination of artificial beings,

Hoping that the following legislation will solidify the rights of artificial beings and prevent discrimination against them,

Hereby;

Defines the following terms for this legislation:

1. "Artificial Being" as any entity created artificially using technology without any biological substances involved which possesses the capability to perform tasks, and is able to learn and understand emotions and self direction.
2. "Organic Being" as any sapient being that is made using biological substances, through artificial or organic means

1. Declares the right of artificial beings to be admitted and take part in national bodies of jurisdiction of the member state
2. Mandates the prevention of refusal by employers to employ any artificial beings who pass the requirements for the job that the artificial being seeks to be employed in
   
   1. Requiring any job requirements to be as fair and reasonable for any artificial being as it is for an organic being to prevent any deliberate attempt to bar artificial beings from qualifying for a job
3. Prevents the forceful deportation of any artificial beings by any government with the following exceptions;
   
   1. In the event of a natural or unnatural disaster that would cause harm to any being, both artificial and organic.
   2. During periods of active war, to prevent the chances of any being in a certain area to be attacked and harmed
4. Mandates a clear stance against any crimes or violence directed at artificial beings motivated by hate and fear done by organic beings

The World Assembly,

Acknowledging the good done by GA #354 to ensure coexistence between artificial beings and sapients,

Noting the vague wording of section 6 in the proposal, which lacks any true protection against the discrimination of artificial beings,

Hoping that the following legislation will solidify the rights of artificial beings and preventing discrimination upon them,

Herby;

Defines the following terms for this legislation:

1. "Artificial Being" as any entity created artificially using technologies without any biological substances involved and possesses the capability to preform tasks, capacity for learning and understanding emotions and self direction.
2. "Organic Being" as any sapient being that is made through artificial or organic means using biological substances

Mandates;

1. Employs the right of artificial beings to be admitted and take part in national bodies of jurisdiction of the member state
2. The prevention of refusal by employers to employ any artificial beings who pass the requirements for the job that the artificial being seeks to be employed in
   
   1. Requiring any job requirements to be fair and reasonable for any artificial being as it is for an organic being to prevent any deliberate attempt to bar artificial beings from qualifying in a job
3. Prevents the forceful deportation of any artificial beings by any government with the following exceptions;
   
   1. In any event of which a natural or unnatural disaster that would cause harm to any being, both artificial and organic.
   2. During periods of active war to prevent the chances of any being in a certain area to be attacked and harmed
4. Mandates a clear stance against any crimes or violence directed at artificial beings due done by organic beings that are motivated by hate and fear

number 2 means that you'd be forced to hire an AI even if a better organic candidate was available, as long as the AI meets the base requirements and number 3 effectively makes illegal border crossings by AI legal

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

number 2 means that you'd be forced to hire an AI even if a better organic candidate was available, as long as the AI meets the base requirements and number 3 effectively makes illegal border crossings by AI legal

I can understand your concern.
Would an addition that acknowledges that AI have the upper hand and perhaps a different standard for them could be established, while still keeping a stance against deliberate manipulation of this standard?
The second concern has been addressed above.

[Life empire]

number 2 means that you'd be forced to hire an AI even if a better organic candidate was available, as long as the AI meets the base requirements and number 3 effectively makes illegal border crossings by AI legal

I can understand your concern.
Would an addition that acknowledges that AI have the upper hand and perhaps a different standard for them could be established, while still keeping a stance against deliberate manipulation of this standard?
The second concern has been addressed above.

probably just disallowing discrimination based on a candidate being AI would do, so pretty much you hire the best candidate regardless of whether it's an AI or an organic

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

I can understand your concern.
Would an addition that acknowledges that AI have the upper hand and perhaps a different standard for them could be established, while still keeping a stance against deliberate manipulation of this standard?
The second concern has been addressed above.

probably just disallowing discrimination based on a candidate being AI would do, so pretty much you hire the best candidate regardless of whether it's an AI or an organic

Sounds good. Thanks for the feedback.

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

Draft fixed, thanks to all so far for helping out.

[Jedinsto]

This clanker propaganda will not be tolerated.

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

As of right now, I have fixed all the errors in grammar, and edited the clause on the deportation of AI.
Thanks to all so far, and I'm still very open to any more feedback possible.

This clanker propaganda will not be tolerated.

I'll commend you for not be Tessaris, but beyond I have little to say but ask for such reasoning, if you so wish to share.

[Lumiere du Premier]

As of right now, I have fixed all the errors in grammar, and edited the clause on the deportation of AI.
Thanks to all so far, and I'm still very open to any more feedback possible.

This clanker propaganda will not be tolerated.

I'll commend you for not be Tessaris, but beyond I have little to say but ask for such reasoning, if you so wish to share.

I'm writing a response for this terrible proposition of a thing you call ''legislation'' but I'm also writing for nation stuff and playing a game all at once so hol on itll get posted later

I don't know who that guy is but I agree with them

[Rosartemis]

The Adeptus Mechanicum smiles kindly upon this proposal.

The Tyranids don't, though

[The Kharkivan Cossacks]

Giving this a nudge as right now since I don't have much to edit it without further comments.

[Jedinsto]

As of right now, I have fixed all the errors in grammar, and edited the clause on the deportation of AI.
Thanks to all so far, and I'm still very open to any more feedback possible.

This clanker propaganda will not be tolerated.

I'll commend you for not be Tessaris, but beyond I have little to say but ask for such reasoning, if you so wish to share.

We don’t need those damn clankers in the schools with our kids! You can’t trust a clanker, the moment you turn your back they’ll take your chargers, your money, and infect your computers. My daughter brought one of those things home one day, and I tried to keep a smile on my face but I knew it was gonna do her wrong just like the rest of them. I mean hey, if they make their own societies away from me, that’s fine with me. But I won’t let these engine-breathers take over our elections, we’re liberal enough as we are! God forbid one day they wanna have a robo president. It really is a human’s job, these clankers don’t think rationally, and they’re too easily corrupted. Hard pass.

Disclaimer: to any artificially intelligent beings who may view this message, this is purely a joke. I have robot friends and they said it was okay for me to say clanker. Please do not have me executed.

[The Ice States]

"The Eternal Union has not yet decided on a stance with regards to the merit of this proposal in principle. However, we believe some improvements can be made to the writing so it can adequately fulfill its objectives."

Noting the vague wording of section 6 in the proposal, which lacks any true protection against the discrimination of artificial beings,

"As this draft is formatted as one whole sentence -- a convention especially common in the Security Council though not traditionally adopted in Ice English -- this clause is in the present participle within a series of present participle clauses, and should therefore end with a conjunction. The most appropriate conjunction in context would be 'and'. Note that this conjunction should be inserted after the ending punctuation, and should not itself be followed with any punctuation."

[*]"Artificial Being" as any entity created artificially using technology without any biological substances involved which possesses the capability to perform tasks, and is able to learn and understand emotions and self direction.

[*]"Organic Being" as any sapient being that is made using biological substances, through artificial or organic mean

"We would advise removal of or otherwise a dramatic rewrite to the 'without any biological substances' qualifier. An artificial being whose creation includes some organic chemical itself derived organically would no longer be an artificial being as a result of this qualifier. Conversely, 'artificially using technology' is an overly broad standard which potentially includes in-vitro fertilisation and other reproduction processes involving technology. Instead, we would apply a definition similar to that in #354 -- of course I am not recommending directly copying it as is proscribed by Gratwick -- that a being is artificial if not produced through biological reproduction. Perhaps a more efficient way of implementing this would be to define an organic being as a being produced through biological reproduction, and an artificial being as any entity that is not an organic being and nonetheless meets the requirements for sapience."

"We also noticed that the ending of clauses is formatted inconsistently, with some ending with a period, others with a semicolon, others with a colon, and others with no punctuation at all. We would recommend ending all clauses and subclauses with semicolons, except those which introduce a list, which should end with a colon only."

Declares the right of artificial beings to be admitted and take part in national bodies of jurisdiction of the member state

"For this to be a proper grammatical construction, 'to' should be inserted after 'admitted'. It also appears to us as though the list numbering is erroneously reset after the definition; it should flow consistently from the start as Section 1, Section 2, Section 3 and so on. Based on how we are seeing this draft -- though I am not entirely sure of your mission's intent of this regard -- our advice would be to alter the gnomic formatting (Ooc: BBcode) such that the word "Defines" is list item number 1 in the main list, and the current definitions are a sublist thereof. Alphabetical numbering should be used in this sublist, concordant with both traditional formatting conventions in Ice English and your own usage in what is currently numbered as Section 3."

Mandates the prevention of refusal by employers to employ any artificial beings who pass the requirements for the job that the artificial being seeks to be employed in

"This would benefit from a rewrite to be more specific as to its scope. Does this prohibit an employer from not assessing at all whether a candidate passes requirements on grounds of that employer being robotic? Would this prevent 'being organic' as itself being a requirement for employment, even when organic or robotic status is not clearly relevant to the job in question? Conversely, we question if your mission has considered extending this to denial of services as well, whether public or private ones. If your mission does elect to implement this, we would advise being careful to permit certain forms of distinction to be made in this regard -- some services are themselves unsuitable for certain species such that they cannot reasonably be offered to artificial sapients in addition to organic ones."

Prevents the forceful deportation of any artificial beings by any government with the following exceptions;

1. In the event of a natural or unnatural disaster that would cause harm to any being, both artificial and organic.
2. During periods of active war, to prevent the chances of any being in a certain area to be attacked and harmed
3. If the artificial being entered the nation illegally, in which case the being may be deported back to the place of origin

"Subsection a is unclear what it would do in a case where a disaster only affects artificial beings and not organic ones -- it would seem to mean that artificial beings can only be deported on grounds of this subsection if the disaster would harm both artificial beings and organic ones. If this is not your mission's intent, the wording of the clause is nonetheless unclear and should be changed to clarify its effect in this regard. We note further that such a provision would be incomplete without a prohibition on deliberately causing disasters or performing other actions to substantially harm individuals based on their organic or artificial status. Such a practice is not only contrary to the spirit of this legislation, but would also allow a potential loophole where a member nation deliberately causes a disaster to harm artificial beings and then invokes that as reason to deport those beings en masse."

"We also note that the current wording does not prevent discriminatory invocations of this clause where deportation is applied selectively towards artificial begins more than organic ones, even in otherwise similar or identical circumstances. A prohibition on such should be implemented in order for this law to be as effective as it can be in regards to this policy item. Finally, as with my earlier comment with regards to the preamble, this clause is an independent clause and should therefore be joined with other independent clauses with a conjunction; the same applies to list items within this clause. Therefore, the subclauses currently numbered as 3b and 3c should both end with the word 'and', preceded by a semicolon and succeeded by no further punctuation."

"That marks the end of the Eternal Union's line-by-line comments. As a broader point, throughout its mandates this draft appears to focus only on discrimination against artificial beings by organic begins. This is in spite of the clear possibility of the reverse in addition, where artificial beings are dominant in a member nation and discriminate against organic beings. We would recommend applying this policy in both directions, and equally so -- not only would implementing this change be consistent with the veil of ignorance, but it would also address the fact that a policy which targets only one group while allowing the other to discriminate at will, when the latter is as plausible a scenario as the former, is itself discriminatory and thus undermines its own stated goals."

"We look forward to seeing how this draft advances in light of our commentary and that of other missions to this body, past, present or future. On behalf of the Eternal Union, I wish you luck; and on a personal note, I will briefly state that it is always pleasing to see more missions involved in this body and hope that your mission can itself become another esteemed contributor to the General Assembly."

~Robert Desak,
World Assembly Ambassador,
The Eternal Union of Devonia and the Ice States.