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[Passed] - WA Misrepresentation Protocols

Postby Simone Republic » Thu Nov 30, 2023 4:40 pm

Motivation

This has run back and forth in the WA since mid October 2023.

Previous vote: viewtopic.php?f=9&t=540843

Previous legal challenge: viewtopic.php?f=9&t=542697

Obviously this is returning with a change of category and a slight change in title in order not to screw up the archives on resolution votes.

I changed the wording "IP" to "UI" (unique identifiers) to avoid this looking like another merchandise resolution.

Category: Political Stability/Mild (pursuant to the legality challenge, this won't be changed)

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The World Assembly (WA);

Noting the esteem in which the WA is held throughout the multi-verse;

Noting the passing of GAR 334 and highlighting the need to protect the names, logos, and other identifiers of the WA from fraudulent misuse;

Affirming that awards, medals and prizes awarded by WA organs represent honor and privilege that should not be misused for profit;

The WA hereby enacts as follows:

  1. Definitions.
    1. "GAO" means the General Accounting Office.
    2. "Individual(s)" means anyone who is part of a sapient species and are subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state.
    3. "Prohibited purposes" means (i) fraud, (ii) deception, or (iii) misrepresentation, in all cases requiring specific intent to harm or act to the detriment of another individual.
    4. "Registers" means physical and electronic registers of the following:
      1. Register of WA Awards;
      2. Register of WA UI;
      3. Register of WA Personnel.
    5. "WA Awards" means all awards, certificates, medals, and other similar honors duly issued by the WA in whatever form.
    6. "WA Personnel" means all current and previous employees and representatives of the WA.
    7. "WA UI" means all names, logos, mascots, uniforms, and other unique identifiers (UI) of the WA, designated by the WA as such from time to time, presented through verbal, physical, electronic, or other means.
  2. GAO registers.
    1. The GAO is to maintain and update regularly the Registers defined in clause (1)(d)(i-iii).
    2. The said Registers are available for inspection at all times, and free of charge, through convenient physical and electronic means.
    3. The Registers for WA Awards and WA UI are available for inspection and enquiries by all individuals free of charge, regardless of whether they are subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state.
    4. The Register for WA Personnel is available for inspection and enquiries by the government of a WA state (or their sub-national governments) to verify the status of all WA Personnel, strictly on a need-to-know basis, subject to appropriate safeguards on personal data. Access shall be free of charge to the government of that WA state.
    5. The GAO may grant competent authorities of non-WA states access to the Register for WA Personnel, to facilitate diplomatic relations, subject to appropriate agreements and security measures.
  3. WA unique identifiers.
    1. The Register for WA UI contains such identifiers that should be solely used by the WA (or its organs, or their representatives) to represent itself.
    2. The GAO is to register all WA UI as trademarks in all states. This is regardless of whether that state is a WA member or not, so long as the said state has such a registration regime, to the maximum extent possible.
  4. Misuse of WA UIs. Each WA state is to make it an offence for indvidiuals under jurisdiction to:
    1. deliberately misuse any WA UI, for prohibited purposes; and/or
    2. misrepresent themselves, for prohibited purposes, as:
      1. WA personnel; or
      2. acting in the capacity of the WA when not duly authorized; or
      3. the recipient of an WA Award.
  5. Clarifications.
    1. References to "the WA" means both the WA itself and all its committees.
    2. For clause (4), the burden of proof for an offence is placed on the prosecuting authority.
    3. The competent authorities of the relevant WA state shall have jurisdiction over this resolution within their own states and to determine any penalties imposed due to committing an offence under clause (4).
    4. For the avoidance of doubt, this resolution does not impede any rights to freedom of speech (including all rights related to political commentary, arts and satire) for the purpose of extant WA resolutions and the laws of each WA state.


Word count: 3,808
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Postby The Ice States » Thu Nov 30, 2023 5:04 pm

Ooc: Would "Prevention of WA Misrepresentation" or something along those lines work as a title?
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Postby Simone Republic » Thu Nov 30, 2023 6:42 pm

The Ice States wrote:Ooc: Would "Prevention of WA Misrepresentation" or something along those lines work as a title?


I tend not to use prepositions in titles because I get slightly annoyed by the title case (it appears as "Prevention Of WA Misrepresentation") but sure. That's fine.

(Draft 1)

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Draft 1

The World Assembly (WA);

Noting the esteem held by the WA across the multi-verse;

Noting the need to protect the logos, emblems, and other unique identifiers of the WA from impersonation and misuse by parties acting in malice, beyond those unique to humanitarian relief workers or organizations already protected by GA334;

Noting that awards, medals and other prizes awarded by organs of the WA represent honor and privilege that should not be misused for profit; hereby:


  1. Defines:
    1. "GAO" to mean the General Accounting Office of the WA;
    2. "IAO" to mean the Independent Adjudicative Office of the WA;
    3. "Inhabitants" to mean, for convenience, include sapient species of all kinds, plus any legal persons howsoever established, so long as the sapient species or legal persons are subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state;
    4. "Prohibited purposes" to mean fraud, deception, or misrepresentation, in all three cases with malicious intent to defraud or harm another inhabitant;
    5. "Registers" to mean registers of (1) all WA awards, and (2) all WA UI;
    6. "WA awards" as all awards, certificates, honors, medals, titles (including courtesy titles), and other similar instruments duly issued by the WA, in howsoever form;
    7. "WAHQ" to mean the WA Headquarters, and, solely for the purpose of this resolution, also includes all offices and facilities of the WA;
    8. "WA UI" as all names, logos, emblems, mascots, markers, uniforms, and other unique identifiers of the WA designated by the WA from time to time, howsoever presented through verbal, physical, electronic, or any other means, and in all colors and all dimensions;
    9. References to "such as" are merely as examples only;
    10. References to "the WA" in this resolution also include all its agencies, bodies and organs, and all their missions and offices across the multi-verse;
  2. Requires:

    1. the GAO to maintain and update from time to time the aforesaid registers, and to make available the registers for inspection, free of charge at all times to all inhabitants of WA states, accessible to both within and outside of WA states, through convenient physical and electronic means and accommodating the differing technology levels of different WA states;
    2. the GAO to provide convenient electronic and physical registries for competent authorities of a WA state, to verify if any inhabitants are duly authorized employees or representatives of the WA, or are acting with duly mandated authority from the WA, or the extent of such authority;
    3. the GAO to, subject appropriate reciprocal agreements and security measures, permit competent authorities of non-WA states access to the aforesaid registers and the registry in the preceding sub-clause, in order to facilitate relations between the WA and non-WA states;
    4. the GAO to register all WA UI as trademarks (or other analogous legal instruments) in all states, whether it is a WA state or not, if the said state has such registration regimes, to the maximum extent possible;
  3. Requires that:
    1. each WA state to make an offence for any inhabitants to deliberately mis-use of any WA UI, for prohibited purposes;
    2. each WA state to make an offence for any inhabitants to misrepresent (them)selves, for prohibited purposes, as:
      1. an employee of the WA; or
      2. an representative of the WA; or
      3. acting on behalf of the WA; or
      4. acting in the capacity of the WA when not duly authorized; or
      5. having authority given by the WA beyond any authority duly authorized by the WA; or
      6. misrepresent (them)selves as the recipient of a WA award;
    3. clarifies that clauses 3(a) and 3(b) are also offences within the WAHQ;
  4. Clarifies that:

    1. for the purpose of interpreting this resolution, the burden of proof for an offence is placed on any competent authorities making such an accusation, and subject to the burden of proof for "malicious intent" placed at or above the level of "beyond reasonable doubt";
    2. this resolution does not impede any rights to freedom of speech (including, for the avoidance of doubt, rights related to political commentary, arts and satire) for the purpose of extant WA resolutions and the laws of each WA state;
    3. the competent authorities of the relevant WA state shall have jurisdiction over the interpretation of this resolution within their own states and any penalties derived from committing an offence under clause 2(d). In case of an alleged offence taking place inside the WAHQ, the IAO shall have jurisdiction.
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Postby Imperium Anglorum » Thu Nov 30, 2023 6:52 pm

I would recommend a through redrafting for grammar, style, and flow issues. This, frankly, isn't that well polished.

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Postby The Ice States » Thu Nov 30, 2023 7:05 pm

Simone Republic wrote:
The Ice States wrote:Ooc: Would "Prevention of WA Misrepresentation" or something along those lines work as a title?


I tend not to use prepositions in titles because I get slightly annoyed by the title case (it appears as "Prevention Of WA Misrepresentation") but sure. That's fine.

"Preventing WA Misrepresentation" may work then, although it would seem less formal than "Prevention of".
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Postby Tinhampton » Thu Nov 30, 2023 8:47 pm

Opposed. It is not the place of the World Assembly to be directly changing how non-member states operate, including through requiring them to recognise their trademarks.
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Tinhampton wrote:Opposed. It is not the place of the World Assembly to be directly changing how non-member states operate, including through requiring them to recognise their trademarks.


That's technically subject to the laws of the non-WA state, I mean they don't have to recognize WA trademarks. WA can't compel them. The GAO is just applying for trademarks.

Imperium Anglorum wrote:I would recommend a through redrafting for grammar, style, and flow issues. This, frankly, isn't that well polished.


I'd work on it. As you know, all of my resolutions have grammar, style, and flow issues due to a lack of talent.
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Postby Imperium Anglorum » Fri Dec 01, 2023 12:01 pm

The idea that the WA is requiring non-member nations to recognise trademarks is a misreading.

Reading the proposal correctly, I don't see any issues with metagaming etc. The WA has the power to offer things to non-member nations without compulsion. Tinhampton was told this in Repeal "Epidemic Investigation Act" [2022] GAS 3. The reciprocal of that – receiving things from non-member nations without compulsion – should also be permissible.

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Postby Simone Republic » Mon Dec 11, 2023 4:48 am

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The World Assembly (WA);

Noting the esteem held by the WA across the multi-verse;

Noting the need to protect the names, logos, and other unique identifiers (UIs) of the WA from fraudulent misuse, beyond those unique to humanitarian relief workers or organizations already protected by GA334;

Noting that awards, medals and other prizes awarded by organs of the WA represent honor and privilege that should not be misused for profit; hereby:

  1. Defines:
    1. "GAO" to mean the General Accounting Office;
    2. "Inhabitants" to mean, for convenience, all individuals belonging to a sapient species that are subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state;
    3. "Prohibited purposes" to mean fraud, deception, or misrepresentation, in all three cases with intent to defraud or harm another inhabitant;
    4. "Registers" to mean physical and electronic registers of the following:
      1. Register of WA Awards;
      2. Register of WA UI;
      3. Register of WA Personnel;
    5. "WA Awards" to mean all awards, certificates, honors, medals, and other similar objects duly issued by the WA in whatever form;
    6. "WA Personnel" to mean all current (and previous) employees and representatives of the WA and their levels of authority;
    7. "WA UI" to mean all names, logos, mascots, markers, uniforms, and other UIs of the WA designated as such from time to time, howsoever presented through verbal, physical, electronic, or other means;
    8. References to "the WA" to mean both the WA itself and all its sub-divisions;
  2. Requires the GAO to:
    1. maintain and update from time to time the aforesaid Registers;
    2. ensure the aforesaid Registers are available free of charge at all times through convenient physical and electronic means;
    3. make the Registers for WA Awards and WA UI available for inspection and enquiries by the general public;
    4. make the Register for WA Personnel available for inspection and enquiries by the governments of a WA state to verify the status of all WA Personnel, subject to appropriate safeguards on privacy and personal data;
    5. permit competent authorities of non-WA states access to the Register for WA Personnel, to facilitate diplomatic relations, subject to appropriate agreements and security measures;
  3. Further, requires the GAO to register all WA UI as trademarks in all states, whether it is a WA state or not, if the said state has such registration regimes, to the maximum extent possible;
  4. Requires each WA state to make it an offence for any of their inhabitants to:
    1. deliberately misuse any WA UI, for prohibited purposes; and/or
    2. misrepresent themselves, for prohibited purposes, as:
      1. WA personnel; or
      2. acting in the capacity of the WA when not duly authorized; or
      3. having authority beyond any duly granted by the WA; or
      4. the recipient of an WA Award;
  5. Clarifies that:
    1. for clause (4), the burden of proof for an offence is placed on the prosecuting authority, and subject to the burden of proof for "intent" placed at or above "beyond reasonable doubt";
    2. the competent authorities of the relevant WA state shall have jurisdiction over this resolution within their own states and to determine any penalties imposed due to committing an offence under clause (3);
    3. for the avoidance of doubt, this resolution does not impede any rights to freedom of speech (including all rights related to political commentary, arts and satire) for the purpose of extant WA resolutions and the laws of each WA state.


Word count: 3,534



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Simone Republic wrote:
I tend not to use prepositions in titles because I get slightly annoyed by the title case (it appears as "Prevention Of WA Misrepresentation") but sure. That's fine.

"Preventing WA Misrepresentation" may work then, although it would seem less formal than "Prevention of".


I used "Protocols" now, having changed it twice from "Prohibition" and "Prevention" at the end.

(4a) is the only clause that is nagging me a bit. Otherwise I would have submitted this ages ago because the previous incarnation had about 70% support I think before it was discarded.

There's been some re-writes so this is now on draft 3. I forgot to save draft 2. Draft 3 has been saved.
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Draft 4 published and bumped.
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Postby Kenmoria » Fri Dec 29, 2023 9:36 am

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Simone Republic wrote:The World Assembly (WA);

Noting the esteem held by the WA throughout the multi-verse; To say that the General Assembly holds esteem is somewhat awkward wording. I suggest that this clause be reworded as follows: “Noting the esteem in which the WA is held throughout the multiverse;”.

Noting the need to protect the names, logos, and other identifiers of the WA from fraudulent misuse, beyond those unique to humanitarian relief workers or organizations already protected by GA334; Your Excellency should use a different opening verb than “noting” here, since “noting” is better used for descriptive, rather than normative, claims. This is also because “noting” has already been used. I recommend “highlighting” instead.

Affirming that awards, medals and prizes awarded by WA organs represent honor and privilege that should not be misused for profit;

The WA hereby enacts as follows:

  1. Definitions.
    1. "GAO" means the General Accounting Office.
    2. "Individuals" mean anyone part of a sapient species and are subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state. This does not grammatically flow. “Mean” should be “means”, because the agreement is with a singular word rather than actual plural individuals, for example. The following, in my view, ought to be used instead: “"Individuals" means anyone who is part of a sapient species and subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state."”
    3. "Prohibited purposes" to mean (i) fraud, (ii) deception, or (iii) misrepresentation, requiring specific intent to harm or act to the detriment of another individual.
    4. "Registers" to mean physical and electronic registers of the following:
      1. Register of WA Awards;
      2. Register of WA UI;
      3. Register of WA Personnel; At this point, the listing used to end clauses switches from full stops to semicolons, and your Excellency should standardise this to either full stops or semicolons, rather than moving between them.
    5. "WA Awards" to mean all awards, certificates, medals, and other similar honors duly issued by the WA in whatever form;
    6. "WA Personnel" to mean all current (and previous) employees and representatives of the WA and their levels of authority; Given that this is an essential part of the clause, “(and previous)” should not be bracketed.
    7. "WA UI" to mean all names, logos, mascots, uniforms, and other unique identifiers (UI)s of the WA, designated by the WA as such from time to time, presented through verbal, physical, electronic, or other means;
    8. References to "the WA" to mean both the WA itself and all its sub-divisions. “Committees” would be more direct than “sub-divisions”, given that it is not as though the General Assembly has regional divisions.
  2. GAO registers.
    1. The GAO is to maintain and update from time to time the Registers defined in clause (1)(d)(i-iii). I recommend “regularly” over “from to time”. The latter has an air of informality about it.
    2. The said Registers are available for inspection at all times, and free of charge, through convenient physical and electronic means. There are two spaces between “said” and “Registers”. This scrivener’s error should be corrected.
    3. The Registers for WA Awards and WA UI available for inspection and enquiries by all individuals, regardless of whether they are subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state. Your Excellency is missing “are” between “WA UI” and “available”. I note that there is no requirement in this clause that the inspection be free of charge. Though this is implied in the above clause, for the avoidance of doubt, I suggest that your Excellency include that requirement in this clause as well.
    4. The Register for WA Personnel is available for inspection and enquiries by the governments of a WA state to verify the status of all WA Personnel, on a need-to-know basis, subject to appropriate safeguards on personal data. Access shall be free of charge to the government of that WA state. There is some awkward plurality here, with an implication that one member-nation can have multiple governments. I recommend the following: “…and enquiries by the governments of WA States to verify […] be free of charge to those governments…”.
    5. The GAO may grant competent authorities of non-WA states access to the Register for WA Personnel, to facilitate diplomatic relations, subject to appropriate agreements and security measures.
  3. WA unique identifiers.
    1. The Register for WA UI contains such identifiers that should be solely used by the WA (or its organs, or their representatives) to represent themselves. I recommend, for grammatical reasons, that your Excellency alter “themselves” to “itself” in this clause.
    2. The GAO is to register all WA UI as trademarks in all states, whether it is a WA state or not, if the said state has such registration regimes, to the maximum extent possible. Another error of pluralisation is present here. “States” is singular yet “whether it is” implies singularity. Your Excellency should correct this.
  4. Misuse of WA UIs. Each WA state is to make it an offence for any of their indvidiuals to: I am uncertain over what constitutes an individual being one of “their individuals”. This is a very uncertain phraseology, which perhaps could be made better by specifying citizens.
    1. deliberately misuse any WA UI, for prohibited purposes; and/or
    2. misrepresent themselves, for prohibited purposes, as:
      1. WA personnel; or
      2. acting in the capacity of the WA when not duly authorized; or
      3. having authority beyond any duly granted by the WA; or The wording of this means that an individual claiming to have any authority whatsoever, apart from authority given directly from the General Assembly, would be guilty of misrepresentation if possessing the requisite mens rea. This is absurdly broad.
      4. the recipient of an WA Award;
  5. Clarifications.
    1. For clause (4), the burden of proof for an offence is placed on the prosecuting authority, and subject to the burden of proof for "intent" placed at or above "beyond reasonable doubt". I am not sure whether this is necessary.
    2. The competent authorities of the relevant WA state shall have jurisdiction over this resolution within their own states and to determine any penalties imposed due to committing an offence under clause (3).
    3. For the avoidance of doubt, this resolution does not impede any rights to freedom of speech (including all rights related to political commentary, arts and satire) for the purpose of extant WA resolutions and the laws of each WA state.
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Simone Republic wrote:The World Assembly (WA);

To say that the General Assembly holds esteem is somewhat awkward wording. I suggest that this clause be reworded as follows: “Noting the esteem in which the WA is held throughout the multiverse;”.


Changed.

I recommend “highlighting” instead.


Changed.

This does not grammatically flow. “Mean” should be “means”, because the agreement is with a singular word rather than actual plural individuals, for example. The following, in my view, ought to be used instead: “"Individuals" means anyone who is part of a sapient species and subject to the jurisdiction of a WA state."”


Changed.

[color=#CC1208]At this point, the listing used to end clauses switches from full stops to semicolons, and your Excellency should standardise this to either full stops or semicolons, rather than moving between them.[/list]


Changed to full stops.

Given that this is an essential part of the clause, “(and previous)” should not be bracketed.


Changed.

“Committees” would be more direct than “sub-divisions”, given that it is not as though the General Assembly has regional divisions.


Sub-divisions is a term I picked up from D&B, but I guess "committees" are closer to NS terminology.

I recommend “regularly” over “from to time”. The latter has an air of informality about it.


Changed.

There are two spaces between “said” and “Registers”. This scrivener’s error should be corrected.


Changed.

Your Excellency is missing “are” between “WA UI” and “available”. I note that there is no requirement in this clause that the inspection be free of charge. Though this is implied in the above clause, for the avoidance of doubt, I suggest that your Excellency include that requirement in this clause as well.


Changed.

There is some awkward plurality here, with an implication that one member-nation can have multiple governments. I recommend the following: “…and enquiries by the governments of WA States to verify […] be free of charge to those governments…”.


Changed.

I recommend, for grammatical reasons, that your Excellency alter “themselves” to “itself” in this clause.


Changed.

Another error of pluralisation is present here. “States” is singular yet “whether it is” implies singularity. Your Excellency should correct this.[/list]


Re-worded.

[*]Misuse of WA UIs. Each WA state is to make it an offence for any of their indvidiuals to: I am uncertain over what constitutes an individual being one of “their individuals”. This is a very uncertain phraseology, which perhaps could be made better by specifying citizens.


Changed to "individuals under the jurisdiction of that WA state".

The wording of this means that an individual claiming to have any authority whatsoever, apart from authority given directly from the General Assembly, would be guilty of misrepresentation if possessing the requisite mens rea. This is absurdly broad.


This is now "acting in the capacity of the WA pursuant to due authorization, but exceeding the specific authority given by the WA as part of that said capacity."

I am not sure whether this is necessary.

Gone.

This has been submitted.
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Postby Silver Steps » Mon Jan 15, 2024 7:20 am

"We are glad to see that WA UI is to be protected across all WA nations and (where possible) in other nations as well. We will be supporting this resolution.

We are particularly excited that digital multiplayer games attempting to simulate the WA -- a veritable scourge throughout Silver Steps and elsewhere -- shall run afoul of the now-registered trademarks and be required to use other terms for their WAs, such as 'United Nations.'"
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Postby Omphalos » Mon Jan 15, 2024 7:35 am

Against due to being submitted with typos in Clause 4.
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Postby The Overmind » Mon Jan 15, 2024 9:42 am

Omphalos wrote:Against due to being submitted with typos in Clause 4.


That seems a little pedantic. It doesn't change the legislative effect of the proposal.
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Postby Haneidon » Mon Jan 15, 2024 9:47 am

Chiko Rujan, Minister of World Assembly Affairs:
The resolution appears to contain a mix of American and British English. For instance, 'Offence' is British English while 'Honor' is American English. Even more damningly—as Omphalos pointed out—the word 'individuals' is misspelled as 'indvidiuals' in section 4.
Simone Republic wrote:Misuse of WA UIs. Each WA state is to make it an offence for indvidiuals under jurisdiction to:

These errors make me unable to vote in favour of this resolution, and I am therefore strongly against it.
Final Recommendation: Vote AGAINST.


The Overmind wrote:
Omphalos wrote:Against due to being submitted with typos in Clause 4.

That seems a little pedantic. It doesn't change the legislative effect of the proposal.

WA resolutions should be formal and professional to avoid appearing unserious and to encourage WA resolutions should be formal and professional to avoid appearing unserious and to encourage new non-WA nations to join the WA. It is essential that all WA resolutions are properly worded to avoid confusion.
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Postby Kenmoria » Mon Jan 15, 2024 9:53 am

Haneidon wrote:Chiko Rujan, Minister of World Assembly Affairs:
The resolution appears to contain a mix of American and British English. For instance, 'Offence' is British English while 'Honor' is American English. Even more damningly—as Omphalos pointed out—the word 'individuals' is misspelled as 'indvidiuals' in section 4.
Simone Republic wrote:Misuse of WA UIs. Each WA state is to make it an offence for indvidiuals under jurisdiction to:

These errors make me unable to vote in favour of this resolution, and I am therefore strongly against it.
Final Recommendation: Vote AGAINST.

Ambassador Fortier stands to speak. “It is possible that the honourable delegation for the Simone Republic was using the version of English which is known in the People’s Republic of Kenmoria as Indian English. Indian English spells ‘honour’ with no ‘u’ yet spells ‘offence’ with a ‘c’. It is considering this diversity that I encourage your Excellency not to regard such differences as flaws in the proposal. Furthermore, though I do share your Excellency’s distress over the misspelling of ‘individuals’, I would encourage consideration of the substantive elements of the proposal over its orthography.”
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Postby The Overmind » Mon Jan 15, 2024 10:18 am

Haneidon wrote:A resolutions should be formal and professional to avoid appearing unserious and to encourage WA resolutions should be formal and professional to avoid appearing unserious and to encourage new non-WA nations to join the WA. It is essential that all WA resolutions are properly worded to avoid confusion.


It only appears unserious to people who think a typo is a big deal in the first place. It's completely a self-fulfilling prophecy, and if delegates would not get so caught up in their feelings over it in the first place, it wouldn't matter.
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Postby August Imperium » Mon Jan 15, 2024 10:35 am

Copying over a question from the Discord- is a C/C an award, certificate, medal or other similar honor?
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Postby The Overmind » Mon Jan 15, 2024 10:45 am

August Imperium wrote:Copying over a question from the Discord- is a C/C an award, certificate, medal or other similar honor?


Did you intend to post that here? In any case, a commend/condemn is done in the Security Council, and is typically awarded to a nation that has made several/many significant contributions to the roleplaying, GA, and/or GP spheres. It adds a badge to your nation's page, and increases its likelihood of attaining a higher card rarity when the next season of cards is released.
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Postby August Imperium » Mon Jan 15, 2024 10:48 am

The Overmind wrote:
August Imperium wrote:Copying over a question from the Discord- is a C/C an award, certificate, medal or other similar honor?


Did you intend to post that here? In any case, a commend/condemn is done in the Security Council, and is typically awarded to a nation that has made several/many significant contributions to the roleplaying, GA, and/or GP spheres. It adds a badge to your nation's page, and increases its likelihood of attaining a higher card rarity when the next season of cards is released.

I'm aware of what a C/C is. I'm asking if it would fall under this resolution. If I falsely stated that I was commended, would that be illegal under this resolution?
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Postby Kenmoria » Mon Jan 15, 2024 10:51 am

August Imperium wrote:Copying over a question from the Discord- is a C/C an award, certificate, medal or other similar honor?

(OOC: The strict, and somewhat dull, answer is that the SC cannot be recognised by the GA. Within the fictional universe of the GA, the SC simply doesn’t exist. However, I would say that, if a member-nation was involved in a roleplay which happened to feature both the GA and the SC, it would make a great deal of sense for C/Cs to count as awards, within the meaning of 1e.)
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Postby Wallenburg » Mon Jan 15, 2024 11:01 pm

Two gnomes push open either door to the main voting chamber. Dressed in full Secretary-General regalia, hair worn up and tied back tightly, a terrible gleam in her eye...is definitely not Catherine Gratwick. She's shorter than that, right? Or was it taller? This lady's hair is definitely dyed light, isn't it. She steps into the chamber, golden caduceus in hand—no, that's a wooden one painted gold, you can see the grain along its haft. The gnomes chase after her, carrying her train. Wait, are those just kids dressed up as gnomes? They kind of look like Wallenburgian kids. Why are there two Wallenburgian kids in the voting chamber?

Not-Gratwick strikes the butt of the caduceus against the ground, sending a loud but dull wood-on-tile sound through the chamber. Her hand reaches toward the Simonian ambassador, then slowly migrates around the room toward less furry delegations. In an absolutely dreadful impression of a Received Pronunciation accent as interpolated solely based on Elsie Mortimer and a few Anglican aides she met in the Strangers' Bar, Trevanyika intones:

"Hear ye, hear ye. Let the record reflect the devastation of this chamber upon the appearance of Her Infinite Terribleness, Keeper of the UNmentionable Records, Heart of the Dark, The Wrong Condemnable Dr. Catherine Gratwick, Esq." Her words, no, her very presence lacks the total evil which would have sent the entire chamber into a panic were the genuine article in the same room, breathing the same air as the various present representatives. "This Assembly has no need for such bills as these. I strike this from the record and declare all business concerning the stricken resolution null. As business still remains on the agenda, we immediately bring to the table the Simonian repeal of 'Consular Rights'. The four day voting period begins now."

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WA Misrep Protocols: Why in the Nation States Not?

Postby Friedens Reich » Wed Jan 17, 2024 8:43 pm

Tinhampton wrote:Opposed. It is not the place of the World Assembly to be directly changing how non-member states operate, including through requiring them to recognise their trademarks.


Conditionally Opposed AND Support:

1. Before the Assembly creates more red tape, who has established this has been an issue in need of improving by law?

2. Just as it is fair to not call every cheese that looks and smells vaguely like the cheese made in Gouda, Nederland "Gouda" I find it a very important and useful cause to start to SET AN INTERNATIONAL LEGAL PRECEDENT by which abuses of [b]intellectual property[/b] may be discouraged, lessened, and potentially give defrauded individuals, government entities, and merchants a way to redress grievances, and receive compensation.

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Political Rights Shouldnt be Suppressed

Postby Escapistan » Thu Jan 18, 2024 12:33 am

The modern world is filled with democracies and the fundamental right of a democracy is to vote for someone. Now, if we suppress criticism or do not face facts this world will not be a democracy anymore. Democracy isn't perfect, like us. Let's not vote for this authoritarian legislation as it destroys democracy.

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