[SUBMITTED] Religious Security Needed?

[Hubdova]

Just an FYI, this is my first ever attempt at writing an issue so bear with me
This is the current edited draft. The original draft is in the google doc link below.

Issue Submission Draft

Headline:
Religious Security Needed?

Description:
Last night at a ten o’clock evening prayer, an explosion was set off at the @@CAPITAL@@ @@FAITH@@ place of worship by anti-@@FAITH@@ mobs. Questions are being raised on whether or not to add mandatory security measures to places of worship.

Solution #1:
Why haven’t we been doing this to begin with?, mentions @@FAITH@@’s leader Taavi Seppä. Sometimes, when I’m preaching, one of these bloody atheists comes and tries to assault me! How dare they! We need the government to mandate each place of worship to have some sort of security force to stop these attacks.

Solution #2:
What?! Yells Tasmin Conrad, a priest from the local Cult of Maxx church, as he bursts down your brand new office door. Places of worship are places of peace, pacifism, sanctity! There is no way I’m letting men with guns into the House of Maxx, Letting these “security” forces secure our Holy House goes against everything we believe in! Please, for your sake and mine, don’t mandate security for churches, or you’ll have to deal with Holy Maxx himself, Tasmin shouts as he is escorted from your office.

Solution #3:
As you go over to your now ruined door, a woman with a shirt saying “♥ Atheist4Life ♥! Come up to you to help you with picking up what’s left of your door. Here, I’ve got an idea, why don’t we just make it illegal for people to believe in these appalling things. We both know that these “gods” these people believe in is all a load of baloney. This way, there is nothing for us atheists to try to save these poor people from and we can use the taxpayer money from these churches to fund better healthcare so we can have people live as long as possible before they end their life forever. Also, we’ll buy you a fancy new door!

I'd love to hear criticism and feedback from the forum-dwelling people!
Hope you have a wonderful rest of your day!

Original draft Google Doc https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sJ5-y3ndG1YVvD7LVgfnDgFlZDKAt_zf3T-xiHPk4is/edit?usp=sharing

[Zandilund]

A bit lazy right now, but the first thing I noticed is that you're using the Violetists, a quite aggressive religion.

I am thinking of three options:

A: Use the Cult of Maxx, NS's anti-conscription (probably peaceful) religion.
B: Change Solution #2 to make it so the Violetists don't allow non-religious folk into their holy sites, assuming that security measures are mainly security guards.
C: Add a solution that allows the Violetists to arm themselves. Then again, they're very aggressive, so it won't make much sense.

I think it'd be best for you to choose option A and change the religion to the Cult of Maxx.

[Hubdova]

I know its a bit lazy at the moment, but I'd like to get some feedback so I can improve it much more.
Oh, ok, that's a really good idea, I wasn't aware that the Violetists were an aggressive religion. I'll use the Cult of Maxx as you suggested.
Thanks for the feedback!

[Zandilund]

I know its a bit lazy at the moment, but I'd like to get some feedback so I can improve it much more.
Oh, ok, that's a really good idea, I wasn't aware that the Violetists were an aggressive religion. I'll use the Cult of Maxx as you suggested.
Thanks for the feedback!

My apologies. When I said "a bit lazy", I was referring to myself and why I wouldn't give good feedback at the moment. The current draft does look like it was written by an inexperienced writer, but it's not bad and definitely not lazily made.

[Hubdova]

Oh, it's ok. You are right though, I am a pretty inexperienced writer since this is my first attempt at writing an issue. I'll give it a couple of months time worth of suggestions and I hope by then it'll look better than it is now.