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[DRAFT] Miss @@LEADER@@

Postby Drew Durrnil » Wed Jul 28, 2021 3:19 pm

hi
[title]Miss @@LEADER@@
[description]When the niece of @@LEADER@@ was named the winner of the Miss @@NAME@@ contest in a giant upset, questions have been raised over @@LEADER@@'s integrity and power over @@NAME@@.
[validity]Must have high levels of corruption, must not be an autocracy

[option]"This is just outrageous!" exclaims the runner-up and initial favorite in the contest, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@. "Look at me, and look at her! I'm much more beautiful than her, so I definitely should've been Miss @@NAME@@ instead, and this is just another showing of the government corruption in @@NAME@@! The government must stop fixing contests and events such as these to give them a better image!"
[effect]@@LEADER@@ cannot tell a lie

[option]"@@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@'s claims are just a bunch of gobbledygook!" replies your niece, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME2@@. "Everybody knows that I am the prettiest woman in @@NAME@@, not that nincompoop over there! To help display this absolute fact to the dimwits that disagree with me, how about we require everybody to worship @@LEADER@@ and @@HIS@@ family!"
[effect]all must hail the holy @@LEADER@@
[policy]Adds the "Autocracy" policy

[option]"@@LEADER@@ is ABSOLUTELY TRASH!!!" declares prominent anti-government figure, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "The people of @@NAME@@ know that our government is just a bunch of LOSERS!!! The government must make themselves look as incompetent and asinine as possible, for the People's sake!!!"
[effect]@@LEADER@@ is often addressed as "Failure"

[title]Miss @@LEADER@@
[description]When the niece of @@LEADER@@ was named the winner of the Miss @@NAME@@ contest in a giant upset, questions have been asked on @@LEADER@@'s integrity and power over @@NAME@@.
[validity]Must have high levels of corruption, must not be an autocracy

[option]"This is just outrageous!" exclaims the runner-up and initial favorite in the contest, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@. "Look at me, and look at her! I'm much more beautiful than her, so I definitely should've been Miss @@NAME@@ instead, and this is just another showing of the government corruption in @@NAME@@! The government must stop fixing contests and events such as these to give them a better image!"
[effect]@@LEADER@@ cannot tell a lie

[option]"@@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@'s claims are just a bunch of gobbledygook!" replies your niece, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME2@@. "Everybody knows that I am the prettiest woman in @@NAME@@, not that nincompoop over there! To help display this absolute fact to the dimwits that disagree with me, how about we require everybody to worship @@LEADER@@ and @@HIS@@ family!"
[effect]all must hail the holy @@LEADER@@
[policy]Adds the "Autocracy" policy

[option]"@@LEADER@@ is ABSOLUTELY TRASH!!!" declares prominent anti-government figure, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "The people of @@NAME@@ know that our g*v*r*m*n* is just a bunch of LOSERS!!! The g*v*r*m*n* must make themselves look as incompetent and asinine as possible, for the People's sake!!!"
[effect]@@LEADER@@ is often addressed as "Failure"


[title]Miss @@LEADER@@
[description]When the daughter of @@LEADER@@ was named winner of the Miss @@NAME@@ contest in a giant upset, questions have been asked on @@LEADER@@'s integrity and power over @@NAME@@.
[validity]Must have high levels of corruption, must not be an autocracy

[option]"This is just outrageous!" exclaims the runner-up and initial favorite in the contest, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@. "Look at me, and look at her! I'm much more beautiful than her, so I definitely should've been Miss @@NAME@@ instead, and this is just another showing of the government corruption in @@NAME@@! The government must stop fixing contests and events such as these to give them a better image!"
[effect]@@LEADER@@ cannot tell a lie

[option]"@@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@'s claims are just a bunch of gobbledygook!" replies your daughter, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME2@@. "Everybody knows that I am the prettiest woman in @@NAME@@, not that nincompoop over there! To help display this absolute fact to the dimwits that disagree with me, how about we require everybody to worship @@LEADER@@ and @@HIS@@ family!"
[effect]all must hail the holy @@LEADER@@
[policy]Adds the "Autocracy" policy

[option]"@@LEADER@@ is ABSOLUTELY TRASH!!!" declares prominent anti-government figure, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "The people of @@NAME@@ know that our g*v*r*m*n* is just a bunch of LOSERS!!! The g*v*r*m*n* must make themselves look as incompetent and asinine as possible, for the People's sake!!!"
[effect]@@LEADER@@ is often addressed as "Failure"
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Postby The Free Joy State » Thu Jul 29, 2021 3:40 am

Giving @@LEADER@@ a child (ditto a spouse) is a player autonomy issue. Brothers, sisters, nephews, nieces etc. are different, but a person can choose whether or not to marry and/or have a child.
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Postby Drew Durrnil » Thu Jul 29, 2021 10:59 am

The Free Joy State wrote:Giving @@LEADER@@ a child (ditto a spouse) is a player autonomy issue. Brothers, sisters, nephews, nieces etc. are different, but a person can choose whether or not to marry and/or have a child.

whoops, changed to niece
Nantoraka wrote:
The Nantorakan government would like to express their concerns about all the pedophiles lurking in this market. There's so much grease and body oil in the offers being made, that you could fry chicken in it. We strongly advise wearing a mask when making deals because the strong smell of kid-diddler permeates the air like a dead, fermenting animal.

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Postby USS Monitor » Sat Jul 31, 2021 11:26 pm

If someone is speaking, you would not be able to hear the asterisks in "g*v*r*m*n*." If you have an option that is an email, text, hand-written letter in exquisite calligraphy on parchment delivered by pigeon, etc. then it makes sense to get creative with the spellings for characterization. In an option where a character is speaking, you should stick to stuff that we would be able to hear if we were actually in the room with them listening to the debate.
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Postby Drew Durrnil » Sun Aug 01, 2021 12:58 pm

USS Monitor wrote:If someone is speaking, you would not be able to hear the asterisks in "g*v*r*m*n*." If you have an option that is an email, text, hand-written letter in exquisite calligraphy on parchment delivered by pigeon, etc. then it makes sense to get creative with the spellings for characterization. In an option where a character is speaking, you should stick to stuff that we would be able to hear if we were actually in the room with them listening to the debate.

ok, fixed
Nantoraka wrote:
The Nantorakan government would like to express their concerns about all the pedophiles lurking in this market. There's so much grease and body oil in the offers being made, that you could fry chicken in it. We strongly advise wearing a mask when making deals because the strong smell of kid-diddler permeates the air like a dead, fermenting animal.

Tarsonis wrote:Translation: "Notice me Senpai Donaldsan"

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Postby Verdant Haven » Thu Aug 05, 2021 11:37 am

Drew Durrnil wrote:When the niece of @@LEADER@@ was named the winner of the Miss @@NAME@@ contest in a giant upset, questions have been raised over @@LEADER@@'s integrity and power over @@NAME@@.


Think through how this would sound when the macros are filled out. Using @@LEADER@@ @@NAME@@ @@LEADER@@ @@NAME@@ that close together, and within a single sentence to boot, is a very stilted and unnatural structure. Also, be careful with making sure your tenses agree with each other.

Remember that from an issue writing perspective, @@LEADER@@ is the name of the player receiving the issue. It might be more functional to use pronouns here ("your niece" and "your integrity"), instead of speaking to the player about themselves in the third person.

Drew Durrnil wrote:"This is just outrageous!" exclaims the runner-up and initial favorite in the contest, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@. "Look at me, and look at her! I'm much more beautiful than her, so I definitely should've been Miss @@NAME@@ instead, and this is just another showing of the government corruption in @@NAME@@! The government must stop fixing contests and events such as these to give them a better image!"


You may wish to establish that this was strictly a beauty contest, in order for this speaker's argument to make sense. Depending how well supported you want her argument to be, you may also want her to provide some evidence for her subjective claim about being "more beautiful." According to who? Why should players believe her? There may need to be a better segue into the claim that the contest was fixed.

Drew Durrnil wrote:"@@RANDOMFEMALENAME1@@'s claims are just a bunch of gobbledygook!" replies your niece, @@RANDOMFEMALENAME2@@. "Everybody knows that I am the prettiest woman in @@NAME@@, not that nincompoop over there! To help display this absolute fact to the dimwits that disagree with me, how about we require everybody to worship @@LEADER@@ and @@HIS@@ family!"


I'm not sure that demanding worship proves somebody's good looks. I think you can get there, but perhaps there is some other wording that avoids that spurious connection. Maybe something more along the lines of demanding worship to force people to agree and show more respect, rather than thinking it proves something?

Adds the "Autocracy" policy


Just an an FYI, you don't need to include stat or policy effects. Write the issue in such a way that the effect is obvious, and it will probably happen.

Drew Durrnil wrote:"@@LEADER@@ is ABSOLUTELY TRASH!!!" declares prominent anti-government figure, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "The people of @@NAME@@ know that our government is just a bunch of LOSERS!!! The government must make themselves look as incompetent and asinine as possible, for the People's sake!!!"


I'm not sure I actually understand what is being asked, here. A protestor throws some playground insults around, so the government is supposed to try and then live up to those insults... for the sake of the people? Wouldn't a person complaining about the ineffectiveness of government want to improve things, not make them worse? What basis does the speaker have for their claims? How is this person's position different from the person in option one? I have no idea what this speaker is trying to get at.

Right now, the speakers in all of these options basically sound like the unmoderated YouTube comment section of a Fortnite streamer. There is a time and a place for that, to be sure, but if this issue is making it to the leader's desk, at least some of them probably should sound like they're older than 14 (unless that aspect is itself specifically introduced as part of the premise).
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Postby Australian rePublic » Tue Aug 10, 2021 4:35 am

Miss @@LEADER@@? What if @@LEADER@@ is female?
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