[SUBMITTED][ISSUE CONTEST] O Fortuna!

[Daarwyrth]

CURRENT DRAFT:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery, didn't choose 1321.1

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would not favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, are the lucky winner of the main cash prize from last night's national lottery, thanks to that lottery ticket your mother had gifted you for Maxxmas! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour smiling down upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being absolutely overwhelmed with angry and accusatory complaints from every imaginable corner! Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't get one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum - and don't you start crying on me now - will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphanage, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] feeling like a winner comes at a price

[Option 3] "Did mommy dear put your name on the lottery ticket? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be. And don't worry, if you ever lose your office, your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

[Option 4] One of your aides tackles your brother, liberating fortune's favour from his grip. "Why not just do what any other @@DEMONYM@@ would do?" @@HE@@ says with a genuine, sincere smile, while handing you the now slightly battered ticket. "Celebrate! Be happy! Go wild! You won the lottery, go and collect the prize! I've seen you working day-in, day-out for the good of the people. This is your reward, and you have earned it. So go, somewhere far and expensive, and enjoy yourself!"

[Effect 4] @@LEADER@@ can finally stop kneading the dough and roll in it instead

DRAFT 7:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery, didn't choose 1321.1

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would not favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, are the lucky winner of the main cash prize from last night's national lottery, thanks to that lottery ticket your mother had gifted you for Maxxmas! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour smiling down upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being absolutely overwhelmed with angry and accusatory complaints from every imaginable corner! Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't get one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum - and don't you start crying on me now - will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphanage, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] feeling like a winner comes at a price

[Option 3] "Did mommy dear put your name on the lottery ticket? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be. And don't worry, if you ever lose your office, your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

[Option 4] One of your aides tackles your brother, liberating fortune's favour from his grip. "Why not just do what any other @@DEMONYM@@ would do?" @@HE@@ says with a genuine, sincere smile, while handing you the now slightly battered ticket. "Celebrate! Be happy! Go wild! You won the lottery, go and collect the prize! I've seen you working day-in, day-out for the good of the people. This is your reward, and you have earned it. So go, somewhere far and expensive, and enjoy yourself!"

[Effect 4] abolishing wealth tax has come onto the government's agenda all of a sudden

DRAFT 6:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery, didn't choose 1321.1

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would not favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, are the lucky winner of the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize from last night's national lottery, thanks to that lottery ticket your mother had gifted you for Maxxmas! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour smiling down upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being absolutely overwhelmed with angry and accusatory complaints from every corner! Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't get one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum - and don't you start crying on me now - will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphanage, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] feeling like a winner comes at a price

[Option 3] "Did mommy dear put your name on the lottery ticket? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be. And don't worry, if you ever lose your office, your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

[Option 4] One of your aides tackles your brother, liberating fortune's favour from his grip. "Why not just do what any other @@DEMONYM@@ would do?" @@HE@@ says with a genuine, sincere smile, while handing you the now slightly battered ticket. "Celebrate! Be happy! Go wild! You won the lottery, go and collect the prize! I've seen you working day-in, day-out for the good of the people. This is your reward, and you have earned it. So go, somewhere far and expensive, and enjoy yourself!"

[Effect 4] abolishing wealth tax has come onto the government's agenda all of a sudden

DRAFT 5:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery, didn't choose 1321.1

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would not favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, are the lucky winner of the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize from last night's national lottery, thanks to that lottery ticket your mother had gifted you for Maxxmas! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour smiling down upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being overwhelmed with angry phone calls and accusatory social media posts. Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't get one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum - and don't you start crying on me now - will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphanage, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] feeling like a winner comes at a price

[Option 3] "Did mom put your name on the lottery ticket? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be! And don't worry, if you ever lose your office, your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

[Option 4] One of your aides tackles your brother, liberating fortune's favour from his grip. "Why not just do what any other @@DEMONYM@@ would do?" @@HE@@ says with a genuine, sincere smile, while handing you the ticket. "Celebrate! Be happy! Go wild! You won the lottery, go and collect the prize! I've seen you working day-in, day-out for the good of the people. This is your reward, and you have earned it. So go, somewhere far and expensive, and enjoy yourself!"

[Effect 4] money can't buy happiness but it can buy off a state debt

DRAFT 4:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery, didn't choose 1321.1

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would never favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, are the lucky winner of the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize from last night's national lottery, thanks to that lottery ticket your mother had gifted you for Maxxmas! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour smiling down upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being overwhelmed with angry phone calls and accusatory social media posts. Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't get one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum, yes, don't you start crying on me now, will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphange, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] no one laughs on the other side of their face like @@LEADER@@ does

[Option 3] "Did mom put your name on the lottery ticket? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be! And don't worry, if you ever lose your office, your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

[Option 4] One of your aides tackles your brother, liberating fortune's favour from his grip. "Why not just do what any other @@DEMONYM@@ would do?" @@HE@@ says with a genuine, sincere smile, while handing you the ticket. "Celebrate! Be happy! Go wild! You won the lottery, @@LEADER@@, go and collect the prize! I've seen you working day-in, day-out for the good of the people. This is your reward, and you have earned it. So go, somewhere far and expensive, and enjoy yourself!"

[Effect 4] everything really can be like in the land of milk and honey if you're rich

DRAFT 3:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would never favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, are the lucky winner of the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize from last night's national lottery, thanks to that lottery ticket your mother had gifted you for Maxxmas! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour smiling down upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being overwhelmed with angry phone calls and accusatory social media posts. Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't get one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum, yes, don't you start crying on me now, will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphange, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] no one laughs on the other side of their face like @@LEADER@@ does

[Option 3] "Did mom put your name on the lottery ticket? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be! And don't worry, if you ever lose your office, your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

[Option 4] "Why not just do what any other @@DEMONYM@@ would do?" poses one of your aides with a genuine, sincere smile on @@HIS@@ lips, while collecting papers from your desk. "Celebrate! Be happy! Go wild! You won the lottery, @@LEADER@@, go and collect the prize! I've seen you working day-in, day-out for the good of the people. This is your reward, and you have earned it. So go, somewhere far and expensive, and enjoy yourself with your friends, or family!"

[Effect 4] everything really can be like in the land of milk and honey if you're rich

DRAFT 2:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would never favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, are the lucky winner of the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize from last night's national lottery, thanks to that lottery ticket your mother had gifted you for Maxxmas! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour smiling down upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being overwhelmed with angry phone calls and accusatory social media posts. Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't get one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum, yes, don't you start crying on me now, will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphange, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] no one laughs on the other side of their face like @@LEADER@@ does

[Option 3] "Did mom put your name on the lottery ticket? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be! And don't worry, if you ever lose your office, your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

DRAFT 1:

[Title] O Fortuna!

[Validity] Allows gambling, has national lottery

[Description] JACKPOT! It seemed impossible, it seemed unlikely, it seemed as if the odds would never favour you. Yet you, yes, you @@LEADER@@, acquired the lucky ticket that won you the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize in last night's national lottery! Yet before you could even recover from celebrating this momentous occasion with your family, fortune's favour upon you made it to the national headlines.

[Option 1] "@@LEADER@@ WINS LOTTERY: A DIRECTED STROKE OF LUCK?" reads the Director of the National Lottery out loud with a heavy sigh. "The optics of this are just too damning. We're being overwhelmed with angry phone calls and accusatory social media posts. Some of our employees have even been followed home by mobs carrying literal torches and pitchforks. Torches and pitchforks! Who even does that these days... I'm sorry, @@LEADER@@, but you'll have to let us declare this drawing void and redraw a new lottery ticket. And this time, please, don't buy one yourself..."

[Effect 1] only thunder has the chance of striking @@LEADER@@ twice

[Option 2] "No, no, just wait a second," says your Chief of Staff, polishing up the mirror that reflects your image. "The optics are bad, but we can turn this into a significant boost of popularity. Accept the prize with all due honours and fanfare, yet from the start declare that the entire sum, yes, don't you start crying on me now, will be donated to charity. The Wagger Dog Shelter, the Bryce Waine Orphange, or heck, even the Out of Luck Gambler's Rehab Centre, take your pick! Just practice smiling through pain, and relinquishing your grip on the cheque beforehand."

[Effect 2] no one laughs on the other side of their face like @@LEADER@@ does

[Option 3] "Does the lottery ticket have your name on it? No? Good!" says your brother while unceremoniously snatching the unfortunately fortuitous piece of paper from your hand. "Just say that the ticket was mine, and all you'll have to deal with is a few angry stares for a while. You've dealt with worse! This way, our family will be happy, you'll be unhappy, and everything will be as it's supposed to be! And don't worry, if you ever lose your office your dear, old brother will take care of you..."

[Effect 3] @@LEADER@@'s luck only runs in @@LEADER@@'s family

[Trotterdam]

First, it's a player autonomy violation to assume @@LEADER@@ bought a lottery ticket. Second, a head of government is likely to have enough money without needing to win the lottery.

[Daarwyrth]

First, it's a player autonomy violation to assume @@LEADER@@ bought a lottery ticket. Second, a head of government is likely to have enough money without needing to win the lottery.

The first comment will have to be addressed, yes, but even if a head of government makes a lot of money, why would that stop them from buying a ticket? Wealthy people buy lottery tickets all the time. Heck, wealthy people even won lotteries here in the Netherlands.

Regarding the player autonomy thing: what if the premise stated the lottery ticket was a gift from someone? People buy each other lottery tickets as a gift all the time.

[Daarwyrth]

New draft is up that addresses the player autonomy violation! Feedback and commentary is more than welcome, as always

[Candlewhisper Archive]

No option to keep the ticket?

Could easily be argued that rejecting the prize would seem stuck up and arrogant, like "I'm so rich and powerful that a lottery win is meaningless to me". There ought to be an option to accept the prize, which was fairly won, and to go on beach holiday with your best mates.

[Daarwyrth]

No option to keep the ticket?

Could easily be argued that rejecting the prize would seem stuck up and arrogant, like "I'm so rich and powerful that a lottery win is meaningless to me". There ought to be an option to accept the prize, which was fairly won, and to go on beach holiday with your best mates.

I agree! I like the idea of Leader simply being able to keep it like any other citizen would be able to, and initially I thought to include it, but later reconsidered. Either way, the option is now there in the newest draft!

I felt a really wholesome and kind speaker would be fitting there. Hopefully my intention comes across!

[Daarwyrth]

New draft is up with a few changes to option 4, to bring it in line with the rest of the options.

[Sunhizria]

I dislike to ruin the fun of issues writers, especially when I am unable to write any issues, and my draft receive no feedback

but you forgot that : #1321: Who Wants to Know a Millionaire?
option 1, where you decide to keep the privacy of the lotteries winners

in which case, even if Leader win the lottery, their name would be kept private and it would be impossible for his nation to know they won it.

Maybe you should change that validity.

[Daarwyrth]

but you forgot that : #1321: Who Wants to Know a Millionaire?
option 1, where you decide to keep the privacy of the lotteries winners

I was thinking of that issue when writing this draft, and had initially thought about making it a follow-up issue to Option 2.

However, it would be a little limiting to the number of nations that could potentially receive the issue. I don't think it's necessary to limit the issue as a follow-up to #1321.2, but I do agree with the suggestion to include "didn't choose #1321.1" into the validity. Good catch!

[Sunhizria]

but you forgot that : #1321: Who Wants to Know a Millionaire?
option 1, where you decide to keep the privacy of the lotteries winners

I was thinking of that issue when writing this draft, and had initially thought about making it a follow-up issue to Option 2.

However, it would be a little limiting to the number of nations that could potentially receive the issue. I don't think it's necessary to limit the issue as a follow-up to #1321.2, but I do agree with the suggestion to include "didn't choose #1321.1" into the validity. Good catch!

it will make no difference because option 3 ban gambling. So, nations that pick 1321.3 cannot receive this issues anyway.

[Daarwyrth]

I was thinking of that issue when writing this draft, and had initially thought about making it a follow-up issue to Option 2.

However, it would be a little limiting to the number of nations that could potentially receive the issue. I don't think it's necessary to limit the issue as a follow-up to #1321.2, but I do agree with the suggestion to include "didn't choose #1321.1" into the validity. Good catch!

it will make no difference because option 3 ban gambling. So, nations that pick 1321.3 cannot receive this issues anyway.

Which is why there is the "allows gambing" validity, alongside "has national lottery" there's issue No. 371 "Lotto Fever" for example.

[Daarwyrth]

Any new comments or suggestions?

[Daarwyrth]

Thoughts and comments are welcome!

[Sacara]

I really dig this one! Love the premise, nice execution. A couple of things here and there:

• Description: a lot of personality here! The phrase "it seemed as if the odds would never favour you" makes it seem like @@LEADER@@ has attempted the lottery many times before... not sure if we want to imply that.
• Option 1: nicely done.
• Option 2: I would get rid of the "yes" that you interject in the middle of the sentence, as you already used it once in the description. Or remove it from the description and keep it here, up to you. Also, it's spelled orphanage. Not a fan of the effect line on this one.
• Option 3: well done.
• Option 4: I don't entirely think the @@LEADER@@ macro is necessary here. Why would the aide be calling the leader by their full name? Also not a fan of the effect line.

Nothing major. Nice work on the draft!

[Daarwyrth]

I really dig this one! Love the premise, nice execution. A couple of things here and there:

• Description: a lot of personality here! The phrase "it seemed as if the odds would never favour you" makes it seem like @@LEADER@@ has attempted the lottery many times before... not sure if we want to imply that.
• Option 1: nicely done.
• Option 2: I would get rid of the "yes" that you interject in the middle of the sentence, as you already used it once in the description. Or remove it from the description and keep it here, up to you. Also, it's spelled orphanage. Not a fan of the effect line on this one.
• Option 3: well done.
• Option 4: I don't entirely think the @@LEADER@@ macro is necessary here. Why would the aide be calling the leader by their full name? Also not a fan of the effect line.

Nothing major. Nice work on the draft!

Thank you so much for your compliments and comments! I have worked them into the newest draft c:

Description: Done, I changed "never" to "not", so hopefully that solves the implication.
Option 1: Thanks!
Option 2: Done, and I have no idea what happened to "orphanage" but that was a typo I should have caught xD The effect line has been changed!
Option 3: Thanks!
Option 4: Macro removed and effect line changed. I had a little trouble coming up with something witty here, so hopefully this is one's humorous

[Australian rePublic]

Corruption isn't the only criticism leveled at leader if he won the lotto. There'll be critics saying he doesn't need the money when the poor do, and he took away a poor person's opportunity to win (which is something I've seen in real life).

[Daarwyrth]

Corruption isn't the only criticism leveled at leader if he won the lotto. There'll be critics saying he doesn't need the money when the poor do, and he took away a poor person's opportunity to win (which is something I've seen in real life).

I think that would be relevant if @@LEADER@@ bought a ticket themselves. But as this was a gift from someone (as stated in the premise), I think it's slightly less relevant. I'll keep it in the back of my mind though, to potentially add it later on!

[Daarwyrth]

Any new thoughts or remarks on this one?

[Electrum]

Pretty good!

Only comment is that the effect line for 4 doesn't really follow from the option -- not sure how spending money on yourself relates to state debt.

[SherpDaWerp]

We're being overwhelmed with angry phone calls and accusatory social media posts.

All I have to say is that "accusatory social media posts" need internet and/or computers, so it might be worth cutting that down to just "angry phone calls". You can smack a few adjectives in there with the saved space, like... "We're getting absolutely overwhelmed with angry phone calls."

Good issue!

[Daarwyrth]

Pretty good!

Only comment is that the effect line for 4 doesn't really follow from the option -- not sure how spending money on yourself relates to state debt.

All I have to say is that "accusatory social media posts" need internet and/or computers, so it might be worth cutting that down to just "angry phone calls". You can smack a few adjectives in there with the saved space, like... "We're getting absolutely overwhelmed with angry phone calls."

Good issue!

Thanks to the both of you! I have added your comments and suggestions into the newest draft. Much appreciated!

[Daarwyrth]

Moving this to last call any last comments and remarks would be great!

[Candensia]

In the description

lucky winner of the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize

I'd use more generic terms to describe the amount of money won, as exchange rates differ between nations. Millions of @@CURRENCYPLURAL@@ may buy a mansion in one nation, and only a nice dinner in another.

[Daarwyrth]

In the description

lucky winner of the multi-million @@CURRENCY@@ prize

I'd use more generic terms to describe the amount of money won, as exchange rates differ between nations. Millions of @@CURRENCYPLURAL@@ may buy a mansion in one nation, and only a nice dinner in another.

Fixed it! I changed it to "main cash prize", which should relay the same meaning, I think

[Sacara]

My only comment is that option four's effect line feels rather weak. I know what you're getting at, but I can't help to feel like it still isn't as funny as it could be. Maybe something like "it pays to be @@LEADER@@". I dunno.

Other than that, looks good to me.