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[DRAFT] Conquest of Toast

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[DRAFT] Conquest of Toast

Postby Soviet Catgirls » Sun Apr 11, 2021 1:12 pm

Conquest of Toast

[[ Issues Editor Electrum stated that multiple issues can be made in the event of multiple descriptions being needed for different nation types, so that is what I propose for this issue with socialist and capitalist, so I can allow more proper elaboration depending on the receiving nation. This issue is similar in premise to Issue 339, but such issue was only to socialist nations, and thus this issue allows greater eligibility and scope, as well as being of more interesting of an issue to myself, personally. ]]

Validity of both Issues: I thought of possibly only having it be available without AI planning or exceptional public transport, [[ such as under top 1% or such? I don’t wish to disqualify too many people from receiving it, especially with the limited number of issues that actually can be given to most older nations, but at the same time, it doesn’t make as much sense to give to a nation with AI planning or amazing public transport, so any comments from issue-minded individuals would be helpful. But those terms of validity could also be removed without harm. ]]

Validity of first Issue: Socialist

Description: Following thorough analysis of the derailing of a cargo train while transporting already scarce and unavailable grain and wheat to a town in the outskirts of @@NAME@@ suffering a substantial drought, several civil engineering failures in both track and junction layout were found within the newly constructed rail network connecting @@ANIMAL@@ Commune with nearby population and industrial centers. It has come to your attention that citizens in rural areas, as well as workers across @@NAME@@, are dissatisfied by the industrial leadership delegated by the Ministry of Central Planning. While taking a break for lunch along with some of your government staff, you take a moment to grab a piece of mail handed to you by a secretary. Sitting down with your favorite beverage and piece of toast, you begin.

Option 1: You open the envelope on the table to reveal a handwritten letter addressed to you by @@CAPITAL@@ resident, anarchist and council communist theorist Petrus Crumbpotkin. “Esteemed @@LEADER@@, it has come upon me, hastened by the needs of several citizens, to call upon you to help alleviate the situation by allowing workers across @@NAME@@ to elect, democratically, their own workers’ councils to delegate industrial needs of their local industries.” His words break, and you take a moment to drink. “This will bring @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ unions their own capable, educated and trusted leaders, and they can re-elect new delegates, shall the members of the council not meet expectations. This is to say that those that consent to exist in governments of Maxist-Lennonist, democratic socialist, libertarian socialist and other such varieties can co-exist with anarchists and usher in a pan-leftist era of collaboration! Only together, in ways that we can provide for ourselves and each other in ways we best can, can we flourish under communism.”

“With comradely greetings,
P. Crumbpotkin”

Effect 1: civilian and government workers alike are united in an alliance of pan-leftist democratic assemblies and sing that @@LEADER@@ is young again
[[ Gains Devolution, Proportional Representation and Public Protest if not already applied ]]
[[ Loses Autocracy if applied ]]
[[ ~Large gains to Civil Rights, Political Freedoms and Economic Output ]]

Option 2: Army officer Lev Tolatovich, better known as Leonard Rotskiy, seated next to you, sneers as he looks away from the page. “In a worker’s State, the workers have no need to fear the State. Daily bread needs to be more efficiently distributed by the Central Planning Committee to prevent starvation, and trained dissident experts, with the help of our political commissars, need to be utilized to make it happen. Left-communists, anarchists and their ideals are counter-revolutionary. The trade unions need to be in our control for maximum effectiveness, dissent needs to be suppressed,” he takes a moment to glare with his eyebrows to the letter, and turns with a cold look that shows his seriousness. “Bourgeois democracy and spinelessness needs to be eliminated, Comrade @@LEADER@@. We must compel the workers with power, and if they do not obey, and instead support the bourgeoisie with their idleness or choose to fight against us, they should be imprisoned and made to work, or be extinguished.” He takes a large drink of non-alcoholic cider, and begins to argue with another comrade once the glass is empty.

Effect 2: support of communism in @@TYPE@@ is counter-revolutionary to the Permanent Revolution
[[ Gains No Dissent, and Capital Punishment if not already applied ]]
[[ Loses Public Protests and No Prisons if applied ]]
[[ ~Large gains to Defense Forces, Law Enforcement and Authoritarianism ]]

Option 3: The man who served your food gives you a smile. “Of course I don’t want capitalism, but, Dàguó’s Celestial Empire has had breakthrough successes with market socialism due to a strong, educated elite administration. Imagine us, dominating the world with market superiority of foreign powers, and turning it against the capitalists! Or, maybe we could do some more libertarian experiments with autonomis--” He promptly notices Rotskiy behind you and flees back into the kitchen.

Effect 3: a lot more in @@REGION@@ is “Made In @@NAME@@”
[[ ~Medium gains to Manufacturing, Education, Government Size and Authoritarianism ]]

Validity of second Issue: Capitalist

Description: Following thorough analysis of the derailing of a cargo train while transporting already scarce and unavailable grain and wheat to a town in the outskirts of @@NAME@@ suffering a substantial drought, several civil engineering failures in both track and junction layout were found within the newly constructed rail network connecting @@ANIMAL@@ City with nearby population and industrial centers. It has come to your attention that citizens in rural areas, as well as workers across @@NAME@@, are dissatisfied by the industrial leadership delegated by the private owners of the industry. While taking a break for lunch along with some of your government staff, you take a moment to grab a piece of mail handed to you by a secretary. Sitting down with your favorite beverage and piece of toast, you begin.


Option 1: You open the envelope on the table to reveal a handwritten letter addressed to you by @@CAPITAL@@ resident, anarchist and council communist theorist Petrus Crumbpotkin. “Esteemed @@LEADER@@, it has come upon me, hastened by the needs of several citizens, to call upon you to help alleviate the situation by allowing workers across @@NAME@@ to elect, democratically, their own workers’ councils to delegate industrial needs of their local industries.” His words break, and you take a moment to drink. “This will bring @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ unions their own capable, educated and trusted leaders, and they can re-elect new delegates, shall the members of the council not meet expectations. This is to say that those that consent to exist in governments of Maxist-Lennonist, democratic socialist, libertarian socialist and other such varieties can co-exist with anarchists and usher in a pan-leftist era of collaboration! Only together, in ways that we can provide for ourselves and each other in ways we best can, can we flourish under communism.”

“With comradely greetings,
P. Crumbpotkin”


Effect 1: civilian and government workers alike are united in an alliance of pan-leftist democratic assemblies and sing that @@LEADER@@ is young again
[[ Gains Devolution, Proportional Representation and Public Protest if not already applied, as well as Socialism ]]
[[ Loses Autocracy if applied ]]
[[ ~Large gains to Civil Rights, Political Freedoms and Economic Output ]]

Option 2 (Doppelganger of Option 3 for nations without No Smoking): Edmun Bates Debb, an orderly representative of yours, puffs on his cigar as he glances over to the note. “That’s sedition, and a radical threat to @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ society. I say we try and pass new legislation to limit speech and action that damages our ability to exert authority. Disloyal, profane, scurrilous, or abusive acts should be treated as such.” He looks out the window, to a young woman with a mohawk. “Defiance should be met with prison sentences.”

Effect 2: the new Sedition Act has jailed hundreds.
[[ Gains No Dissent if not already applied, possibility to gain Prudism ]]
[[ Loses Public Protests and No Prisons if applied ]]
[[ ~Large gains to Defense Forces, Law Enforcement and Authoritarianism ]]


Option 3 (Doppelganger of Option 2 for nations with No Smoking): Edmun Bates Debb, an orderly representative of yours, leans his head on his knuckle as he glances over to the note. “That’s sedition, and a radical threat to @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ society. I say we try and pass new legislation to limit speech and action that damages our ability to exert authority, @@LEADER@@. Disloyal, profane, scurrilous, or abusive acts should be treated as such.” He looks out the window, to a young woman with a mohawk. “Defiance should be met with prison sentences.”

Effect 3: the new Sedition Act has jailed hundreds.
[[ Gains No Dissent if not already applied, possibility to gain Prudism ]]
[[ Loses Public Protests and No Prisons if applied ]]
[[ ~Large gains to Defense Forces, Law Enforcement and Authoritarianism ]]

Option 4: The man who served your food gives you a smile. “The freer the markets, the freer the people, as my father always said. Why don’t you government boys let us experiment with some good old right-wing libertarian policies? Smaller government means we can provide for each other better. Just let the market sort itself out, man.”

Option 4: @@LEADER@@ appears to much prefer vague guidance to leadership.
[[ ~Large gains to Free Markets and Rich Incomes ]]

All things in [[]] aren't actually in the issue, and, let me know if you think it is okay for submission yet! I don't think I could shorten it without losing any flavor, personally.
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Postby Drew Durrnil » Sun Apr 11, 2021 2:03 pm

way too long
this is got issues, not an n&I rp
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Postby Soviet Catgirls » Sun Apr 11, 2021 2:21 pm

Drew Durrnil wrote:way too long
this is got issues, not an n&I rp


I styled it more like the issue series issues, and there are only three options for each version of the issue, with only as much detail as can permit such an elaboration, which I believe is necessary to the overall quality of the issue. Each of the named characters are also named off of political figures, Russian anarchist Kropotkin, Ukrainian authsoc Trotsky and American authdem Webb. The options aren't the longest I've seen in the game, nor is there a huge amount of them.
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Postby Sierra Lyricalia » Mon Apr 12, 2021 5:02 pm

From the perspective of left politics, I love it!

A big problem is there's not much humor going on here. Crumbpotkin ( :lol: )'s letter is also far too long. The most important element here is that these be funny to read. Other than the waiter in (socialist) Option 3 fleeing back to the kitchen, there's very little to amuse readers here. Socialists familiar with the various ideologies being bandied about and name-dropped will like it, but it needs to appeal to the whole playerbase.

Good luck!
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Postby Soviet Catgirls » Tue Apr 13, 2021 6:02 am

Sierra Lyricalia wrote: A big problem is there's not much humor going on here.


If I'm being completely honest, the style of humor has always been my least favorite part of NationStates issues and something that I don't find important to the experience, personally. So, eh...
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Postby Australian rePublic » Wed Apr 21, 2021 5:22 pm

If there is a server drought, I'd be more interested in the logistics of distributing water, especially in a socialist country. That, in my opinion, would make a far more interesting premise
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