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[Draft] Commend King HEM

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[Draft] Commend King HEM

Postby Ambrella » Sat Oct 03, 2020 10:08 pm

Well, this is my first venture out here into drafting and passing resolutions. I'd like to thank Maowi for all of her help with this alongside many others who already gave me feedback. I'm looking forward to making any improvements y'all can suggest before submitting. Long story short, HEM is one of the most influential founders and players in this game, and he has done an incredible amount of good. This commendation only begins to cover it.

Updated version as of 10/18/20

The Security Council,

Acknowledging the outstanding and lasting contributions made to NationStates by the nation of King HEM during their fourteen year-long career under a variety of satellite states;

Convinced that without their diligence, wisdom, and exemplary leadership in founding Europeia and fostering its democratic traditions and institutions, the region - itself Commended by this Council - would not have become the respected community of nations it is today;

Impressed by the sheer consistency of King HEM's insightful and selfless guidance of Europeia over the years, which has manifested itself in a multitude of ways such as:

  • Their decision to go against prevailing trends and convert Europeia from a Monarchy into a Republic in July 2007, four months after its founding, and their dedicated leadership throughout that change, which paved the way for many other regions to successfully adopt democratic systems and was a catalyst for the system’s widespread use;
  • Their governmental and cultural leadership of Europeia in its early stages to pioneer a strong implementation of the Independent ideology, establishing its place in the NationStates political landscape;
  • Their impressive 228 total days as Head of Government of Europeia, as well as countless more of service in the Cabinet and the Senate, which saw the introduction of multiple fruitful projects and policies including:
    • The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes - the event was successfully re-held two years later;
    • A restructure of the Europeian Republican Navy during their service as Grand Admiral between June and October 2019, pushing the organisation's revitalisation by recognising and promoting sailors using an emphasis on continued consistent service, and by better integrating the naval reserves into the overall structure;
  • Their role as a driving force behind Europeia’s media scene, especially in their extensive contributions to private media via their acclaimed outlet E-News Network, which they have run since 2007 with over 300 published pieces, as well as practising a high standard of journalism in NationStates overall (for example, the nation’s journalists ran two iterations of a survey gathering and perceptively analyzing information about over 50 and over 100 regions respectively);
  • Their tireless work to ensure the safety and wellbeing of Europeia's nations, soon setting a NationStates-wide standard for professional and trustworthy work of that sort in many other regions, some of which received direct help from King HEM in this regard;

Recognising King HEM's exemplary service to The South Pacific in numerous capacities from 2010 to 2014, with accomplishments including;

  • As Minister of Regional Affairs, establishing a regional welcome procedure, helping ensure the continued flow of new members into the region, and working diligently on a project to collate a comprehensive account of The South Pacific’s rich history;
  • Presiding over the historic Coalition v. Milograd trial as Chief Justice, which lasted over a month, ruling on accusations of treason for “orchestrating a coup, ejecting nations from the region and undermining the judiciary”;
  • In their capacity as Vice Delegate, working with Delegate Southern Bellz to stabilise the region after Milograd’s ban and leading efforts to increase and enrich integration and communication between The South Pacific’s governmental areas and its wider community;
  • As Deputy Minister of Foreign Affairs, revamping and revitalising the region's ambassador system, which contributed to a resurgence of The South Pacific's diplomatic presence interregionally;

Appreciating their years of service in the region The Land of Kings and Emperors, where they served as a steadfast senior advisor on foreign affairs and Constitutional matters, including answering the call to serve temporarily as regent while Crown Prince, presiding over a successful and productive government in early 2015;

Believing that King HEM has left a lasting and profound impact on the NationStates community, consistently going above and beyond, with achievements that are highly worthy of recognition by the Security Council,

Hereby Commends King HEM.


Updated version as of 10/7/20

The Security Council,

Acknowledging the outstanding and lasting contributions made to NationStates by the nation of King HEM during their fourteen year-long career under a variety of satellite states;

Convinced that without their diligence, wisdom, and exemplary leadership in founding Europeia and fostering its democratic traditions and institutions, the region - itself Commended by this Council - would not have become the thousand-strong community of nations it is today;

Impressed by the sheer consistency of King HEM's insightful and selfless guidance of Europeia over the years, which has manifested itself in a multitude of ways such as:

  • Their decision to go against prevailing trends and convert Europeia from a Monarchy into a Republic in July 2007, four months after its founding, and their dedicated leadership throughout that change, which paved the way for many other regions to successfully adopt democratic systems and was a catalyst for the system’s widespread use;
  • Their governmental and cultural leadership of Europeia in its early stages to pioneer a strong implementation of the Independent ideology, establishing its place in the NationStates political landscape;
  • Their impressive 228 total days as Head of Government of Europeia, as well as countless more of service in the Cabinet and the Senate, which saw the introduction of multiple fruitful projects and policies including:
    • The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes - the event was successfully re-held two years later;
    • A restructure of the Europeian Republican Navy during their service as Grand Admiral between June and October 2019, pushing the organisation's revitalisation by recognising and promoting sailors using an emphasis on continued consistent service, and by better integrating the naval reserves into the overall structure;
  • Their role as a driving force behind Europeia’s media scene, especially in their extensive contributions to private media via their acclaimed outlet E-News Network, which they have run since 2007, as well as practising a high standard of journalism in NationStates overall (for example, the nation’s journalists ran two iterations of a survey gathering and perceptively analyzing information about over 50 and over 100 regions respectively);
  • Their tireless work to ensure the safety and wellbeing of Europeia's nations, soon setting a NationStates-wide standard for professional and trustworthy work of that sort in many other regions, some of which received direct help from King HEM in this regard;

Recognising King HEM's exemplary service to The South Pacific, in which they served in numerous capacities from 2010 to 2014;

  • During their tenure as Minister of Regional Affairs they established a regional welcome procedure, helping ensure the continued flow of new members into the region, and worked diligently on a project to collate a comprehensive account of The South Pacific’s rich history;
  • While Chief Justice they presided over the historic Coalition v. Milograd trial, which lasted over a month, ruling on accusations of treason for “orchestrating a coup, ejecting nations from the region and undermining the judiciary”;
  • In their capacity as Vice Delegate they worked with Delegate Southern Bellz to stabilise the region after Milograd’s ban and to lead efforts to increase and enrich integration and communication between The South Pacific’s governmental areas and its Regional Message Board community;
  • As Deputy Minister of Foreign Affairs between December 2013 and January 2014 they were responsible for revamping and revitalising the region's ambassador system, which contributed to a resurgence of The South Pacific's diplomatic presence interregionally;

Appreciating their years of service in the region The Land of Kings and Emperors, where they served as a steadfast senior advisor on foreign affairs and Constitutional matters, including answering the call to serve temporarily as regent while Crown Prince, presiding over a successful and productive government in early 2015;

Believing that overall King HEM has left a lasting and profound impact to several regions and to NationStates as a whole, consistently going above and beyond, which is highly worthy of recognition by the Security Council,

Hereby Commends King HEM.


The Security Council,

Acknowledging the outstanding and lasting contributions made to NationStates by the nation of King HEM during their fourteen year-long career under a variety of satellite states;

Convinced that without their diligence, wisdom, and exemplary leadership in founding Europeia and growing it to the thousand-strong group of nations it is today, the region - itself Commended by this Council - would not have become as strong a community with as established institutions as it is today;

Impressed by the sheer consistency of King HEM's insightful and selfless guidance of Europeia over the years, which has manifested itself in a multitude of ways such as:

  • Their decision to go against prevailing trends and convert Europeia from a Monarchy into a Republic in July 2007, four months after its founding, and their dedicated leadership throughout that change, which paved the way for many other regions to successfully adopt democratic systems and was a catalyst for the system’s widespread use;
  • Their governmental and cultural leadership of Europeia in its early stages to pioneer a strong implementation of the Independent ideology, establishing its place in the NationStates political landscape;
  • Their impressive 228 total days as Head of Government of Europeia, as well as countless more of service in the Cabinet and the Senate, which saw the introduction of multiple fruitful projects and policies including:
    • The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes - the event was successfully re-held two years later;
    • A restructure of the Europeian Republican Navy during their service as Grand Admiral between June and October 2019, pushing the organisation's revitalisation by recognising and promoting sailors using an emphasis on continued consistent service, and by better integrating the naval reserves into the overall structure, culminating in a week-long hold of North Ustaynga in November 2019;
  • Their role as a driving force behind Europeia’s media scene, especially in their extensive contributions to private media via their acclaimed outlet E-News Network, which they have run since 2007, as well as practising a high standard of journalism in NationStates overall (for example, the nation’s journalists ran two iterations of a survey gathering and perceptively analyzing information about over 50 and over 100 regions respectively);
  • Their tireless work to ensure the safety and wellbeing of Europeia's nations, soon setting a NationStates-wide standard for professional and trustworthy work of that sort in many other regions, some of which received direct help from King HEM in this regard;

Recognising King HEM's exemplary service to The South Pacific, in which they served as Prime Minister from September to November 2010, Minister of Foreign Affairs from January to September 2011, Minister of Regional Affairs from December 2012 to March 2013, Minister of Justice followed by Chief Justice later that year, and Vice Delegate in June and July 2013;

  • During their tenure as Minister of Regional Affairs they established a regional welcome procedure, helping ensure the continued flow of new members into the region, and worked diligently on a project to collate a comprehensive account of The South Pacific’s rich history;
  • While Chief Justice they presided over the historic Coalition v. Milograd trial, which lasted over a month, ruling on accusations of treason for “orchestrating a coup, ejecting nations from the region and undermining the judiciary”;
  • In their capacity as Vice Delegate they worked with Delegate Southern Bellz to stabilise the region after Milograd’s ban and to lead efforts to increase and enrich integration and communication between The South Pacific’s governmental areas and its Regional Message Board community;
  • As Deputy Minister of Foreign Affairs between December 2013 and January 2014 they were responsible for revamping and revitalising the region's ambassador system, which contributed to a resurgence of The South Pacific's diplomatic presence interregionally;

Appreciating their years of service in positions of leadership in the region The Land of Kings and Emperors - as a senior advisor on foreign affairs and Constitutional matters, as Prime Minister for six weeks in 2007 and in 2010, and as Crown Prince for a total of 769 days in 2011 and 2014-2015, including presiding over a successful and productive government as regent in early 2015;

Believing that overall King HEM has left a lasting and profound impact to several regions and to NationStates as a whole, consistently going above and beyond, which is highly worthy of recognition by the Security Council,

Hereby Commends King HEM.
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Postby Honeydewistania » Sat Oct 03, 2020 10:11 pm

culminating in a week-long hold of North Ustaynga in November 2019


You should remove this part. Restructuring organisation good, restricting organisation to raid region bad.

Your LKE clause needs more elaboration on what they did and why it is good.
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Postby Foril » Sat Oct 03, 2020 10:11 pm

OOC: 100% support. HEM has been a player of great contributions to Europeia and NS in general.

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Postby Ambrella » Sat Oct 03, 2020 10:15 pm

Honeydewistania wrote:
culminating in a week-long hold of North Ustaynga in November 2019


You should remove this part. Restructuring organisation good, restricting organisation to raid region bad.

Your LKE clause needs more elaboration on what they did and why it is good.


I can certainly remove that line if it will be problematic.

On the latter, I can work on that as well.
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Postby Honeydewistania » Sat Oct 03, 2020 10:17 pm

Ambrella wrote:
Honeydewistania wrote:
You should remove this part. Restructuring organisation good, restricting organisation to raid region bad.

Your LKE clause needs more elaboration on what they did and why it is good.


I can certainly remove that line if it will be problematic.

On the latter, I can work on that as well.

Also for TSP positions that you don’t elaborate on its best to remove them, because a laundry list of filler doesn’t help
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Postby Kazaman » Sat Oct 03, 2020 10:24 pm

I can't emphasise enough how thrilled I am that the process for commending HEM has started. He has contributed so much to the game and to the regions he's been part of. I'm very hopeful that this resolution will go beyond the drafting stage and pass the SC vote.
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Postby Ganolfan » Sat Oct 03, 2020 10:29 pm

I am glad to see HEM's proposed commendation! I hope it passes.

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OOC: Full support of course. The hold thing is the only slightly controversial part but I already commented on it elsewhere

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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Sun Oct 04, 2020 7:13 am

On first look this seems quite good though for a draft of this size I need a couple of read throughs to form a proper opinion.

I’ll try and get back to it during the week.
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Postby Ambrella » Mon Oct 05, 2020 8:18 am

Thanks for the feedback so far. I'll give it another day or two and then I'll make edits for a new draft.
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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Wed Oct 07, 2020 5:39 am

Couple of points:
- would not have become as strong a community with as established institutions as it is today;

This part of the second clause doesn’t make sense to me. Could do with a little rewriting.

While Chief Justice they presided over the historic Coalition v. Milograd trial, which lasted over a month, ruling on accusations of Treason for “orchestrating a coup, ejecting nations from the region and undermining the judiciary”;

Incorrect capitalisation of “treason”.

I also agree with HoneyD’s point about removing the reference to a raid.

Apart from these things this looks quite good.
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Postby Ambrella » Wed Oct 07, 2020 12:11 pm

Updated version based on feedback here and edited into the OP.

Updated version as of 10/7/20

The Security Council,

Acknowledging the outstanding and lasting contributions made to NationStates by the nation of King HEM during their fourteen year-long career under a variety of satellite states;

Convinced that without their diligence, wisdom, and exemplary leadership in founding Europeia and fostering its democratic traditions and institutions, the region - itself Commended by this Council - would not have become the thousand-strong community of nations it is today;

Impressed by the sheer consistency of King HEM's insightful and selfless guidance of Europeia over the years, which has manifested itself in a multitude of ways such as:

  • Their decision to go against prevailing trends and convert Europeia from a Monarchy into a Republic in July 2007, four months after its founding, and their dedicated leadership throughout that change, which paved the way for many other regions to successfully adopt democratic systems and was a catalyst for the system’s widespread use;
  • Their governmental and cultural leadership of Europeia in its early stages to pioneer a strong implementation of the Independent ideology, establishing its place in the NationStates political landscape;
  • Their impressive 228 total days as Head of Government of Europeia, as well as countless more of service in the Cabinet and the Senate, which saw the introduction of multiple fruitful projects and policies including:
    • The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes - the event was successfully re-held two years later;
    • A restructure of the Europeian Republican Navy during their service as Grand Admiral between June and October 2019, pushing the organisation's revitalisation by recognising and promoting sailors using an emphasis on continued consistent service, and by better integrating the naval reserves into the overall structure;
  • Their role as a driving force behind Europeia’s media scene, especially in their extensive contributions to private media via their acclaimed outlet E-News Network, which they have run since 2007, as well as practising a high standard of journalism in NationStates overall (for example, the nation’s journalists ran two iterations of a survey gathering and perceptively analyzing information about over 50 and over 100 regions respectively);
  • Their tireless work to ensure the safety and wellbeing of Europeia's nations, soon setting a NationStates-wide standard for professional and trustworthy work of that sort in many other regions, some of which received direct help from King HEM in this regard;

Recognising King HEM's exemplary service to The South Pacific, in which they served in numerous capacities from 2010 to 2014;

  • During their tenure as Minister of Regional Affairs they established a regional welcome procedure, helping ensure the continued flow of new members into the region, and worked diligently on a project to collate a comprehensive account of The South Pacific’s rich history;
  • While Chief Justice they presided over the historic Coalition v. Milograd trial, which lasted over a month, ruling on accusations of treason for “orchestrating a coup, ejecting nations from the region and undermining the judiciary”;
  • In their capacity as Vice Delegate they worked with Delegate Southern Bellz to stabilise the region after Milograd’s ban and to lead efforts to increase and enrich integration and communication between The South Pacific’s governmental areas and its Regional Message Board community;
  • As Deputy Minister of Foreign Affairs between December 2013 and January 2014 they were responsible for revamping and revitalising the region's ambassador system, which contributed to a resurgence of The South Pacific's diplomatic presence interregionally;

Appreciating their years of service in the region The Land of Kings and Emperors, where they served as a steadfast senior advisor on foreign affairs and Constitutional matters, including answering the call to serve temporarily as regent while Crown Prince, presiding over a successful and productive government in early 2015;

Believing that overall King HEM has left a lasting and profound impact to several regions and to NationStates as a whole, consistently going above and beyond, which is highly worthy of recognition by the Security Council,

Hereby Commends King HEM.
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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Wed Oct 07, 2020 12:25 pm

Still incorrectly capitalising “treason”. :) But that second clause reads a lot better.
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Postby Ambrella » Wed Oct 07, 2020 12:29 pm

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Still incorrectly capitalising “treason”. :) But that second clause reads a lot better.

I swore I fixed that. Editing now.
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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Wed Oct 07, 2020 12:37 pm

Ambrella wrote:
Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Still incorrectly capitalising “treason”. :) But that second clause reads a lot better.

I swore I fixed that. Editing now.

:) I know that feeling.

On re-reading, and I am getting picky here, use of the phrase “Regional Message Board community” jars with me. Yes, RMB is legal but I think it could be better expressed as “general populace” or “wider community”.
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Postby The Unified Missourtama States » Wed Oct 07, 2020 3:16 pm

Ambrella wrote:The Security Council,

Acknowledging the outstanding and lasting contributions made to NationStates by the nation of King HEM during their fourteen year-long career under a variety of satellite states;

Maybe provide a list of their most relevant puppets if they really had that big of an effect.
Convinced that without their diligence, wisdom, and exemplary leadership in founding Europeia and fostering its democratic traditions and institutions, the region - itself Commended by this Council - would not have become the thousand-strong community of nations it is today;

As of my writing this Europeia only has 897 nations residing. Not thousand.
Impressed by the sheer consistency of King HEM's insightful and selfless guidance of Europeia over the years, which has manifested itself in a multitude of ways such as:

  • Their decision to go against prevailing trends and convert Europeia from a Monarchy into a Republic in July 2007, four months after its founding, and their dedicated leadership throughout that change, which paved the way for many other regions to successfully adopt democratic systems and was a catalyst for the system’s widespread use;
  • Their governmental and cultural leadership of Europeia in its early stages to pioneer a strong implementation of the Independent ideology, establishing its place in the NationStates political landscape;
  • Their impressive 228 total days as Head of Government of Europeia, as well as countless more of service in the Cabinet and the Senate, which saw the introduction of multiple fruitful projects and policies including:
    • The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes - the event was successfully re-held two years later;
    • A restructure of the Europeian Republican Navy during their service as Grand Admiral between June and October 2019, pushing the organisation's revitalisation by recognising and promoting sailors using an emphasis on continued consistent service, and by better integrating the naval reserves into the overall structure;
  • Their role as a driving force behind Europeia’s media scene, especially in their extensive contributions to private media via their acclaimed outlet E-News Network, which they have run since 2007, as well as practising a high standard of journalism in NationStates overall (for example, the nation’s journalists ran two iterations of a survey gathering and perceptively analyzing information about over 50 and over 100 regions respectively);
  • Their tireless work to ensure the safety and wellbeing of Europeia's nations, soon setting a NationStates-wide standard for professional and trustworthy work of that sort in many other regions, some of which received direct help from King HEM in this regard;

This seems like a lot of filler, you could remove half of it and they'd still be just as likely to earn a commendation.
Recognising King HEM's exemplary service to The South Pacific, in which they served in numerous capacities from 2010 to 2014;

  • During their tenure as Minister of Regional Affairs they established a regional welcome procedure, helping ensure the continued flow of new members into the region, and worked diligently on a project to collate a comprehensive account of The South Pacific’s rich history;
  • While Chief Justice they presided over the historic Coalition v. Milograd trial, which lasted over a month, ruling on accusations of treason for “orchestrating a coup, ejecting nations from the region and undermining the judiciary”;

The wording is just off here, take a double look.
  • In their capacity as Vice Delegate they worked with Delegate Southern Bellz to stabilise the region after Milograd’s ban and to lead efforts to increase and enrich integration and communication between The South Pacific’s governmental areas and its Regional Message Board community;

  • Elaborate what the RMB community did, in general I think of direct mentions of RMBs as inappropriate for the Security Council (https://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?p=3755837#inappropriate).
  • As Deputy Minister of Foreign Affairs between December 2013 and January 2014 they were responsible for revamping and revitalising the region's ambassador system, which contributed to a resurgence of The South Pacific's diplomatic presence interregionally;

  • Make it more obviously extra-regional.
    Appreciating their years of service in the region The Land of Kings and Emperors, where they served as a steadfast senior advisor on foreign affairs and Constitutional matters, including answering the call to serve temporarily as regent while Crown Prince, presiding over a successful and productive government in early 2015;

    Didn't you already mention this? Too many sprinkles.
    Believing that overall King HEM has left a lasting and profound impact to several regions and to NationStates as a whole, consistently going above and beyond, which is highly worthy of recognition by the Security Council,

    Hereby Commends King HEM.

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    Postby Praeceps » Wed Oct 07, 2020 8:58 pm

    Convinced that without their diligence, wisdom, and exemplary leadership in founding Europeia and fostering its democratic traditions and institutions, the region - itself Commended by this Council - would not have become the thousand-strong community of nations it is today;
    In addition to TUMS' comment, I'd note that number of nations is not impressive. I would suggest using a different measure here, probably WA nations.

    Their impressive 228 total days as Head of Government of Europeia, as well as countless more of service in the Cabinet and the Senate, which saw the introduction of multiple fruitful projects and policies including:
    I get that they have had a number of positions and have helped out the region in a variety of capacities. However, I personally wouldn't describe a total of 228 days as HoG as impressive. Also, pedantically, I should point out that one could count the number of other days in service to the Cabinet and the Senate.

    The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes - the event was successfully re-held two years later;
    Generally, I don't find festivals to be super commendable and this feels out of place compared to the other clauses here.

    A restructure of the Europeian Republican Navy during their service as Grand Admiral between June and October 2019, pushing the organisation's revitalisation by recognising and promoting sailors using an emphasis on continued consistent service, and by better integrating the naval reserves into the overall structure;
    What were the ramifications of this restructuring?
    Their role as a driving force behind Europeia’s media scene, especially in their extensive contributions to private media via their acclaimed outlet E-News Network, which they have run since 2007, as well as practising a high standard of journalism in NationStates overall (for example, the nation’s journalists ran two iterations of a survey gathering and perceptively analyzing information about over 50 and over 100 regions respectively);

    Do you potentially have a number on how many articles HEM has written?



    Overall, I think this is a good resolution and a deserving nominee.
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    Postby Ambrella » Sun Oct 18, 2020 10:54 am

    With some delay, a third draft that I plan to submit in the coming days. Updated here and in the OP. I appreciate the feedback - I certainly didn't act on all of it, but it has made this a stronger proposal.

    Updated version as of 10/18/20

    The Security Council,

    Acknowledging the outstanding and lasting contributions made to NationStates by the nation of King HEM during their fourteen year-long career under a variety of satellite states;

    Convinced that without their diligence, wisdom, and exemplary leadership in founding Europeia and fostering its democratic traditions and institutions, the region - itself Commended by this Council - would not have become the respected community of nations it is today;

    Impressed by the sheer consistency of King HEM's insightful and selfless guidance of Europeia over the years, which has manifested itself in a multitude of ways such as:

    • Their decision to go against prevailing trends and convert Europeia from a Monarchy into a Republic in July 2007, four months after its founding, and their dedicated leadership throughout that change, which paved the way for many other regions to successfully adopt democratic systems and was a catalyst for the system’s widespread use;
    • Their governmental and cultural leadership of Europeia in its early stages to pioneer a strong implementation of the Independent ideology, establishing its place in the NationStates political landscape;
    • Their impressive 228 total days as Head of Government of Europeia, as well as countless more of service in the Cabinet and the Senate, which saw the introduction of multiple fruitful projects and policies including:
      • The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes - the event was successfully re-held two years later;
      • A restructure of the Europeian Republican Navy during their service as Grand Admiral between June and October 2019, pushing the organisation's revitalisation by recognising and promoting sailors using an emphasis on continued consistent service, and by better integrating the naval reserves into the overall structure;
    • Their role as a driving force behind Europeia’s media scene, especially in their extensive contributions to private media via their acclaimed outlet E-News Network, which they have run since 2007 with over 300 published pieces, as well as practising a high standard of journalism in NationStates overall (for example, the nation’s journalists ran two iterations of a survey gathering and perceptively analyzing information about over 50 and over 100 regions respectively);
    • Their tireless work to ensure the safety and wellbeing of Europeia's nations, soon setting a NationStates-wide standard for professional and trustworthy work of that sort in many other regions, some of which received direct help from King HEM in this regard;

    Recognising King HEM's exemplary service to The South Pacific in numerous capacities from 2010 to 2014, with accomplishments including;

    • As Minister of Regional Affairs, establishing a regional welcome procedure, helping ensure the continued flow of new members into the region, and working diligently on a project to collate a comprehensive account of The South Pacific’s rich history;
    • Presiding over the historic Coalition v. Milograd trial as Chief Justice, which lasted over a month, ruling on accusations of treason for “orchestrating a coup, ejecting nations from the region and undermining the judiciary”;
    • In their capacity as Vice Delegate, working with Delegate Southern Bellz to stabilise the region after Milograd’s ban and leading efforts to increase and enrich integration and communication between The South Pacific’s governmental areas and its wider community;
    • As Deputy Minister of Foreign Affairs, revamping and revitalising the region's ambassador system, which contributed to a resurgence of The South Pacific's diplomatic presence interregionally;

    Appreciating their years of service in the region The Land of Kings and Emperors, where they served as a steadfast senior advisor on foreign affairs and Constitutional matters, including answering the call to serve temporarily as regent while Crown Prince, presiding over a successful and productive government in early 2015;

    Believing that King HEM has left a lasting and profound impact on the NationStates community, consistently going above and beyond, with achievements that are highly worthy of recognition by the Security Council,

    Hereby Commends King HEM.
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    Postby Xoriet » Mon Oct 19, 2020 5:52 am

    I support Commending HEM. He's done a lot of good work over his NS career and helped forge one of the most successful UCRs. I only have one little quibble, which is over a word here:

    The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes; - the event was successfully re-held reintroduced two years later;


    "Re-held" sounds awkward, and the "-" isn't the right punctuation to use there. You could also exclude adding that in and state that it was successfully hosted twice rather than tacking on that it was hosted again later on.
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    Postby Tinhampton » Mon Oct 19, 2020 9:14 am

    I note that your bullet points for the Europeia clauses are of the form "Their choice to QWERTYUIOP," but your bullet points for the TSP clauses are of the form "Choosing to ASDFGHJKL." Please be consistent with your tenses :P
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    Postby Amerion » Mon Oct 19, 2020 5:03 pm

    On behalf of the government of TSP, may I kindly request that the section relating to the South Pacific be substantially reduced, if not omitted in its entirety. The South Pacific would appreciate not being associated with a character who has since presided over considerable hostility against the Coalition.

    [On a side note, ideally, references to TSP should be the South Pacific rather than The South Pacific]
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    Postby Cretox State » Mon Oct 19, 2020 8:29 pm

    Support.

    Xoriet wrote:
    The region’s first EuroPride festival during their Presidency in 2018, in which national delegations from all over NationStates convened to celebrate diversity and promote inclusion and positive attitudes; - the event was successfully re-held reintroduced two years later;


    "Re-held" sounds awkward, and the "-" isn't the right punctuation to use there. You could also exclude adding that in and state that it was successfully hosted twice rather than tacking on that it was hosted again later on.

    Or just say "held again".

    Believing that King HEM has left a lasting and profound impact on the NationStates community, consistently going above and beyond, with achievements that are highly worthy of recognition by the Security Council,

    This is better, but still feels a bit clunky.

    Their tireless work to ensure the safety and wellbeing of Europeia's nations, soon setting a NationStates-wide standard for professional and trustworthy work of that sort in many other regions, some of which received direct help from King HEM in this regard;

    This is vague enough that it could probably be expanded upon, but ultimately that's up to you.

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    Postby Unibot III » Tue Oct 20, 2020 6:42 am

    I support this resolution, although I think TSP & LKE sections may need reconsideration. The heart of the resolution is HEM’s extraordinary contribution to Europeia — he could have run it as an autocrat, but instead he chose to embrace a democratic republic that could evolve and innovate and change. He’s always been a constructive force there.

    Independentism has a difficult history in TSP - the 2016 coup had tacit/material support from ‘Manifesto’ regions (Balder, TNP, Euro). Mentioning HEM’s involvement in championing independentism in tandem with his work in prosecuting a couper in TSP, doesn’t address the fact HEM also betrayed the Coalition and the constitution to further a political agenda.

    It also seems inconsistent to me to commend HEM for helping to make Europeia commendable, but also commending HEM for contributing to LKE — whose members have been condemned and whose closest ally has been condemned for actions that LKE conducted with TNI. Like, either the WASC’s opinion is valuable or it is not.
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