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[Submitted] Push Polling

Postby Cretox State » Tue Sep 15, 2020 7:52 pm

As always, any comments are appreciated; please let me know if there is overlap with an existing issue I'm not aware of.

Draft 2; some minor edits and revised option 4.

Push Polling

Validity: Must have elections, public protest, and at least some political freedom.

Description
In the aftermath of a recent close election, your government has received a litany of complaints concerning the activities of "Bikers for @@LEADER@@"- a grassroots organization whose intense mass demonstrations in front of voting locations and harassment of opposition voters allegedly swung the election in your favor.

Option 1
"We're just tryin' ta' help, is all," says @@RANDOMNAME@@, the head of the organization, placing a friendly arm around your shoulder and pinning one of your own party's buttons to your chest. "Maybe we swung the election a bit. Who knows? We're just exercisin' our right ta' express ourselves politically like any folks can do, and you should be supporting that. Otherwise, I can't guarantee ma boys an' I will keep bein' so friendly in the future."

Effect: the mob vote is a crucial electoral demographic

Option 2
"You're to blame for this!" accuses a junior aide who's clearly trying to get himself fired. "My grandmother and her friends were going to vote against you, and they couldn't even get in because of these goons that you directly benefited from! If you want to show people you're anything but a corrupt wannabe autocrat, you'll ban all political demonstrations anywhere near voting centers and beef up security. It's the only way to keep our elections fair."

Effect: police officers intimidate voters into not trying to intimidate voters
Alternate: poll workers complaining about unfair wages are arrested

Option 3
"Can't we all just get along?" asks your Director of Managerial Oversight, hanging an empty suit on your coat rack. "How about we set up special cordoned-off areas some distance away from voting locations specifically for these demonstrations? It'll appease the more enthusiastic political types while alleviating any concerns about them interfering in the electoral process. Would you like a glass of water?"

Effect: the nation's democracy attracts huddled masses yearning to breathe free

Option 4
"Such a nasty person. So nasty," rambles Minister of Electioneering Edward Rump, who somehow won "Minister of the Year" despite losing the popular vote. "People say it's nasty- very many people, you're hearing, they're calling it everywhere. And we need to call- they give us a call, and they vote. And the vote won't be nasty, because it's fair, and we're calling it. Bigtopia's building a call center. They're competing with us- the voters call and not the nasty people and it'll be so fair. So fair."

Effect: the "I don't want what you're selling" Party recently won a few seats in Parliament
Last edited by Cretox State on Tue Oct 06, 2020 6:24 pm, edited 5 times in total.

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Postby Cretox State » Tue Sep 15, 2020 7:53 pm

Push Polling

Validity: Must have elections, public protest, and at least some political freedom.

Description
In the aftermath of a recent close election, your government has received a litany of complaints concerning the activities of "Bikers for @@LEADER@@"- a grassroots organization whose intense mass demonstrations in front of voting locations and harassment of opposition voters allegedly swung the election in your favor.

Option 1
"We're just tryin' ta' help, is all," says @@RANDOMNAME@@, the head of the organization, placing a friendly arm around your shoulder and pinning one of your own party's buttons to your chest. "Maybe we swung the election a bit. Who knows? We're just exercisin' our right ta' express ourselves politically like any folks can do, and you should be supporting that. Otherwise, I can't guarantee ma boys an' I will keep bein' so friendly in the future."

Effect: the mob vote is a crucial electoral demographic

Option 2
"You're to blame for this!" accuses a junior aide who's clearly trying to get himself fired. "My grandmother and her friends were going to vote against you, and they couldn't even get in because of these goons that you directly benefited from! If you want to show people you're anything but a corrupt wannabe autocrat, you'll ban all political demonstrations anywhere near voting centers and beef up security. It's the only way to keep our elections fair."

Effect: poll workers complaining about unfair wages are arrested

Option 3
"Can't we all just get along?" asks your Director of Managerial Oversight, hanging an empty suit on your coat rack. "How about we set up special cordoned-off areas some distance away from voting locations specifically for these demonstrations? It'll appease the more enthusiastic political types while alleviating any concerns about them interfering in the electoral process. Would you like a glass of water?"

Effect: the nation's democracy attracts huddled masses yearning to breathe free

Option 4
"Bigtopia's building a call center. They're competing with us," rambles Minister of Electioneering Edward Rump, who somehow won "Minister of the Year" despite losing the popular vote. "But we need the calls. People want to vote, they call us. They call us, we'll call it an election. The voting places, the nasty areas- very nasty, they need to be called out. We'll close them. People call to vote- it'll be the fairest election. It'll be so fair and so great, people will get tired of how fair it is. So great."

Effect: the "I don't want what you're selling" Party recently won a few seats in Parliament
Last edited by Cretox State on Thu Sep 17, 2020 8:49 am, edited 1 time in total.

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Postby Westinor » Wed Sep 16, 2020 9:09 pm

I like the issue draft overall! Great humor, and nice premise. The description seemed extremely familiar to me, might've been an issue draft I read in the past but I'm not quite certain.

Cretox State wrote:We're just tryin' ta help, is all


I'd suggest adding an apostrophe after the "ta"s in this option.

Cretox State wrote:anyone can do


I think changing 'anyone' to 'anybody/everybody' and reframing this part of the sentence accordingly would fit better with this speaker's vernacular (<- I have no clue how to use this word, to be quite honest).

Cretox State wrote:You're to blame for this!" accuses a junior aide who's clearly trying to get himself fired. "My grandmother couldn't get in to vote because of these goons that you directly benefited from!


This is a pretty nitty nitpick, but I don't like the sort of leap of logic this has the reader take. I like "Those goons kept opposition voters like my grandma out of the polling booth" or something similar. It does sort of guide the reader through the logic more smoothly even though it repeats (to an extent) part of the description.

Cretox State wrote:"Bigtopia's building a call center. They're competing with us," rambles Minister of Electioneering Edward Rump, who somehow won "Minister of the Year" despite losing the popular vote. "But we need the calls. People want to vote, they call us. They call us, we'll call it an election. The voting places, the nasty areas- very nasty, they need to be called out. We'll close them. People call to vote- it'll be the fairest election. It'll be so fair and so great, people will get tired of how fair it is. So great."


While I like this option, I feel like you didn't hit the mark on imitating his dialect. Besides that, the opening of "Bigtopia's building a call center" also doesn't make very much logical sense (even for Tru- er, Rump). In fact, I'm not entirely sure what that has to do with anything, even if that's usually how the rants go irl. Moving the 'calling out our nation's competitors' to the middle of the text, starting it off with some sort of comment on the previous speaker's point (perhaps) or another previous point and then slowly descending it into a trump-esque rant would make this option great imo. Otherwise, well done!
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Postby Cretox State » Thu Sep 17, 2020 8:56 am

Edits made accordingly. I'm having a bit of trouble figuring out how to make option 4 believably incoherent.

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Postby Candlewhisper Archive » Fri Sep 18, 2020 4:26 am

Hey, this is really good. Carry on!
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Postby Cretox State » Fri Sep 18, 2020 9:44 am

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:Hey, this is really good. Carry on!

Thanks for the kind words! I'll obviously hold off on submitting for at least a few weeks, since I feel option 4 especially could be a bit better.

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Postby Golgothastan » Wed Sep 23, 2020 8:31 am

Not wild about option 4 but whatever.

The effect for option 2 seems weak. I get you're trying to engineer an "unexpected consequence" outcome, but I don't think poll workers actually would demonstrate on election day like that. How about ... "intimidating security officers crowd polling stations in an effort to prevent voter intimidation"? Or not. But something.

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Postby Cretox State » Thu Sep 24, 2020 6:09 pm

Golgothastan wrote:The effect for option 2 seems weak. I get you're trying to engineer an "unexpected consequence" outcome, but I don't think poll workers actually would demonstrate on election day like that. How about ... "intimidating security officers crowd polling stations in an effort to prevent voter intimidation"? Or not. But something.

I added a new effect line for option 2 along those lines.

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Postby Cretox State » Sat Oct 03, 2020 2:09 pm

Bumping this.

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Postby Cretox State » Tue Oct 06, 2020 6:23 pm

Submitted this.


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