[SUBMITTED] Meat Meet

[Fauxia]

Switched the meats in the title.

How does it look? I will probably submit this in a week or so if no one has any further comments.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

[fallout] @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@ fear nothing so much as being caught with meat in their mouths

Funny, but maybe too risqué for an effect line, as class nations can always see effect lines.

[Krogon]

Description feels a little bare bones if you know what I mean *nudge nudge*

Perhaps a bit of background around why exactly the ambassador is eating meat?

[Honeydewistania]

[fallout] @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@ fear nothing so much as being caught with meat in their mouths

Funny, but maybe too risqué for an effect line, as class nations can always see effect lines.

Didnt we have the whole pulling out issue? Or is that adult tagged?

[Jutsa]

I'd be shocked if that weren't adult tagged. That said, I did have to change at least one effect line involving twigs and hippies due to being visible to non-class nations.

FTR that draft was originally as clean as any other draft of mine, but I was going through a mental crisis because I woke up at 6AM for some ungodly reason. Glad something good came out of it.

[Fauxia]

[fallout] @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@ fear nothing so much as being caught with meat in their mouths

Funny, but maybe too risqué for an effect line, as class nations can always see effect lines.

Bah, kids always get in the way of fun. I can see an opportunity to transfer it to the first option, perhaps, and slap on an adult tag.

Description feels a little bare bones if you know what I mean *nudge nudge*

Perhaps a bit of background around why exactly the ambassador is eating meat?

Thanks, but I respectfully disagree. You have the background, I think it’s best to leave questions of the ambassador’s motives up to the reader. @@LEADER@@ doesn’t know what goes on in the ambassador’s head, probably.

Funny, but maybe too risqué for an effect line, as class nations can always see effect lines.

Didnt we have the whole pulling out issue? Or is that adult tagged?

Most of the dirty jokes in that one are in the options. Only one fallout is dirty but it’s probably not as overt as the one here. Generally, if the joke is obvious enough for me to make it, it’s probably obvious enough thatlots of school kids to catch it.

[Fauxia]

Okay, third draft is up, with that joke moved into option 1, a few more puns added, a few tweaks, and an adult tag slapped on.

I'll submit if no one has any objections.

[Honeydewistania]

put a ‘Nice to Meat You’ pun or smth along those lines

[Cretox State]

Okay, third draft is up, with that joke moved into option 1, a few more puns added, a few tweaks, and an adult tag slapped on.

I'll submit if no one has any objections.

I like it! Just one comment regarding option 3:

We can flesh out an agreement to keep some unethical practices off the table, but we're adults now.

Maybe replace "now" with "for crying out loud!" or similar? It might just be my tired brain, but saying "we're adults now" doesn't seem to make much sense.

[Fauxia]

Okay, third draft is up, with that joke moved into option 1, a few more puns added, a few tweaks, and an adult tag slapped on.

I'll submit if no one has any objections.

I like it! Just one comment regarding option 3:

We can flesh out an agreement to keep some unethical practices off the table, but we're adults now.

Maybe replace "now" with "for crying out loud!" or similar? It might just be my tired brain, but saying "we're adults now" doesn't seem to make much sense.

You’re right, it doesn’t.

[Fauxia]

The macros were a little messed up, so I fixed those and tweaked the language again, then submitted. I don't know if it's my best, but it's not the wurst writing I've ever done.

[Australian rePublic]

Good Luck!