[DRAFT] Abolish factory farming!

[Socialist State of LAY]

That's my first issue. I didn't stumble across an issue that targets regulations about factory farming so I hope this isn't redundant in any way. I think it's mostly an economic issue. I appreciate all the feedback. My English isn't that good so I hope it doesn't suck too much.

Description:

Animal rights groups and environmental organizations launched an initiative to ban intensive, large-scale livestock farming. They aim to put a brake on the increasing trend towards large-scale farming and high-productivity breeding, according to the groups behind the campaign. "The government must protect the dignity of animals within the animal husbandry industry, which includes conditions that systematically violate animal welfare!", the organizations wrote.

Option 1:

"That's unbelievable. Implementing such laws would implicate severe consequences for the meat industry!" complains @@RANDOMNAME@@ CEO of FriedBurgers, while eating one of the dripping, greasy burgers of @@HIS@@ fast-food chain "The prices for meat would skyrocket and who knows how many people would get their meat from abroad. We can't possibly compete in such a scenario. We have to deregulate the meat industry completely and give companies all the freedom they need to produce meat for cheap prices in high quantities. Who needs animal rights anyway? It will boost the economy and also make sure poor people have food on their plate. They will be thankful, trust me."

Effect: Meat became so cheap, everything is made out of meat. Even toilet paper.

Option 2:

"Millions of animals are tortured and killed every day", says popular vegan author @@RANDOMNAME@@, "and the industry has a tremendous impact on the environment. If we implement these laws, we could reduce our ecological food print. The government must define criteria for animal-friendly housing, ensure access to outdoors and limit the maximum amount of animals kept in barn. People still can eat meat but they simply will have to reduce the quantity of it, while also profiting from higher quality. Sometimes you need to sacrifice some things for the greater good."

Effect: Only rich people eat meat since it has become more expensive than caviar.

Option 3:

"We can't possibly do that", interjects BBQ enthusiast @@RANDOMNAME@@, "we would basically kill a whole industry with such laws. People love organic food and there is a vegetarianism is on the rise. Why don't we simply allow businesses to mark their food as "animal-friendly", if they expose their animals to sunlight at least 20 minutes a day and give them 2.5 inches more living space? That way the people can sleep well at night and we keep the meat industry alive. Nobody needs to know that we didn't really change anything. Win-win for everyone."

Effect: Meat holds a dark secret.

[Earthbound Immortal Squad]

I wouldn't take my word as absolute as I am new here too but I noticed a few things. Firstly your effect parts are supposed to be written as non sentences so no capital letter or full stops. Secondly option 3 seems to have a similar effect to option 1 maybe if the promise was upheld and the requirements were greater e.g things like vaccinations, being allowed to live longer etc. Finally option two it seems unlikely that a vegan author would support any form of meat eating if anything they would want it completely banned which makes it sort of like an issue that already exists (not sure what it's called or the number). As I said I'm new to this too so I'd wait for a more experienced player to give you the feedback.

[Autonomous Cleaner Bot Cleaners]

...Firstly your effect parts are not supposed to be written as non sentences so no capital letter or full stops.

Which is to say, they are supposed to be written as non-sentences

To illustrate, from my own nation's page:

Leader is too busy listening to praise to get any work done, the logging industry is celebrating as tourists plaster Autonomous Cleaner Bot Cleaners with trees, many rural villagers have never been more than a day's horse-ride from their birthplace, and a referendum must be held in order for any new law to be passed. Crime, especially youth-related, is totally unknown. Autonomous Cleaner Bot Cleaners's national animal is the deluxe corner combo brush.

The multi-colored bits are sentence fragments, all of which constitute issue outcome lines. They should appear in exactly this form in your sentence draft. They have to be sentence fragments, because then they can be strung together like this on a nation's page.

Also, try to shoot for brevity, precisely because otherwise the sentence built on nations' pages is going to get unwieldy really quick. For example:

Only rich people eat meat since it has become more expensive than caviar.

should probably be something more like:

meat is more expensive than caviar

Shorter and sweeter, but still carries the point. Add length where it is necessary to carry a joke (which, ideally, is being built into your options/outcomes).

[Autonomous Cleaner Bot Cleaners]

So I did a quick survey all up and down the issues spoilers thread, and it looks like this general corner of issuespace has had much attention:

#7: Animal Liberation Front Strikes Again
#145: Hackles Raised Over Fur Clothes Debate
#162: Animal Experimentation Laws Under Scrutiny
#205: No More Broccoli, Beg Meat-Eaters
#286: A Whale of a Problem
#367: What's Their Beef?
#502: Scientists Declare That @@ANIMALPLURAL@@ Are Persons
#563: Resistance Is Fertile

I went searching because the description of the issue in this draft is kind of vague. It seems to cite "animal cruelty" in general, and proposes general ways to address it. But, as can be seen above, there are a plethora of issues addressing specific sorts and cases of animal cruelty, with specific policy actions and recommendations. I'd recommend reading carefully through the above issues to see if there is a specific case or instance that's yet to be addressed, and then focusing your draft there. These published issues can probably serve as good examples to boot.

[Trotterdam]

I think the main criticism of factory farming is that it puts animals in tiny cages with barely any space to move around, in order to more efficiently pack many animals into a small farm.

Note, factory farming also applies to dairy, egg, and wool industries, not just meat.

[Australian rePublic]

This is way too long

[USS Monitor]

It's a little long, and you should pay attention to what folks said about the effect lines, but I think the biggest problem is the similarity to #7. This is written in a very different tone, but it's still covering the same general turf.