I am very new to writing issues, so any criticism or suggestions would be highly appreciated. My chief concerns include the issue being too wordy, particularly the description, and the title and outcomes being suboptimal.
I have not included any specific stat effects for the options, as I am unsure as to whether the issue is even viable. I would also like to know whether I should create a communist version of this issue.
Title: Focal Seizure
Validity: Only available to nations with free-market economies.
The Issue: An employee of one of the nation's largest technology firms, Dam-E-Diodes, left the company and began using corporate resources to construct his own corporation, Path-E-TechPheft, which has since consumed the majority of the nation's @@MAJORINDUSTRY@@ sector. Dam-E-Diodes is attempting to legally seize the newer corporation and its assets, citing theft of its intellectual property, given a non-disclosure agreement signed by its former employee. The resulting economic fallout has propelled the issue past the usual bureaucracy, and directly onto your desk.
Option 1: "These barbaric 'contracts' and 'agreements' are an insult to hardworking citizens such as myself!" opines @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, the employee in question, while trading stocks off of his proprietary Dam-E-Diodes-brand mobile device. "So what if I stole some assets and sabotaged some of their operations? This agreement is insulting! According to it, all of my 'thoughts, DNA, and derivative works' are company property! You need to stand up for us workers, and outlaw any contracts or agreements infringing on our- SELL! SELL! SELL!"
Outcome 1: Most jobs now consist of retiring with full pay.
Option 2: "What they call an insult, I call brand loyalty", interjects @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, an executive of Dam-E-Diodes, flanked by a dozen high-priced lawyers. "In any competitive marketplace, corporations must protect the security of their interests. Oftentimes, this involves placing certain restrictions on employees, who may possess sensitive information. Everyone would benefit if you could allow us to further restrict potentially compromising employees. Besides, many of these measures are merely formalities. If any employee wishes to leave, all we ask is that they avoid working in any related industry for the next 300 years."
Outcome 2: Citizens are known to pay employers for the privilege of working for them.
Option 3: "I honestly don't see why you're focusing on such petty squabbles, when there are much bigger things at stake", opines your tired economic advisor,
@@RANDOMNAME@@, smelling faintly of whiskey. "These are massive corporations; the fallout just from the announcement of a possible merger has already caused massive market fluctuation. I implore you, allow our economy to stabilize, and save us all a big headache. Pardon the employee involved, and prohibit an asset seizure, just this time."
Outcome 3: @@LEADER@@ is known to make wildly unpopular decisions "for the good of the people".
Option 4: Restricting employee freedoms is a wonderful idea, but what's in it for us?" hisses one of your shadiest advisors and former used car dealer @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, leaving a visible slime trail as he slithers up to your desk. "My friends in the technology industry have developed an amazing new device. Implanted into a person's skull at birth, it will deliver a good, hard electric shock whenever they do anything not sanctioned by the government! This'll stop all corporate theft permanently, and will be a great tool when I seize power, for both of us, of course. You can even be the first to test it out!"
Outcome 4: The nation's streets and media outlets are eerily silent for fear of angering @@LEADER@@.
Option 5: You're wasting so much of that delicious brain", snarls your deranged manchild of a cousin, @@RANDOMNAME@@, while trying to perform surgery on a live @@ANIMAL@@ with a plastic fork and knife. "You should just force every citizen to sign a contract pledging lifetime allegiance to you. If they resist, just cite the contract. You know, my walls could always use some redecoration. Tasty, moist redecoration."
Outcome 5: Dissidents are converted into delicious protein supplements.
Option 6: Friend, obvious solution cannot elude you", proclaims @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, self-appointed man of the people. "Solution to problem must be clear, revered leader. Corporation obviously cause problem, so to solve problem, ban corporation. In glorious homeland, no corruptive corporation exist, and populace never more happy or slovenly."
Outcome 6: The banning of private enterprise has united all in poverty. [Institutes national policy of Communism]
Validity: Only available to nations with free-market economies.
The Issue: An employee of one of the nation's largest technology firms, Dam-E-Diodes, left the company and began using corporate resources to construct his own corporation, Path-E-TechPheft, which has since consumed the majority of the nation's @@MAJORINDUSTRY@@ sector. Dam-E-Diodes is attempting to legally seize the newer corporation and its assets, citing theft of its intellectual property, given a non-disclosure agreement signed by its former employee. The resulting economic fallout has propelled the issue past the usual bureaucracy, and directly onto your desk.
Option 1: "These barbaric 'contracts' and 'agreements' are an insult to hardworking citizens such as myself!" opines @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, the employee in question, while trading stocks off of his proprietary Dam-E-Diodes-brand mobile device. "So what if I stole some assets and sabotaged some of their operations? This agreement is insulting! According to it, all of my 'thoughts, DNA, and derivative works' are company property! You need to stand up for us workers, and outlaw any contracts or agreements infringing on our- SELL! SELL! SELL!"
Outcome 1: Most jobs now consist of retiring with full pay.
Option 2: "What they call an insult, I call brand loyalty", interjects @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, an executive of Dam-E-Diodes, flanked by a dozen high-priced lawyers. "In any competitive marketplace, corporations must protect the security of their interests. Oftentimes, this involves placing certain restrictions on employees, who may possess sensitive information. Everyone would benefit if you could allow us to further restrict potentially compromising employees. Besides, many of these measures are merely formalities. If any employee wishes to leave, all we ask is that they avoid working in any related industry for the next 300 years."
Outcome 2: Citizens are known to pay employers for the privilege of working for them.
Option 3: "I honestly don't see why you're focusing on such petty squabbles, when there are much bigger things at stake", opines your tired economic advisor,
@@RANDOMNAME@@, smelling faintly of whiskey. "These are massive corporations; the fallout just from the announcement of a possible merger has already caused massive market fluctuation. I implore you, allow our economy to stabilize, and save us all a big headache. Pardon the employee involved, and prohibit an asset seizure, just this time."
Outcome 3: @@LEADER@@ is known to make wildly unpopular decisions "for the good of the people".
Option 4: Restricting employee freedoms is a wonderful idea, but what's in it for us?" hisses one of your shadiest advisors and former used car dealer @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, leaving a visible slime trail as he slithers up to your desk. "My friends in the technology industry have developed an amazing new device. Implanted into a person's skull at birth, it will deliver a good, hard electric shock whenever they do anything not sanctioned by the government! This'll stop all corporate theft permanently, and will be a great tool when I seize power, for both of us, of course. You can even be the first to test it out!"
Outcome 4: The nation's streets and media outlets are eerily silent for fear of angering @@LEADER@@.
Option 5: You're wasting so much of that delicious brain", snarls your deranged manchild of a cousin, @@RANDOMNAME@@, while trying to perform surgery on a live @@ANIMAL@@ with a plastic fork and knife. "You should just force every citizen to sign a contract pledging lifetime allegiance to you. If they resist, just cite the contract. You know, my walls could always use some redecoration. Tasty, moist redecoration."
Outcome 5: Dissidents are converted into delicious protein supplements.
Option 6: Friend, obvious solution cannot elude you", proclaims @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, self-appointed man of the people. "Solution to problem must be clear, revered leader. Corporation obviously cause problem, so to solve problem, ban corporation. In glorious homeland, no corruptive corporation exist, and populace never more happy or slovenly."
Outcome 6: The banning of private enterprise has united all in poverty. [Institutes national policy of Communism]
Title: Focal Seizure
Validity: Only available to nations with free-market economies.
The Issue: An employee of one of the nation's largest technology firms, Dam-E-Diodes, left the company and began constructing his own corporation, Maiygo-Hertz. Dam-E-Diodes is attempting to legally seize the newer corporation and its assets, citing theft of its intellectual property, given a non-disclosure agreement signed by its former employee. The resulting economic fallout has propelled the issue past the usual bureaucracy, and directly onto your desk.
Option 1: "These barbaric 'contracts' and 'agreements' are an insult to hardworking citizens such as myself!" opines @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, the former employee in question, while trading stocks off of his proprietary Dam-E-Diodes-brand mobile device. "According to this agreement, all of my 'thoughts, DNA, and derivative works' are company property. These corporations survive because of the efforts of employees, not some bigshot in upper management! Prohibiting employees from using knowledge gathered from work in a single corporation limits competition to large corporations, and prevents us from using our skills to full effect. The national economy would immensely benefit if you abolished these agreements, allowing us to- SELL! SELL! SELL!"
Outcome 1: Thousands of identical products are sold under different brands.
Option 2: "Have you even considered the ramifications of eliminating non-disclosure agreements on our bottom line?" interjects @@RANDOMNAME@@, aforementioned bigshot in upper management, flanked by a dozen high-priced lawyers. "You must understand the sheer number of @@CURRENCYPLURAL@@ we invest in Research and development efforts every year. Why, Dam-E-Diodes spends nearly 1.5% of our quarterly earnings on R&D! All of that effort becomes meaningless if any competitor can just take our work without consequences; no sane executive would even bother with R&D. Banning these agreements will only lead to economic stagnation, and cause @@NAME@@ to lose its competitive footing within @@REGION@@. Allow us broad authority to protect our IP through any means necessary, and I'll ensure that some of the earnings find their way back to you."
Outcome 2: Citizens are known to pay employers for the privilege of working for them.
Option 3: Friend, obvious solution cannot elude you", proclaims @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, self-appointed man of the people. "Corporate system cleary corrupt; does nothing but steal and partition national wealth. Company abuses talent of workers, so workers revolt. Eradicate corporate system, and bring market under control of the people. In glorious homeland, wealth redistributed to people long ago, and people never more happy or slovenly."
Outcome 3: Former CEOs can be seen huddled around trashcan fires. [Institutes national policy of Communism]
Validity: Only available to nations with free-market economies.
The Issue: An employee of one of the nation's largest technology firms, Dam-E-Diodes, left the company and began constructing his own corporation, Maiygo-Hertz. Dam-E-Diodes is attempting to legally seize the newer corporation and its assets, citing theft of its intellectual property, given a non-disclosure agreement signed by its former employee. The resulting economic fallout has propelled the issue past the usual bureaucracy, and directly onto your desk.
Option 1: "These barbaric 'contracts' and 'agreements' are an insult to hardworking citizens such as myself!" opines @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, the former employee in question, while trading stocks off of his proprietary Dam-E-Diodes-brand mobile device. "According to this agreement, all of my 'thoughts, DNA, and derivative works' are company property. These corporations survive because of the efforts of employees, not some bigshot in upper management! Prohibiting employees from using knowledge gathered from work in a single corporation limits competition to large corporations, and prevents us from using our skills to full effect. The national economy would immensely benefit if you abolished these agreements, allowing us to- SELL! SELL! SELL!"
Outcome 1: Thousands of identical products are sold under different brands.
Option 2: "Have you even considered the ramifications of eliminating non-disclosure agreements on our bottom line?" interjects @@RANDOMNAME@@, aforementioned bigshot in upper management, flanked by a dozen high-priced lawyers. "You must understand the sheer number of @@CURRENCYPLURAL@@ we invest in Research and development efforts every year. Why, Dam-E-Diodes spends nearly 1.5% of our quarterly earnings on R&D! All of that effort becomes meaningless if any competitor can just take our work without consequences; no sane executive would even bother with R&D. Banning these agreements will only lead to economic stagnation, and cause @@NAME@@ to lose its competitive footing within @@REGION@@. Allow us broad authority to protect our IP through any means necessary, and I'll ensure that some of the earnings find their way back to you."
Outcome 2: Citizens are known to pay employers for the privilege of working for them.
Option 3: Friend, obvious solution cannot elude you", proclaims @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, self-appointed man of the people. "Corporate system cleary corrupt; does nothing but steal and partition national wealth. Company abuses talent of workers, so workers revolt. Eradicate corporate system, and bring market under control of the people. In glorious homeland, wealth redistributed to people long ago, and people never more happy or slovenly."
Outcome 3: Former CEOs can be seen huddled around trashcan fires. [Institutes national policy of Communism]
Draft 2 Update:
- Condensed options from 6 to 3.
Removed unnecessary wording.
Brought remaining options more in line with original focus of the issue.