[Accepted] (Redraft) You Got Stones

[Abhichandra]

Still open to more suggestions and improvements. Later I will try to improve the writing/clarity of the draft, specifically in option two.

[Fauxia]

Change over ten thousand to over nine thousand.

[Abhichandra]

Change over ten thousand to over nine thousand.

Done.

[Kaschovia]

Green = Good! (Keep)
Red = Not So Good! (Remove)
Purple = My Suggestion
Dark Orange = Not Sure, Maybe Needs Changing

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[title] You Got Stones

[desc] A nation-wide contest was held about two months ago to see who could make the best sculpture find the best sculptors @@NAME@@ had to offer, and. The winner was promised to get ten-million @@CURRENCYPLURAL@@ from the government as a prize. However, as more people lost interest in the sculptures, and didn't win, they left them abandoned in the @@CAPITAL@@ Convention Center, where the contest was held.

[validity] Only valid for capitalist nations, nation has sizable wealth gaps

[option] "We can store display them in museums!" exclaims museum manager @@RANDOMNAME@@, manager of a failing gallery on the outskirts of @@CAPITAL@@. "It doesn't necessarily matter if no one wants to see these sculptures, because as long as we preserve even the worst art, we still keep a part of the culture and history of our nation. Like that sculpture of you, @@LEADER@@. It's pretty awful yet it's proudly displayed in the center of @@NAME@@."

[effect] art that was once rotting in dumpsters is now hung in exquisite galleries
rotting dumpster art is hung in exquisite designer galleries

[option] "Leader, We should "gift" distribute the sculptures en masse to our allies!," shouts suggests , @@RANDOMNAME@@, your Minister of Foreign Affairs, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "They are They'll feel obliged obliged to accept our gifts and hold on to the sculptures in order to maintain diplomatic politeness, and if they don't want the sculptures, ho ho ho!Then they willThey'll be forced to accept because they are our allies and must, I repeat MUST accept these "gifts".... for the sake of our diplomatic relations."

[effect] Brancaland has gifted over nine thousand rancid moose carcasses to @@NAME@@ in order to maintain diplomatic friendship

[option] "We should just bulldoze 'em," bluntly suggests urges bulldozer driver @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@. "This is the simplest solution out there, and it minimizes the garbage in the streets. All I need is your permission, and a lot about 15 acres wide to start the smashing. I estimate the project be done, in as little as a few months".

[effect] con artists now have it easy by selling smashed bits of sculptures as old dinosaur bones

[option]"Or....we can repurpose them ourselves," says your in-law @@RANDOMNAME@@, who has been working on a campaign to eliminate waste. "@@LEADER@@, do you know what kind of items we can make with those sculptures? Paperweights! Weights! Very strong --and heavy-- phone cases! The choices are endless! Well, not exactly endless, but you know what I mean! And best of all, the economy benefits from these new innovations in the end."

[effect] twice-as-heavy stone wrist watches are the latest trend among @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@

I've put the content organization first so that you can make those immediate changes if you wish to. Next, I want to talk about the actual premise of the draft.

I'm on the fence about this, to be honest. Is it really a problem for the government of a nation to be addressing? The government held a competition in which a bunch of people lose and leave their stone sculptures in an arts center. Is it really a national issue?

[Abhichandra]

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I've put the content organization first so that you can make those immediate changes if you wish to. Next, I want to talk about the actual premise of the draft.

I'm on the fence about this, to be honest. Is it really a problem for the government of a nation to be addressing? The government held a competition in which a bunch of people lose and leave their stone sculptures in an arts center. Is it really a national issue?

Thanks for the suggestions! I've updated the draft. Now, I think it's a national issue because the government held the contest, but people started leaving the sculptures abandoned in the @@Capital@@ convention center, and the government doesn't necessarily want the sculptures, so they need to figure out what to do with them.

[Abhichandra]

I'm going to submit this soon (if there are no further comments).

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Send it in, and I'll check it out to pick up the edit where we left off. It certainly looks a lot stronger now.

[Abhichandra]

Send it in, and I'll check it out to pick up the edit where we left off. It certainly looks a lot stronger now.

Alright! The issue has now been submitted

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Cheers. I've still got more thoughts on it, but I'll deal those with you in telegram as the edit begins.

[Abhichandra]

This issue has been accepted as #856 You Got Stones (published by Candlewhisper Archive)

[Ransium]

Congrats!

[Australian rePublic]

Yeay you!

[Palos Heights]

Congratulations!

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Congratulations. Well done for drafting this twice, and for all the work that entailed.

[Fauxia]

Congratulations!

[Abhichandra]

Thanks everyone