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[DRAFT] Aircraft Damage and No Learning

Postby Super Top » Sun May 15, 2022 6:23 pm

Title: Aircraft Damage and No Learning

Description: As you relax in your office, air force officers arrive and give you the news that a training plane has crashed. Kill a cadet and his instructor.

Options:

Option 1: "We shouldn't let novices fly such an advanced machine, for example an airplane. They are not yet mature enough to understand that it is a very dangerous piece of equipment, that any mistake can kill. I suggest that novices have a high experience simulator before flying extremely expensive combat equipment," said @@RANDOMNAME@@, an experienced Air Force pilot.

About 70% of a new pilot's knowledge comes from a computer, not an airplane.

Option 2: "This is nonsense!" shouts the Air Force Captain, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "We must encourage more and more the use of training planes in cadets, only then they will have the real experience of an air combat, and not with computer games!"

New pilots don't know how to configure a fighter plane's electronics.

Option 3: Your workaround minister, @@RANDOMNAME@@ enters your office through an open window. "I think I have the solution, we can create an air force aviation school, in which only the most qualified are approved. In 1 year he has classes in extremely modern simulators, and only in the last 2 years will the cadet have practical classes.. Of course, this is going to be expensive, more money is what you have, right?

The price of the new air force aviation school is equivalent to 3 Ministry of Defense buildings.

this is my first draft for an issue, it probably has beginner problems in the text. Any suggestions or corrections are welcome.
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Postby Kiddian States » Sun May 15, 2022 6:26 pm

Super Top wrote:Title: Aircraft Damage and No Learning

Description: As you relax in your office, air force officers arrive and give you the news that a training plane has crashed. Kill a cadet and his instructor.

Options:

Option 1: "We shouldn't let novices fly such an advanced machine, for example an airplane. They are not yet mature enough to understand that it is a very dangerous piece of equipment, that any mistake can kill. I suggest that novices have a high experience simulator before flying extremely expensive combat equipment," said @@RANDOMNAME@@, an experienced Air Force pilot.

About 70% of a new pilot's knowledge comes from a computer, not an airplane.

Option 2: "This is nonsense!" shouts the Air Force Captain, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "We must encourage more and more the use of training planes in cadets, only then they will have the real experience of an air combat, and not with computer games!"

New pilots don't know how to configure a fighter plane's electronics.

Option 3: Your workaround minister, @@RANDOMNAME@@ enters your office through an open window. "I think I have the solution, we can create an air force aviation school, in which only the most qualified are approved. In 1 year he has classes in extremely modern simulators, and only in the last 2 years will the cadet have practical classes.. Of course, this is going to be expensive, more money is what you have, right?

The price of the new air force aviation school is equivalent to 3 Ministry of Defense buildings.

this is my first draft for an issue, it probably has beginner problems in the text. Any suggestions or corrections are welcome.

While the premise is good, a lot of things are rather weak
The title, some results, the length of the description and options
However, a good first try
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Postby Outer Sparta » Sun May 15, 2022 8:03 pm

Since you are new, I suggest you read this helpful thread before continuing just to grasp the basics: viewtopic.php?f=13&t=424657

The title needs work. You need something creative, catchy, and pertinent to the issue. I also suggest you add more character to your speakers and add some meat to your options. Why did the plane crash? Is it due to faulty maintenance, inexperience of recruits, or something else? You need to make it specific in your description. Keep in mind that there's a similar issue that deals with plane crashes (#652: Mayday! Mayday! viewtopic.php?f=13&t=88&start=25#652), so you can look at that for inspiration, but my issue that I wrote deals with civilian aircraft, so there's no overlap in terms of issue conflicts.

I would also suggest you work on grammar and sentence structure. That will make everything flow smoother.
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