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by Moonfungus » Thu May 20, 2021 9:38 am
by Crowheim » Thu May 20, 2021 10:20 am
by Moonfungus » Thu May 20, 2021 10:57 am
Crowheim wrote:I wouldn’t mention the PfS as a commendable point. As an organization, it’s still in its infancy and thus could go anywhere. It could be dead and disbanded in three months for all we know, and it’s not really commendable at this time.
by Greater Cesnica » Thu May 20, 2021 10:59 am
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by Fauxia » Thu May 20, 2021 2:30 pm
by Moonfungus » Thu May 20, 2021 11:24 pm
Greater Cesnica wrote:"Full support, Ambassador."
Fauxia wrote:Might mention the Defender Olympics just finished - HS played a crucial role.
by Nova Vandalia » Fri May 21, 2021 1:35 pm
by Moonfungus » Fri May 21, 2021 8:08 pm
Nova Vandalia wrote:It's good, HS isn't the worst person to write one on. But It's dry and factual... >.> I mean you're telling me what he did and some of that is pretty unique but like where are the emotive and expresses words. This reads like a resume not a commendation. I'd hire HS, but this is an awards we're giving toss in some nutmeg and paprika and spice it.
"Acclaiming HumanSanity’s skillful authorship of SC#353 “Commend Deadeye Jack” to immortalize the deeds of a dedicated nation which vastly improved numerous regional communities and defended them from incessant hostile invasions,"
is a great. Skillful, and immortalize, and calling Jack Dedicated, that tells me how you feel about the Commend and Jack and the work HS did on it, but this
"Observing HumanSanity’s tenure as the Chief Executive (head of government) of RIA after Shizensky retired from the position; where it streamlined the government to be more effective, introduced unique activities to encourage regional participation, and led RIA's military - the Renegade Islands Alliance Special Forces (RIASF) - in various high-stakes missions with regional allies including the liberation of Lazarus and the refound of Hogwarts in 2015,"
doesn't have the same impact to me.
Sorry I'm jumping around. Here hear me out "Applauding HumanSanity’s inspiring leadership abilities, best exhibited by SC#173 "Commend Renegade Islands Alliance," which passed during its tenure as Chief Executive for RIASF's excellence in defending vulnerable regions from harm,"
Exemplified instead of exhibited. Exhibited is clinical, Exemplified is personal. also I'd drop abilities, that's just me.
I'd add in a lot more powerful and character driven words so that way we don't just get told why HS is deserving but feel it.
by Nova Vandalia » Fri May 21, 2021 9:12 pm
Moonfungus wrote:Nova Vandalia wrote:It's good, HS isn't the worst person to write one on. But It's dry and factual... >.> I mean you're telling me what he did and some of that is pretty unique but like where are the emotive and expresses words. This reads like a resume not a commendation. I'd hire HS, but this is an awards we're giving toss in some nutmeg and paprika and spice it.
"Acclaiming HumanSanity’s skillful authorship of SC#353 “Commend Deadeye Jack” to immortalize the deeds of a dedicated nation which vastly improved numerous regional communities and defended them from incessant hostile invasions,"
is a great. Skillful, and immortalize, and calling Jack Dedicated, that tells me how you feel about the Commend and Jack and the work HS did on it, but this
"Observing HumanSanity’s tenure as the Chief Executive (head of government) of RIA after Shizensky retired from the position; where it streamlined the government to be more effective, introduced unique activities to encourage regional participation, and led RIA's military - the Renegade Islands Alliance Special Forces (RIASF) - in various high-stakes missions with regional allies including the liberation of Lazarus and the refound of Hogwarts in 2015,"
doesn't have the same impact to me.
Sorry I'm jumping around. Here hear me out "Applauding HumanSanity’s inspiring leadership abilities, best exhibited by SC#173 "Commend Renegade Islands Alliance," which passed during its tenure as Chief Executive for RIASF's excellence in defending vulnerable regions from harm,"
Exemplified instead of exhibited. Exhibited is clinical, Exemplified is personal. also I'd drop abilities, that's just me.
I'd add in a lot more powerful and character driven words so that way we don't just get told why HS is deserving but feel it.
So focus on the emotional side for a bit, instead of the factual side, if I'm understanding this correctly?
I can try to do that, thanks!
by Moonfungus » Wed May 26, 2021 8:47 am
by Zukchiva » Wed May 26, 2021 10:55 am
by Bhang Bhang Duc » Wed May 26, 2021 11:15 am
Pierconium wrote:I see Funk as an opportunistic manipulator that utilises the means available to him to reach his goals. In other words, a nation after my own heart.
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by Altmoras » Wed May 26, 2021 12:29 pm
as RIA's Immigration Officer, it recruited new nations into RIA, helpingitsthe region's population grow from 10 to over 300 nations in six months,
by Tinhampton » Wed May 26, 2021 12:30 pm
Altmoras wrote:I would also like to see [nation] tags on the other nations you mention like Shizensky, Grea Kriopia, Free Las Pinas, and Wischland, but those are all minor nitpicks.
by Moonfungus » Wed May 26, 2021 8:04 pm
Jedinsto wrote:Based.
Zukchiva wrote:Looks good to me, happy to see this going to vote soon!
Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Reads well, a lot of good research into the nominee. Will be happy to recommend support when this comes to the vote.
Altmoras wrote:Overall very good resolution that I hope passes.
Altmoras wrote:In this sentence you use your first "it" to refer to HumanSanity the nation and your second one to refer to RIA the region which is a bit awkward.
Altmoras wrote:I would also like to see [nation] tags on the other nations you mention like Shizensky, Grea Kriopia, Free Las Pinas, and Wischland
by Goobergunchia » Wed May 26, 2021 8:13 pm
Observing HumanSanity’s historic tenure as the Chief Executive (head of government) of RIA; where it streamlined the government to be more effective, introduced unique activities to encourage regional participation, and led RIA's military - the Renegade Islands Alliance Special Forces (RIASF) - in various high-stakes missions with regional allies, including the liberation of Lazarus and the refound of Hogwarts in 2015,
by Moonfungus » Wed May 26, 2021 8:30 pm
Goobergunchia wrote:I'd add one comma (in blue) here:Observing HumanSanity’s historic tenure as the Chief Executive (head of government) of RIA; where it streamlined the government to be more effective, introduced unique activities to encourage regional participation, and led RIA's military - the Renegade Islands Alliance Special Forces (RIASF) - in various high-stakes missions with regional allies, including the liberation of Lazarus and the refound of Hogwarts in 2015,
by Moonfungus » Fri May 28, 2021 8:35 pm
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