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[ABANDONED] @@NAME@@-Dàguó war?

Postby Liberatarian States » Sat May 01, 2021 12:56 am

IMPORTANT: This issue is abandoned, mostly because it's probably not gonna get accepted by the moderators. Not because it's horribly written - I personally think the writing was pretty good if I do say so myself - but because there are so many other issues that are more or less the same. I'm working on a different, more unique issue now.

Hi, this is my first time writing an issue. I'm pretty new to NationStates and just reached the population requirement of 250 million a few days ago. I hope this is how you're supposed to do it, if not please point that out. If you would care to give feedback and tell me where there's room for improvement I would greatly appreciate it.

[title] @@NAME@@-Dàguó war?

[desc] @@NAME@@'s relations with the militaristic, warmongering nation of Dàguó were not so good to begin with, but with the recent disappearance of Dàguó leader @@RANDOMNAME_1@@'s daughter while she was supposedly on vacation in @@NAME@@, things have taken a turn for the worse. The @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ Intelligence Agency reports Dàguó's mass mobilization of soldiers, weapons and even mobile ICBMs to the @@NAME@@-Dàguò border. Your military officers, advisors and Dàguó diplomats gather at a meeting to discuss this matter.

[validity] Always valid.

[option]Violent and bloodthirsty @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ 5-star General @@RANDOMNAME_2@@ pounds his muscular fist on the table, which cracks upon his strength. "They want war, so be it! Gather the troops and invade- uh, liberate Dàguó." @@HE_2@@ looks directly at you, fire burning in @@HIS_2@@ eyes. "With your permission, @@LEADER@@, I will lead the charge myself."
[effect]@@NAME@@ is at war with Dàguó

[option]Nuclear physicist and military scientist @@RANDOMNAME_3@@ waddles into your meeting, wearing an originally white, now scorched lab coat and smouldering, half molten safety goggles. "Hey guys, check out my new antimatter bomb. Capable of vaporizing anything within a 30 kilometer radius, this bad boy will put nukes to shame!" @@HE_3@@ pauses, trying to recall what the meeting was about. "Oh yeah! You wanna attack Dàguó, right? Perfect chance to test out my bomb! It is a work in progress and might explode anytime, but this is in the interest of science! And national security."
[effect]@@NAME@@ uses neighbouring nations as testing grounds for experimental weapons of mass destruction

[option]An air vent on the roof of the meeting room clatters to the ground. A figure wearing a futuristic suit of body armor and wielding a deadly-looking automatic rifle rappels down. After swiftly executing a tactical summersault, he scans the room for potential threats. "Operator #1047 of @@NAME@@ Special Operations Command," the figure introduces itself, still pointing its gun at random people in the room. "I come here to deliver a message from Command: We have a way to resolve the conflict. Just give us the thumbs-up, and you'll never hear from Dàguó's leader @@RANDOMNAME_1@@ again." The figure drops a smoke grenade, and when the smoke clears, it is nowhere to be seen.
[effect]nations that don't play nice with @@NAME@@ often find their leaders mysteriously missing

[option]Well-known pacifist @@RANDOMNAME_4@@ walks past your security, which is preoccupied with a swarm of government critics. In @@HIS_4@@ hand is a pistol replica with a crudely bent barrel. "What is this I hear? Invasions? Nukes? Assassinations?" @@HE_4@@ shakes @@HIS_4@@ head in disbelief. "Why the needless violence? Reduce funding for the military and call off the invasion. Naturally, Dàguó will do the same and we can all be friends."
[effect]with a potential war on the horizon, @@NAME@@ has drastically reduced its defense budget
Last edited by Liberatarian States on Sun May 09, 2021 1:38 am, edited 3 times in total.

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Postby Comfed » Sat May 01, 2021 6:19 am

Hi there! :) Overall this is a decent concept and the writing is good. We already have issues about war with the NPC nations. I think this one is the war arc with Brasilistan? Also, I think that Daguo preparing for a full-on military deployment because their leader’s daughter “disappeared” is a bit extreme.

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Postby Liberatarian States » Sat May 01, 2021 5:06 pm

Comfed wrote:Hi there! :) Overall this is a decent concept and the writing is good. We already have issues about war with the NPC nations. I think this one is the war arc with Brasilistan? Also, I think that Daguo preparing for a full-on military deployment because their leader’s daughter “disappeared” is a bit extreme.

I guess, but it doesn't have to be serious, right?

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Postby Outer Sparta » Sat May 01, 2021 6:04 pm

It does overlap somewhat with another issue concerning Daguo and New Daguo.
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Postby Comfed » Sun May 02, 2021 6:08 am

Liberatarian States wrote:
Comfed wrote:Hi there! :) Overall this is a decent concept and the writing is good. We already have issues about war with the NPC nations. I think this one is the war arc with Brasilistan? Also, I think that Daguo preparing for a full-on military deployment because their leader’s daughter “disappeared” is a bit extreme.

I guess, but it doesn't have to be serious, right?

No, but it has to have verisimilitude.

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Postby Liberatarian States » Mon May 03, 2021 1:00 am

Comfed wrote:
Liberatarian States wrote:I guess, but it doesn't have to be serious, right?

No, but it has to have verisimilitude.

Well there's a reason why it's called a psychotic dictatorship, right? Because the dictator is psychotic.

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Postby Australian rePublic » Mon May 03, 2021 4:22 am

I fell as if if we were to have another war issue, it should be a chain of someone declaring war (or nation declaring war), rather than a stand alone issue. We already have enough stand alone issues about the threat of war
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Postby Liberatarian States » Mon May 03, 2021 5:29 am

Australian rePublic wrote:I fell as if if we were to have another war issue, it should be a chain of someone declaring war (or nation declaring war), rather than a stand alone issue. We already have enough stand alone issues about the threat of war

But how do I request the moderators to make this issue an issue chain (like the International Incident series)?

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Postby Australian rePublic » Mon May 03, 2021 5:41 am

Liberatarian States wrote:
Australian rePublic wrote:I fell as if if we were to have another war issue, it should be a chain of someone declaring war (or nation declaring war), rather than a stand alone issue. We already have enough stand alone issues about the threat of war

But how do I request the moderators to make this issue an issue chain (like the International Incident series)?

Write one and see how it pans out. Maybe do it one issue at a time
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Postby Liberatarian States » Tue May 04, 2021 1:17 am

Australian rePublic wrote:
Liberatarian States wrote:But how do I request the moderators to make this issue an issue chain (like the International Incident series)?

Write one and see how it pans out. Maybe do it one issue at a time

OK. Also, why does it seem like the Got Issues forum is so much less active than the GA proposal drafting forum? Since no one else seems to be replying I'll submit it soon, unless someone advises against before I do so.
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Postby Australian rePublic » Tue May 04, 2021 4:30 am

Liberatarian States wrote:
Australian rePublic wrote:Write one and see how it pans out. Maybe do it one issue at a time

OK. Also, why does it seem like the Got Issues forum is so much less active than the GA proposal drafting forum? Since no one else seems to be replying I'll submit it soon, unless someone advises against before I do so.

GI is less active I guess it's because fewer people are interested. Also, considering that most people told you that this is too similar to other issues, I wouldn't be submitting it yet, until you make it adequately distinct
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Postby Liberatarian States » Wed May 05, 2021 12:37 am

Australian rePublic wrote:GI is less active I guess it's because fewer people are interested. Also, considering that most people told you that this is too similar to other issues, I wouldn't be submitting it yet, until you make it adequately distinct

Hmm... I'll work on it... sometime.


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