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Do you commonly step on Legos and hurt your feet?

Yes
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No
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I do it so much that I have scars and scabs on my feet.
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[DRAFT] Toying with Cars?

Postby Awesomeland012345 » Thu Mar 19, 2020 1:11 pm

This is my first time actually trying to write an issue, and I'm not actually that good at writing, so... please help me out. The name "Blockies" probably could be changed, so maybe you guys could come up with a better name? Anyway, I won't be surprised if it isn't added as an issue. But still, it might. Hope there are some really good writers out there!
DRAFT 3

VALIDITY:
Nation doesn't outlaw toys, nation doesn't outlaw cars

TITLE:
Toying with Cars?

DESCRIPTION:
Your Minister of Drastic Changes was getting the mail when he tripped on his sons' toys and fell into the street. An incoming driver consequently ran him over. Although the wound was not fatal, the Minister is recovering in the hospital from a major injury. You're visiting him to check up on his condition.

OPTION:
"GAH! Those darn toys!" Screams @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@, your minister as soon as you walk in. "You see what they did to me? Five broken bones, a broken arm, a torn tendon, my legs - wait a second, where are my legs??" The doctor responds, "Uh... you don't have any legs anymore." "@@LEADER@@! You see how dangerous toys can be! Ban toys, and this will never happen again!" Muttering under his breath he adds, "And I can finally get revenge on the dumb things! Haha!"

EFFECT:
Teachers remind children that playing with toys can get them arrested.

OPTION:
"What? No! Toys are my life!" exclaims his son @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@. "We should keep them!" He goes on, rambling in little kid talk. "If me and my friends didn't have toys, then we would become bored zombies that just watch TV! Do you want that? One accident doesn't mean anything! Toys make us more creative! Keep toys! If daddy's not happy, just give him lots of money to help him!"

EFFECT:
Poor people are faking injuries for government compensation.

OPTION:
"Keep toys? Certainly! Keep cars... not so much." says activist @@RANDOMNAME@@. "If there weren't cars, this wouldn't have happened either! Plus cars are nasty environment polluters. Ban cars and automobiles, and there won't ever be any more car crashes!"

EFFECT:
The sounds of @@CAPITAL@@ City are eerily quiet.

OPTION:
"No no no..." exclaims your head of science @@RANDOMNAMEMALE@@. "What we need are FLYING CARS! If all cars hovered 6 feet above the ground, there would never be any wheel to run someone over! And unless you're tall, then they'll never hit you! But if you are tall... well then let's say look both ways before crossing the street."

EFFECT:
Tall people are accusing flying car companies of discrimination against "their race".

VALIDITY:
Nation doesn't outlaw toys, nation has capitalism policy.

TITLE:
Blockies to be Outlawed?


DESCRIPTION:
Your Minister of Drastic Changes, Bob, is sick, and as a result, is working from home. He is in an important video call with you. "Hello @@LEADER@@. I just figured out a very important-YAAGHHH! OW! Dumb Blockies! Son! Erik! Why did my wife even get those darned things?! I should've gotten rid of them. Get over here and pick them up! Kids these days... all they do play with their toys. They don't do anything else. Eventually, this is gonna hurt our economy! Instead of working, they just play and do nothing! We should ban toys!"

OPTION:
"What? No! Blockies are my favorite toy!" exclaims Erik. "We should keep them!" He goes on, rambling in little kid talk. "In fact, they're so good that you should force the factories to give them away! Maybe if you become a dictator and do soci... socio... socialism! Then I could finally finish my epic battle scene!" Becoming very worked up, he suddenly stumbles onto one of his own Blockies. "OWW!!!"

EFFECT:
A life-sized neighborhood has been built by Blockies.

OPTION:
Bob mutters under his breath. "GRRG... those darn Blockies... toys never did a kid any good. And you be quiet Erik!" Unfortunately for him, his face is so close to his tablet screen that you can hear his every word. Unfortunately for you, you can see the food stuck in his teeth. "Wait. Did you hear that? Well whatever! All toys do is make kids distracted and not do their homework! And you heard me say before that it could hurt the economy! In fact, it could hurt everyone. Imagine the future: Everyone now glued to their phones instead of their toys, playing crafty mine or whatever instead of being productive!We should ban toys, along with the dumb Blockies!"

EFFECT:
Your almost-priceless action figure that you've been saving has been thrown away.
VALIDITY:
Nation doesn't outlaw toys

TITLE:
Blockies to be Outlawed?

DESCRIPTION:
Your Minister of Drastic Changes, Bob, is sick, and as a result, is working from home. He is in an important video call with you. "Hello @@LEADER@@. I just figured out a very important-YAAGHHH! OW! Dumb Blockies! Son! Erik! Get over here and pick them up! Kids these days... all they do play with their toys. They don't do anything else. We should ban toys!"

OPTION:
"What? No! Blockies are my favorite toy!" exclaims Erik. "We should keep them!" He goes on, rambling in little kid talk. "In fact, they're so good that you should force the factories to give them away! Maybe if you become a dictator and do soci... socio... socialism! Then I could finally finish my epic battle scene!" Becoming very worked up, he suddenly stumbles onto one of his own Blockies. "OWW!!!"

EFFECT:
A life-sized neighborhood has been built by Blockies.

OPTION:
Bob mutters under his breath. "GRRG... those darn Blockies... toys never did a kid any good. And you be quiet Erik!" Unfortunately for him, his face is so close to his tablet screen that you can hear his every word. Unfortunately for you, you can see the food stuck in his teeth. "Wait. Did you hear that? Well whatever! All toys do is make kids distracted and not do their homework! We should ban toys, along with the dumb Blockies!"

EFFECT:
Your almost-priceless action figure that you've been saving has been thrown away.
VALIDITY:
Nation doesn't outlaw toys

TITLE:
Blockies to be Outlawed?

DESCRIPTION:
Your Minister of Drastic Changes, Bob, is sick, and as a result, is working from home. He is in an important video call with you. "Hello @@LEADER@@. I just figured out a very important-YAAGHHH! OW! Dumb Blockies! Son! Erik! Get over here and pick them up!

OPTION:
Bob mutters under his breath. "GRRG... those darn Blockies... toys never did a kid any good." Unfortunately for him, his face is so close to his tablet screen that you can hear his every word. Unfortunately for you, you can see the food stuck in his teeth. "Wait. Did you hear that? Well whatever! All toys do is make kids distracted and not do their homework! We should ban toys, along with the dumb Blockies!"

EFFECT:
Your almost-priceless action figure that you've been saving has been thrown away.

OPTION:
"What? No! Blockies are my favorite toy!" exclaims Erik. "We should keep them!" He goes on, rambling in little kid talk. "In fact, they're so good that you should force the factories to give them away! Then I could finally finish my epic battle scene!" Becoming very worked up, he suddenly stumbles onto one of his own Blockies. "OWW!!!"

EFFECT:
A life-sized neighborhood has been built by Blockies.

OPTION:
"You guys are very... extreme." says your Minister of Common Sense, @@RANDOMNAME@@. "All you need to do is tell your kids to put up there toys! Geez! It's not that hard! Look... Erik, put up your toys." @@HE@@ says sternly. "Sniff... Ok... I will." Erik says over the camera. "But my foot hurts." Your Minister gives him a sinister glare. "Hmph... ok... I will."

EFFECT:
The government has a public campaign about the importance of putting up your toys.
Last edited by Awesomeland012345 on Mon Mar 23, 2020 4:24 pm, edited 9 times in total.

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Postby Awesomeland012345 » Thu Mar 19, 2020 1:22 pm

Telegram me if you post something and I don't respond within a day. If you look at the number of posts I have, it's pretty small compared to everyone else. Meaning I don't really know if you've responded to my thread.
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Postby Baggieland » Sat Mar 21, 2020 12:57 am

Awesomeland012345 wrote:DESCRIPTION:
Your Minister of Drastic Changes, Bob, is sick, and as a result, is working from home. He is in an important video call with you. "Hello @@LEADER@@. I just figured out a very important-YAAGHHH! OW! Dumb Blockies! Son! Erik! Get over here and pick them up!

The description should clearly state a dilemma that requires LEADER's action / legislation. What is the dilemma here? I understand that people are stubbing their toes on their kids Lego (that happened a lot to me when my son was into Lego), but that hardly requires national action. A stubbed toe won't prevent people from going to work.

The options should present a clear action for LEADER to perform:

Awesomeland012345 wrote:We should ban toys

This is good, assuming you can sort out the description.

Awesomeland012345 wrote:you should force the factories to give them away!

This is never going to happen.

Awesomeland012345 wrote:All you need to do is tell your kids to put up there toys!

A matter for parents, not government.
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Postby Awesomeland012345 » Sat Mar 21, 2020 5:59 pm

Baggieland wrote:
Awesomeland012345 wrote:DESCRIPTION:
Your Minister of Drastic Changes, Bob, is sick, and as a result, is working from home. He is in an important video call with you. "Hello @@LEADER@@. I just figured out a very important-YAAGHHH! OW! Dumb Blockies! Son! Erik! Get over here and pick them up!

The description should clearly state a dilemma that requires LEADER's action / legislation. What is the dilemma here? I understand that people are stubbing their toes on their kids Lego (that happened a lot to me when my son was into Lego), but that hardly requires national action. A stubbed toe won't prevent people from going to work.

I'll have the minister of drastic changes say something like, "GGRRGG... kids don't even do anything these days! All they do is play, play, and play with their toys. We should get rid of them."

The options should present a clear action for LEADER to perform:

Awesomeland012345 wrote:We should ban toys

This is good, assuming you can sort out the description.

I'll switch this and the second option around, so then I won't repeat myself

Awesomeland012345 wrote:you should force the factories to give them away!

This is never going to happen.
I'll state something like, "If you become a dictator and do socialism, then you can force factories to give them away."

Awesomeland012345 wrote:All you need to do is tell your kids to put up there toys!

A matter for parents, not government.

I'll delete this part
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Postby Baggieland » Sat Mar 21, 2020 8:16 pm

Awesomeland012345 wrote:I'll have the minister of drastic changes say something like, "GGRRGG... kids don't even do anything these days! All they do is play, play, and play with their toys. We should get rid of them."

Again, a matter for parents, not for government. Now my son is no longer into Lego, he now loves Roblux. I don't need government legislation to tell my son: "GET OFF THAT BLOODY GADGET!".
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Postby Australian rePublic » Sun Mar 22, 2020 2:43 pm

Option 1- If he's so anti-toys, why did he buy the bloody thing in the first place? Did his wife force him to?
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Postby Awesomeland012345 » Sun Mar 22, 2020 6:12 pm

Baggieland wrote:
Awesomeland012345 wrote:I'll have the minister of drastic changes say something like, "GGRRGG... kids don't even do anything these days! All they do is play, play, and play with their toys. We should get rid of them."

Again, a matter for parents, not for government. Now my son is no longer into Lego, he now loves Roblux. I don't need government legislation to tell my son: "GET OFF THAT BLOODY GADGET!".

I fixed this by saying this would effect the economy, which is (hopefully) something the government would care about.



Australian rePublic wrote:Option 1- If he's so anti-toys, why did he buy the bloody thing in the first place? Did his wife force him to?
Good catch! And also good idea. I changed it from his wife forcing him to buy it to her just buying it.
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Postby Baggieland » Sun Mar 22, 2020 8:05 pm

I think your basic idea of "should toys be banned?" is fine, in previous NS issues, just about everything else can be banned, so why not toys as well?

However, at the moment you're completely lacking a decent NS style issue.

Option 1: ban toys (this is fine).
Option 2: even socialist nations sell what they manufacture, no one gives stuff away for free. It would make more sense for the speaker to ask LEADER to subsidise the toy manufacturing industry, so as to make the products cheaper for the consumer.

Now we need to take a look at the description. Why is the first speaker asking for toys to be banned?

Kids playing all day is, as I've said before, a matter for parents not government. Also play is a very important part of growing up.

You need to completely change your description.

The only thing I can think of at the moment is a scenario like this:
A kid was playing outside with his toys, so preoccupied with his play, he ran out into the street and got killed by a passing car.

Then option 1's speaker could be the driver of the car:
"The kid appeared out of nowhere, I had no time to react. Ban toys and this won't happen again".

Then speaker 2 has to counter-balance this argument before asking to subsidise toys.

Then we need a crazy option 3. This speaker could suggest all cars be toy cars (not the hand-held ones, the ones kids can fit into and drive themselves).

These are just my suggestions, you might come up with a better scenario yourself, or somrone else might have a better suggestion.

Anyhow, the opening description definitely needs to be changed.
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Postby Awesomeland012345 » Mon Mar 23, 2020 4:24 pm

Ok, I think I fixed all of the problems. At least I hope.
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Postby Awesomeland012345 » Thu Mar 26, 2020 9:42 am

Should I submit this issue now?
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Postby Baggieland » Thu Mar 26, 2020 8:05 pm

Awesomeland012345 wrote:Should I submit this issue now?

Definitely not yet.

Your new description of someone having one accident is better, but having read it, I feel there should be a spate of accidents that have occured due to toys being left around. By having multiple hospital admissions would make it more of a concern to the nation. Maybe the 1st speaker could be a doctor saying "look how many patients are here".

You also need to have a rethink about the last two options, this issue has always been about toys, not cars.
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