by Indusse » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:14 am
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by Kostrorleauny » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:20 am
by Indusse » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:29 am
Kostrorleauny wrote:Aye there!
So this is a commendation proposal yes? Right, so... I would recommend adding a bit more substance in here. So far, I get the gist - Vilita seems to be an elder nation that’s taken a particular interest in NationStates sports. What you’re going to want to do in order to draft a successful commendation is then proceed to relate it back to how Vilita’s actions are admirable/commendable/etc.
Currently, I’m not really seeing this flow... unfortunately. If you’d like, I’d be happy to help should you wish to telegram me and we can work on certain clauses together? What you’ll be wanting to do here is to paint a clear, comprehensive, picture of why Vilita should be recognized by the World Assembly with commendation distinction for their actions. The clauses herein in your draft need to mirror that, I’d think.
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by Kostrorleauny » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:30 am
Indusse wrote:Kostrorleauny wrote:Aye there!
So this is a commendation proposal yes? Right, so... I would recommend adding a bit more substance in here. So far, I get the gist - Vilita seems to be an elder nation that’s taken a particular interest in NationStates sports. What you’re going to want to do in order to draft a successful commendation is then proceed to relate it back to how Vilita’s actions are admirable/commendable/etc.
Currently, I’m not really seeing this flow... unfortunately. If you’d like, I’d be happy to help should you wish to telegram me and we can work on certain clauses together? What you’ll be wanting to do here is to paint a clear, comprehensive, picture of why Vilita should be recognized by the World Assembly with commendation distinction for their actions. The clauses herein in your draft need to mirror that, I’d think.
so can u help me.
by USS Monitor » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:31 am
by Indusse » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:34 am
USS Monitor wrote:Vilita is a pretty cool guy. He doesn't afraid of anything. But you should clean up your grammar and clear up the stuff like "another account" that refer to the game rather than being IC.
Probably would be best to redo this as "Commend Vilita and Turori" so that it is easier to include different parts of his creations without talking about a player controlling multiple accounts. If it's "Commend Vilita" then it becomes awkward to explain why you're talking about stuff Turori did.
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by Kostrorleauny » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:35 am
USS Monitor wrote:Vilita is a pretty cool guy. He doesn't afraid of anything. But you should clean up your grammar and clear up the stuff like "another account" that refer to the game rather than being IC.
Probably would be best to redo this as "Commend Vilita and Turori" so that it is easier to include different parts of his creations without talking about a player controlling multiple accounts. If it's "Commend Vilita" then it becomes awkward to explain why you're talking about stuff Turori did.
by USS Monitor » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:35 am
Indusse wrote:USS Monitor wrote:Vilita is a pretty cool guy. He doesn't afraid of anything. But you should clean up your grammar and clear up the stuff like "another account" that refer to the game rather than being IC.
Probably would be best to redo this as "Commend Vilita and Turori" so that it is easier to include different parts of his creations without talking about a player controlling multiple accounts. If it's "Commend Vilita" then it becomes awkward to explain why you're talking about stuff Turori did.
I Will remove turori
by USS Monitor » Wed Jan 02, 2019 12:41 am
Indusse wrote:you are a moderator so can u look @ comlend kuriko draft too.
by Vangaziland » Wed Jan 02, 2019 1:02 am
by Indusse » Wed Jan 02, 2019 2:03 am
Vangaziland wrote:It needs a few more details, but it's a nice idea. You also accidentally called AO the best sports region.
But details such as how long AO has been active, for example.
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by Tinhampton » Wed Jan 02, 2019 7:16 am
by Falcania » Wed Jan 02, 2019 10:21 am
Vangaziland wrote:It needs a few more details, but it's a nice idea. You also accidentally called AO the best sports region.
But details such as how long AO has been active, for example.
by Indusse » Wed Jan 02, 2019 5:58 pm
Tinhampton wrote:Rule 2a. Compare with SC#40 "Commend Starblaydia".
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by Lamoni » Wed Jan 02, 2019 7:50 pm
Licana on the M-21A2 MBT: "Well, it is one of the most badass tanks on NS."
Vortiaganica: Lamoni I understand fully, of course. The two (Lamoni & Lyras) are more inseparable than the Clinton family and politics.
Triplebaconation: Lamoni commands a quiet respect that carries its own authority. He is the Mandela of NS.
by Falcania » Sat Jan 05, 2019 12:08 pm
by Tinhampton » Mon Jan 07, 2019 1:55 pm
Kakastania wrote:Vilita should be capitalized. Am I right?
by Vangaziland » Tue Jan 08, 2019 5:09 pm
by Vangaziland » Tue Jan 08, 2019 7:13 pm
Indusse wrote:Anyone can help me
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