Star Wars: A Final Hope (OOC/Signups)[/OPEN]

[Brusia]

Corrected map: https://imgur.com/a/KTxcHo6

As with the last map, the area in Gold is Alliance Space, Red is Coalition Space, Green is Hutt Space, Black is Mandalorian Space, and Blue is Chiss Ascendancy Space. The worlds between Alliance and Coalition Space are part of a Demilitarized Zone established by the Carida Concordant and are officially neutral; all other worlds not within the listed territories are neutral as well.

[Gerdon Laughis]

I do enjoy that Taris is officially in neutral space. Makes the decision to try and hide there a little more plausible. As for whoever stole a holocron from a sith heading into the unknown regions... Aryca is gonna want to have some words with them.

Sesroe has that Sith holocron from the Droid factory, was gonna probably try to open it with Aryca at some point

[Nuxipal]

I do enjoy that Taris is officially in neutral space. Makes the decision to try and hide there a little more plausible. As for whoever stole a holocron from a sith heading into the unknown regions... Aryca is gonna want to have some words with them.

Sesroe has that Sith holocron from the Droid factory, was gonna probably try to open it with Aryca at some point

That'd be interesting. Though, I was mostly concerned about the "Sith" who apparently had the holocron lifted off of him. If the timeline matches up right, and I haven't checked it, that could be the Sorcerer that Aryca had been learning from.

[Tropicville]

APPLICATION
Name: Acy Puko
Age: 26
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Allegiance to: himself
Occupation: Smuggler/gambler
Appearance:
(Image)

Personality: Cocky, persuasive, and deceiving. Often more arrogant than his money can support which leads to frequent fleeing. Gambling addiction keeps him swaying between the lines of “in debt” and “making profit” though he seems to be in the margins of both at any given time. Has an eye and an interest for vintage goods (ships, droids, etc.)

Force Sensitive: N

Skills/Powers: Above average flying skills developed and sharpened by fleeing from those he owes money to and stealing from others. Sharpshooter with a blaster pistol. Quick improviser.

Weaponry: Model 434
(Image)
Acquired by taking it off of the unconscious body of the first hitman ever sent after him for unpaid gambling debt at the age of 16

Companion: Prowler 1000
(Image)
Nicknamed “P1,” a prowler droid stolen by an empirical defector and passed down until won by Puko in a game of sabaac. P1 serves as Puko’s personal companion and has had its exploration navigation upgraded to help navigate Puko’s ship, Moon Trick, through the galaxy. P1 docks on Puko’s lightweight mechanical backpack station when not in use.

Ship: VCX 350 “Moon Trick”
(Image)
Stolen a few years back and customized to his liking, Puko’s VCX 350 light freighter, nicknamed Moon Trick, is a 33-meter long freighter converted to conceal and transport mass amounts of smuggled goods. The standard 8 sleeping quarters have been converted to 5 sleeping quarters and a suite for Puko.

Biography: Abandoned in Canto Bight on the planet of Cantonica at a young age, Puko had to learn the arts of thievery and self-sufficiency young. Once he mastered pickpocketing, Puko discovered that commitment to deception and trickery could help him become successful, especially in the coastal city of Canto Bight where many wealthy tourists frequently visit.

Puko survived solely by pickpocketing the wealthy until the age of 12 when he decided to concede to his temptation and bet his week’s credits on the fathier races at the Canto Bight racetrack. After multiplying his worth from one day’s gambling, Puko began diving further and further into the gambling industry until he became known as one of the best Sabacc players on Cantonica.

At the age of 16, Acy Puko lost the highest-stakes game of sabacc he had ever played to a mob boss in Canto Casino. Puko claims he would’ve paid if it had been a legitimate game, but knowing that the mob boss had cheated him in the game, Puko grabbed his credits and ran. Puko then stole an escape pod amidst blaster fire and fled to one of Cantonica’s moons. Seeing that he would be followed by a hitman out to collect the money, Puko got out of the escape pod, closed it back up, and wired it to shock anyone that tried to touch it. When the hired hitman saw the escape pod and landed in a VCX 350, Puko waited and watched as the hitman approached the escape pod and was fried trying to open it. Puko then stole the hired man’s Model 434 blaster pistol off his body and fled in his VCX 350, naming it “Moon Trick” after the terms for his acquiring it.

For the past 10 years, Puko has captained Moon Trick with a crew of 4 ragtag smugglers and runaways transporting illegal goods from Tatooine and Cantonica through the galaxy. After one run in Cantonica 5 years ago, Puko went back to Canto Casino for a round of sabacc when a local collector sat down at his table. Puko noticed the collector’s Prowler P1000 droid and, being attracted by vintage goods, bet the collector his droid against Puko’s stack of credits. Puko laid down an Idiot’s Array, the unbeatable hand of sabacc, and won the P1000 exploration droid, which he had upgraded with galactic navigation to copilot his ship, made a backpack stationing rack for the droid to stay with him, and calls it “P1.”

APPLICATION 2
Name: Kip Waloo
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Allegiance to: force, Acy Puko
Occupation: Crewmember
Details: blind but uses force sight to detect surroundings
Appearance:


Personality: Quiet, spiritual. Uses force sight to detect surroundings, so keeps his blindness a secret (except to Acy Puko). Tries to avoid combat but is highly protective when needs to be.

Force Sensitive: Yes

Skills/Powers: Force sight. Ambidextrous. Skilled with throwing boomerangs for combat and deflecting blaster fire.

Weaponry:

Two sharpened hunting boomerangs he learned to use and hunt with while on Auraterra that he conceals under his poncho

Biography: Born blind on Auraterra, a planet overly saturated with force sensitivity due to the Jedi and Sith presence there decades ago, Waloo was raised amongst a deeply spiritual family that believed the force chooses what is best and encourages you to side with it. Waloo was taught that when you trust the force it gives to you in return. Reading and learning about the Jedi’s and Sith’s influence from centuries of their presence on his planet and the hostility they both held for each-other, led him to develop a belief in Potentium, the belief that all of the force is innately good and the same. Waloo’s belief in Potentium was more towards believing that the Dark side is bad, but it became bad by a corrupted humanity and not by a dark side of the Force itself.

Waloo’s parents were both subtly force sensitive and were open about being so only to him. They preserved a few ancient texts from generations of their families and kept them locked away. They taught him from a young age that the world isn’t ready for force sensitive people again just yet, and when they discovered that their son was force sensitive as well, they taught him assertively that he would need to keep it a secret from everyone he met.

Kip Waloo’s father came up with the idea that his blindness could be somewhat mended if his son were to learn how to utilize force sight. His father dug up an ancient text from his family’s hidden library of Jedi and sith texts and gave it to Kip who was, at the time, 7 years old.

Kip was homeschooled in galactic and historical studies by his parents his entire youth life, and after 10 years had developed a near perfect force sight through constant practice during his every waking hour. At 17 years old, his home was broken into by two Coalition clones searching for his parents and their library. Kip was instructed by his mother to hide, and he did so. He heard blaster fire and couldn’t hide anymore and grabbed his father’s hidden blaster pistol and ran into the doorway of the library. Kip took two shots and realized he had hit both Coalition clones in the helmets and killed them both. He ran to where he sensed his parents were and realized they had both been killed. Kip, sobbing, realized he had used his force sight to shoot the two Coalition clones and figured he needed to leave as soon as possible. He grabbed the texts on Force Sight he had been studying for 10 years and fled with them.

Halfway around Auraterra and out of money, Kip Waloo took a job as a reenee hunter, still concealing his blindness and using the Force to guide is sight. His mentor in the craft taught him to hunt with the sharpened metal boomerangs often used for hunting on Auraterra. Kip began saving money from this job hoping to one day be able to afford to move to a planet far away where he can be alone with the Force.

6 years later, Waloo had saved up what he thought to be enough money to pay for a way out of Auraterra. He just knew he needed a ride, since he had never driven a ship before in his life. Waloo was ending his workday selling his catch of reenee at a local traders’ market one day when he met Acy Puko, who was selling goods he said were the purest anyone in the Outer Rim could have ever seen. Mesmerized by the thought of Puko’s journeys to a far off planet, Waloo took a job as a crew member on Puko’s Moon Trick.

Waloo worked 4 years with Puko before Puko became suspicious of something odd happening. While Waloo was out meditating one day, Puko used P1 to “slice” the door open to Waloo’s quarters on the Moon Trick. Puko round the ancient texts of force sight and realized that either Waloo had found them and kept it a secret or he was blind and force sensitive and using force sight to see. Puko put the texts back and waited for Waloo to return to the ship once again. After a few hours, Puko decided he would be testy with Waloo and threw a rock at him from behind. Waloo sensed the rock coming towards him and swung around quickly the cut the rock in half with one of his boomerang blades. Waloo, angered, confessed to Puko, who seemed amused, that he had a force sensitivity that allowed him to develop force sight to overcome his blindness by substituting visual sensory for the force. Waloo insisted that Puko never tell a word of it to anyone, to which Puko replied, “the only secret I won’t charge you for.”

For the last 3 years Waloo has been open to Puko about his constant studying, meditation, and using of the force and is Acy Puko’s right-hand-man in his crew. Waloo trains combat tactics every day as he insists that one day the Coalition will come for him as they did his parents and he will stand his ground.

[New Minitopia]

The APP
Name:Xio

Age: 130, adolescent in his races years

Gender: Male

Allegiance paid to: Jedi and smugglers

Rank: Ex-padawan, Head mechanic on the Excalibur

Appearance:Average Human looks, with many ornate tattoos from his own family. He does have a deformed ear and eye though, which is why he wears a jacket and outfit similar to that of Solo, but with a hood and face mask for hiding his unusual features, gloves with the symbol of his home( a star ) on the top, and his sword and blaster in their scabbard next to his side, and the scabbard is ornately decorated with runic carvings and symbols, burnt into the wood by his ancestors

Personality: gentle, but ferocious when loved ones are in danger, as after seeing the decimation of his family, he has always hid what he truly is, and when loved ones are hurt, his muscles swell up and his eyes turn red, called Bloodlust, however, he is kind toward orphans as he sees himself in them and often takes jobs for free if it includes helping refugees or those less fortunate

Force Sensitive: Y

Skills/Powers: Excellent mechanic, Lighsaber style two, Handy with a blaster, Infra and Ultra Vision, Telepath, Standard jedi skills. Good pilot from years of running, excellent with a sword

Weaponry: Tazi vibro sword that he grabbed of a mercenary sent to murder him and he prefers using this weapon to , blue standard length lightsaber, DL-18 blaster

Ship: A modified Vigil-class corvette

Biography: Xio was born in the same year the Empire ended on his home world of the Planet Mandalore, which had been the base for Darth Revan during the Sith Jedi war all those years ago. He was a child in a large family of 12, who believed that the colonisers made good on their promise to help them, even though the family was poor, Xio was a smart child for his race, solving advanced questions at kindergarten age, however he suffered in the more manual labours of childhood, as his limbs were weaker than many others, however this was only due to the deep well of force energy hidden deep within his being.

At the age of 30 Xio experienced a growth spurt, and quickly became the stranger again for being to tall. However, by this time Xio's family had slowly become more open to Xio of their own basic force powers (telepathy, mind reading). This terrified him, knowing that something or someone could control him.However, Alliance forces, mistaking him for a weapon, stormed his house and killed his family. This is when his force power was first shown. With a scream, a massive wave of Force energy blasts the soldiers into the walls, and kills them in rage. it was here he grabbed a Tazi Vibro sword and a DL-18 blaster. It turns out they were mercenaries hired by his fathers employer, and vows from that moment forth to never work for a large business ever again. He grabbed clothes, a few 100 credits from his families emergency store, and some blue milk and some bread, along with books studying his planets history and many other planets including Coruscant.

He finds himself, after using and sowing away on board ships, he somehow ends up on Coruscant. Their he is extremely confused about peoples anger at his face, and buys his outfit and cloak after being beaten up after being called a creeping cripple. He grabs a short vibro knife to use if he is attacked again. Suddenly, a man appears behind him, wearing long brown and tan robes. Xio spins around to meet him, but he recognises his robes from books of Jedi and Soth. the man, a Tradoshan by the name of Gui Tripu, was a Jedi before the Purge, and wishes to train another Jedi before he dies.

After many months of tutelage, Xio almost has full control over his powers, and is reaching the power of that of a well-trained padawan, as they have had to train in secret due to Jedi predjudice.
Suddenly, a squad of Alliance troops turn up and knocks down the door to the apartment, killing Gui, and forcing Xio to jump out of a window to escape, he lands on top of a AT-ST cockpit, now a sign for a club, and runs of on board a abandoned XS stock freighter, and hits the hyper drive, smashing through the blockade and coming out over Tatooine, and sets up shop their, keeping his power his secret, and becoming a smuggler, gathering fellow runaways and refugees into a crew, which he uses almost solely for trading and smuggling, with the pay being low but liberty and freedom being high, many on the crew stay out of happiness of the freedom Xio gives them.

Notes: has a crush on Twi'leks, Humans and Night Sisters
Am i accepted?

[Ormata]

That is one slim bio.

Also kindly delete your IC post and do not post there until otherwise accepted

[New Minitopia]

That is one slim bio.

Also kindly delete your IC post and do not post there until otherwise accepted

Sorry, had to do it quickly and how do you delete posts

[Ormata]

That is one slim bio.

Also kindly delete your IC post and do not post there until otherwise accepted

Sorry, had to do it quickly and how do you delete posts

Well, since someone posted after you...you don't. Best that can be done is to essentially ignore your posts. Dang it. Why, precisely, did it have to be done quickly?

[Jedi Council]

Sorry, had to do it quickly and how do you delete posts

Well, since someone posted after you...you don't. Best that can be done is to essentially ignore your posts. Dang it. Why, precisely, did it have to be done quickly?

I have appealed to the Mods to get them deleted. In the mean time...

The APP
Name:Xio
Age: 130, adolescent in his races years
Gender: Male
Allegiance paid to: Jedi and smugglers
Rank: Ex-padawan, Head mechanic on the Excalibur
Appearance (Picture preferred, if not, detailed description accepted): Black hard scales, a very reptilian body and internal system, Blue eyes, with reptilian pupils, a tail not unlike that of a dragon, Arms reach waist, 3 metres tall, thin, and sharp, reptilian teeth, claws on hands and feet.
Personality: gentle, but ferocious when loved ones are in danger
Force Sensitive: Y
Skills/Powers: Excellent mechanic, Lighsaber style two, Handy with a blaster, Infra and Ultra Vision, Telepath, Standard jedi skills. Good pilot from years of running, excellent with a sword
Weaponry: Tazi vibro sword, blue standard length lightsaber, DL-18 blaster
Ship: XS stock light freighter, with added blaster cannons and smuggling capacity, changed so much unrecognisable
Biography: From a planet in the Unknown regions called Suryak, touched a crystal as a child ( aged 20 ) and appeared in the jedi temple. Was taken under the wing of a jedi master, a was about to complete his tutelage under his master until the empire chased him into Datooine, where he met with fellow ex-Jedi and set up a smuggling crew, and has been piloting and being hired for missions on the Excalibur for 50 years
Notes: has a crush on Twi'leks
Am i accepted?

As much as I absolutely love the note at the end I am going to have to DENY this application.

If you go and refer to the other apps that have been accepted for this RP, most are supremely detailed and well crafter, with a rich backstory and detailed lists of their attributes.
In order for you to reach the bar of acceptance, you can edit the app to the standard seen among the already accepted players. Expand the bio, explain the character and bring it to life, as most people here have done.

[Jedi Council]

APPLICATION
Name: Acy Puko
Age: 26
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Allegiance to: himself
Occupation: Smuggler/gambler
Appearance:
(Image)

Personality: Cocky, persuasive, and deceiving. Often more arrogant than his money can support which leads to frequent fleeing. Gambling addiction keeps him swaying between the lines of “in debt” and “making profit” though he seems to be in the margins of both at any given time. Has an eye and an interest for vintage goods (ships, droids, etc.)

Force Sensitive: N

Skills/Powers: Above average flying skills developed and sharpened by fleeing from those he owes money to and stealing from others. Sharpshooter with a blaster pistol. Quick improviser.

Weaponry: Model 434
(Image)
Acquired by taking it off of the unconscious body of the first hitman ever sent after him for unpaid gambling debt at the age of 16

Companion: Prowler 1000
(Image)
Nicknamed “P1,” a prowler droid stolen by an empirical defector and passed down until won by Puko in a game of sabaac. P1 serves as Puko’s personal companion and has had its exploration navigation upgraded to help navigate Puko’s ship, Moon Trick, through the galaxy. P1 docks on Puko’s lightweight mechanical backpack station when not in use.

Ship: VCX 350 “Moon Trick”
(Image)
Stolen a few years back and customized to his liking, Puko’s VCX 350 light freighter, nicknamed Moon Trick, is a 33-meter long freighter converted to conceal and transport mass amounts of smuggled goods. The standard 8 sleeping quarters have been converted to 5 sleeping quarters and a suite for Puko.

Biography: Abandoned in Canto Bight on the planet of Cantonica at a young age, Puko had to learn the arts of thievery and self-sufficiency young. Once he mastered pickpocketing, Puko discovered that commitment to deception and trickery could help him become successful, especially in the coastal city of Canto Bight where many wealthy tourists frequently visit.

Puko survived solely by pickpocketing the wealthy until the age of 12 when he decided to concede to his temptation and bet his week’s credits on the fathier races at the Canto Bight racetrack. After multiplying his worth from one day’s gambling, Puko began diving further and further into the gambling industry until he became known as one of the best Sabacc players on Cantonica.

At the age of 16, Acy Puko lost the highest-stakes game of sabacc he had ever played to a mob boss in Canto Casino. Puko claims he would’ve paid if it had been a legitimate game, but knowing that the mob boss had cheated him in the game, Puko grabbed his credits and ran. Puko then stole an escape pod amidst blaster fire and fled to one of Cantonica’s moons. Seeing that he would be followed by a hitman out to collect the money, Puko got out of the escape pod, closed it back up, and wired it to shock anyone that tried to touch it. When the hired hitman saw the escape pod and landed in a VCX 350, Puko waited and watched as the hitman approached the escape pod and was fried trying to open it. Puko then stole the hired man’s Model 434 blaster pistol off his body and fled in his VCX 350, naming it “Moon Trick” after the terms for his acquiring it.

For the past 10 years, Puko has captained Moon Trick with a crew of 4 ragtag smugglers and runaways transporting illegal goods from Tatooine and Cantonica through the galaxy. After one run in Cantonica 5 years ago, Puko went back to Canto Casino for a round of sabacc when a local collector sat down at his table. Puko noticed the collector’s Prowler P1000 droid and, being attracted by vintage goods, bet the collector his droid against Puko’s stack of credits. Puko laid down an Idiot’s Array, the unbeatable hand of sabacc, and won the P1000 exploration droid, which he had upgraded with galactic navigation to copilot his ship, made a backpack stationing rack for the droid to stay with him, and calls it “P1.”

APPLICATION 2
Name: Kip Waloo
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Allegiance to: force, Acy Puko
Occupation: Crewmember
Details: blind but uses force sight to detect surroundings
Appearance:


Personality: Quiet, spiritual. Uses force sight to detect surroundings, so keeps his blindness a secret (except to Acy Puko). Tries to avoid combat but is highly protective when needs to be.

Force Sensitive: Yes

Skills/Powers: Force sight. Ambidextrous. Skilled with throwing boomerangs for combat and deflecting blaster fire.

Weaponry:

Two sharpened hunting boomerangs he learned to use and hunt with while on Auraterra that he conceals under his poncho

Biography: Born blind on Auraterra, a planet overly saturated with force sensitivity due to the Jedi and Sith presence there decades ago, Waloo was raised amongst a deeply spiritual family that believed the force chooses what is best and encourages you to side with it. Waloo was taught that when you trust the force it gives to you in return. Reading and learning about the Jedi’s and Sith’s influence from centuries of their presence on his planet and the hostility they both held for each-other, led him to develop a belief in Potentium, the belief that all of the force is innately good and the same. Waloo’s belief in Potentium was more towards believing that the Dark side is bad, but it became bad by a corrupted humanity and not by a dark side of the Force itself.

Waloo’s parents were both subtly force sensitive and were open about being so only to him. They preserved a few ancient texts from generations of their families and kept them locked away. They taught him from a young age that the world isn’t ready for force sensitive people again just yet, and when they discovered that their son was force sensitive as well, they taught him assertively that he would need to keep it a secret from everyone he met.

Kip Waloo’s father came up with the idea that his blindness could be somewhat mended if his son were to learn how to utilize force sight. His father dug up an ancient text from his family’s hidden library of Jedi and sith texts and gave it to Kip who was, at the time, 7 years old.

Kip was homeschooled in galactic and historical studies by his parents his entire youth life, and after 10 years had developed a near perfect force sight through constant practice during his every waking hour. At 17 years old, his home was broken into by two Coalition clones searching for his parents and their library. Kip was instructed by his mother to hide, and he did so. He heard blaster fire and couldn’t hide anymore and grabbed his father’s hidden blaster pistol and ran into the doorway of the library. Kip took two shots and realized he had hit both Coalition clones in the helmets and killed them both. He ran to where he sensed his parents were and realized they had both been killed. Kip, sobbing, realized he had used his force sight to shoot the two Coalition clones and figured he needed to leave as soon as possible. He grabbed the texts on Force Sight he had been studying for 10 years and fled with them.

Halfway around Auraterra and out of money, Kip Waloo took a job as a reenee hunter, still concealing his blindness and using the Force to guide is sight. His mentor in the craft taught him to hunt with the sharpened metal boomerangs often used for hunting on Auraterra. Kip began saving money from this job hoping to one day be able to afford to move to a planet far away where he can be alone with the Force.

6 years later, Waloo had saved up what he thought to be enough money to pay for a way out of Auraterra. He just knew he needed a ride, since he had never driven a ship before in his life. Waloo was ending his workday selling his catch of reenee at a local traders’ market one day when he met Acy Puko, who was selling goods he said were the purest anyone in the Outer Rim could have ever seen. Mesmerized by the thought of Puko’s journeys to a far off planet, Waloo took a job as a crew member on Puko’s Moon Trick.

Waloo worked 4 years with Puko before Puko became suspicious of something odd happening. While Waloo was out meditating one day, Puko used P1 to “slice” the door open to Waloo’s quarters on the Moon Trick. Puko round the ancient texts of force sight and realized that either Waloo had found them and kept it a secret or he was blind and force sensitive and using force sight to see. Puko put the texts back and waited for Waloo to return to the ship once again. After a few hours, Puko decided he would be testy with Waloo and threw a rock at him from behind. Waloo sensed the rock coming towards him and swung around quickly the cut the rock in half with one of his boomerang blades. Waloo, angered, confessed to Puko, who seemed amused, that he had a force sensitivity that allowed him to develop force sight to overcome his blindness by substituting visual sensory for the force. Waloo insisted that Puko never tell a word of it to anyone, to which Puko replied, “the only secret I won’t charge you for.”

For the last 3 years Waloo has been open to Puko about his constant studying, meditation, and using of the force and is Acy Puko’s right-hand-man in his crew. Waloo trains combat tactics every day as he insists that one day the Coalition will come for him as they did his parents and he will stand his ground.

Allow me to take a look at this tomorrow its nearly 4 AM here and I will not be able to review this properly at my current state.

[New Minitopia]

Sorry, had to do it quickly and how do you delete posts

Well, since someone posted after you...you don't. Best that can be done is to essentially ignore your posts. Dang it. Why, precisely, did it have to be done quickly?

I'm going to a friends wedding

[Union Princes]

Please review my app, I cut down the military size. Is there anything else that I have to change?

[Ormata]

Tropicville why...why boomerangs?

EDIT: Also Urti is done.

[Tropicville]

Tropicville why...why boomerangs?

EDIT: Also Urti is done.

They were used for hunting on Auraterra, so I thought it would be a new twist to make a force sensitive blind guy be able to use them

[Ormata]

They were used for hunting on Auraterra, so I thought it would be a new twist to make a force sensitive blind guy be able to use them

I see. Interesting idea, though I feel that them being sharpened would make for some...unfortunate issues?

Also, permit me to observe the neutral status of Bakura and to inquire as to it's status industrially at this time, not to mention it's role in the Galactic Alliance-Coalition War.

[Danceria]

The APP
Name: Zarath Usters
Age: 40
Gender: Male
Allegiance paid to: Jedi Order(?)
Rank: Master
Appearance (Picture preferred, if not, detailed description accepted): Zarath is a pale Zabrak, with his right forearm being replaced by a durable prosthetic that he designed to also double as a fold-out shield. He stands just under six feet/little over a meter and a half, with a stocky and stalwart build. He also has a hat
Personality: He is often described as very fatherly, often trading dry banter with Ka and playfully wrestling with the few padawans and younglings who survived Telos IV, as was his occupation before the disbanding of the Jedi Order as the Phys-Ed and Lightsaber Combat instructor. He retains a humble and down to earth demeanor, and seen as a good moral anchor in these trying times. Despite striking out on his own as a bounty hunter, he still retains a strict adherence to the Jedi Code, and never breaks his word.

However, more often than not he is musing ideologically, and wonders if the galaxy even wants the Jedi anymore...
Force Sensitive: Y
Skills/Powers: (Please include Force abilities and lightsaber forms if applicable)
Force
Force Speed
Force Deflection
Force Telekinesis (Push, Pull, turn the lightsaber into a spinning blade of death, summon an out of reach plate, ect.)
Force Sight: (Can detect people through walls, and commune with those he’s close to)
Force Repulse
Movement Meditation
Force Channel: Defined as a mixture of Force Deflection and Telekinesis, it allows Zarath to use his Force Pushes less as a wave/blunderbuss, and more of a shotgun slug, even arcing the “push” as one would a baseball. A highly lethal baseball, but handy for activating mines from a safe distance. As its name implies, Zarath uses this to enhance his hand to hand combat and reflexes, and even various items and weapons, should they be durable enough. It has often been joked that Zarath could feasibly find a way to kill someone with a stuffed animal, to which he always responds “If it’s made of cortosis, sure!”. He’s no Mace Windu/Shatterpoint master, but he gets by pretty damn well.

Combat
Lightsaber Skills:
Tràkata (His personal favorite style, allowing him to bludgeon opponents nonlethally with his lightsaber staff, or to worm past defenses for precise stabs)
Form V (His most skilled, aside from Tràkata)
Form II (For when he’s using his shield arm to defend himself)
Form III (For when he cannot use his shield arm, or doesn’t have it attached to him)

It should be noted that these are the most discernible fighting styles, he doesn’t limit himself to one style. Zarath’s fighting style is reminiscent of Earth’s classical spear-fighters, such as Hoplites or Zulu Impis, with a solid and stalwart defense and quick surgical counterattacks.

Hand to Hand:
Teräs Käsi
Greco-Roman Wrestling...IN SPAAAACE
Southpaw/Out-boxer style of boxing...IN SPAAAACE
Stave-fighting...IN (you get the idea)
Knife-fighting/throwing.


Noncombatative
Fluent in Huttese and Mando’a
Survivalist
First Aid
Stealth and camouflage.

Weaponry: Detachable double edged lightsaber, yellow blade. Uniquely crafted because when not using both ends, Zarath can extend one blade for longer reach and wide sweeping attacks.
Ship (If you have one): Some old ass freighter, IDK where he got it from, or what it’s officially called, but all other freighters are almost a century old and I sincerely doubt they’d be kicking.
Biography: Born on Dathomir in 165 ABY, he would be discovered by the famed blind Pantoran Jedi Knight Kanghes Quinzi during the denouement of scattering the One Sith into hiding, and any chance of the Dark Side resurfacing. The Jedi Order was all he knew, as well as the war between the Coalition and the Alliance. Quinzeh was a father to the young Jedi, having instilled in him a deep love of history and bibliophilia, Zarath was not always the burly brawler that he’s famous for now...it would come out of necessity due to the state of conflict. Zarath proved himself an apt strategist, and a leader of squadrons. Whenever Usters and Quinzeh with a squadron, odds of success rose to a steady 187.3 percent, last checked by most protocol droids. Well, maybe it wasn’t a protocol droid who estimated that…

Shortly after his ascension as a Jedi Knight, he was assigned by Quinzeh to teach younglings in the arts of combat, while Quinzeh went on to Commenor and Eridau, hoping to resolve the conflict as quickly as possible. During the long and bloody siege on Eridau, the Zabrak would finally disobey his master’s orders and seek him out, hearing his capture by Coalition forces. On there, he swayed dangerously close to the Dark Side in seeking out his captured master, but something...unexpected happened. A Coalition commander was defying orders, keeping the Jedi alive as a bargaining chip for either the planet, or anyone captured. This Zygerrian would fight to keep his quarry on even footing, and when defeated, yielded the Jedi. He would even try to give his life to protect the man who defeated him, simply because it was honourable. Ultimately the two masters were rescued, and the Zygerrian would walk away, unscathed.

Zarath would eventually drift away from the Jedi Order after Eridau, seeking out the Zygerrian who saved his life, ultimately striking out on his own roughly a year before the Armistice. It would prove to be a wise undertaking, as the Armistice outlawed the Jedi from existing. Master Quinzeh, contrary to his own beliefs of compromising with the Alliance Senate, was forced to flee with his former padawan to Zygerria, and found themselves under the protection and of Tygril of House Josaine, the very man who had spared them on Eridau. There, in the dark slave pits of Zygerria, did Usters and Quinzeh train and teach. Protecting the few slaves that had Force sensitivity, and training them. This would be a most time for House Josaine, as their slaves were remarked to be level-headed and polite, excellent courtesans and combatants, who almost seemed to know what their masters were thinking. While not exactly the most ethical of ways to renew the Jedi Order, Usters fell in love, and found a career as a bounty hunter. The Bound Brethren, as they would call themselves, gave him a sense of hope, a sense of belonging… a sense that things would be okay.

Telos IV happened. House Josaine being accused and massacred for hiding Jedi would happen. The deaths of his Master, and the family that took him in, his wife’s family...all would be burned by both Coalition and Alliance. This was where...Usters notably changed. He became depressed, and resentful, often going on a single-pilot ship into the unknown, for weeks at a time. He would return with holocrons, lost relics, and further lock himself away to study them. Usters barely even noticed the birth of his son, who would ultimately snap him out of his misery. The young half-Zygerrian would curiously touch a crimson holocron, and only at the last minute, would Usters realize what the path he was taking would lead him away from.

While this didn’t stop him from going out, he at least began to open up about his feelings, and his reasoning. Zarath became a father, and a man again, and found himself at peace. He would take his wife, his son, and those he trusted to the forgotten ruins that he saw at night, standing ever vigilant against the sneering spirits trapped within them and the old holocrons. Zarath became himself again.
RP Example: I guess
Notes: I am not sure how to do an ancillary character app.

[New Minitopia]

The APP
Name:Xio

Age: 130, adolescent in his races years

Gender: Male

Allegiance paid to: Jedi and smugglers

Rank: Ex-padawan, Head mechanic on the Excalibur

Appearance: Black hard scales, a very reptilian body and internal system, Blue eyes, with reptilian pupils, a tail not unlike that of a dragon, Arms reach waist, 3 metres tall, thin, and sharp, reptilian teeth, claws on hands and feet, wears a jacket and outfit similar to that of Solo, but with a hood and face mask for hiding his unusual features, gloves with the symbol of his home( a star ) on the top, and his sword and blaster in their scabbard next to his side, and the scabbard is ornately decorated with runic carvings and symbols, burnt into the wood by his ancestors

Personality: gentle, but ferocious when loved ones are in danger, as after seeing the decimation of his family, he has always hid what he truly is, and when loved ones are hurt, his muscles swell up and his eyes turn red, called Bloodlust, however, he is kind toward orphans as he sees himself in them and often takes jobs for free if it includes helping refugees or those less fortunate

Force Sensitive: Y

Skills/Powers: Excellent mechanic, Lighsaber style two, Handy with a blaster, Infra and Ultra Vision, Telepath, Standard jedi skills. Good pilot from years of running, excellent with a sword

Weaponry: Tazi vibro sword that he grabbed of a mercenary sent to murder him and he prefers using this weapon to , blue standard length lightsaber, DL-18 blaster

Ship: XS stock light freighter, with added blaster cannons and smuggling capacity, changed so much unrecognisable

Biography: Xio was born in the same year the Empire ended on his home world of the Planet Borcdan, which had been the base for Darth Revan during the Sith Jedi war all those years ago. He was a child in a large family of 12, who believed that the colonisers made good on their promise to help them, even though the family was poor, Xio was a smart child for his race, solving advanced questions at kindergarten age, however he suffered in the more manual labours of childhood, as his limbs were weaker than many others, however this was only due to the deep well of force energy hidden deep within his being.

At the age of 30 Xio experienced a growth spurt, and quickly became the stranger again for being to tall. However, by this time Xio's family had slowly become more open to Xio of their own basic force powers (telepathy, mind reading). This terrified him, knowing that something or someone could control him. This is the first ever recorded evidence of Bloodlust mode, were a Borcdan's body and muscle rapidly grows and their eyes turn a deep red, and they act much more savagely. However, Alliance forces, mistaking him for a weapon, stormed his house and killed his family. This is when his force power was first shown. With a scream, a massive wave of Force energy blasts the soldiers into the walls, and kills them in rage. it was here he grabbed a Tazi Vibro sword and a DL-18 blaster. It turns out they were mercenaries hired by his fathers employer, and vows from that moment forth to never work for a large business ever again. He grabbed clothes, a few 100 credits from his families emergency store, and some blue milk and some bread, along with books studying his planets history and many other planets including Coruscant.

He finds himself, after using and sowing away on board ships, he somehow ends up on Coruscant. Their he is extremely confused about peoples anger at his race, and buys his outfit and cloak after being beaten up after being called a creeping beast. He grabs a short vibro knife to use if he is attacked again. Suddenly, a man appears behind him, wearing long brown and tan robes. Xio spins around to meet him, but he recognises his robes from books of Jedi and Soth. the man, a Tradoshan by the name of Gui Tripu, was a Jedi before the Purge, and wishes to train another Jedi before he dies.

After many months of tutelage, Xio almost has full control over his powers, and is reaching the power of that of a well-trained padawan, as they have had to train in secret due to Jedi predjudice.
Suddenly, a squad of Coalition troops turn up and knocks down the door to the apartment, killing Gui, and forcing Xio to jump out of a window to escape, he lands on top of a AT-ST cockpit, now a sign for a club, and runs of on board a abandoned XS stock freighter, and hits the hyper drive, smashing through the blockade and coming out over Tatooine, and sets up shop their, keeping his power his secret, and becoming a smuggler, gathering fellow runaways and refugees into a crew, heavily modifying his ship from a light freighter to a medium weight blockade runner, with many compartments for storing crew and cargo, advanced shields and plating, and old cannons salvaged of the wreck of Rebel Alliance and Imperial frigates, and extremely advanced computers and systems, and a decent pair of engines, however they weakness lies in the size of them; Xio could only afford four, but their power makes up for a lack of numbers

Notes: has a crush on Twi'leks, Humans and Night Sisters
Am i accepted?

Is this better guys?

[Ormata]

Is this better guys?

I have just a few questions. Keep in mind that I am not a Co-Op by any measure and as such these are simply suggestions.

• Borcdan...is where, precisely? It's not a Canon or Legends planet, so I'd love to know more about it. At the very least I'd like to know the general region it's located in for the purposes of determining which side it was during the Alliance-Coalition War.
• What species is he? Is it completely of your own design or...just something I have no idea on? It looks to me like you've combined a Trandoshan with a Tiefling.
• His personality seems still sorta sparse. The vast majority of it concerns his 'Bloodlust' and does nothing to note how he feelings about this affliction, whether he takes measures to contain it or not. Furthermore, 'gentle' is a catch-all term that can kinda mean a lot. Is he gruff about things, like a grandfatherly gentle, is he like a mother with tenderness and care (Something I'd find pretty funny considering the looks), is he gentle towards all beings (Man those Verpine look like they need a hug) or just to kids, things like that. He has a hood to contain his looks, so obviously he's concerned about being judged for such things yet that isn't mentioned at all in said personality.
• His ship. I assume it's named the Excalibur, and honestly am curious as to how you explain that sort of name deeply rooted in British mythos when we're, you know...in space. Also it's a stock ship used during the Clone Wars so it''s sort of...outdated? Just saying. The fact that you've mounted guns from frigates is remarkable, especially considering I doubt the power plant or structure could handle such exertions.
• When you state Tazi Vibro Sword, do you reference this?
• You have no RP Sample.
• "He finds himself, after using and sowing away on board ships, he somehow ends up on Coruscant." I am glad the Deus Ex Machina is still strong.
• He was on Coruscant, yet was found by Coalition troops? Very strange, since that planet is most definitively owned by the Galactic Alliance. Also, AT-STs in Coruscant? Really, really weird there, especially considering that it was a sign for a club. Do people use T-34 turrets as club signs in Eastern Europe?
• The spelling and overall grammar is somewhat lacking.

[New Minitopia]

Is this better guys?

I have just a few questions. Keep in mind that I am not a Co-Op by any measure and as such these are simply suggestions.

• Borcdan...is where, precisely? It's not a Canon or Legends planet, so I'd love to know more about it. At the very least I'd like to know the general region it's located in for the purposes of determining which side it was during the Alliance-Coalition War.
• What species is he? Is it completely of your own design or...just something I have no idea on? It looks to me like you've combined a Trandoshan with a Tiefling.
• His personality seems still sorta sparse. The vast majority of it concerns his 'Bloodlust' and does nothing to note how he feelings about this affliction, whether he takes measures to contain it or not. Furthermore, 'gentle' is a catch-all term that can kinda mean a lot. Is he gruff about things, like a grandfatherly gentle, is he like a mother with tenderness and care (Something I'd find pretty funny considering the looks), is he gentle towards all beings (Man those Verpine look like they need a hug) or just to kids, things like that. He has a hood to contain his looks, so obviously he's concerned about being judged for such things yet that isn't mentioned at all in said personality.
• His ship. I assume it's named the Excalibur, and honestly am curious as to how you explain that sort of name deeply rooted in British mythos when we're, you know...in space. Also it's a stock ship used during the Clone Wars so it''s sort of...outdated? Just saying. The fact that you've mounted guns from frigates is remarkable, especially considering I doubt the power plant or structure could handle such exertions.
• When you state Tazi Vibro Sword, do you reference this?
• You have no RP Sample.
• "He finds himself, after using and sowing away on board ships, he somehow ends up on Coruscant." I am glad the Deus Ex Machina is still strong.
• He was on Coruscant, yet was found by Coalition troops? Very strange, since that planet is most definitively owned by the Galactic Alliance. Also, AT-STs in Coruscant? Really, really weird there, especially considering that it was a sign for a club. Do people use T-34 turrets as club signs in Eastern Europe?

Here are my answers, thank you for pointing those out by the way:

[*] The planet of Borcdan is located near Bokata Prime, and has quite the cold temperature, with native species either gaining scales or fur to deal with the climate

[*] I listed his design, but i'll do it again here just for this question: His species are called the Borcat(get it?), and are tall, thin, reptilian creatures, with hard, flexible scales of various colour, and serpentine eyes alike to a dragon, and they have a row of spines filled with a hallucinogen on their tail, which connects to the body just above the butt, and is commonly wrapped around their clothing like a scarf.

[*] By gentle i mean he is kind and caring to the Unfortunate and to children and paticularily orphans. However when he takes someone under his wing, he acts like a grandfather, stern and teaching. He takes measures to control Bloodlust, but when a loved one is hurt it cannot be controlled, and he uses his cloak to hide his face as prejudice is a common thing in the planets he visits, and doesn't want any more going his way.

[*]The reason i used that ship is because it is easily modifiable and adaptable, just like Xio. Sorry about Excalibur, just sounds badass, would Piku be a better name? I stated in the text that he took guns from ships of his ships size, i'm not talking imperial turbo lasers here. The reinforced shields and upgraded power plant are just for flying and taking blaster beams.

[*] Yes i mean that

[*] Sorry, i guess what i wrote in the IC was what i though counted, care to read that? Oh wait, i deleted it, whoops.

[*] The Coallitio hired hit men to take them out, and yes, i have been to eastern Europe and seen such signs.

[New Minitopia]

Thanks for finding those though

[Ormata]

Here are my answers, thank you for pointing those out by the way:

[*] The planet of Borcdan is located near Bokata Prime, and has quite the cold temperature, with native species either gaining scales or fur to deal with the climate

[*] I listed his design, but i'll do it again here just for this question: His species are called the Borcat(get it?), and are tall, thin, reptilian creatures, with hard, flexible scales of various colour, and serpentine eyes alike to a dragon, and they have a row of spines filled with a hallucinogen on their tail, which connects to the body just above the butt, and is commonly wrapped around their clothing like a scarf.

[*] By gentle i mean he is kind and caring to the Unfortunate and to children and paticularily orphans. However when he takes someone under his wing, he acts like a grandfather, stern and teaching. He takes measures to control Bloodlust, but when a loved one is hurt it cannot be controlled, and he uses his cloak to hide his face as prejudice is a common thing in the planets he visits, and doesn't want any more going his way.

[*]The reason i used that ship is because it is easily modifiable and adaptable, just like Xio. Sorry about Excalibur, just sounds badass, would Piku be a better name? I stated in the text that he took guns from ships of his ships size, i'm not talking imperial turbo lasers here. The reinforced shields and upgraded power plant are just for flying and taking blaster beams.

[*] Yes i mean that

[*] Sorry, i guess what i wrote in the IC was what i though counted, care to read that? Oh wait, i deleted it, whoops.

[*] The Coallitio hired hit men to take them out, and yes, i have been to eastern Europe and seen such signs.

• I can find no such planet or system called "Bokata Prime". Please provide a link, nearby star system, or Galactic Map grid coordinates.
• The hallucinogen tail part should be listed in his appearance section.
• I see. Might want to add some of that elaboration into the personality section for clarification.
• Piku would probably be a better name, considering that I can't think of any sort of connotations to real world lore. As for the guns, might want to specify the type and style in the ship section.
• KK, good to know.
• In my personal opinion, if you wanted that to count as your RP sample, I would not accept you.
• The Coalition would simply notify Alliance authorities on the matter, who would thereafter send troops and soldiers to take care of the issue. They would not hire mercenaries in any capacity for such operations. I'd furthermore point-out the fact that the Coalition would likely not find a few Jedi in Alliance territory before the Alliance itself would. Care to provide a picture or information on that turret thing? I somehow doubt this heavily. I mean, considering you were there and that would be a helluva novelty, I'd love to see it.

[Jedi Council]

I have just a few questions. Keep in mind that I am not a Co-Op by any measure and as such these are simply suggestions.

• Borcdan...is where, precisely? It's not a Canon or Legends planet, so I'd love to know more about it. At the very least I'd like to know the general region it's located in for the purposes of determining which side it was during the Alliance-Coalition War.
• What species is he? Is it completely of your own design or...just something I have no idea on? It looks to me like you've combined a Trandoshan with a Tiefling.
• His personality seems still sorta sparse. The vast majority of it concerns his 'Bloodlust' and does nothing to note how he feelings about this affliction, whether he takes measures to contain it or not. Furthermore, 'gentle' is a catch-all term that can kinda mean a lot. Is he gruff about things, like a grandfatherly gentle, is he like a mother with tenderness and care (Something I'd find pretty funny considering the looks), is he gentle towards all beings (Man those Verpine look like they need a hug) or just to kids, things like that. He has a hood to contain his looks, so obviously he's concerned about being judged for such things yet that isn't mentioned at all in said personality.
• His ship. I assume it's named the Excalibur, and honestly am curious as to how you explain that sort of name deeply rooted in British mythos when we're, you know...in space. Also it's a stock ship used during the Clone Wars so it''s sort of...outdated? Just saying. The fact that you've mounted guns from frigates is remarkable, especially considering I doubt the power plant or structure could handle such exertions.
• When you state Tazi Vibro Sword, do you reference this?
• You have no RP Sample.
• "He finds himself, after using and sowing away on board ships, he somehow ends up on Coruscant." I am glad the Deus Ex Machina is still strong.
• He was on Coruscant, yet was found by Coalition troops? Very strange, since that planet is most definitively owned by the Galactic Alliance. Also, AT-STs in Coruscant? Really, really weird there, especially considering that it was a sign for a club. Do people use T-34 turrets as club signs in Eastern Europe?

Here are my answers, thank you for pointing those out by the way:

[*] The planet of Borcdan is located near Bokata Prime, and has quite the cold temperature, with native species either gaining scales or fur to deal with the climate

[*] I listed his design, but i'll do it again here just for this question: His species are called the Borcat(get it?), and are tall, thin, reptilian creatures, with hard, flexible scales of various colour, and serpentine eyes alike to a dragon, and they have a row of spines filled with a hallucinogen on their tail, which connects to the body just above the butt, and is commonly wrapped around their clothing like a scarf.

[*] By gentle i mean he is kind and caring to the Unfortunate and to children and paticularily orphans. However when he takes someone under his wing, he acts like a grandfather, stern and teaching. He takes measures to control Bloodlust, but when a loved one is hurt it cannot be controlled, and he uses his cloak to hide his face as prejudice is a common thing in the planets he visits, and doesn't want any more going his way.

[*]The reason i used that ship is because it is easily modifiable and adaptable, just like Xio. Sorry about Excalibur, just sounds badass, would Piku be a better name? I stated in the text that he took guns from ships of his ships size, i'm not talking imperial turbo lasers here. The reinforced shields and upgraded power plant are just for flying and taking blaster beams.

[*] Yes i mean that

[*] Sorry, i guess what i wrote in the IC was what i though counted, care to read that? Oh wait, i deleted it, whoops.

[*] The Coallitio hired hit men to take them out, and yes, i have been to eastern Europe and seen such signs.

1 and 2.) Custom planets are not allowed, nor are custom races. You have to use species or places that are based in the lore.

3.) That personality is sounding less and less like a Jedi.

4.) If your vessel is that ancient, expect it to not be modified all that much. I have allowed older ships to be upgraded, but usually by people with the resources to do it, like Admiral Krast.

5.) If a single Coalition soldier, or merc, stepped foot on Alliance territory, the entire Galaxy would collapse into war. So I cant allow that either.

Unfortunately, I will have to once again DENY the application.

[New Minitopia]

Here are my answers, thank you for pointing those out by the way:

[*] The planet of Borcdan is located near Bokata Prime, and has quite the cold temperature, with native species either gaining scales or fur to deal with the climate

[*] I listed his design, but i'll do it again here just for this question: His species are called the Borcat(get it?), and are tall, thin, reptilian creatures, with hard, flexible scales of various colour, and serpentine eyes alike to a dragon, and they have a row of spines filled with a hallucinogen on their tail, which connects to the body just above the butt, and is commonly wrapped around their clothing like a scarf.

[*] By gentle i mean he is kind and caring to the Unfortunate and to children and paticularily orphans. However when he takes someone under his wing, he acts like a grandfather, stern and teaching. He takes measures to control Bloodlust, but when a loved one is hurt it cannot be controlled, and he uses his cloak to hide his face as prejudice is a common thing in the planets he visits, and doesn't want any more going his way.

[*]The reason i used that ship is because it is easily modifiable and adaptable, just like Xio. Sorry about Excalibur, just sounds badass, would Piku be a better name? I stated in the text that he took guns from ships of his ships size, i'm not talking imperial turbo lasers here. The reinforced shields and upgraded power plant are just for flying and taking blaster beams.

[*] Yes i mean that

[*] Sorry, i guess what i wrote in the IC was what i though counted, care to read that? Oh wait, i deleted it, whoops.

[*] The Coallitio hired hit men to take them out, and yes, i have been to eastern Europe and seen such signs.

1 and 2.) Custom planets are not allowed, nor are custom races. You have to use species or places that are based in the lore.

3.) That personality is sounding less and less like a Jedi.

4.) If your vessel is that ancient, expect it to not be modified all that much. I have allowed older ships to be upgraded, but usually by people with the resources to do it, like Admiral Krast.

5.) If a single Coalition soldier, or merc, stepped foot on Alliance territory, the entire Galaxy would collapse into war. So I cant allow that either.

Unfortunately, I will have to once again DENY the application.

Fine i will change it again

[New Minitopia]

The APP
Name:Xio

Age: 20

Gender: Male

Allegiance paid to: Jedi and smugglers

Rank: Ex-padawan, Head mechanic on the Excalibur

Appearance:Average Human looks, with many ornate tattoos from his own family. He does have a deformed ear and eye though, which is why he wears a jacket and outfit similar to that of Solo, but with a hood and face mask for hiding his unusual features, gloves with the symbol of his home( a star ) on the top, and his sword and blaster in their scabbard next to his side, and the scabbard is ornately decorated with runic carvings and symbols, burnt into the wood by his ancestors

Personality: gentle, but ferocious when loved ones are in danger, as after seeing the decimation of his family, he has always hid what he truly is, and when loved ones are hurt, his muscles swell up and his eyes turn red, called Bloodlust, however, he is kind toward orphans as he sees himself in them and often takes jobs for free if it includes helping refugees or those less fortunate

Force Sensitive: Y

Skills/Powers: Excellent mechanic, Lighsaber style two, Handy with a blaster, Infra and Ultra Vision, Telepath, Standard jedi skills. Good pilot from years of running, excellent with a sword

Weaponry: Tazi vibro sword that he grabbed of a mercenary sent to murder him and he prefers using this weapon to , blue standard length lightsaber, DL-18 blaster

Ship: A modified Vigil-class corvette

Biography: Xio was born in the same year the Empire ended on his home world of the Planet Mandalore, which had been the base for Darth Revan during the Sith Jedi war all those years ago. He was a child in a large family of 12, who believed that the colonisers made good on their promise to help them, even though the family was poor, Xio was a smart child for his race, solving advanced questions at kindergarten age, however he suffered in the more manual labours of childhood, as his limbs were weaker than many others, however this was only due to the deep well of force energy hidden deep within his being.

At the age of 30 Xio experienced a growth spurt, and quickly became the stranger again for being to tall. However, by this time Xio's family had slowly become more open to Xio of their own basic force powers (telepathy, mind reading). This terrified him, knowing that something or someone could control him.However, Alliance forces, mistaking him for a weapon, stormed his house and killed his family. This is when his force power was first shown. With a scream, a massive wave of Force energy blasts the soldiers into the walls, and kills them in rage. it was here he grabbed a Tazi Vibro sword and a DL-18 blaster. It turns out they were mercenaries hired by his fathers employer, and vows from that moment forth to never work for a large business ever again. He grabbed clothes, a few 100 credits from his families emergency store, and some blue milk and some bread, along with books studying his planets history and many other planets including Coruscant.

He finds himself, after using and sowing away on board ships, he somehow ends up on Coruscant. Their he is extremely confused about peoples anger at his face, and buys his outfit and cloak after being beaten up after being called a creeping cripple. He grabs a short vibro knife to use if he is attacked again. Suddenly, a man appears behind him, wearing long brown and tan robes. Xio spins around to meet him, but he recognises his robes from books of Jedi and Soth. the man, a Tradoshan by the name of Gui Tripu, was a Jedi before the Purge, and wishes to train another Jedi before he dies.

After many months of tutelage, Xio almost has full control over his powers, and is reaching the power of that of a well-trained padawan, as they have had to train in secret due to Jedi predjudice.
Suddenly, a squad of Alliance troops turn up and knocks down the door to the apartment, killing Gui, and forcing Xio to jump out of a window to escape, he lands on top of a AT-ST cockpit, now a sign for a club, and runs of on board a Vigil-class freighter , and hits the hyper drive, smashing through the blockade and coming out over Tatooine, and sets up shop their, keeping his power his secret, and becoming a smuggler, gathering fellow runaways and refugees into a crew, which he uses almost solely for trading and smuggling, with the pay being low but liberty and freedom being high, many on the crew stay out of happiness of the freedom Xio gives them.

Notes: has a crush on Twi'leks, Humans and Night Sisters
Am i accepted?

Is this better?

[Ormata]

Jedi Council and/or Brusia, you mind looking over this app?

Is this better?

• The Vigil-Class Corvette requires a crew of 200. Does he have a crew of 200?
• Mandalore and colonizers? No, no, and no. Also, kindergarten? Mandalorians don't really...have kindergarten, it's schooling based around the clan system.
• Alliance forces on Mandalore? No. That simply wouldn't really be the case, especially in any form wherein they would have the power to burn down a family home. The fact that there is no further mention of his family, or of anything Mandalorian, or really of anything in the way of the culture, is furthermore disturbing. He essentially, according towards this biography, is not acting at all like a Mandalorian nor is Mandalore being portrayed as it is.

Could you please not copy-and-paste a planet's name as a cheap way to get around rules, especially not one that is so well-known and one that has such deep roots in terms of lore, culture, and people? It's not better, in my opinion.