Boejoe wrote:Name: Tyler C. Boyer
Age; 31 , appears 31
Species, Clan, Class: human
Appearance: Light brown hair, brown eyes, formal clothes, glasses, big head, long legs, long arms, big shoulders, 6 feet, 8 inches.
Personality:
Tyler is a cheerful, smart guy and He likes researching things. One of the things he researchs is paranormal activity. He's also good at negotiating and likes programming things, history, computers, science, math, rockets, nuclear fission, engineering, nuclear fusion, food, paranormal activity, old music, and old movies. He's also a little crazy and likes to do things solo.
Biography:
Tyler was born 31 years ago. Since he was born, he has always liked science, business, engineering, math, and programming. He's mostly been the top of his classes all through his childhood. He also likes to do things solo. When he was 11, he started to get interested in paranormal things, mostly, vampires. He did some research on them when he was 14 and has been interested in doing even more research. When he was 17, he got attacked by a vampire. luckily, he got away unharmed. Now the attack made him go a bit crazy for a year. Until he was 18 pretty much, he researched all about vampires. He started to relax soon after the attack. He went to Stanford university for college and was mostly the best student in his classes.
After college, he immediately started a small business. This business sold Information technology and It was started near San Francisco. His business was able to grow rapidly into an even bigger business. When he was 27, he bought another office building for his business in LA. Right after then, he decided to move to LA. About a month after moving to LA though, he was attacked again by a vampire. He was lucky again because he got away unharmed. Now this did harm him mentally a little. Luckily, he's okay but he's now always trying to find out who's a vampire and who isn't though. His business has also grown even more and its gotten pretty big. He currently has 987 office buildings for his company and growing. His main dream is to own the biggest company in the world!
NPCs: none yet but some may come...
So I like the general direction of your app.
But I am worried about the quality of it as a reflection on your role playing ability. Have you read the IC? Generally every IC post is expected to conform to the quality of posts there. I say this because RPing is an investment in time so I don't want you to invest yours then end up not liking it. So right now I'd ask that you revise it a little and maybe expand on it a bit more since it seems to be very minimalist. Minimalism is fine if its concise (several apps here are pretty concise), just right now its too minimalistic where its very bare bones to the point were I can't accept it as is.
Any questions feel free to ask, TG me, or hop on the discord and message the group chat or me directly.
Cheers