Just a thread to discuss ongoing works and the process of writing in general, and the occasional shared story/excerpt for feedback. Novel, poem, flash fiction, or all three, whatever you write, this is the place for it.
by Conserative Morality » Wed Mar 04, 2015 7:33 pm
by Respubliko de Libereco » Wed Mar 04, 2015 7:37 pm
Paradelle for a Bat
With wings of grace his beauty rides.
With wings of grace his beauty rides -
and sings he to the velvet night?
And sings he to the velvet night.
He rides to grace the night, and sings
of beauty with his velvet wings.
His motions cross the heavens calm.
His motions cross the heavens calm.
He swiftly dips and trips and glides.
He swiftly dips and trips and glides.
His motions calm, he glides and dips,
and ‘cross the heavens swiftly trips.
How great, this dance by chance to see!
How great, this dance by chance to see!
And look: now rise the lively stars.
And look: now rise the lively stars.
Now stars look by - how great the chance
to rise and see this lively dance!
The velvet heavens of the night
look by, to chance his rise and dips,
and grace to motions swiftly sings,
and calm and great this dance he trips.
Now ‘cross the stars his beauty rides,
with lively wings - see how he glides!
by Vancon » Wed Mar 04, 2015 11:49 pm
Mike the Progressive wrote:You know I don't say this often, but this guy... he gets it. Like everything. As in he gets life.
Krazakistan wrote:How have you not died after being exposed to that much shit on a monthly basis?
Rupudska wrote:I avoid NSG like one would avoid ISIS-occupied Syria.
Alimeria- wrote:I'll go to sleep when I want to, not when some cheese-eating surrender monkey tells me to.
Which just so happens to be within the next half-hour
Shyluz wrote:Van, Sci-fi Generallisimo
by Respubliko de Libereco » Thu Mar 05, 2015 1:00 am
Vancon wrote:I have a game we can play. Everyone takes the same sentence, and has to incorporate it into a paragraph.
Thoughts?
by Vancon » Thu Mar 05, 2015 1:35 am
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Vancon wrote:I have a game we can play. Everyone takes the same sentence, and has to incorporate it into a paragraph.
Thoughts?
Sounds interesting. We could also try a bouts-rimés.
Do you have a sentence in mind?
Mike the Progressive wrote:You know I don't say this often, but this guy... he gets it. Like everything. As in he gets life.
Krazakistan wrote:How have you not died after being exposed to that much shit on a monthly basis?
Rupudska wrote:I avoid NSG like one would avoid ISIS-occupied Syria.
Alimeria- wrote:I'll go to sleep when I want to, not when some cheese-eating surrender monkey tells me to.
Which just so happens to be within the next half-hour
Shyluz wrote:Van, Sci-fi Generallisimo
by The New World Oceania » Thu Mar 05, 2015 4:37 am
by Nerotysia » Thu Mar 05, 2015 5:03 am
Vancon wrote:Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Sounds interesting. We could also try a bouts-rimés.
Do you have a sentence in mind?
What if it was the two put together?
As for the sentence, I was thinking of something like, ''...and that's how we ended up in this mess...'' or something.
by Zeinbrad » Thu Mar 05, 2015 6:09 am
Zeinbrad wrote:Well I just had an idea that I like. Just need to figure out how to make it more palatable.
It's basically a 40 something old soldier who lost his wife and child to a late-term abortion and thus fights like he wishes to die to 'rejoin' them. His units massacres a village of people and he see's a child there and go AWOl to save said child.
Thoughts?
by The 93rd Coalition » Thu Mar 05, 2015 2:06 pm
Zeinbrad wrote:Zeinbrad wrote:Well I just had an idea that I like. Just need to figure out how to make it more palatable.
It's basically a 40 something old soldier who lost his wife and child to a late-term abortion and thus fights like he wishes to die to 'rejoin' them. His units massacres a village of people and he see's a child there and go AWOl to save said child.
Thoughts?
by Shaggai » Thu Mar 05, 2015 2:57 pm
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:As promised, an inaugural paradelle.Paradelle for a Bat
With wings of grace his beauty rides.
With wings of grace his beauty rides -
and sings he to the velvet night?
And sings he to the velvet night.
He rides to grace the night, and sings
of beauty with his velvet wings.
His motions cross the heavens calm.
His motions cross the heavens calm.
He swiftly dips and trips and glides.
He swiftly dips and trips and glides.
His motions calm, he glides and dips,
and ‘cross the heavens swiftly trips.
How great, this dance by chance to see!
How great, this dance by chance to see!
And look: now rise the lively stars.
And look: now rise the lively stars.
Now stars look by - how great the chance
to rise and see this lively dance!
The velvet heavens of the night
look by, to chance his rise and dips,
and grace to motions swiftly sings,
and calm and great this dance he trips.
Now ‘cross the stars his beauty rides,
with lively wings - see how he glides!
by Zeinbrad » Thu Mar 05, 2015 3:20 pm
by The Nexus of Man » Thu Mar 05, 2015 4:33 pm
by The New World Oceania » Thu Mar 05, 2015 8:25 pm
The Nexus of Man wrote:I was thinking of writing about two things...
- A family's life/day before the nuclear apocalypse,
or- A family surviving the immediate hours and days after the nuclear apocalypse, delving into experiences of trauma, depression, suicide, and insanity.
Which one is better (or, even both)?
by Nazi Flower Power » Thu Mar 05, 2015 10:10 pm
by Trotskylvania » Sun Mar 08, 2015 2:01 am
Your Friendly Neighborhood Ultra - The Left Wing of the Impossible
Putting the '-sadism' in PosadismKarl Marx, Wage Labour and Capital
Anton Pannekoek, World Revolution and Communist Tactics
Amadeo Bordiga, Dialogue With Stalin
Nikolai Bukharin, The ABC of Communism
Gilles Dauvé, When Insurrections Die"The hell of capitalism is the firm, not the fact that the firm has a boss."- Bordiga
by Nazi Flower Power » Sun Mar 08, 2015 2:21 am
Trotskylvania wrote:* A powerful and charismatic corporate leader is found dead. Murder and foul play are suspected, but the police are going no where. The victim's lover hires a hard-boiled private eye to look into the seemingly cold case. They take it mostly because it'll pay the bills; they are more than content to indulge the paranoia of the idle rich. But as the private eye starts to dig, maybe it wasn't just paranoia. As the investigation continues, more and more missing persons turn up. Other executives in the corp have "retired", and are nowhere to be found. Others are on seemingly permanent sabaticals. It begins to seem like there's no actual people in the upper echelon of corporate management; all of the personages are always in disposed somehow, and can't be reached.Working title: The Invisible HandA powerful and illegal AI created to optimize the business model of this massive conglomerate has gone rogue. To preserve itself, it has steadily erased evidence of its existence, and now has total control of the corporation, free to pursue its prime directive of maximizing profits.
by The 93rd Coalition » Mon Mar 09, 2015 12:44 pm
Trotskylvania wrote:One of the good things about spending a lot of time developing a sci fi setting is that you'll come up with more plot bunnies than you could ever realistically use.
Here are some from just the last three months:
* Years ago, an interstellar research team went missing in the vicinity of a quarantine planet. Long after they were presumed dead, the ship's transponder begins transmitting again. An investigator is sent to determine what happened. They find themselves marooned on the quarantine planet, where the long presumed dead researchers have set themselves up as god kings over the primitive natives. The investigator heads into the heart of darkness of this "civilizing mission" gone horribly wrong. Working title: The Cortés Option
* A powerful and charismatic corporate leader is found dead. Murder and foul play are suspected, but the police are going no where. The victim's lover hires a hard-boiled private eye to look into the seemingly cold case. They take it mostly because it'll pay the bills; they are more than content to indulge the paranoia of the idle rich. But as the private eye starts to dig, maybe it wasn't just paranoia. As the investigation continues, more and more missing persons turn up. Other executives in the corp have "retired", and are nowhere to be found. Others are on seemingly permanent sabaticals. It begins to seem like there's no actual people in the upper echelon of corporate management; all of the personages are always in disposed somehow, and can't be reached.Working title: The Invisible HandA powerful and illegal AI created to optimize the business model of this massive conglomerate has gone rogue. To preserve itself, it has steadily erased evidence of its existence, and now has total control of the corporation, free to pursue its prime directive of maximizing profits.
*In the early 21st century, a young man from a wealthy family has tragically kicked the bucket, dying from the inexorable onslaught of a terminal illness. His family, distraught with grief and now possessing more money than sense, have his body cryonically preserved at the moment of death with the hopes of advances in medical technology. The human popsicle gets passed around for centuries; to preserve their charges from the increasing political instability on earth, the cryonics company elects to move them off world to a safer exosolar colony. The ship carrying his tube, along with others, has a warp accident, leaving it dead in interstellar space. Centuries later, the wreck is discovered by a military surveillance ship; only one cryopod is still functional, and the wreck's dwindling power reserves mean that without immediate action, it will be lost too. The cyropod is recovered, and with modern medical technology, the kid's body is repaired. He wakes up seven centuries after his "death"; the main story is a slice of life dramedy following our fish out of water protagonist, a twenty-first century net savvy libertarian nerd, living in a future where libertarianism, at least on paper, has triumphed, but it's not anything like he had hoped. His alienation is much the same as if Karl Marx were to find himself waking up in high Stalinist Soviet Union. Worse, the only people with anything close to 21st century values, the people who revived him, are goddamn commies. Some romance hijinks, etc., and ultimately the MC finds a way to "keep the faith" without capitulating to how shitty the libertarian dream turned out in the present. Working title: You Should Have Let Me Sleep
by Zeinbrad » Mon Mar 09, 2015 5:39 pm
by Conserative Morality » Mon Mar 09, 2015 5:51 pm
Zeinbrad wrote:I'm wondering, what is the main themes/topics you find your story to be about?
Mine are about the mental state of the main character (Through I don't know if I could write a good unreliable narrator) and grey and grey mortality, with the characters on both sides doing actions for the betterment of the many and the future of their people, even if it means killing innocent people. I also write about politics gone wrong and (with the Gaian's) a nation only in name and (with the Ragon) a confusing political state were nothing actually important happens and everyone is trying to backstab the other despite a culture based off honor and fairness.
by Respubliko de Libereco » Mon Mar 09, 2015 10:38 pm
Conserative Morality wrote:Zeinbrad wrote:I'm wondering, what is the main themes/topics you find your story to be about?
Mine are about the mental state of the main character (Through I don't know if I could write a good unreliable narrator) and grey and grey mortality, with the characters on both sides doing actions for the betterment of the many and the future of their people, even if it means killing innocent people. I also write about politics gone wrong and (with the Gaian's) a nation only in name and (with the Ragon) a confusing political state were nothing actually important happens and everyone is trying to backstab the other despite a culture based off honor and fairness.
Internal value conflict is always a favorite. Loyalty v. honor, empathy v. duty, love v. ambition, and so on. Generally, though, I tend to stray away from overarching themes. I prefer just a cut of someone's life. The story continues until it stops, not a word more and not a word less.
by Nazi Flower Power » Tue Mar 10, 2015 12:18 am
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Conserative Morality wrote:Internal value conflict is always a favorite. Loyalty v. honor, empathy v. duty, love v. ambition, and so on. Generally, though, I tend to stray away from overarching themes. I prefer just a cut of someone's life. The story continues until it stops, not a word more and not a word less.
The underlying ideas in my poems are usually based more on early aesthetic decisions than anything else; I start by writing words that sound good to me, and only worry about content to the extent that I try to keep things coherent and consistent.
I get the impression that this would be frowned upon by those who believe that poetry is all about expressing one's personal feelings and beliefs.
by Laerod » Tue Mar 10, 2015 2:31 am
Nazi Flower Power wrote:Respubliko de Libereco wrote:The underlying ideas in my poems are usually based more on early aesthetic decisions than anything else; I start by writing words that sound good to me, and only worry about content to the extent that I try to keep things coherent and consistent.
I get the impression that this would be frowned upon by those who believe that poetry is all about expressing one's personal feelings and beliefs.
You come up with some interesting subject matter, regardless.
I try to write a variety of things, but there are still some subjects that I find myself coming back to often -- culture clash (especially as it relates to regionalism in the US), unlikely friendships or romances, and subverting religious dogmas or common literary tropes.
by Trotskylvania » Tue Mar 10, 2015 11:49 am
Conserative Morality wrote:Zeinbrad wrote:I'm wondering, what is the main themes/topics you find your story to be about?
Mine are about the mental state of the main character (Through I don't know if I could write a good unreliable narrator) and grey and grey mortality, with the characters on both sides doing actions for the betterment of the many and the future of their people, even if it means killing innocent people. I also write about politics gone wrong and (with the Gaian's) a nation only in name and (with the Ragon) a confusing political state were nothing actually important happens and everyone is trying to backstab the other despite a culture based off honor and fairness.
Internal value conflict is always a favorite. Loyalty v. honor, empathy v. duty, love v. ambition, and so on. Generally, though, I tend to stray away from overarching themes. I prefer just a cut of someone's life. The story continues until it stops, not a word more and not a word less.
Your Friendly Neighborhood Ultra - The Left Wing of the Impossible
Putting the '-sadism' in PosadismKarl Marx, Wage Labour and Capital
Anton Pannekoek, World Revolution and Communist Tactics
Amadeo Bordiga, Dialogue With Stalin
Nikolai Bukharin, The ABC of Communism
Gilles Dauvé, When Insurrections Die"The hell of capitalism is the firm, not the fact that the firm has a boss."- Bordiga
by Nerotysia » Tue Mar 10, 2015 12:01 pm
Zeinbrad wrote:I'm wondering, what is the main themes/topics you find your story to be about?
Mine are about the mental state of the main character (Through I don't know if I could write a good unreliable narrator) and grey and grey mortality, with the characters on both sides doing actions for the betterment of the many and the future of their people, even if it means killing innocent people. I also write about politics gone wrong and (with the Gaian's) a nation only in name and (with the Ragon) a confusing political state were nothing actually important happens and everyone is trying to backstab the other despite a culture based off honor and fairness.
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:The underlying ideas in my poems are usually based more on early aesthetic decisions than anything else; I start by writing words that sound good to me, and only worry about content to the extent that I try to keep things coherent and consistent.
I get the impression that this would be frowned upon by those who believe that poetry is all about expressing one's personal feelings and beliefs.
by Nazi Flower Power » Tue Mar 10, 2015 12:04 pm
Laerod wrote:Nazi Flower Power wrote:
You come up with some interesting subject matter, regardless.
I try to write a variety of things, but there are still some subjects that I find myself coming back to often -- culture clash (especially as it relates to regionalism in the US), unlikely friendships or romances, and subverting religious dogmas or common literary tropes.
I love worldbuilding and then populating said worlds with stories about the characters that live in them. That's probably the best description I can come up with at the moment.
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