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[Doppio Giudici]

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Review this place, give a paragraph saving what you think.

Money is not in solid form, but I loved your reviews. Some of you overgave and will be overpaid, others undergave and will be underpaid.

Do not repeat other people at all...I need new information...Okay?

[Doppio Giudici]

Bump

[Atvania]

In "Our History", you should elaborate some in the in-between from ancient to modern; it sort of jumps way too quickly into the present/future.

[Jarden]

Very Detailed needs pictures though

[The New Greek Republic]

Just read the government organization. Your organizing of government seems very well placed as far as presidential and congressional explanation and organization goes. With that said, however, you could go further in depth to explain what the other bodies of goverment do. For instance, how is legislation passed in Congress? Can it be overturned by the president? Is there any type of checks and balances sytem to keep government from becoming too powerful? You can also provide a description of what the presiden't advisers do and how the help him on a daily basis. With these statements, you have done a well-enough job with it, but it needs to be more rounded out and fully descriptive. Hope this helps!

[Fantrum]

Your prehistory section is good, my only concern is for ease of reading, to see about possibly adding bullet points.

Actually I had several which were quite new for the time. People considered me crazy for trying them, but they worked. I would give my men weapons that we less reliable, but more effective. I stressed keeping them clean and proper marksmanship. After a while I started using my armor more and more. I would use a mix of tanks and APCs to smash the flanks and then hit the middle with everything else. I didn't shell things often and I never used air-support, just marksmen and tanks mostly. I like to think the things I had bolted to my tanks improved them.

Your histories seem to be in order, except one picture is currently not displaying.

Its too bad that the music of the people isnt a real song, would have loved to hear it.

Cant say that I agree with your politics, but its very well written and thought out.

Ew, folk songs...

Your government organization is... unorthodox...

Very thorough description of the T-84, still, would have liked pictures of some sort.

Army information packet was a wallup to skim, but still very intriguing to read about.

As before mentioned, needs more pictures, while the describing text is great, many people will get bored and leave the reading unfinished if there arent pretty pictures to look at.

Is this enough?

[Alicorn Princess Twilight Sparkle]

Prehistory is rather short, and the jump between 1909AD and 2007AD is rather big given the next few dates are 2011 and 2012.
The rest seems fine though.

[Artstotszka]

In your "Our history" factbook, try to make it more like a historical overview (for example replacing 'we" with "They"). the T-84 is very good, i like how you went into to detail with its specs and history. Other than that, the rest of your factbook is very nice, though a cool idea might be to make a wikipedia-style page for your nations general overview (heres mine as an example:http://www.nationstates.net/nation=artstotszka/detail=factbook/id=170630) if you want the template for that, i can TG it to you

[Drawkland]

It seems like some of them (An interview ..., Pictures from ..., Terran Credit, My Wall) could be better off as dispatches, but that's a personal preference.

Anyway, I agree in the fact that "Our History" skips too much, it could use a bit more meat as well.

"Historic Music of the People" and "Saudian Folk Songs" could use some sort of musical device. Perhaps a link to a YouTube video with the actual music on it if that were possible?

"Doppio Politics" could probably be re-classified in Politics rather than Culture.

Other than that I think it was very good and extremely detailed, a plethora of information.

[Doppio Giudici]

I think I paid everyone.

[Inventio]

I think I paid everyone.

I TG'd mine due to forum screwiness, don't think I got paid. Thanks!

[Eastern Equestria]

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