[PASSED] Repeal "Liberate Slavia" (SC #130)

[Sedgistan]

Repeal "Liberate Slavia"
Category: Repeal | Resolution: SC #130 | Proposed by: The North Polish Union

The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING that the original purpose of SC Resolution #130 "Liberate Slavia" was to prevent the refounding of that region by a hostile occupying force;

COGNIZANT that the liberation served its intended purpose insofar as the occupying forces were unable to turn their conquest into a permanent occupation of the region and that said forces have since been removed, thereby allowing for the original inhabitants to return to their region;

APPLAUDING when such international efforts are made to protect the sovereignty of vulnerable regions such as Slavia;

NOTING that, since the occupying force has since been removed, the continued presence of a liberation on Slavia hinders efforts to bolster the region's security;

FURTHER NOTING that the inability of Slavia to instigate more rigorous security measures may result in a renewed hostile occupation, which would go contrary to the original ideals of SC #130;

BELIEVING that it is the Security Council's duty to aid regions in their efforts to maintain security;

THIS BODY does hereby repeal SC Resolution #130, "Liberate Slavia".

Yeah, I know there's already a thread on this, but since this is an entirely different draft, I feel it warrants its own thread. All constructive comments/criticisms are welcomed.

Repeal "Liberate Slavia"
Category: Repeal | Resolution: SC #130 | Proposed by: The North Polish Union

The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING that the original purpose of SC Resolution #130 "Liberate Slavia" was to prevent the refounding of that region by a hostile occupying force; and

APPLAUDING such international efforts as are made to respect the sovereignty of such vulnerable regions;

NOTING THAT, however, that the occupying force has since been removed and that the continued presence of a liberation on Slavia is a hindrance to efforts to renew the region's security;

FURTHER NOTING that the inability of Slavia to instigate more rigorous security measures may result in a renewed hostile occupation, which would go contrary to the original ideals of SC Resolution # 130;

BELIEVING that, as a body whose duty it it is to "spread interregional peace and goodwill" it is the Security Council's duty to aid regions in their efforts to maintain security;

THIS BODY does hereby repeal SC Resolution #130 "Liberate Slavia".

[Venico]

Woooh! I can use my sleeper then!

[The North Polish Union]

Woooh! I can use my sleeper then!

No. Go back to being Delegate of Osiris so you don't have a mobile WA until this is over.

[Ramaeus]

Not bad. Some changes:

RECOGNIZING that the original purpose of SC Resolution #130 "Liberate Slavia" was to prevent the refounding of that region by a hostile occupying force; and

The "and" at the end of the clause isn't necessary. Also, small stylistic change: have bold + caps at the beginning of each clause. It looks more professional.

APPLAUDING such international efforts as are made to respect the sovereignty of such vulnerable regions;

That clause doesn't flow too well. Suggested clause: "APPLAUDING when international efforts are made to protect the sovereignty of vulnerable regions like Slavia;"

NOTING that, however, that the occupying force has since been removed and that the continued presence of a liberation on Slavia is a hindrance hinders to efforts to renew bolster the region's security;

Removing some unnecessary words, and adding some new ones to make the clause flow better.

FURTHER NOTING that the inability of Slavia to instigate more rigorous security measures may result in a renewed hostile occupation, which would go contrary to the original ideals of SC Resolution # 130;

Not a bad clause.

BELIEVING that, as a body whose duty it it is to "spread interregional peace and goodwill" it is the Security Council's duty to aid regions in their efforts to maintain security;

Eliminating a superfluous part of that clause.

THIS BODY doesHereby repeals SCResolution #130, "Liberate Slavia".

Not too bad. I went ahead and bolded the beginning of each clause, so you get an idea of what it looks like. Also, suggested additions are underlined, and suggested edits have been struck through.

[Port blood]

You submitting this will mean a insta-fail,you know that right?

[Ramaeus]

You submitting this will mean a insta-fail,you know that right?

And you would think AMOM submitting anything would be an instant success, but that is not the case.

[Port blood]

You submitting this will mean a insta-fail,you know that right?

And you would think AMOM submitting anything would be an instant success, but that is not the case.

I mean because hes basically enemy #1 when it comes to this subject

[Ramaeus]

I mean because hes basically enemy #1 when it comes to this subject

There's no way anyone can predict the outcome of a vote, Port blood. Hence why I showed you Commend Francos Spain. As an aside, several knowledgeable people thought that proposal would pass, not fall flat like it did.

[Venico]

Woooh! I can use my sleeper then!

No. Go back to being Delegate of Osiris so you don't have a mobile WA until this is over.

Mate I'm Venicos Left Fist at the moment. The second any repeal passed for Slavia you will see me drop WA.

[The North Polish Union]

Not bad. Some changes:

RECOGNIZING that the original purpose of SC Resolution #130 "Liberate Slavia" was to prevent the refounding of that region by a hostile occupying force; and

The "and" at the end of the clause isn't necessary. Also, small stylistic change: have bold + caps at the beginning of each clause. It looks more professional.

APPLAUDING such international efforts as are made to respect the sovereignty of such vulnerable regions;

That clause doesn't flow too well. Suggested clause: "APPLAUDING when international efforts are made to protect the sovereignty of vulnerable regions like Slavia;"

NOTING that, however, that the occupying force has since been removed and that the continued presence of a liberation on Slavia is a hindrance hinders to efforts to renew bolster the region's security;

Removing some unnecessary words, and adding some new ones to make the clause flow better.

FURTHER NOTING that the inability of Slavia to instigate more rigorous security measures may result in a renewed hostile occupation, which would go contrary to the original ideals of SC Resolution # 130;

Not a bad clause.

BELIEVING that, as a body whose duty it it is to "spread interregional peace and goodwill" it is the Security Council's duty to aid regions in their efforts to maintain security;

Eliminating a superfluous part of that clause.

THIS BODY doesHereby repeals SCResolution #130, "Liberate Slavia".

Not too bad. I went ahead and bolded the beginning of each clause, so you get an idea of what it looks like. Also, suggested additions are underlined, and suggested edits have been struck through.

Thanks for the help!I'll make most of those changes. I just couldn't think of the right English word for what I wanted to say in that clause about hindering security efforts.

Also, I want to use that last clause "THIS BODY does hereby repeal etc." It looks much more formal, IMO.

And you would think AMOM submitting anything would be an instant success, but that is not the case.

I mean because hes basically enemy #1 when it comes to this subject

Its ironic that I'm "enemy #1" on this and also the most raiderist person in the entirety of Slavia. But hey, whatever.

EDIT: Added a new second clause.

[Ramaeus]

Thanks for the help!I'll make most of those changes. I just couldn't think of the right English word for what I wanted to say in that clause about hindering security efforts.

Also, I want to use that last clause "THIS BODY does hereby repeal etc." It looks much more formal, IMO.

Don't mention it. Happy to help.

[The North Polish Union]

I'll submit this tomorrow if there's no further issues brought up.

[Port blood]

Its ironic that I'm "enemy #1" on this and also the most raiderist person in the entirety of Slavia. But hey, whatever.

I was hinting at the arguing with the FRA in the other thread

[The North Polish Union]

Submitted.

[Shnrubton]

We are curious as to how the repealing of SC #130 would bolster security on your region. The resolution at vote was very vague in that respect.

[Consular]

"Coathored by The Ameliorate of Milograd"

Coathored.

[The North Polish Union]

"Coathored by The Ameliorate of Milograd"

Coathored.

Dang...

We are curious as to how the repealing of SC #130 would bolster security on your region. The resolution at vote was very vague in that respect.

It would allow us to put a password back on the region, which is vital to the security of the region right now.

[Mallorea and Riva]

"Coathored by The Ameliorate of Milograd"

Coathored.

0/10 Voting against now.

Poor Milo.

[Port blood]

Ofc against


Want your own region to be secure? don't raid

[The North Polish Union]

Ofc against


Want your own region to be secure? don't raid

The original reason for our being invaded was that we defended...

Maybe "Want your own region to be secure? Don't get involved in R/D ever" would be a better statement, though probably still untrue.

[Sichuan Pepper]

Interesting history of the region. It looks as though it was invader / colonist?

Waback Machine link to the past

[Consular]

And now defenders are helping said invader region protect itself. Pretty cool, huh?

[The North Polish Union]

Interesting history of the region. It looks as though it was invader / colonist?

Waback Machine link to the past

Eh, not really...

I was WAD at the time that was posted and so I usually hardly had any clue what they army was doing, but I do remember people griping on the RMB for days every time we raided someone who hadn't been extremely irritating to us.

Most of those regions were just founded by us originally anyways...

[Port blood]

Interesting history of the region. It looks as though it was invader / colonist?

Waback Machine link to the past

Eh, not really...

I was WAD at the time that was posted and so I usually hardly had any clue what they army was doing, but I do remember people griping on the RMB for days every time we raided someone who hadn't been extremely irritating to us.

Most of those regions were just founded by us originally anyways...

You as the chosen representative of your region are responsible for the actions of your army and your citizens

[Railano]

Railano supports the repeal of liberation resolutions when they are no longer necessary to protect a region. Based on our analysis, it appears this is the case for Slavia.

Accordingly, we intend to vote FOR this proposal.

John McCloskey
Deputy Ambassador to the World Assembly, Kingdom of Railano