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Postby Maowi » Sat Mar 06, 2021 4:39 pm

Grey County wrote:a). Put in place an approval process that must include but is not limited to:
i. A background check,
ii. A home inspection, and
iii. an interview of the prospective Foster Parents,

OOC: What do you want these checks to be used for? As currently written, a member state could implement an approval process involving home inspections etc. to investigate anything at all about the foster parents. I think you could focus more on the purpose and end goal of these checks to make sure that the approval process is maximally useful for identifying who would be suitable as foster parents and who would not be.

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Postby Grey County » Sat Mar 06, 2021 5:51 pm

Maowi wrote:
Grey County wrote:a). Put in place an approval process that must include but is not limited to:
i. A background check,
ii. A home inspection, and
iii. an interview of the prospective Foster Parents,

OOC: What do you want these checks to be used for? As currently written, a member state could implement an approval process involving home inspections etc. to investigate anything at all about the foster parents. I think you could focus more on the purpose and end goal of these checks to make sure that the approval process is maximally useful for identifying who would be suitable as foster parents and who would not be.

Agreed, I will make some changes to that

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Postby Grey County » Thu Mar 11, 2021 10:38 am

Gonna Propose within a week. Once the que empties

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Postby Jedinsto » Thu Mar 11, 2021 11:06 am

Best time would be probably be right when Maritime Vessel Registration goes to vote, because the queue will be completely empty of quorate proposals. (that will be Saturday at minor)
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Postby Maowi » Fri Mar 12, 2021 5:40 pm

OOC: I think you should give it a little more time before submitting :) I think I at least would have some more suggestions to give you if I have a bit more time to go through

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Postby Grey County » Fri Mar 12, 2021 6:00 pm

I underatand what your sayign btu I think ready. if u can get me some before minor I will happily take them into account but if not thats Ok I belive its ready

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Postby Jedinsto » Fri Mar 12, 2021 6:29 pm

Grey County wrote:I underatand what your sayign btu I think ready. if u can get me some before minor I will happily take them into account but if not thats Ok I belive its ready

You should probably wait at least a day or two, I don't think there's anything getting ready to submit, other than mine, of course. And, I'll be courteous and let you go first if you want.
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Postby Scalizagasti » Fri Mar 12, 2021 6:38 pm

Grey County wrote:Acknowledging abortion is not always an option and just because it isn't that it doesn't mean they are ready to support and provide for a baby thus the foster care system being the best option,

This is a run-on sentence which makes it a bit hard to read. Even if it's only the preamble I think it should be reworded.

Grey County wrote:a). Put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents can provide and care for a foster child that must include but is not limited to:
i. A background check,
ii. A home inspection, and
iii. an interview of the prospective Foster Parents,

Like others have mentioned, what sort of background check and home inspection is it?

Grey County wrote:b). Provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive training and help to prepare for a Fostered Youth to join their home and provide additional training to people who wish to foster a child with a disability,

This could be split in two; one clause (or subclause) talking about preparation of foster youth and the other for disability training. Right now this could be misinterpreted as the Fostered Youth providing the training to the parents, rather than member states providing it.

Grey County wrote:c). Conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the Foster Parents are providing suitable support, shelter, and resources for the Fostered youth for a minimum of one (1) year but individual Member states may expand this, and

This is also strangely-worded. It seems like Foster Parents only need to care about proving suitable support for a minimum of one year before they can chuck the foster youth onto the street.

Grey County wrote:d). Establish legislation regarding inspections and penalties for failure to services including but not limited to support, shelter, financial, a suitable education, and emotional resources for the Fostered Youth.

You're missing a word. I assume it should read "failure to provide services" rather than just "failure to services."

Overall it needs a bit more work, I'd recommend making some more edits before submitting :)
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Postby Grey County » Sat Mar 13, 2021 4:30 am

Scalizagasti wrote:
Grey County wrote:Acknowledging abortion is not always an option and just because it isn't that it doesn't mean they are ready to support and provide for a baby thus the foster care system being the best option,

This is a run-on sentence which makes it a bit hard to read. Even if it's only the preamble I think it should be reworded.

Grey County wrote:a). Put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents can provide and care for a foster child that must include but is not limited to:
i. A background check,
ii. A home inspection, and
iii. an interview of the prospective Foster Parents,

Like others have mentioned, what sort of background check and home inspection is it?

Grey County wrote:b). Provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive training and help to prepare for a Fostered Youth to join their home and provide additional training to people who wish to foster a child with a disability,

This could be split in two; one clause (or subclause) talking about preparation of foster youth and the other for disability training. Right now this could be misinterpreted as the Fostered Youth providing the training to the parents, rather than member states providing it.

Grey County wrote:c). Conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the Foster Parents are providing suitable support, shelter, and resources for the Fostered youth for a minimum of one (1) year but individual Member states may expand this, and

This is also strangely-worded. It seems like Foster Parents only need to care about proving suitable support for a minimum of one year before they can chuck the foster youth onto the street.

Grey County wrote:d). Establish legislation regarding inspections and penalties for failure to services including but not limited to support, shelter, financial, a suitable education, and emotional resources for the Fostered Youth.

You're missing a word. I assume it should read "failure to provide services" rather than just "failure to services."

Overall it needs a bit more work, I'd recommend making some more edits before submitting :)

I’m gonna make these edits. Will update OP

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Postby Tinhampton » Sat Mar 13, 2021 4:55 am

Optimistic Tin: Why is this still classed as "Ready to Submit" if you admit that "I'm gonna make these edits?" :P

Pessimistic Tin: Imperium Anglorum and Jedinsto have already given you perfectly good advice about how to use [list] tags; why should I expect you to "make these edits" if you can't even make those edits?
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Postby Grey County » Sat Mar 13, 2021 7:18 am

Tinhampton wrote:Optimistic Tin: Why is this still classed as "Ready to Submit" if you admit that "I'm gonna make these edits?" :P

Pessimistic Tin: Imperium Anglorum and Jedinsto have already given you perfectly good advice about how to use [list] tags; why should I expect you to "make these edits" if you can't even make those edits?

I thought it was ready to submit but then those were suggested. I didnt understand how to do the list tags even after reading the explanations but thankfuly Jed, Bless his heart is gonna do it for me.

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Postby Grey County » Sat Mar 13, 2021 7:36 am

List tags added. Thanks Jed!

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Postby Grey County » Sat Mar 13, 2021 10:06 am

Since Tinn just submitted a proosal Im gonna delay till after. If yall have any suggestions go ahead but I believe its ready for when his is over.

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Postby Hulldom » Sat Mar 13, 2021 5:40 pm

Ambassador Rosenkranz silently pulls out a blue Bic pen, his favorite type of pen.

"Well, this is certainly a great idea in theory, Ambassador, but let me take a look at the draft circular and separate the good from the bad."

Grey County wrote:The World Assembly,

Noting that not all parents can provide the necessary support that young children and youth need,

Acknowledging abortion is not always an option and thus the foster care system being the best option,

Acknowledging that the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need,

"You could absolutely combine these two clauses, sir. I would suggest: 'Acknowledging abortion always an option and thus the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides support and resources for some young children and youth.'"

Noting that in some scenarios the system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to the people in the system,

"You could cut 'cause damage to the people in the system' and change it to 'cause damage to those in it' and it would work just as well."

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the youth and young children that so desperately need the support of the system,

Hereby:

1. Defines:

  1. "Foster care" as the care of youth and young children that are not able to be cared for by their biological parents in the hope that they can be adopted,
  2. "Foster parent" as a person who is charged with the care of fostered youth before they are adopted, and
  3. "Fostered youth" as a person under the age of legal competency who’s in the Foster Care system; and

"Two things:

1. In our opinion, this is not a great definition of 'foster care'. I would add 'a state-supported service which cares for' instead of 'as the care of'.

2. In your definition of fostered youth' you don't need to capitalize foster care and who's should be more formally written out as 'who is'."

2. Mandates member states to:

  1. Put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents can provide and care for a foster child that must include but is not limited to:
    i. A background check that will look over criminal and social past history to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as a foster parent,
    ii. A home inspection to determine whether they have a suitable home environment, and
    iii. an interview of the prospective Foster Parents to get to know the prospective foster parents better,


"A few things:

1. 'that will look' should change over to 'looks' in the 2(a) clause.

2. Additionally, eliminate the 'and social' bit after 'criminal', it is not necessary.

3. Capitalize 'an' if you plan to capitalize all of your sub-clauses."

b. Provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive training from the memberstates and help to prepare for a Fostered Youth to join their home.

c. Provide additional training to those who wish to foster a child with a disability

d. Conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the Foster Parents are providing suitable support, shelter, and resources for the Fostered youth.

e. Establish legislation regarding inspections and penalties for failure to provide services including but not limited to support, shelter, financial, a suitable education, and emotional resources for the Fostered Youth.

"Once again, a few things:

1. 'memberstates' should have a space between the two words.

2. Add a full stop after disability in 2(b)

3. Neither Foster Parents and Fostered Youth need to be capitalized anywhere.

4. If you're going to be regulating the foster care system, I'd suggest elaborating on 2(e) instead of calling this a day-unless you, of course, are suggesting our only obligation is to simply require the creation of a foster care system, which doesn't seem wise."

OOC: Sorry for screwing up the list. This was just like the best way to do it.
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Postby Grey County » Sat Mar 13, 2021 5:43 pm

Hulldom wrote:Ambassador Rosenkranz silently pulls out a blue Bic pen, his favorite type of pen.

"Well, this is certainly a great idea in theory, Ambassador, but let me take a look at the draft circular and separate the good from the bad."

Grey County wrote:The World Assembly,

Noting that not all parents can provide the necessary support that young children and youth need,

Acknowledging abortion is not always an option and thus the foster care system being the best option,

Acknowledging that the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need,

"You could absolutely combine these two clauses, sir. I would suggest: 'Acknowledging abortion always an option and thus the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides support and resources for some young children and youth.'"

Noting that in some scenarios the system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to the people in the system,

"You could cut 'cause damage to the people in the system' and change it to 'cause damage to those in it' and it would work just as well."

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the youth and young children that so desperately need the support of the system,

Hereby:

1. Defines:

  1. "Foster care" as the care of youth and young children that are not able to be cared for by their biological parents in the hope that they can be adopted,
  2. "Foster parent" as a person who is charged with the care of fostered youth before they are adopted, and
  3. "Fostered youth" as a person under the age of legal competency who’s in the Foster Care system; and

"Two things:

1. In our opinion, this is not a great definition of 'foster care'. I would add 'a state-supported service which cares for' instead of 'as the care of'.

2. In your definition of fostered youth' you don't need to capitalize foster care and who's should be more formally written out as 'who is'."

2. Mandates member states to:

  1. Put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents can provide and care for a foster child that must include but is not limited to:
    i. A background check that will look over criminal and social past history to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as a foster parent,
    ii. A home inspection to determine whether they have a suitable home environment, and
    iii. an interview of the prospective Foster Parents to get to know the prospective foster parents better,


"A few things:

1. 'that will look' should change over to 'looks' in the 2(a) clause.

2. Additionally, eliminate the 'and social' bit after 'criminal', it is not necessary.

3. Capitalize 'an' if you plan to capitalize all of your sub-clauses."

b. Provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive training from the memberstates and help to prepare for a Fostered Youth to join their home.

c. Provide additional training to those who wish to foster a child with a disability

d. Conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the Foster Parents are providing suitable support, shelter, and resources for the Fostered youth.

e. Establish legislation regarding inspections and penalties for failure to provide services including but not limited to support, shelter, financial, a suitable education, and emotional resources for the Fostered Youth.

"Once again, a few things:

1. 'memberstates' should have a space between the two words.

2. Add a full stop after disability in 2(b)

3. Neither Foster Parents and Fostered Youth need to be capitalized anywhere.

4. If you're going to be regulating the foster care system, I'd suggest elaborating on 2(e) instead of calling this a day-unless you, of course, are suggesting our only obligation is to simply require the creation of a foster care system, which doesn't seem wise."

OOC: Sorry for screwing up the list. This was just like the best way to do it.

Since there seems to be more I can do to make my proposal better. I will be tkaing ur suggestions and moving them to LAST CALL for a SHORT period of time and we could still propose on schedule but if not then it may be worth it

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OOC: Typing on mobile for extensive wording help is very annoying, so if you're willing to push back submission by 24 hours, I should have time to get to my computer and type in my suggestions.

But something your draft seems to miss is category and strength or AoE.

Also, general advice; drop any mentions of abortion. It's unnecessary to do what you want done and will just serve to derail conversation if and when this gets to vote. Additionally in RL at least the vast majority of fostered kids are in the system because their parents are not fit to be parents, not because they were unwanted babies.

And lastly for now, Prevention of Child Abuse covers all minors, not just little children - in regards to the abuse mentioned at least in 2.e.
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Araraukar wrote:OOC: Typing on mobile for extensive wording help is very annoying, so if you're willing to push back submission by 24 hours, I should have time to get to my computer and type in my suggestions.

But something your draft seems to miss is category and strength or AoE.

Also, general advice; drop any mentions of abortion. It's unnecessary to do what you want done and will just serve to derail conversation if and when this gets to vote. Additionally in RL at least the vast majority of fostered kids are in the system because their parents are not fit to be parents, not because they were unwanted babies.

And lastly for now, Prevention of Child Abuse covers all minors, not just little children - in regards to the abuse mentioned at least in 2.e.

if you scroll a bit up on the thread we decided on a Aoe and Strength. I will add it ot the op. I will look at what you mean about 2e and I may just remove the abortion part

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Postby Maowi » Sun Mar 14, 2021 4:50 pm

Grey County wrote:The World Assembly,

Noting that not all parents can provide the necessary support that young children and youth need,

Acknowledging having a youth stay with their biological parents is not always an option and [you have an extra space here] thus the foster care system is anecessary thing that providesto provide the support and resources that young children and youth need,

Acknowledging that the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need, [this just seems like a repetition of the above line - you could remove it]

Noting that in some scenarios the system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to those in it,

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the youth and young children that so desperately need the support of the system,

Hereby:

1. Defines:

  1. "Foster care" as a state-supported service whichthat cares for youth and young children that are not able to be cared for by their biological parents in the hope that they can be adopted,
  2. "Foster parent" as a person who is charged with the care of fostered youth before they are adopted, and
  3. "Fostered youth" as a person under the age of majoritylegal competency who’sin the foster care system; and [seeing as you use the term "foster youth" in the "foster parent" definition, I would switch around their order]


OOC: I left some thoughts and suggestions in red, the parts with the strike-through being those I think you should remove.

[list=a][*]Put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents can provide and care for a foster child that must include but is not limited to:
i. A background check that looks at criminal past history to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as a foster parent,
ii. A home inspection to determine whether they have a suitable home environment, and
iii. An interview of the prospective Foster Parents to get to know the prospective foster parents better,


"I am of the opinion that a greater focus on the goal of this measure than on the particular means of reaching it would be beneficial. For example, part iii. is really quite vaguely worded and does not necessarily add anything constructive to the process. A possibility could be to expand on the requirement that potential foster parents "can provide and care" for the child. What do they need to be able to provide, and what kind of care do they need to give the child?"

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OOC post.

Grey County wrote:Noting that not all parents can provide the necessary support that young children and youth need,

Given other resolutions that classify all minors as children, I don't really see any reason to separate children and... what are youths, here? Teenagers? You could just use "minors" instead.

Acknowledging having a youth stay with their biological parents is not always an option and thus the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need,

I get what you mean, here, but I think you really should stop advertizing the foster system and pick a side. Like, given this is civil rights, presumably you're on the kids' side here? Try rewriting the preamble to emphasize from the children's wellbeing's side why they need to sometimes be taken from their parents, temporarily or not, and why children's wellbeing matters on the national scale. I know, they're kinda obvious, but the preamble is for making the obvious clear to all, when you're talking about people's rights.

Acknowledging that the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need,

Unnecessary repetition between this and the previous one. Also, the foster system is usually augmenting other social services and usually the hope is to either return the children to their parents or get them adopted. You might want to mention it, instead of creating this thing that takes children from their parents without anything existing outside of it. You want to make this thing part of the whole system, not a disjointed thing outside of all other social services. (There is a resolution about adoptions, check it out.)

Noting that in some scenarios the system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to those in it,

This is a case of "obviously, but you don't want to say it as a fact". You instead want to say something to the tune of wanting to prevent situations where the children might be rescued from one bad living situation just to end up in another.

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the youth and young children that so desperately need the support of the system,

I'd leave this out entirely. If you want to make the internationality of this whole thing obvious, just saying it's your opinion, is not going to cut the mustard. Maybe instead go for a platitude like "Hoping to improve the lives of minors everywhere" or something like that. Leave out any desperation as well. Be reassuring that you've got the fix for any problems, here, rather than going "oh those poor little darlings, they need nanny state handholding to be saved".

[list=a][*]"Foster care" as a state-supported service which cares for youth and young children that are not able to be cared for by their biological parents in the hope that they can be adopted,

So you're NOT including kids only temporarily (hopefully) removed from parents so their parents can get their shit together and become better parents? Why?

"Foster parent" as a person who is charged with the care of fostered youth before they are adopted, and

KISS principle edit.

"Fostered youth" as a person under the age of legal competency who’s in the foster care system; and

Define terms before you use them. Make this come before "foster parent". Also, leave out the "and" at the end, as the list of definitions isn't continuing.

Put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents can provide and care for a foster child that must include but is not limited to:

Instead of "put in place", I suggest "create (an approval process) if such does not already exist", because chances are most nations already have something like this.

i. A background check that looks at criminal past history to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as a foster parent,

Don't limit it to criminality on purpose. Let nations decide what all they want to check to make sure the fosterers are suitable.

ii. A home inspection to determine whether they have a suitably safe home environment, and

Safety is important here, across the proposal.

iii. An interview of the prospective Foster Parents to get to know the prospective foster parents better,

Who gets to know them? And random capitaliation there to fix.

Provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive training from the member states and help to prepare for a fostered youth to join their home.

You don't need to separately tell them to fund things, if you tell them to give the foster parents training to ensure they're doing a good job.

Provide additional training to those who wish to foster a child with a disability.

You need to choose if you're going to use "child/children" or "minor/minors" throughout the resolution. Pick one style and stick to it. And then fix the defintition to match.

Conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the foster parents are providing suitable support, shelter, and resources for the fostered youth.

Use "suitable and adequate support and resources", because shelter is a resource, and mentioning it separately sounds like you're talking about rescued pets, not people. You might want to replace it with "services".

Establish additional legislation regarding inspections, and penalties for failure to provide the necessary services including but not limited to support, shelter, financial, a suitable education, and emotional resources for the fostered youth as well as any abuse of or mistreatment of fostered youth that must to deter abusers of the system and those who wish to do harm to fostered youth

Additions, also notice the comma added after "inspections", as that way it reads as "establish penalties for failure etc.".
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Postby Grey County » Sun Mar 14, 2021 5:29 pm

Alright so this is gonna take awhile to put in these last 2 so Im gonna return to drafting until its ready, Postoponing submitting indefinitley

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Postby Biliancheseing » Mon Mar 15, 2021 10:15 pm

Grey County wrote:This is my first draft and would love to hear your ideas on it.
I understand it probably needs a lot of work but I decided that the first draft doesn't need to be perfect It just needs to be something.
So here it is, enjoy.
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The World Assembly,

Noting that not all parents can provide the necessary support that young children and youth need,

Acknowledging having a youth stay with their biological parents is not always an option and thus the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need,

Acknowledging that the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need,

Noting that in some scenarios the system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to those in it,

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the youth and young children that so desperately need the support of the system,

Hereby:

1. Defines:

  1. "Foster care" as a state-supported service which cares for youth and young children that are not able to be cared for by their biological parents in the hope that they can be adopted,
  2. "Foster parent" as a person who is charged with the care of fostered youth before they are adopted, and
  3. "Fostered youth" as a person under the age of legal competency who’s in the foster care system; and

2. Mandates member states to:

  1. Put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents can provide and care for a foster child that must include but is not limited to:
    i. A background check that looks at criminal past history to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as a foster parent,
    ii. A home inspection to determine whether they have a suitable home environment, and
    iii. An interview of the prospective Foster Parents to get to know the prospective foster parents better,
  2. Provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive training from the member states and help to prepare for a fostered youth to join their home.
  3. Provide additional training to those who wish to foster a child with a disability.
  4. Conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the foster parents are providing suitable support, shelter, and resources for the fostered youth.
  5. Establish legislation regarding inspections and penalties for failure to provide services including but not limited to support, shelter, financial, a suitable education, and emotional resources for the fostered youth as well as abuse of or mistreatment of fostered youth that must deter abusers of the system and those who wish to do harm to fostered youth

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Postby Grey County » Fri Mar 19, 2021 6:07 am

will do the edits later today, Hope to submit Monday

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Postby Maowi » Fri Mar 19, 2021 10:21 am

Grey County wrote:will do the edits later today, Hope to submit Monday

OOC: I don't mean to be annoying, but please please take your time and consider waiting a bit longer to submit!!! These are some quite extensive suggestions/changes you're looking at putting in, and people will need time to absorb them and leave thoughts and feedback on your execution of them. In general, I think it's only really a good idea to specify a date for submission after you haven't had new criticisms for a while.

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Postby Grey County » Mon Mar 22, 2021 10:00 am

Maowi wrote:
Grey County wrote:will do the edits later today, Hope to submit Monday

OOC: I don't mean to be annoying, but please please take your time and consider waiting a bit longer to submit!!! These are some quite extensive suggestions/changes you're looking at putting in, and people will need time to absorb them and leave thoughts and feedback on your execution of them. In general, I think it's only really a good idea to specify a date for submission after you haven't had new criticisms for a while.

Agreed and since my computer is in for maintanaence have to delay anyways

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Postby Araraukar » Thu Mar 25, 2021 9:55 am

OOC: This took longer than I thought, but here's some problems and fixes for them:

Grey County wrote:
The World Assembly,

Noting Aware that not all some guardians of minors parents can cannot provide the necessary support that safe living conditions to that young children and youth need minors under their care,

Acknowledging that a minor having to a youth stay with their biological parents current guardian is not always an the best option for them and (extra space here) thus the (extra space here) foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need necessary to support them,

Acknowledging that the foster care system is a necessary thing that provides the support and resources that young children and youth need, (already said in the previous one)

Noting Also noting that in some scenarios the foster care system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to those in it the very minors it should protect,

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the youth and young children minors that so desperately are in desperate need for the support of the foster care system,

Hereby:

1. Defines:

  1. "Foster the foster care system" as a state-supported service which cares for youth and young children places minors in need of safer living conditions than their current guardian can provide, under the care of a new guardian, that are not able to be cared for by their biological parents in the hope hopes that they can be adopted, (why only adoption?)
  2. "Fostered youth a fostered minor" as a person under the age of legal competency who’s minor placed in the foster care system, and
  3. "Foster a foster parent" as a person state designated guardian who is in charge of charged with the care of a fostered youth minor before they are adopted, and (seriously, why only adoption?)

2. Mandates member states to:

  1. Put put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parents parent can provide and appropriate care for a foster child fostered minor, that must include but is not limited to:
    i. A a background check that looks (I think "looks" is too informal but can't currently think of a better word) at the criminal past history of the prospective foster parent to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as a foster parent as the new guardian of a fostered minor,
    ii. A home an inspection of the prospective foster parent's home to determine whether they have a suitable home environment suitable to a minor, and
    iii. An an interview of the prospective Foster Parents foster parent to get to know the prospective foster parents better (this I can't replace without knowing who is to "get to know" them - the minor? the state?),
  2. Provide provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive appropriate training from the member states and help to prepare them for a fostered youth to join minor's arrival to their home.
  3. Provide provide additional training to those who wish to foster a child minors with a disability disabilities,
  4. Conduct conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the foster parents are parent is providing suitable safety, support, shelter, and resources for the fostered youth minor,
  5. Establish establish legislation regarding
    1. the inspections and penalties for failure to provide services including but not limited to support, shelter, financial, a suitable education, at least the minimum necessities, and emotional and psychological resources support for the fostered youth minor,
    2. as well as any abuse of or mistreatment of a fostered youth minor that must to deter abusers of from benefiting from the foster care system and those who wish to do harm to fostered youth (you don't really need the "to do harm" bit when you have already addressed abuse)


These changes would make the whole thing read:

The World Assembly,

Aware that some guardians of minors cannot provide safe living conditions to minors under their care,

Acknowledging that a minor having to stay with their current guardian is not always the best option for them and thus the foster care system is necessary to support them,

Also noting that in some scenarios the foster care system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to the very minors it should protect,

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the minors that are in desperate need for the support of the foster care system,

Hereby:

1. Defines:

  1. "the foster care system" as a state-supported service which places minors in need of safer living conditions than their current guardian can provide, under the care of a new guardian, in the hopes that they can be adopted,
  2. "a fostered minor" as a minor placed in the foster care system, and
  3. "a foster parent" as a state designated guardian who is in charge of the care of a fostered minor before they are adopted,

2. Mandates member states to:

  1. put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parent can provide appropriate care for a fostered minor, that must include but is not limited to:
    1. a background check that looks at the past history of the prospective foster parent to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as the new guardian of a fostered minor,
    2. an inspection of the prospective foster parent's home to determine whether they have a home environment suitable to a minor, and
    3. an interview of the prospective foster parent (this I can't replace without knowing who is to "get to know" them - the minor? the state?)
  2. provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive appropriate training and help to prepare them for a fostered minor's arrival to their home,
  3. provide additional training to those who wish to foster minors with disabilities,
  4. conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the foster parent is providing suitable safety, support, shelter, and resources for the fostered minor,
  5. establish legislation regarding
    1. the inspections and penalties for failure to provide at least the minimum necessities, and emotional and psychological support for the fostered minor,
    2. any abuse or mistreatment of a fostered minor to deter abusers from benefiting from the foster care system.


And with the code included:
Code: Select all
[box]The World Assembly,

Aware that some guardians of minors cannot provide safe living conditions to minors under their care,

Acknowledging that a minor having to stay with their current guardian is not always the best option for them and thus the foster care system is necessary to support them,

Also noting that in some scenarios the foster care system can inadvertently or maliciously be taken advantage of and cause damage to the very minors it should protect,

Certain that there is a need for international regulations and restrictions to protect the minors that are in desperate need for the support of the foster care system,

Hereby:

1. Defines:

[list=a][*]"the foster care system" as a state-supported service which places minors in need of safer living conditions than their current guardian can provide, under the care of a new guardian, in the hopes that they can be adopted,
[*]"a fostered minor" as a minor placed in the foster care system, and
[*]"a foster parent" as a state designated guardian who is in charge of the care of a fostered minor before they are adopted,[/list]

2. Mandates member states to:

[list=a][*]put in place an approval process to determine whether the prospective foster parent can provide appropriate care for a fostered minor, that must include but is not limited to:
[list=i][*]a background check that looks at the past history of the prospective foster parent to determine whether they are a safe and suitable option as the new guardian of a fostered minor,
[*]an inspection of the prospective foster parent's home to determine whether they have a home environment suitable to a minor, and
[*]an interview of the prospective foster parent [color=#BF0000](this I can't replace without knowing who is to "get to know" them - the minor? the state?)[/color][/list]
[*]provide funding to the foster care system to ensure that prospective foster parents can receive appropriate training and help to prepare them for a fostered minor's arrival to their home,
[*]provide additional training to those who wish to foster minors with disabilities,
[*]conduct post-placement inspections to make sure that the foster parent is providing suitable safety, support, shelter, and resources for the fostered minor,
[*]establish legislation regarding
[list=i][*]the inspections and penalties for failure to provide at least the minimum necessities, and emotional and psychological support for the fostered minor,
[*]any abuse or mistreatment of a fostered minor to deter abusers from benefiting from the foster care system.[/list][/list][/box]

If you want to use this slight rewrite, you can just click the "select all" on the code box and use copy function to copy the draft with all the changes and list code and whatnot to post in your first post of the thread.

And obviously the final version has one bit that needs sorting out. It's included in the code version too, so it will stand out.
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