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[DRAFT] Cleaner Future Act of 2021

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New American Democracy
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Proposal

Postby New American Democracy » Sun Feb 21, 2021 11:11 am

Can you all tell me what you think of this proposal? would it pass? Is it legal? please review it for me, it would be an excellent help!

The General Assembly,
Acknowledging that fossil fuels, such as coal, and oil are very important to the economies of member nations.
However concerned with the effects of using these resources for centuries.
Seeking to find better sources of energy that will build a better economy on the national and international level.
Hereby:
1. Defines the following terms:
a.) Climate Change: A global change in climate, hot or cold, caused by natural weather or human interference.
b.) Global Warming: An increase in the average temperature on a global scale, caused by many factors, especially human interference.
c.) Global Cooling: A decline in global average temperatures.
2.
a.)Establishes a committee of 100 member WA nations of diverse political ideologies, known as the "International Economic & Climate Committee", or "IECC", to investigate causes of global climate change, and to create bipartisan resolutions that will have a positive impact on member nations' economies, and a positive impact on the global economy, also providing solutions that will give future generations a cleaner future with billions of clean energy jobs worldwide.

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Jedinsto
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Postby Jedinsto » Sun Feb 21, 2021 11:22 am

This is illegal because of the committee rule: your proposal's only action cannot be to establish/change the job of a committee, and you cannot define who gets to staff said committee. Also, these are my tips for the proposal itself- make the title of the thread [DRAFT] My proposal name. Instead of "defines these terms," just put "defines;" and everything needs a bit of polishing.

Edit: also, you should read some old resolutions to see how they are written (I'm not saying to plagiarize), and take some notes on formatting and such. Also, I recommend reading the rules for proposals.
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New American Democracy
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Postby New American Democracy » Sun Feb 21, 2021 11:26 am

Jedinsto wrote:This is illegal because of the committee rule: your proposal's only action cannot be to establish/change the job of a committee, and you cannot define who gets to staff said committee. Also, these are my tips for the proposal itself- make the title of the thread [DRAFT] My proposal name. Instead of "defines these terms," just put "defines;" and everything needs a bit of polishing.

Edit: also, you should read some old resolutions to see how they are written (I'm not saying to plagiarize), and take some notes on formatting and such. Also, I recommend reading the rules for proposals.




Thanks, so does that mean i can establish a committee if theres another purpose of the legislation?

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Postby Jedinsto » Sun Feb 21, 2021 11:27 am

New American Democracy wrote:
Jedinsto wrote:This is illegal because of the committee rule: your proposal's only action cannot be to establish/change the job of a committee, and you cannot define who gets to staff said committee. Also, these are my tips for the proposal itself- make the title of the thread [DRAFT] My proposal name. Instead of "defines these terms," just put "defines;" and everything needs a bit of polishing.

Edit: also, you should read some old resolutions to see how they are written (I'm not saying to plagiarize), and take some notes on formatting and such. Also, I recommend reading the rules for proposals.




Thanks, so does that mean i can establish a committee if theres another purpose of the legislation?

Correct, as long as you remove the staffing rules.
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Communism, socialism, nukes, fascism, Trump

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New American Democracy
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Postby New American Democracy » Sun Feb 21, 2021 11:29 am

Jedinsto wrote:
New American Democracy wrote:


Thanks, so does that mean i can establish a committee if theres another purpose of the legislation?

Correct, as long as you remove the staffing rules.




Thank you so much.

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Cleaner Future Act of 2021

Postby New American Democracy » Sun Feb 21, 2021 11:46 am

Jedinsto wrote:This is illegal because of the committee rule: your proposal's only action cannot be to establish/change the job of a committee, and you cannot define who gets to staff said committee. Also, these are my tips for the proposal itself- make the title of the thread [DRAFT] My proposal name. Instead of "defines these terms," just put "defines;" and everything needs a bit of polishing.

Edit: also, you should read some old resolutions to see how they are written (I'm not saying to plagiarize), and take some notes on formatting and such. Also, I recommend reading the rules for proposals.


Is this better, would it pass now?

The General Assembly,
Acknowledging that fossil fuels, such as coal, and oil are very important to the economies of member nations.
However concerned with the effects of using these resources for centuries.
Seeking to find better sources of energy that will build a better economy on the national and international level.
Hereby:
1. Defines the following terms:
a.) Climate Change: A global change in climate, hot or cold, caused by natural weather or human interference.
b.) Global Warming: An increase in the average temperature on a global scale, caused by many factors, especially human interference.
c.) Global Cooling: A decline in global average temperatures.
2.
a.)Establishes a committee known as the "International Economic & Climate Committee", or "IECC", to investigate causes of global climate change, and to create bipartisan resolutions that will have a positive impact on member nations' economies, and a positive impact on the global economy, also providing solutions that will give future generations a cleaner future with billions of clean energy jobs worldwide. 3.
a.) Bans the usage of all vehicles powered on fossil fuels, with the exception of Aircraft, by calendar year two thousand thirty-six.
b.) Strongly encourages member nations to invest in wind, solar, and other clean renewable energies,
c.) Strongly encourages member nations to fund research into cleaner air travel.

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Jedinsto
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Postby Jedinsto » Sun Feb 21, 2021 11:56 am

New American Democracy wrote:
Jedinsto wrote:This is illegal because of the committee rule: your proposal's only action cannot be to establish/change the job of a committee, and you cannot define who gets to staff said committee. Also, these are my tips for the proposal itself- make the title of the thread [DRAFT] My proposal name. Instead of "defines these terms," just put "defines;" and everything needs a bit of polishing.

Edit: also, you should read some old resolutions to see how they are written (I'm not saying to plagiarize), and take some notes on formatting and such. Also, I recommend reading the rules for proposals.


Is this better, would it pass now?

The General Assembly,
Acknowledging that fossil fuels, such as coal, and oil are very important to the economies of member nations.
However concerned with the effects of using these resources for centuries.
Seeking to find better sources of energy that will build a better economy on the national and international level.
Hereby:
1. Defines the following terms:
a.) Climate Change: A global change in climate, hot or cold, caused by natural weather or human interference.
b.) Global Warming: An increase in the average temperature on a global scale, caused by many factors, especially human interference.
c.) Global Cooling: A decline in global average temperatures.
2.
a.)Establishes a committee known as the "International Economic & Climate Committee", or "IECC", to investigate causes of global climate change, and to create bipartisan resolutions that will have a positive impact on member nations' economies, and a positive impact on the global economy, also providing solutions that will give future generations a cleaner future with billions of clean energy jobs worldwide. 3.
a.) Bans the usage of all vehicles powered on fossil fuels, with the exception of Aircraft, by calendar year two thousand thirty-six.
b.) Strongly encourages member nations to invest in wind, solar, and other clean renewable energies,
c.) Strongly encourages member nations to fund research into cleaner air travel.

First of all, slow down. You're making a mistake I made too, and that's rushing the hell out of the proposal. Take it slow, this process usually takes several weeks before the product is passable. Again, make the title of the thread "[Draft] Proposal name." Also, instead of making a new reply when you have a new draft, make the edits in the original post. Also, I highly doubt clause 2a would even be legal, and I can guarantee it's not remotely passable. And, don't take my word for it, but I'm pretty certain clause 3a would be illegal for contradictions, and again, I guarantee it would not pass. Take your time with this, take suggestions, and maybe you will get a passable product. I do commend your bravery in writing a proposal.
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Capitalism, centrism, abortion, environment, civil rights
Communism, socialism, nukes, fascism, Trump

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New American Democracy
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[DRAFT] Cleaner Future Act of 2021

Postby New American Democracy » Sun Feb 21, 2021 12:16 pm

Hello, I hope you are having a wonderful day! Over the next week or two, I would love to hear your thoughts on my proposal. This includes opinions on the issue I am addressing, any recommendations to make it more formal or better overall, and especially your review on the legality. I would have much appreciation if you could take a moment of your time to review this.
Proposal:
The General Assembly,
Acknowledging that fossil fuels, such as coal, and oil are very important to the economies of member nations.
However concerned with the effects of using these resources for centuries.
Seeking to find better sources of energy that will build a better economy on the national and international level.
Hereby:
1. Defines:
a.) Climate Change: A global change in climate, hot or cold, caused by natural weather or human interference.
b.) Global Warming: An increase in the average temperature on a global scale, caused by many factors, especially human interference.
c.) Global Cooling: A decline in global average temperatures.
2.
a.)Establishes a committee known as the "International Economic & Climate Committee", or "IECC", to investigate causes of global climate change, and to create bipartisan resolutions that will have a positive impact on member nations' economies, and a positive impact on the global economy, also providing solutions that will give future generations a cleaner future with billions of clean energy jobs worldwide. 3.
a.) Bans the usage of vehicles powered on fossil fuels, with the exception of Aircraft, by calendar year two thousand thirty-six.
b.) Strongly encourages member nations to invest in wind, solar, and other clean renewable energies.
c.) Strongly encourages member nations to fund research into cleaner air travel.

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Imperium Anglorum
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Postby Imperium Anglorum » Sun Feb 21, 2021 1:29 pm

We did global warming mitigation already in Greenhouse Gas Cap and Trade.

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Postby Outer Sparta » Sun Feb 21, 2021 2:04 pm

Why do you have two separate threads on this?
social democracy, environmental protection, universal healthcare, free college, social equality, LGBT, pro-choice,
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New American Democracy
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Postby New American Democracy » Sun Feb 21, 2021 2:19 pm

Imperium Anglorum wrote:We did global warming mitigation already in Greenhouse Gas Cap and Trade.

Yes, I’ve read it. What I’m proposing is much different.

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Postby Scalizagasti » Sun Feb 21, 2021 3:03 pm

OOC: Welcome to the World Assembly!

Global warming/cooling are terms you have defined but have not used, meaning defining them isn't necessary to begin with. You also mention "bipartisan resolutions" which doesn't make sense in the context of the NS WA for two reasons. First, there aren't any political parties, and second, committees can't draft resolutions. Your reference to 2036 is a bit arbitrary and also doesn't make sense in the context of the WA. For reference, member states don't necessarily have 21st century technology. Some countries are medieval, others are already colonizing space. Furthermore not every country uses the same calendar, so using 2036 as a standard would not work.

In terms of writing style and formatting, I would recommend reading through existing resolutions and see how they are written and formatted. For instance, you don't need a subclause a) for clause 2 if there are no subclauses b, c, d, etc.
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Postby Imperium Anglorum » Sun Feb 21, 2021 3:15 pm

New American Democracy wrote:
Imperium Anglorum wrote:We did global warming mitigation already in Greenhouse Gas Cap and Trade.

Yes, I’ve read it. What I’m proposing is much different.

How is it different?

If you want to promote clean energy, we did that already, viewtopic.php?p=27599850#p27599850.

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Postby Outer Sparta » Sun Feb 21, 2021 3:17 pm

To OP: please edit your draft you have in your opening instead of inserting it randomly in the middle of the thread.
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