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[Draft] Ban on Plastics in Cosmetics

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[Draft] Ban on Plastics in Cosmetics

Postby Saint Jonas » Wed Feb 10, 2021 1:59 am

Environment | Manufacturing
Prior discussion also took place here

The World Assembly,

Realizing that synthetic polymers are used in cosmetic products as abrasives, binders and fillers in creams, peelings or shower gels. Consumers are often not aware that many of their cosmetic and personal care products contain plastics because there is no understandable reference on the packaging. The average consumer does not know that behind "polymethyl methacrylate" or "polyethylene terephthalate" plastic is hidden. Thus, they are subconsciously endangering the environment by buying consumable personal care products and cosmetics containing plastics if these plastics can be spat out or rinsed off.

Concerned that studies show that synthetic polymers pose a significant threat to the marine ecosystem and that marine organisms absorb these plastics. Due to ocean currents, this happens all over the world. In addition, the plastic particles ingested are often highly polluted because plastics bind pollutants like magnets. The effects of synthetic polymers on marine life include physiological disorders and increased death rates. When contaminated seafood is eaten, plastics end up in human bodies.

Stating that cosmetics don't need plastics. This is because synthetic polymers in cosmetics can be replaced by natural substances such as salts or cellulose.

Hereby bans synthetic polymers in consumable personal care products and cosmetics if the contained plastics can be spat out or rinsed off.

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The World Assembly,

Realizing that synthetic polymers are used as abrasives, binders and fillers in creams, peelings or shower gels but consumers are often not aware that many of these personal care products contain plastics because there is no understandable reference on the packaging,

Concerned about the threat to the marine ecosystem as well as studies showing that plastics are absorbed by marine organisms and eventually end up in human bodies when seafood is eaten,

Stating that personal care products don't need plastics because synthetic polymers in cosmetics can be replaced by natural substances such as salts or cellulose.

Hereby defines:
  1. "plastic" as a synthetic polymeric substance that can be extruded, moulded or physically manipulated into various solid forms and that retains its final manufactured shape during use in its intended applications,
  2. "personal care product" as any substance, or mixture of substances, manufactured for the purpose of being applied to the human body in the course of any personal care treatment,
  3. "personal care treatment" as any process of cleaning, protecting or scenting any part of the human body or changing its appearance.


Hereby bans plastics in personal care products.
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Postby Astrobolt » Wed Feb 10, 2021 1:06 pm

OOC: I would strongly advise that you draft here first, for at least two weeks (and ideally even longer), before you submit your proposal.
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Postby Scalizagasti » Wed Feb 10, 2021 9:27 pm

"If the plastics can be spat out? Spat out by what? Me? An ant? Space whales?"
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Postby Greater Cesnica » Wed Feb 10, 2021 9:31 pm

Scalizagasti wrote:"If the plastics can be spat out? Spat out by what? Me? An ant? Space whales?"

"It's truly unfortunate that such a sorry proposal even reached quorum at all."

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Postby Saint Jonas » Thu Feb 11, 2021 2:51 am

Scalizagasti wrote:"If the plastics can be spat out? Spat out by what? Me? An ant? Space whales?"

Spat out obviously applies to toothpaste only. However, the contained plastic particles in toothpaste can also be rinsed off if you use enough water or some kind of solvent.

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Postby Greater Cesnica » Thu Feb 11, 2021 5:55 am

Saint Jonas wrote:
Scalizagasti wrote:"If the plastics can be spat out? Spat out by what? Me? An ant? Space whales?"

Spat out obviously applies to toothpaste only.

"Oh, but Ambassador, it's not obvious at all."

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Postby Scalizagasti » Thu Feb 11, 2021 7:44 am

Saint Jonas wrote:
Scalizagasti wrote:"If the plastics can be spat out? Spat out by what? Me? An ant? Space whales?"

Spat out obviously applies to toothpaste only. However, the contained plastic particles in toothpaste can also be rinsed off if you use enough water or some kind of solvent.

"Yes, but toothpaste is typically contained in a plastic tube. If we are talking about spitting out plastic, a large animal could spit out a tube of toothpaste with ease. Will we have to replace plastic toothpaste containers with cardboard boxes?"
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Postby Saint Jonas » Thu Feb 11, 2021 8:03 am

Scalizagasti wrote:
Saint Jonas wrote:Spat out obviously applies to toothpaste only. However, the contained plastic particles in toothpaste can also be rinsed off if you use enough water or some kind of solvent.

"Yes, but toothpaste is typically contained in a plastic tube. If we are talking about spitting out plastic, a large animal could spit out a tube of toothpaste with ease. Will we have to replace plastic toothpaste containers with cardboard boxes?"

Great spitting idea! :blink:
But a packaging can't be consumed. Or are teeth brushed with toothpaste tubes?
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Postby Asvalya » Thu Feb 11, 2021 9:33 am

This is a pain to read. So, you're using participles at the beginning of sentences expressing the WA's view, which is the most common way of writing preambles, such as :

The World Assembly,

Realizing that [...]


But by using this format, you're supposed to complete the sentence starting with the participle by stating what the WA is realizing (in this case, the use of synthetic polymers). But here, don't put a period and add other sentences on top, which is what you did in the entire resolution. In terms of syntax, it's incorrect, and all you have to do is read up again to realize how odd it sounds.
Example of what you wrote :

Realizing that synthetic polymers are used in cosmetic products as abrasives, binders and fillers in creams, peelings or shower gels. Consumers are often not aware that many of their cosmetic and personal care products contain plastics because there is no understandable reference on the packaging. The average consumer does not know that behind "polymethyl methacrylate" or "polyethylene terephthalate" plastic is hidden. Thus, they are subconsciously endangering the environment by buying consumable personal care products and cosmetics containing plastics if these plastics can be spat out or rinsed off.


So not only does this irk to read because of how odd the syntax is, but you're also rambling about consumer awareness and environmental damage without giving each point a sentence beginning with a participle that expresses a WA view (Realizing, Aware, Declaring, Dismayed, etc.). You either use participles and respect the syntax, or don't use them and you can then write paragraphs as a preamble.
I don't know how you can read this to yourself and think it sounds good, but as a piece of advice, take inspiration from other resolutions' format.
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Postby Feyrisshire » Thu Feb 11, 2021 5:00 pm

You do are well aware though that this newer draft doesn't exactly solve the problems outlined in the previous one. There is still the lack of crucial definitions, and the resolution as a whole is still even more obscure than the previous one.
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Postby Saint Jonas » Thu Feb 11, 2021 10:38 pm

Thanks for the advices, here's a new draft (probably the most different one):

The World Assembly,

Realizing that synthetic polymers are used as abrasives, binders and fillers in creams, peelings or shower gels but consumers are often not aware that many of these personal care products contain plastics because there is no understandable reference on the packaging,

Concerned about the threat to the marine ecosystem as well as studies showing that plastics are absorbed by marine organisms and eventually end up in human bodies when seafood is eaten,

Stating that personal care products don't need plastics because synthetic polymers in cosmetics can be replaced by natural substances such as salts or cellulose.

Hereby defines:
  1. "plastic" as a synthetic polymeric substance that can be extruded, moulded or physically manipulated into various solid forms and that retains its final manufactured shape during use in its intended applications,
  2. "personal care product" as any substance, or mixture of substances, manufactured for the purpose of being applied to the human body in the course of any personal care treatment,
  3. "personal care treatment" as any process of cleaning, protecting or scenting any part of the human body or changing its appearance.

Hereby bans plastics in personal care products.
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Postby Scalizagasti » Fri Feb 12, 2021 11:18 am

Saint Jonas wrote:Hereby defines:
[list=I][*]"plastic" as a synthetic polymeric substance that can be extruded, moulded or physically manipulated into various solid forms and that retains its final manufactured shape during use in its intended applications,

"So, basically all plastics then?"
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Postby Saint Jonas » Fri Feb 12, 2021 1:50 pm

Exactly, all plastics are banned.

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Postby Tinhampton » Fri Feb 12, 2021 4:04 pm

Saint Jonas wrote:here's a new draft

Sticking it in your OP would probably be a good idea :P
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