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Read the proposal rules. Your proposal can't include your own nation name in it, that's branding. Also, you almost certainly want to be more specific. Exactly what pledge? Pledge to what? Donation of how much? Prevention of what? Keeping nature vibrant how? Diverse to what level?

Answering these kinds of specific policy questions makes the GA probably the hardest part of the game. Good luck!

You haven't included Category and Strength/Are of Effect, though I assume it'd be Environmental All Businesses Mild/Strong depending on the angle you take with it

This has been submitted.

Gunibuha: I urge you to read the feedback you got here, and continue drafting the proposal in the forum until you get it into a final shape, before submitting it. Also see passed resolutions for examples of how to write a resolution.

Still illegal for branding

This reads like a non-binding pledge, not an actual policy proposal. No content, no specifics, no nothing. And yet the author submitted it.

a small donation to nature prevention

We’re donating to prevent nature?

Pull your submission. Draft here. This is full of illegal.

Imperium Anglorum wrote:Read the proposal rules. Your proposal can't include your own nation name in it, that's branding. Also, you almost certainly want to be more specific. Exactly what pledge? Pledge to what? Donation of how much? Prevention of what? Keeping nature vibrant how? Diverse to what level?

Answering these kinds of specific policy questions makes the GA probably the hardest part of the game. Good luck!

It was my first attempt at, I am sorry if i accidentally did it incorrectly, it was not a self promotion either, but just a first attempt (very new to this sort of thing)

Gunibuha wrote:

Imperium Anglorum wrote:Read the proposal rules. Your proposal can't include your own nation name in it, that's branding. Also, you almost certainly want to be more specific. Exactly what pledge? Pledge to what? Donation of how much? Prevention of what? Keeping nature vibrant how? Diverse to what level?

Answering these kinds of specific policy questions makes the GA probably the hardest part of the game. Good luck!

It was my first attempt at, I am sorry if i accidentally did it incorrectly, it was not a self promotion either, but just a first attempt (very new to this sort of thing)

(OOC: That’s fine; you are a new player. In future, check the proposal rules before drafting anything, since those decide what is legal and what is not. It could also be helpful to have a look at the passed resolutions for inspiration.)

[quote="Gunibuha";p="37641300"]Act of environmental protection
So I am proposing we all do a joint decoration to help and secure nature in development, having a eco-friendly or as close to model adopted.

I know what you mean, of course, but "decoration" isn't the word you're looking for. Mind you, the WA lobby could do with brightening up...

Sorry, I know it's petty. It just amused me.

Good luck with your proposal!

Murab wrote:

Gunibuha wrote:Act of environmental protection
So I am proposing we all do a joint decoration to help and secure nature in development, having a eco-friendly or as close to model adopted.

I know what you mean, of course, but "decoration" isn't the word you're looking for. Mind you, the WA lobby could do with brightening up...

Sorry, I know it's petty. It just amused me.

Good luck with your proposal!

Bah. This is a place of business. Froo-frah is not necessary.

Murab wrote:

Gunibuha wrote:Act of environmental protection
So I am proposing we all do a joint decoration to help and secure nature in development, having a eco-friendly or as close to model adopted.

I know what you mean, of course, but "decoration" isn't the word you're looking for. Mind you, the WA lobby could do with brightening up...

Sorry, I know it's petty. It just amused me.

Good luck with your proposal!

All good - I re-wrote it with the proper guidelines

Four general suggestions:
- Use the feedback from drafting, but don't rewrite your draft after each comment. Acknowledge feedback, ask questions, and then rework your resolution every few days.
- Post your current draft in your first post, note any changes since last draft, and keep older drafts in a spoiler.
- Draft for at least 4-8 weeks. This is a marathon, not a sprint. The earlier you submit, the worse your proposal will often be. Some proposals have been drafted for years (Though that is not a recommendation).
- Read the rules and current environmental resolutions. What you were proposing was so bland that it didn't do anything, but if it had, it would be lesser versions of current resolutions.

Good luck!

Why did you submit this proposal straight away when you said it was still in development?

Gunibuha wrote:

Murab wrote:

All good - I re-wrote it with the proper guidelines

You didn't. Your new rewrite is illegal on the second line. Draft for 4-8 weeks before you even think about submitting.

Why has this been submitted again already?