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[Passed] Reducing Disease Vectors

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[Passed] Reducing Disease Vectors

Postby Honeydewistania » Fri Aug 28, 2020 4:40 am

Category: Health
AoE: Research

The World Assembly,

Recognising that numerous vector species, such as mosquitos, ticks and fleas, are vectors for deadly diseases such as malaria, dengue fever, bubonic plague and many others, and most of these diseases are difficult to cure or do not have working vaccines;

Concerned that the diseases vectors spread can imperil the health of those that inhabit in close proximity to these disease vectors;

Believing that reducing the populations of disease vectors is of utmost importance and in the interests of public health, hereby:

  1. Defines:
    1. "vector" as a non-sapient macro-organism that can transmit harmful pathogens to a sapient organism;
    2. "vector-spread pathogen" as a microorganism that can cause a disease, and is spread by vectors;
    3. "vector-infested area" as an area wherein the population of vectors is likely to cause serious harm to sapient populations within that area via vector-spread pathogens;
  2. Tasks member nations with effectively conducting and assembling research on vectors and vector-spread pathogens within their territory that is necessary to reducing the threats of said vectors and vector-spread pathogens to public health;
    1. Member nations that have successfully eliminated or are close to eliminating the threats of vectors to public health are exempt from this mandate, but are encouraged to assist other member nations in their research;
  3. Tasks the Epidemic and Pandemic Alert and Response Centre with, upon request, providing medical information relating to vector-spread pathogens to member nations;
  4. Mandates that member nations publicly release any information in their possession that could potentially reduce vector populations or the spread of vector-spread pathogens for free, with necessary redactions to protect privacy or national security;
  5. Requires that member nations create and promulgate effective and understandable guidelines for people and businesses in vector-infested areas to reduce the breeding of vectors or the spread of vector-spread pathogens;
    1. Clarifies that only vectors or vector-spread pathogens that are the main cause(s) of designating an area as a vector-infested area are those that are to be targeted by this clause;
  6. Urges member nations to further enact policies using the research obtained to reduce disease vectors;
  7. Clarifies that this resolution does not discourage nor limit the usage of other legal and safe methods of reducing the threat of vectors.
Category: Health
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The World Assembly,

Recognising that numerous vector species, such as mosquitos, ticks and fleas, are vectors for deadly diseases such as malaria, dengue fever, bubonic plague and many others, and most of these diseases are currently incurable or do not have working vaccines;

Concerned that the diseases vectors spread can imperil the health of those that inhabit in close proximity to these disease vectors;

Believing that reducing the populations of disease vectors is of utmost importance and in the interests of public health, hereby:
  1. Defines:
    1. "vector" as a non-sapient macro-organism that can transmit harmful pathogens into a sapient organism;
    2. "vector-spread pathogen" as a microorganism that can cause a disease, and is spread by vectors;
    3. "vector-infested area" as an area in which the population of vectors presents a significant threat to the health of sapient organisms;
    4. “genetically modified vector” as a genetically modified vector organism that is released into wild populations with the purpose of reducing these wild populations, such as to produce offspring that are sterile or unable to transmit pathogens;
  2. Tasks member nations with conducting and collating research that can assist in reducing the threats of vectors and vector-borne diseases pose to public health;
  3. Further tasks member nations with:
    1. researching into genetically modified vectors, and the effectiveness of their usage in targeted vector-infested areas and their vector populations;
    2. overseeing the breeding of these genetically modified vectors;
    3. overseeing the releasing genetically modified vectors into vector-infested areas,
    4. ensuring that following the above does not pose a significant negative impact to the environment or to other organisms except for the targeted organisms;
  4. Permits the delegation of research duties to individuals or corporations, so long as doing so will not create problematic barriers towards the release important information to public health;
  5. Tasks the World Assembly Science Program (WASP) with assisting member nations in the above if they lack the adequate resources to accomplish those tasks;
  6. Tasks the World Health Authority with providing medical information relating to vector-borne disease to member nations;
  7. Mandates that member nations provide as much knowledge as feasibly possible to the World Assembly pertaining to vectors that are likely or are known to cause public health hazards;
  8. Requires that member nations create and promulgate understandable guidelines for people and businesses in vector-infested areas to reduce the breeding of vectors or the spread of vector-borne disease, based on information provided by WASP;
  9. Clarifies that:
    1. member nations are not required to comply with Clauses 2, 3 and 6 if they have successfully eliminated or are close to eliminating the threats of vectors within their territory;
    2. member nations are not required to comply with Clauses 3b and 3c if the research from 3a states that genetically modified vectors will not be or are not useful in reducing vector populations;
    3. this resolution does not discourage nor limit the usage of legal and safe methods of reducing the threat of vectors.
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Postby Sancta Romana Ecclesia » Fri Aug 28, 2020 11:20 am

Seems like a good idea. Good luck, here are my couple observations.

Aren't definitions 1a and 1b in conflict with each other?
  1. Defines the following:
    1. "vector" as a non-sapient non-endangered organism that can transmit pathogen into a sapient organism that can harm said sapient organism, excluding microorganisms or similar,
    2. "vector-borne disease" as a pathogen that is spread by vectors and can cause serious harm to the people vectors spread it to,

One says that vector is an organism transmitting pathogens that can harm a sapient. Another says that vector-borne disease is pathogen, transmitted by vectors, that can seriously harm a sapient. So some vectors would not transmit a vector-borne disease, because the pathogen they carry is not harmful enough. There isn't a straight up contradiction here, since two different things are defined, but I think it creates some unnecessary tension in your draft.

I think this can be resolved and simplified, by removing the 1b definition. You already defined what a vector is and said it carries diseases. So it's reasonably clear what a vector-borne disease would be. It's your call whether the vectors have to carry harmful or seriously harmful diseases to classify as such.

ensuring that the genetically modified vectors do not pose a negative impact to the environment or to other organisms;

I also have one question relating to this, what is the purpose of genetically modified vectors? Is their goal to outbreed the original populace? Or is it to interbreed with them? Both ways could work for removing genes that cause vectors to carry diseases from the pool, but the first one in my opinion may be arguably called a negative impact on an organism (the original vector).
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Postby Ardiveds » Fri Aug 28, 2020 11:44 am

Honeydewistania wrote:
Category: Health
AoE: Research

[*]Further tasks WASP with:
  1. researching into genetically modified vectors, and the effectiveness of their usage in targeted vector-infested areas and their vector populations,
  2. breeding these genetically modified vectors,
  3. cooperating with local authorities in the release of genetically modified vectors into vector-infested areas,
  4. ensuring that the genetically modified vectors do not pose a negative impact to the environment or to other organisms;
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OOC: I'm assuming this in response to that release of GM mosquitoes in Florida?
Anyway, shouldn't the last point here have 'significantly negative' impact. I mean if the purpose of the GM vector is to reduce the population of the vectors, I don't see how you can realistically have zero negative impact. That lower vector population will most definitely put at least a little dent in the population of the predators of that vector. Just a thought.
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Postby Honeydewistania » Fri Aug 28, 2020 5:26 pm

Ardiveds wrote:
Honeydewistania wrote:
Category: Health
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[*]Further tasks WASP with:
  1. researching into genetically modified vectors, and the effectiveness of their usage in targeted vector-infested areas and their vector populations,
  2. breeding these genetically modified vectors,
  3. cooperating with local authorities in the release of genetically modified vectors into vector-infested areas,
  4. ensuring that the genetically modified vectors do not pose a negative impact to the environment or to other organisms;
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OOC: I'm assuming this in response to that release of GM mosquitoes in Florida?
Anyway, shouldn't the last point here have 'significantly negative' impact. I mean if the purpose of the GM vector is to reduce the population of the vectors, I don't see how you can realistically have zero negative impact. That lower vector population will most definitely put at least a little dent in the population of the predators of that vector. Just a thought.


Okay, slightly unrelated can everyone stop talking about Florida? I did not know the GM mosquitos existed in Florida until someone pointed it out after I posted this draft :p I read about it in an unrelated news article


Also, I hope the changes I made help address Sancta Romana Ecclesia’s and Ardiveds’ concerns.


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Postby Imperium Anglorum » Fri Aug 28, 2020 9:18 pm

It seems to me that this proposal is really just three clauses.

Don't kill shit that will crap the environment if gone.

Kill shit that kills people.

Let me help you kill shit that kills people.

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Postby Honeydewistania » Fri Aug 28, 2020 9:23 pm

Imperium Anglorum wrote:It seems to me that this proposal is really just three clauses.

Don't kill shit that will crap the environment if gone.

Kill shit that kills people.

Let me help you kill shit that kills people.

That’s a way to put it, I suppose.


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Postby Sancta Romana Ecclesia » Sat Aug 29, 2020 2:42 am

Honeydewistania wrote:Also, I hope the changes I made help address Sancta Romana Ecclesia’s and Ardiveds’ concerns.

It has addressed mine, thanks!
Imperium Anglorum wrote:It seems to me that this proposal is really just three clauses.

Don't kill shit that will crap the environment if gone.

Kill shit that kills people.

Let me help you kill shit that kills people.

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Postby Honeydewistania » Wed Sep 09, 2020 7:22 pm

Bump


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Postby Imperium Anglorum » Wed Sep 09, 2020 8:52 pm

Simplify your proposal's text around what specific actions you want accomplished.

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Postby Merni » Fri Sep 11, 2020 5:37 am

Some comments in red.
Honeydewistania wrote:
Category: Health
AoE: Research

The World Assembly,

Recognising that numerous species of insects, such as mosquitos, ticks and fleas, are vectors for deadly diseases such as malaria, dengue fever, bubonic plague and many others;

Concerned that these disease vectors can imperil the health of those that inhabit in close proximity to these disease vectors;

Believing that reducing the populations of disease vectors is of utmost importance, hereby:
  1. Defines the following:
    1. "vector" as a non-sapient non-endangered organism that can transmit pathogens (pathogen is not a mass noun) into a sapient organism which can seriously harm said sapient organism, excluding microorganisms or similar, might be better to move this clause near the start of the point, right now it isn't too clear whether this applies to vectors, pathogens or sapient organisms.
    2. "vector-borne disease" as a pathogen that is spread by vectors, so, you're defining a disease as the organism which causes it?
    3. "vector-infested area" as an area in which the population of vectors pose a significant threat to the health of sapient organisms inhabiting in close proximity to them as a result of vector-borne disease,
    4. “genetically modified vector” as a vector that is released into vector populations to breed and produce offspring that are sterile or unable to transmit pathogens; minor nitpick, but such an organism might not necessarily be a vector under your definition.
  2. Tasks the World Assembly Science Program (WASP) with conducting and collating research that can assist in reducing the population of vectors or the spread of vector-borne diseases in vector-infested areas, such as life cycles, breeding grounds, nesting grounds and sources of nutrition, and tasks the World Health Authority with assisting WASP in their research efforts such as by providing medical information on vector-borne diseases;
  3. Further tasks WASP with:
    1. researching into genetically modified vectors, and the effectiveness of their usage in targeted vector-infested areas and their vector populations,
    2. breeding these genetically modified vectors, the WASP will breed these for all member nations? Not individual member nations or corporations in them?
    3. cooperating with local authorities in the release of genetically modified vectors into vector-infested areas,
    4. ensuring that the genetically modified vectors do not pose a significant negative impact to the environment or to other organisms except for the targeted organisms;
  4. Mandates that member nations provide as much knowledge as reasonably possible to the World Assembly pertaining to vectors that have previously caused, are currently causing or are at risk of causing an area to become a vector-infested area or on vector-borne diseases to assist in research;
  5. Requires that member nations create and promulgate reasonable and understandable guidelines for people and businesses in vector-infested areas to reduce the breeding of vectors or the spread of vector-borne disease, based on information provided by WASP;
  6. Subject to World Assembly legislation, obligates member nations to distribute, manufacture and apply chemicals or substances to curb the population of vectors or the spread of vector-borne disease in vector-infested areas; So member states are forced to make and apply these chemicals? Are they prevented from curbing the population of vectors or spread of vector-borne diseases in other ways (which might be far better than chemicals or physical substances), or outside of vector-infested areas? At least, some assistance or funding from the WASP might be in order.
  7. Permits member nations not to follow the above clauses, with the exception of clause 4, only when: This qualifier could easily be added only to clause 6, since that is the only clause to which it is relevant (clause 5 just deals with information and the rest don't place mandates on member states)
    1. fulfilling the obligations will:
      1. significantly disrupt sources of food for organisms that are not vectors or carriers of pathogen,
      2. significantly damage biodiversity or the environment,
      3. reduce the ability of plants to pollinate or any other vital function such that the plant’s population will be decreased immensely,
    2. the damage caused as per 7a cannot be reasonably mitigated; feels like an "and" is needed somewhere
  8. Strongly urges member nations to conduct any other necessary activities or enforce policies that will assist in reducing vector populations or the spread of vector-borne disease, in both vector-infested areas and non-infested areas.
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Postby Honeydewistania » Fri Sep 11, 2020 6:46 am

"Taking pointers from the Mernian delegation, we have made appropriate adjustments."


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Postby Merni » Fri Sep 11, 2020 6:57 am

OOC: Clause 6 is still a problem. I sincerely do not understand why member states should be forced, at their own expense, to make and use chemicals to curb the population of vectors or spread of diseases. This seems like an incredible level of micromanagement from the WA.
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Postby Honeydewistania » Fri Sep 11, 2020 7:01 am

Merni wrote:OOC: Clause 6 is still a problem. I sincerely do not understand why member states should be forced, at their own expense, to make and use chemicals to curb the population of vectors or spread of diseases. This seems like an incredible level of micromanagement from the WA.

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OOC: Some problems I noticed.

Wiktionary wrote:Any organism or substance, especially a microorganism, capable of causing disease, such as bacteria, viruses, protozoa or fungi. Microorganisms are not considered to be pathogenic until they have reached a population size that is large enough to cause disease.

Since no definition of pathogen is given, going by the dictionary one. Notice "substance" there?

Honeydewistania wrote:"vector" as a non-pathogen non-sapient non-endangered organism that can transmit pathogens into a sapient organism which can seriously harm said sapient organism;

Since botulism is "an illness caused by a toxin produced by the bacterium Clostridium botulinum", the toxin fits the dictionary definition of a pathogen and thus the bacterium would fit your definition of a vector, right? Except no. Clostridium botulinum is "a diverse group of pathogenic bacteria" and causes the illness known as botulism via its toxic secretions. In RL there's not problem because both the bacterium and its toxin fit the definition of a pathogen. But lacking that definition here, the bacterium would be both a pathogen and a vector, yet a vector can't be a pathogen, so... the proposal doesn't apply to C. botulinum?

Fairly sure there was also some micro-organism that itself causes a disease (and is spread by an animal vector) that can additionally infect you with a virus or bacterium - I watched a documentary on parasites not long ago, but can't remember what it was - in which case you'd have another vector-and-pathogen N/A situation. And that's just RL.

Also, in RL at least every single land vertebrate livestock animal is a vector according to your definition.

But going back to the definition, notice the latter part of it? "Microorganisms are not considered to be pathogenic until they have reached a population size that is large enough to cause disease." So a pathogenic micro-organism isn't one, unless there's enough of them. So as at introduction of pathogen from the vector into the host the micro-organism number is usually too small to cause a disease and it's only the micro-organism in question breeding in the host that then causes the disease, most actual micro-organism pathogens (if any, actually) would not be pathogens (in RL they're "pathogenic") when they still reside in the vectors, and so the vectors wouldn't be vectors...

In other words, needs work, and likely the introduction of the definition of a pathogen. Relying on the RL dictionary definition of it is what's causing these problems. Livestock will remain vectors nevertheless.

"vector-borne disease" as a disease that is spread by vectors;

This is nonsense according to your definition of a vector, as the vectors themselves cannot be pathogenic. You're wanting to say the disease is one caused by pathogens spread by vectors.

"vector-infested area" as an area in which the population of vectors pose a significant threat to the health of sapient organisms inhabiting in close proximity to them as a result of vector-borne disease;

I get what you're wanting to say here, but you might want to reorganize it. And given your definition of a vector, why would you even need to have the "as a result of" ending there? It's already in the definition!

“genetically modified vector” as an organism that is released into vector populations to breed and produce offspring that are sterile or unable to transmit pathogens;

"...as a genetically modified vector organism..." and "...wild populations..."

Though why so specific? Couldn't a modified vector be introduced that has a genetic aversion against parasitizing (thinking mosquitoes here) sapients? Then it wouldn't matter that they kept breeding or kept spreading the pathogen, if they didn't transmit it to sapients (as that's the point of your definition). I think you're too focused on the GMO malaria mosquitoes in RL here. No need to limit the multiverse with what some poxy little species does on a poxy little planet in an uninteresting middle-sized galaxy.

Tasks the World Assembly Science Program (WASP) with conducting and collating research

Make the member nations do the research. Do NOT reach for a committee right off the bat. Mandates for member nations first, give the nations as much to do as possible, ONLY use a committee if you must. ESPECIALLY the whole GMO vectors thing. You're currently giving nations no say ("cooperating with" doesn't equal "the nation can say no thanks") whether they even WANT GMO mosquitoes being created in the first place, nevermind having them released into the wild. Maybe they've vaccinated their whole population and continue doing so as part of their regular vaccination program and thus the pathogen is no biggie? Don't shove your solution down everyone's throat with the might of the WA, rather give the member nations the task to figure out whether 1. some vector and its pathogen(s) are bad enough that something needs to be done about them, 2. if they want to go for GMO route to edit an entire species of wild creatures or if they'd prefer a vaccine for the pathogen, and 3. if they need the WA's help to do so. I mean, literally obviously creating GMO vectors is Modern Tech, since it's been done in RL, so it shouldn't be beyond reach for most WA nations. Only engage a committee (and look for something that works for WASP but isn't WASP itself, if possible) if the member nation asks for WA's help. And even then don't reach for the General Fund next.

Mandates that member nations provide as much knowledge as reasonably possible to the World Assembly pertaining to vectors that have previously caused, are currently causing or are at risk of causing an area to become a vector-infested area or on vector-borne diseases to assist in research;

...what? The language is weird. Plus you have definitions, use them! And I don't mean throwing all 3 defined terms into the same clause like you do here, I mean actually using them intelligently.

Requires that member nations create and promulgate understandable guidelines for people and businesses in vector-infested areas to reduce the breeding of vectors or the spread of vector-borne disease, based on information provided by WASP;

Arse-first up the tree again. See what I said before about whether vectors and their pathogens even are a problem anymore.

Strongly urges member nations to conduct any other necessary activities or enforce policies that will assist in reducing vector populations or the spread of vector-borne disease, in both vector-infested areas and non-infested areas;

Strongly urging vague fluff is no use for anyone. A reasonable nation would do such things anyway and would likely have already done so, if the vectors and their pathogens were still a problem. I'm sure some Finnish mosquito species could technically spread some serious pathogens (there used to be endemic malaria here in the medieval period but I don't know if it was a mosquito species that has since been extirpated), but because they don't, currently, there's no need to - from the POV of the nation - do something so drastic as to start genetically modifying them.

Also how exactly are you going to reduce vector populations where there are no vectors (some of the non-infested areas are going to be non-infested due to the lack of said vectors entirely)? Why should I go out after rain and pour out any water collected in pots and pans outside like it was early May 1986 all over again, when the malaria micro-organisms simply don't live here? (I don't like our mosquitoes - I actively loathe and hate them and would want all mosquitoes everywhere to vanish off the face of the Earth, but as long as their bite just is unpleasant and not actually dangerous, I'm not going to stress about them, nor are others.)
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Postby Honeydewistania » Sun Sep 13, 2020 2:29 am

I'll incorporate your suggestions soon


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Postby Honeydewistania » Fri Sep 18, 2020 8:48 am

Hopefully corrected to your satisfaction


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Postby Honeydewistania » Tue Sep 22, 2020 6:59 am

Slightly minor bump for feedback, especially on how to make it less verbose


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OOC: Looking through it, but for the love of little green lizards, "micro-organism"!!!
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Postby Honeydewistania » Tue Sep 22, 2020 7:44 am

Araraukar wrote:OOC: Looking through it, but for the love of little green lizards, "micro-organism"!!!

Bah.

I’ll fix it... soon.


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Postby Araraukar » Tue Sep 22, 2020 8:44 am

OOC and IC as marked.

Honeydewistania wrote:Recognising that numerous species, such as mosquitos, ticks and fleas, are vectors for deadly diseases such as malaria, dengue fever, bubonic plague and many others;

IC: "I would add the word "vector" to "species" there, to make it clear from the start what you're talking about."

OOC: Also, I would just love it if "dengue fever" was instead known as "dandy fever". Funny disease names need to come back. :lol2:

Concerned that these disease vectors can imperil the health of those that inhabit in close proximity to these disease vectors;

IC: "I think what you meant here, was that the diseases the vectors spread, can imperil the health of people? I would also add "livestock" to it, because while this is in the Health category, many diseases that are bad for people, are also bad for livestock."

Believing that reducing the populations of disease vectors is of utmost importance and in the interests of public health,

IC: "Somewhere in the preamble, the words "incurable" and "for which there are no working vaccines" should probably be included. For example, we have developed a working vaccine for our endemic strain of malaria, and it is part of the regular vaccination program that is mandatory for everyone who wants to stay here for more than a quick visit to urban areas, so for us to go after the malaria-spreading mosquito would make little sense, as the micro-organism it spreads is prevented from causing the disease in people - and livestock, which are also vaccinated."

"vector" as a non-microorganism non-sapient non-endangered organism that can transmit harmful pathogens into a sapient organism;

OOC: Reducing word count: "a non-sapient macro-organism". The endangerment thing doesn't come into play, because the resolution specifically makes an allowance (see clause 6) for endangered species that are a clear health risk to public health. And a macro-organism is what a non-micro-organism is. :P

"pathogen" as a microorganism that can transmit diseases;

IC: "That should read "cause a disease". Do take care with the pluralizations to avoid causing issues. With the wording as is, this wouldn't apply to the malaria parasite, for example. Hence changes needed."

OOC: "Vectors transmit disease-causing pathogens". Memorize that.

"vector-borne disease" as a disease transmitted by pathogens;

IC: "I think you meant "caused by pathogens transmitted by vector organisms". Though why are you defining a vector-spread disease in the first place? Wouldn't vector-spread pathogen make more sense? And I would suggest also using "spread" instead of "borne". Not just to cut down on archaic language, but also to make it clearer to the uninitiated what you mean here."

"vector-infested area" as an area in which the population of vectors pose presents a significant threat to the health of sapient organisms inhabiting in close proximity to them as a result of vector-borne disease;

IC: "Replacing the latter simply by "sapients" will make it shorter and clearer. You don't keep talking about "vector organisms" either, so you can shortern sapient organisms as well. Or you could just, throughout, replace "sapient organisms" with "people". The vectors need contact with the sapients to be able to spread the pathogens, so if there are no sapients in a given area, the vectors are no threat to their health and thus it doesn't count as infested area."

OOC: Also, "(a) population of vectors" is a singular, not a plural, so "presents". And using presenting instead of posing to sound more scientific.

“genetically modified vector” as a genetically modified vector organism that is released into the wild populations with the purpose of reducing these the threat posed by wild vector populations, such as to produce by producing offspring that are sterile or unable to transmit pathogens the pathogen into sapients;

OOC: Hopefully obvious edits.

Tasks member nations with conducting and collating research that can assist in reducing the threats of vectors and that vector-borne diseases pose to public health;

IC: "Why collating instead of sharing?"

OOC: If you're short on space, could be simplified as "...conducting research and sharing information on reducing the threats of vector-spread diseases".

Further tasks member nations with:

OOC: You're still mandating all this, whether or not the nations have sorted things out differently (vaccinations, natural control methods of vector populations). I think you should definitely either put in the definition (which has the problematic word "can") something about the pathogen and its disease still being a problem to the member nation, or in this main clause specify that this only applies to vectors and diseases that are still a problem in the nation. See my earlier post about malaria no longer being endemic in Finland in RL.

  1. researching into genetically modified vectors, and the effectiveness of their usage in targeted vector-infested areas and their vector populations;
  2. overseeing the breeding of these genetically modified vectors;
  3. overseeing the releasing genetically modified vectors into vector-infested areas,
  4. ensuring that following the above does not pose a significant negative impact to the environment or to other organisms except for the targeted organisms;

IC: "Why the fuck are you literally mandating the creation and release of genetically modified organisms into the wild WA-wide??? And how the hell are you going to manage subclause d after release? What if there's no way to do d.? Does that mean you're freed from needing to do a.-c. as well? And what about nations that do not have the resources to create GMO rats en masse? Who would even want millions of rats added to the already existing millions of rats, if you could instead just, you know, kill the existing rats?"

OOC: Rats are vectors to various diseases in RL, and it's good to remember you're not talking about just mosquitoes or ticks here. Not that I would want extra of those either. Remember that they need to get vertebrate blood to reproduce.

Permits the delegation of research duties to individuals or corporations, so long as doing so will not create problematic barriers towards the release important information to public health;

IC: "But you're still mandating each nation to do the research themselves, even if they could get the info from their neighbour for free?"

Tasks the World Assembly Science Program (WASP) with assisting member nations in the above if they lack the adequate resources to accomplish those tasks;

OOC: Just mandate the info to be shared for free between member nations and leave WASP out of it.

Tasks the World Health Authority with providing medical information relating to vector-borne disease to member nations;

OOC: Not EPARC? I mean, if these diseases are bad enough to be epidemic in nature (if not, then why target them?), the epidemic-related committee would make most sense.

Mandates that member nations provide as much knowledge as feasibly possible to the World Assembly pertaining to vectors that are likely or are known to cause public health hazards;

OOC: ...what is this clause meant to be for?

Requires that member nations create and promulgate understandable guidelines for people and businesses in vector-infested areas to reduce the breeding of vectors or the spread of vector-borne disease, based on information provided by WASP;

OOC: But WASP is only involved if you can't do your own research? Couldn't they base it on information provided by their own research?

Clarifies that:
  1. member nations are not required to comply with Clauses 2, 3 and 6 if they have successfully eliminated or are close to eliminating the threats of vectors within their territory;
  2. member nations are not required to comply with Clauses 3b and 3c if the research from 3a states that genetically modified vectors will not be or are not useful in reducing vector populations;
  3. this resolution does not discourage nor limit the usage of legal and safe methods of reducing the threat of vectors.

OOC: The first exception needs to go way to the start of the active clauses and just exclude such from the proposal entirely. The second exception needs to be in the clause it's referring to, and should take into account subclause d., which in turn should be included as a condition on subclause a. If that sounds too confusing, let me know and I'll break it down further. The last one needs the word "other" before "legal and safe". Though the addition of "safe" sounds a bit weird given how unsafe massive release of GMO disease vector species is going to be, and that's being required currently.
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Postby Kenmoria » Thu Sep 24, 2020 9:42 am

“I’ve added some comments to the draft in red pen.”
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The World Assembly,

Recognising that numerous vector species, such as mosquitos, ticks and fleas, are vectors for deadly diseases such as malaria, dengue fever, bubonic plague and many others, and most of these diseases are currently incurable or do not have working vaccines; ‘Such as’ implies ‘and many others’, so the latter phrase can be removed. I also recommend caution in saying a disease is ‘currently incurable’, given the medical diversity found in member states. Consider more cautious wording.

Concerned that the diseases vectors spread can imperil the health of those that inhabit in close proximity to these disease vectors; Having ‘disease vectors’ twice here sounds repetitive; I recommend utilising a synonym.

Believing that reducing the populations of disease vectors is of utmost importance and in the interests of public health, hereby:

  1. Defines:
    1. "vector" as a non-sapient macro-organism that can transmit harmful pathogens into a sapient organism;
    2. "vector-spread pathogen" as a microorganism that can cause a disease, and is spread by vectors;
    3. "vector-infested area" as an area in which the population of vectors presents a significant threat to the health of sapient organisms;
  2. Tasks member nations with conducting and assembling research on reducing the threats of vectors to public health;
    1. Member nations that have successfully eliminated or are close to eliminating the threats of vector to public health are exempt from this mandate, but are encouraged to assist other member nations in their research; It should be ‘vectors’ here.
  3. Tasks the Epidemic and Pandemic Alert and Response Centre with providing medical information relating to vector-spread pathogen to member nations;
  4. Mandates that member nations publicly release any information that could potentially reduce vector populations or the spread of vector-spread pathogens for free; ‘Any information’ is awfully broad; are you saying that member states must forcibly release private research done by their citizens? On the other hand, almost nothing can be done at zero cost, so this might not apply to much information at all.
  5. Requires that member nations create and promulgate understandable guidelines for people and businesses in vector-infested areas to reduce the breeding of vectors or the spread of vector-spread pathogens;
  6. Clarifies that this resolution does not discourage nor limit the usage of other legal and safe methods of reducing the threat of vectors.
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Postby Kenmoria » Fri Oct 09, 2020 12:01 am

“Consider ‘to a’ rather than ‘into a’ in clause 1a. This is only a minor change, which of course means that I have little other feedback to give, at this time - this looks to be a fairly solid draft.”
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