Agualia wrote:The World Assembly,
Recognizing that a large number of nations are facing significant water shortages, affecting their population's and their economy's, that could be solved, Neither ‘populations’ nor ‘economies’ should have an apostrophe.
Observing that water is used in various ways including urban, agricultural and industrial uses, I’m not sure what this clause adds to your preamble. This is a fact universally acknowledged that doesn’t really need observing.
Further observing that today, there are water uses that do not require the water to be drinkable, This clause, on the other hand, might be more necessary. Consider rewording it to something along the lines of ‘Cognisant that not all uses of water necessarily require said water to be drinkable’, in light of the removal of the above clause.
Aware that recycled water can be used for agricultural irrigation, industrial applications, irrigation in parks, and many other uses, I don’t think there’s a need to split ‘irrigation’ into two distinct purposes here.
Noting with satisfaction that using recycled water in daily activity can reduce the diversion of water from delicate ecosystems, therefore reducing the strain on the animals and plants living in these areas,
Convinced that the use of recycled water can substantially reduce the strain on water resources as a whole,
Taking note that international legislation is needed in order that all nations are pushed to participate in this effort as water management is a global issue, The grammar here feels slightly awkward.
Having examined past resolutions on the issue of water management, it is clear that the past resolutions to not specifically talk about water reclamation and it's possibilities, The second part of this clause feels jarring in the context of all the preambulatory clauses before. You could go with something similar to ‘Noticing that there is no extant General Assembly legislation tackling the issue of water reclamation’.
Affirming that re-thinking the uses and management of water resources is essential and clear resolutions should deal with this; You mean ‘resolution’, singular.
Hereby,
- Defines the following for the purpose of this resolution:
- "Water Reclamation Facility" as a facility that treats various types of wastewater and turns it into greywater,
- "Greywater" as water that can be treated and used as irrigation water or other non-potable uses, Since this definition is used in the one above it, it would make sense for the definition of ‘greywater’ to go first.
- Mandates that all nations introduce adequate water reclamation facilities in accordance to the nation's economic, technological and
logistical capacities, This part of the clause doesn’t fully work in the context of subclause b, which suggests that all nations must reach the 50% figure.
- Water reclamation facilities can include sewage treatment or greywater reuse systems, This should be obvious by the definition, so doesn’t need a subclause.
- To reach the adequate level of water reclamation, countries must treat at least 50% of all wastewater, Why is this arbitrary percentage required?
- For these purposes, wastewater does not include rainwater,
- Requires cities/urban areas to create water reclamation scheme plans for their area, All cities and urban areas? That seems excessive.
- This can be done through incentives or legislation,
- Water Reclamation schemes for water uses excluding drinking water,
- Urges member states to research the possible uses of recycled water,
- Including agricultural uses such as irrigation. This does not need to be a subclause.
