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[PASSED] Ensuring Commercial Vessel Navigation

PostPosted: Fri Nov 08, 2019 8:37 pm
by Terttia
Regulation | Transportation

The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel in the absence of proper navigational tools and techniques,

Hoping to improve international safety standards on sea travel,

Hereby,

1. Defines

  1. "nautical routes" as routes allocated for commercial vessels to travel through a given area of sea,

  2. "nautical charts" as maps that show the shape of the shoreline, the underwater topography, tidal changes in water depth, nautical routes, major currents and specific localized dangers to sea travel,

  3. "nautical instrumentation" on a commercial vessel to include

    1. some way to determine one's coordinates and direction of travel,

    2. some way to determine the local status of tide, and

    3. some way to communicate with other vessels and nearest authorities

  4. ”commercial vessels” as non-military vessels that transport cargo and/or passengers for hire;

2. Mandates that member states

  1. create and frequently update nautical charts of their territorial waters and exclusive economic zone,

  2. share their nautical charts with commercial vessels that have the right to enter these areas;

3. Requires that all commercial vessels registered in a member nation carry and utilize up-to-date nautical charts and nautical instrumentation;

4. Mandates that all crews of commercial vessels registered in a member nation

  1. acquire the necessary nautical charts before leaving port,

  2. have their planned route pre-approved by the member states whose waters they will be traversing,

  3. when feasible, stay on nautical routes,

  4. obey the local authorities when it comes to additional temporary regulations applied to all commercial vessels in that area,

  5. communicate with the nearest authorities and other vessels, if they must for one reason or another depart from their pre-approved traveling plans, and

  6. carry nautical charts for the areas they intend to pass through.

Co-authored by Araraukar

PostPosted: Fri Nov 08, 2019 8:39 pm
by Terttia
Terttia wrote:The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel, especially in the absence of proper navigation tools and techniques.

Shocked by member states’ refusal to chart sea routes, especially knowing the dangers of sea travel.

Defines nautical routes as routes in water in which boats and other vessels travel over.

Further Defines nautical charts as charts that define the course of water and the depth.

Mandates that member states:

Form a navigation chart in which ships, with or without conventional navigation equipment, can use to navigate water routes if present;

Frequently update their charts, due to the changing of water flow and depth changes.

Any suggestions, thoughts, additions, etc?

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 5:28 am
by Kenmoria
(OOC: Welcome to the General Assembly. Nautical charts are a potentially viable idea, but currently I don’t see how this ‘Regulation’. Also, bear in mind that mapping the ocean is an incredibly challenging task which could be near-impossible for some nations.)

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 5:43 am
by Terttia
Kenmoria wrote:(OOC: Welcome to the General Assembly. Nautical charts are a potentially viable idea, but currently I don’t see how this ‘Regulation’. Also, bear in mind that mapping the ocean is an incredibly challenging task which could be near-impossible for some nations.)

I don’t see another category this will fit in.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 6:05 am
by Kenmoria
Terttia wrote:
Kenmoria wrote:(OOC: Welcome to the General Assembly. Nautical charts are a potentially viable idea, but currently I don’t see how this ‘Regulation’. Also, bear in mind that mapping the ocean is an incredibly challenging task which could be near-impossible for some nations.)

I don’t see another category this will fit in.

(OOC: The general advice is to come up with a category near the beginning of a proposal’s lifecycle, before the legislation has even been written, and then to write the law around that choice. I think that ‘Free trade’ could work for this, if you emphasise the negative economic impact of sea routes not being charted, impairing the ability of member nations to trade via the sea.)

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 6:18 am
by Terttia
Kenmoria wrote:
Terttia wrote:I don’t see another category this will fit in.

(OOC: The general advice is to come up with a category near the beginning of a proposal’s lifecycle, before the legislation has even been written, and then to write the law around that choice. I think that ‘Free trade’ could work for this, if you emphasise the negative economic impact of sea routes not being charted, impairing the ability of member nations to trade via the sea.)

I believe this would have mild strength since it effects one specific area, correct?

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 6:21 am
by Kenmoria
Terttia wrote:
Kenmoria wrote:(OOC: The general advice is to come up with a category near the beginning of a proposal’s lifecycle, before the legislation has even been written, and then to write the law around that choice. I think that ‘Free trade’ could work for this, if you emphasise the negative economic impact of sea routes not being charted, impairing the ability of member nations to trade via the sea.)

I believe this would have mild strength since it effects one specific area, correct?

(OOC: Yes, I believe this would have a mild effect.)

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 7:40 am
by Terttia
Kenmoria wrote:
Terttia wrote:I believe this would have mild strength since it effects one specific area, correct?

(OOC: Yes, I believe this would have a mild effect.)

Does this draft violate any rules?

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 8:32 am
by Grays Harbor
Shocked by member states’ refusal to chart sea routes, especially knowing the dangers of sea travel.

There is no seagoing nation, ever, since the days of wooden ships and sails, that has not had sea charts. That is inviting disaster. And to state nobody has or uses them is ludicrous.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 8:54 am
by Terttia
Grays Harbor wrote:
Shocked by member states’ refusal to chart sea routes, especially knowing the dangers of sea travel.

There is no seagoing nation, ever, since the days of wooden ships and sails, that has not had sea charts. That is inviting disaster. And to state nobody has or uses them is ludicrous.

Although my statement was somewhat ludicrous, what if a nation doesn’t have sea charts?

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 8:58 am
by Bears Armed
A related and more likely potential problem more worth covering might be nations not sharing their charts... but then we get into the whole "rights of passage" business (Which is probably worth a resolution in itself...) and probably lots of people shouting "But my national security!"

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 9:04 am
by Terttia
Bears Armed wrote:A related and more likely potential problem more worth covering might be nations not sharing their charts... but then we get into the whole "rights of passage" business (Which is probably worth a resolution in itself...) and probably lots of people shouting "But my national security!"

In that case, there can be a compromise that states that member states must share their charts with civilian craft so long that the member state gives them permission to use their waterways.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 9:19 am
by Kenmoria
“I’ve left some general feedback on the proposal in red.”

Terttia wrote:Free Trade | Mild

The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel, especially in the absence of proper navigation tools and techniques.

Emphasizing the inhibition to trade via the sea with the lack of nautical charts which brings about drastic economic stress. I’m not sure what you are trying to say here. Perhaps it would be clearer to say: ‘Emphasising that a lack of nautical charts can lead to an inhibition to trade via seas, causing drastic economic stress’. This is a more logical word order. Although the use of ‘seas’ sounds strange here, it is necessary given that the WA exists on multiple planets. I’m sure there is better wording possible, however.

Defines nautical routes as routes in water in which boats and other vessels travel over. This definition would be better as: ‘Defines nautical routes as routes in water that boats and other vessels travel through’, as one doesn’t travel ‘over’ routes.

Further Defines nautical charts as charts that define the course of water and the depth. Also, for both of your defining clauses, you don’t use the terms anywhere in the proposal, which makes the clauses fairly pointless.

Mandates that member states:

Form a navigation chart in which ships, with or without conventional navigation equipment, can use to navigate water routes if present; You want ‘that’ instead of ‘in which’. I suggest additionally using ‘create’ instead of ‘form’, and possibly pluralising ‘navigation chart’.

Frequently update their charts, due to the changing of water flow and depth changes. The word ‘changes’ at the end is unnecessary and should be deleted.

This proposal is overall good, and covers a plausible idea. Currently, I most worry about the applicability of this for nations that are landlocked.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 9:33 am
by Terttia
Kenmoria wrote:“I’ve left some general feedback on the proposal in red.”

Terttia wrote:Free Trade | Mild

The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel, especially in the absence of proper navigation tools and techniques.

Emphasizing the inhibition to trade via the sea with the lack of nautical charts which brings about drastic economic stress. I’m not sure what you are trying to say here. Perhaps it would be clearer to say: ‘Emphasising that a lack of nautical charts can lead to an inhibition to trade via seas, causing drastic economic stress’. This is a more logical word order. Although the use of ‘seas’ sounds strange here, it is necessary given that the WA exists on multiple planets. I’m sure there is better wording possible, however.

Defines nautical routes as routes in water in which boats and other vessels travel over. This definition would be better as: ‘Defines nautical routes as routes in water that boats and other vessels travel through’, as one doesn’t travel ‘over’ routes.

Further Defines nautical charts as charts that define the course of water and the depth. Also, for both of your defining clauses, you don’t use the terms anywhere in the proposal, which makes the clauses fairly pointless.

Mandates that member states:

Form a navigation chart in which ships, with or without conventional navigation equipment, can use to navigate water routes if present; You want ‘that’ instead of ‘in which’. I suggest additionally using ‘create’ instead of ‘form’, and possibly pluralising ‘navigation chart’.

Frequently update their charts, due to the changing of water flow and depth changes. The word ‘changes’ at the end is unnecessary and should be deleted.

This proposal is overall good, and covers a plausible idea. Currently, I most worry about the applicability of this for nations that are landlocked.

Note that this is applicable to landlocked nations because the current draft says, “... can use to navigate nautical routes if present.” Also, I implemented your suggestions!

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 9:45 am
by Araraukar
Terttia wrote:Also, I implemented your suggestions!

OOC: Have you posted the draft with them? Because your OP draft still has "forms" instead of "creates", for example.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 12:05 pm
by Terttia
Terttia wrote:Free Trade | Mild

The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel, especially in the absence of proper navigation tools and techniques.

Emphasising that a lack of nautical charts can lead to an inhibition to trade via seas, causing drastic economic stress.

Defines nautical charts as charts that define the course of water and the depth.

Further Defines nautical routes as routes in water in which boats and other vessels travel through.

Mandates that member states:

Create nautical charts that ships, with or without conventional navigation equipment, can use to navigate nautical routes if present;

Frequently update their nautical charts, due to the changing of water flow and depth;

Share their nautical charts with civilian craft, so long that the member state allows them entry into their sovereign water.

Is this ready to be proposed?

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 1:22 pm
by Grays Harbor
Terttia wrote:
Terttia wrote:Free Trade | Mild

The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel, especially in the absence of proper navigation tools and techniques.

Emphasising that a lack of nautical charts can lead to an inhibition to trade via seas, causing drastic economic stress.

Defines nautical charts as charts that define the course of water and the depth.

Further Defines nautical routes as routes in water in which boats and other vessels travel through.

Mandates that member states:

Create nautical charts that ships, with or without conventional navigation equipment, can use to navigate nautical routes if present;

Frequently update their nautical charts, due to the changing of water flow and depth;

Share their nautical charts with civilian craft, so long that the member state allows them entry into their sovereign water.

Is this ready to be proposed?

No. Are you on a tight schedule? You just posted this yesterday, it’s been up less than a day.

Edit: your definition of what a nautical chart is way off base. Here is the NOAA definition and description.
https://oceanservice.noaa.gov/facts/nautical_chart.html
Do not use their definition, that is plagiarism, but do use it to bring your own more in line with reality.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 2:52 pm
by Kenmoria
Terttia wrote:
Terttia wrote:Free Trade | Mild

The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel, especially in the absence of proper navigation tools and techniques.

Emphasising that a lack of nautical charts can lead to an inhibition to trade via seas, causing drastic economic stress.

Defines nautical charts as charts that define the course of water and the depth.

Further Defines nautical routes as routes in water in which boats and other vessels travel through.

Mandates that member states:

Create nautical charts that ships, with or without conventional navigation equipment, can use to navigate nautical routes if present;

Frequently update their nautical charts, due to the changing of water flow and depth;

Share their nautical charts with civilian craft, so long that the member state allows them entry into their sovereign water.

Is this ready to be proposed?

(OOC: No, I don’t think that this is ready for submission yet, as it is only a very short period of drafting that has elapsed. As has been demonstrated by GH, there are still issues, some of which it could take a while to notice. Personally speaking, I still have some critique to offer on the legislation.)

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 3:34 pm
by Terttia
Kenmoria wrote:
Terttia wrote:Is this ready to be proposed?

(OOC: No, I don’t think that this is ready for submission yet, as it is only a very short period of drafting that has elapsed. As has been demonstrated by GH, there are still issues, some of which it could take a while to notice. Personally speaking, I still have some critique to offer on the legislation.)

I’m interested in your critique.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 3:51 pm
by Terttia
Grays Harbor wrote:
Terttia wrote:Is this ready to be proposed?

No. Are you on a tight schedule? You just posted this yesterday, it’s been up less than a day.

Edit: your definition of what a nautical chart is way off base. Here is the NOAA definition and description.
https://oceanservice.noaa.gov/facts/nautical_chart.html
Do not use their definition, that is plagiarism, but do use it to bring your own more in line with reality.

I thank you for this, and I’ll update accordingly.

PostPosted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 4:57 pm
by Terttia
Should this proposal also include that all vessels must carry a nautical chart?

PostPosted: Sun Nov 10, 2019 8:31 am
by Grays Harbor
Terttia wrote:Should this proposal also include that all vessels must carry a nautical chart?

“All vessels” seems too ‘one-size-fits-all’, as that would then include weekend fishermen, water skiers, kayakers, ... pretty anything that floats. I would think “all commercial vessels” may be a better fit.

PostPosted: Sun Nov 10, 2019 9:24 am
by Frisbeeteria
Grays Harbor wrote:I would think “all commercial vessels” may be a better fit.

This is a "commercial vessel", along with rental paddleboards and kayaks and such. Not much room for charts aboard these.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 10, 2019 9:43 am
by Kenmoria
“And now, some wording and formatting changes.”
Terttia wrote:Free Trade | Mild

The World Assembly,

Realizing the dangers of sea travel, especially in the absence of proper navigation tools and techniques.

Emphasizing that a lack of nautical charts can lead to an inhibition towards sea trade, causing drastic economic stress.

Hereby,

Defines nautical charts as charts that define the characteristics of a shoreline and the topography of a sea bed, and can include dangers to mariners.

Further Defines nautical routes as routes in water that boats and other vessels travel through.

Mandates that member states:

  1. Create nautical charts that ships, with or without conventional navigation equipment, can use to navigate nautical routes if present;

  2. Frequently update their nautical charts, due to the erosion of shorelines and changing of water depth;

  3. Share their nautical charts with civilian craft, so long that the member state allows them entry into their sovereign water.

Requires that all large commercial vessels bear a nautical chart to warn the crew of any nautical hazard that may be positioned in their path.

PostPosted: Sun Nov 10, 2019 10:08 am
by Terttia
Frisbeeteria wrote:
Grays Harbor wrote:I would think “all commercial vessels” may be a better fit.

This is a "commercial vessel", along with rental paddleboards and kayaks and such. Not much room for charts aboard these.
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Although that’s a rental boat, it’s used for recreational activities and such. Commercial vessels are used for commerce, such as carrying goods.