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by Marxist Germany » Tue Jun 04, 2019 9:56 am
by Kenmoria » Tue Jun 04, 2019 10:54 am
by Marxist Germany » Tue Jun 04, 2019 11:54 am
Kenmoria wrote:“Due to how some of your clauses are written, a business is perfectly fine to extract data from someone, provided they aren’t users of the business, since you only target the actions of the business towards its users. This seems rather opposite to what I would expect. Also, there should be a comma after ‘a member of’ in clause 1f.”
by Kenmoria » Tue Jun 04, 2019 12:31 pm
by Marxist Germany » Tue Jun 04, 2019 1:41 pm
Kenmoria wrote:“2d should have ‘a user’ rather than ‘an user’ after ‘viewing the data’.”
by Araraukar » Wed Jun 05, 2019 8:07 am
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by Marxist Germany » Wed Jun 05, 2019 8:33 am
Araraukar wrote:OOC: Definition for organization should probably have "non-state" in it, if it's meant to not include things like tax register or criminal records and such. If it is meant to include those, then the later mentions of the state or government doing things don't quite fit. Also you have typoed "criminal".
by Separatist Peoples » Wed Jun 05, 2019 9:09 am
Prohibits . . . Governments of member states from viewing the data of a user without the explicit prior consent from both the organisation holding the data and the user to which the data belongs, unless the data pursuant to subpoena for a civil discovery is not a party or subject to issuance of a warrant for criminal proceedings, or when a search warrant has been issued;
Prohibits . . . Member state governments from viewing user data without explicit prior consent from both the user and the organization in possession, unless:
a. the data is subject to a subpoena for litigation discovery to which the user is not a party;
b. the user places the data's contents or subject matter at issue as a party in a civil dispute;
c. subject to a valid warrant during criminal investigation.
by Kenmoria » Wed Jun 05, 2019 9:25 am
by Marxist Germany » Wed Jun 05, 2019 12:02 pm
Separatist Peoples wrote:"Lets rewrite 2.d.Prohibits . . . Governments of member states from viewing the data of a user without the explicit prior consent from both the organisation holding the data and the user to which the data belongs, unless the data pursuant to subpoena for a civil discovery is not a party or subject to issuance of a warrant for criminal proceedings, or when a search warrant has been issued;
"Lets write it as:Prohibits . . . Member state governments from viewing user data without explicit prior consent from both the user and the organization in possession, unless:
a. the data is subject to a subpoena for litigation discovery to which the user is not a party;
b. the user places the data's contents or subject matter at issue as a party in a civil dispute;
c. subject to a valid warrant during criminal investigation.
"It reads better and is better organized. I am willing to answer any questions as to why this is an improved organization and phrasing."
Kenmoria wrote:“1a would be better written with ‘a government’ rather than ‘the government’, since you are referring to many different nations, as opposed to a monolithic government in charge of all.”
by Marxist Germany » Thu Jun 06, 2019 10:29 am
by Marxist Germany » Fri Jun 14, 2019 4:51 am
by Kenmoria » Fri Jun 14, 2019 10:46 am
by Marxist Germany » Fri Jun 14, 2019 2:37 pm
Kenmoria wrote:“To fit with 2di and 2dii, 2diii should be a complete sentence. I recommend adding the words ‘the data is’ to the beginning of that subclause to remedy this.”
by Araraukar » Fri Jun 14, 2019 2:57 pm
Marxist Germany wrote:1. Defines the following for the purpose of this resolution:
- An "Organisation" as any entity that collects data from its members or users, and isn't directly run by a government;
- A "Minor" as any sapient being under the age of majority;
- An "Adolescent" as any minor going through a transitional period into adulthood as defined by a government of a member-state;
- A "Guardian" as any legal guardian of a minor, or if none exists, a biological parent;
- "Personal Data" as any data that can be used to identify a sapient individual;
- A "User" as any sapient being who uses or has used the services of, or is a member of, an organisation;
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by Marxist Germany » Sat Jun 15, 2019 3:48 am
Araraukar wrote:Marxist Germany wrote:1. Defines the following for the purpose of this resolution:
- An "Organisation" as any entity that collects data from its members or users, and isn't directly run by a government;
- A "Minor" as any sapient being under the age of majority;
- An "Adolescent" as any minor going through a transitional period into adulthood as defined by a government of a member-state;
- A "Guardian" as any legal guardian of a minor, or if none exists, a biological parent;
- "Personal Data" as any data that can be used to identify a sapient individual;
- A "User" as any sapient being who uses or has used the services of, or is a member of, an organisation;
OOC: Why are the defined nouns written with capital first letter, when they aren't written that way in the text?
by Kenmoria » Sat Jun 15, 2019 4:44 am
by Marxist Germany » Sat Jun 15, 2019 4:54 am
Kenmoria wrote:“In clause 4, ‘a organisation’ should be ‘an organisation’.”
by Araraukar » Sat Jun 15, 2019 8:31 am
Marxist Germany wrote:OOC:It looks neater.
1. Defines the following for the purpose of this resolution:
- An "organisation" as any entity that collects data from its members or users, and isn't directly run by a government;
- A "minor" as any sapient being under the age of majority;
- An "adolescent" as any minor going through a transitional period into adulthood as defined by a government of a member-state;
- A "guardian" as any legal guardian of a minor, or if none exists, a biological parent;
- "Personal data" as any data that can be used to identify a sapient individual;
- A "user" as any sapient being who uses or has used the services of, or is a member of, an organisation;
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by Marxist Germany » Sat Jun 15, 2019 9:01 am
Araraukar wrote:Marxist Germany wrote:OOC:It looks neater.
OOC: As opposed to...1. Defines the following for the purpose of this resolution:
- An "organisation" as any entity that collects data from its members or users, and isn't directly run by a government;
- A "minor" as any sapient being under the age of majority;
- An "adolescent" as any minor going through a transitional period into adulthood as defined by a government of a member-state;
- A "guardian" as any legal guardian of a minor, or if none exists, a biological parent;
- "Personal data" as any data that can be used to identify a sapient individual;
- A "user" as any sapient being who uses or has used the services of, or is a member of, an organisation;
...^that? If you want to use capital letters for the nouns, just drop the articles.
by Araraukar » Sat Jun 15, 2019 9:34 am
Marxist Germany wrote:and proposal submitted.
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by Kenmoria » Sat Jun 15, 2019 10:37 am
Marxist Germany wrote:OOC:Alright, change has been made, and proposal submitted.
by Borovan entered the region as he » Sat Jun 15, 2019 4:03 pm
by Marxist Germany » Sat Jun 15, 2019 4:50 pm
Borovan entered the region as he wrote:Did u even send a telegram campaign it's not getting approvals
by Araraukar » Sun Jun 16, 2019 4:17 am
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
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