Widowed Land wrote:The World Assembly hereby:
Change all the bolded words above this to -ing verbs, e.g. notifies --> notifying (although I think you mean noting?)
Commands governments to improve infrastructure and safety system in penitentiary establishments.1.) Governments must fund infrastructure in prisons to avoid unsanitary conditions.
2.) Governments must either build new prisons or implement law of "split sentences" to reduce overcrowding.
3.) Prison workforce must go through mandatory annual retraining to ensure their qualification.
This seems problematic for nations with good prison systems already. Making member nations solve a problem which might not exist is...frustrating for them. You could change 1) to command member nations to ensure that prisoners are living in sanitary conditions, by funding infrastructure if necessary. Again, 2) would be annoying for member nations with good conditions. I might be wrong, but off the top of my head doesn't that resolution 'Treatment of Inmates' (or something like that) deal with prisoners' living space?
(Also, you're using list code wrong. You want:
- Code: Select all
[i]Commands[/i] governments to improve infrastructure and safety system in penitentiary establishments.
[list=1][*] Governments must fund infrastructure in prisons to avoid unsanitary conditions.
[*] Governments must either build new prisons or implement law of "split sentences" to reduce overcrowding.
[*] Prison workforce must go through mandatory annual retraining to ensure their qualification.[/list]
Mandates that governments must take the following actions in order to integrate ex-prisoners ? into the/a/something else community.
1.) Prisons must have weekly exchange of books with government-funded libraries or private libraries who are welcome to fund such project.
2.) Prisoners must be taught practical subjects, such as: cooking and etc. Prisoners must have right to choose their likely subject.
3.) Prisoners must have access to therapy with psychologists. Psychologist can be full worker of a prisoner or volunteer from different projects.
I think you need to tidy up the grammar. It's a bit unclear how far or how stringently you're trying to regulate member nations here.
Implements certain standards to help prisoners to gain job after the release.1.) Prisoners should have a right to volunteer for in-prison jobs.(For example: Janitor, Chef and etc.)
2.) After release emplyers must be restricted to decline job applications from ex-offenders based solely on their background. Exceptions can be made if ex-offenders' crime is directly connected to the job they are applying for.
Unless you do want 1) to be optional, change should to must or something equivalent. In 2), first of all emplyers --> employers. But also, this could be phrased better, e.g. 'Employers may not decline job applications from ex-offenders based on their criminal backgrounds unless their past crimes are directly connected to the relevant job.' (There's probably a better way, but 'after release' made me think of it as though the employers have just been released )