
by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 5:45 am

by Kenmoria » Sun Jun 17, 2018 6:14 am

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 6:19 am
Kenmoria wrote:(OOC: At present, this breaks two rules: firstly, your intended category doesn't actually exist, a list of available categories can be found in the link above; and secondly, you don't have a clause that has an effect. Defining, addressing and declaring don't count as active clauses. However, well done for posting your daft here and not immediately submitting it, like some new players do.)

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 7:18 am

by Kenmoria » Sun Jun 17, 2018 7:28 am
Most proposals are drafted for weeks or months before submission, I recommend waiting for this time period before submitting it, so that others can comment.Marxist Germany wrote:Kenmoria wrote:(OOC: At present, this breaks two rules: firstly, your intended category doesn't actually exist, a list of available categories can be found in the link above; and secondly, you don't have a clause that has an effect. Defining, addressing and declaring don't count as active clauses. However, well done for posting your daft here and not immediately submitting it, like some new players do.)
Thank you for replying i changed the clauses and the category, now you can tell me if it is worth sending to the General assembly?

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 7:29 am
Kenmoria wrote:Most proposals are drafted for weeks or months before submission, I recommend waiting for this time period before submitting it, so that others can comment.Marxist Germany wrote:Thank you for replying i changed the clauses and the category, now you can tell me if it is worth sending to the General assembly?

by Jebslund » Sun Jun 17, 2018 8:23 am
Marxist Germany wrote:Category: Social Justice
Strength: Significant
The World Assembly,
Applauding the continued efforts of it's members to reduce the wealth gaps and increase welfare spending;
Noting that the world has been descending into complete capitalism and extreme wealth gaps; Eh... You're kinda flirting with the Ideological Ban rule here.
Believing that the wealth gaps between the poor and rich should be reduced;
further believing that all humans are born equal; The word you want is Sapients. Several member nations (including my own and one of the GENSEC (Bears Armed) are inhabited completely (Bears Armed) or primarily (My own Jebslund) by nonhumans. This isn't a legality thing so much as a quibble someone was going to bring up sooner or later.
Aware that a lot of people are living under the poverty line recently and/or have not enough money to even buy a single meal;
Convinced That every legal inhabitant of a member nation, as long as they are willing to contribute to the society should not be paid less or more than other people just because their contribution is different;
Seeking however, to stop these wealth gaps from growing even bigger;
1. Restricts a maximum wealth gap that a nation can reach; Metagaming. Resolutions cannot directly mention/affect gameside stats
3. Mandates that no one should live under the poverty line "Should" and "Mandates" do not go together. Drop the "should" and clean up the wording a bit.
4. Urges members to reduce the gaps between incomes in both public and private sector;
5. Clarifies that nothing in this resolution shall be interpreted as prohibiting the World Assembly from legislating in the future on Income equality.

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 8:32 am
Jebslund wrote:[OOC: Notes in blue.]Marxist Germany wrote:Category: Social Justice
Strength: Significant
The World Assembly,
Applauding the continued efforts of it's members to reduce the wealth gaps and increase welfare spending;
Noting that the world has been descending into complete capitalism and extreme wealth gaps; Eh... You're kinda flirting with the Ideological Ban rule here.
Believing that the wealth gaps between the poor and rich should be reduced;
further believing that all humans are born equal; The word you want is Sapients. Several member nations (including my own and one of the GENSEC (Bears Armed) are inhabited completely (Bears Armed) or primarily (My own Jebslund) by nonhumans. This isn't a legality thing so much as a quibble someone was going to bring up sooner or later.
Aware that a lot of people are living under the poverty line recently and/or have not enough money to even buy a single meal;
Convinced That every legal inhabitant of a member nation, as long as they are willing to contribute to the society should not be paid less or more than other people just because their contribution is different;
Seeking however, to stop these wealth gaps from growing even bigger;
1. Restricts a maximum wealth gap that a nation can reach; Metagaming. Resolutions cannot directly mention/affect gameside stats
3. Mandates that no one should live under the poverty line "Should" and "Mandates" do not go together. Drop the "should" and clean up the wording a bit.
4. Urges members to reduce the gaps between incomes in both public and private sector;
5. Clarifies that nothing in this resolution shall be interpreted as prohibiting the World Assembly from legislating in the future on Income equality.
[OOC: You may wish to post previous drafts under spoilers in the OP.]

by Imperium Anglorum » Sun Jun 17, 2018 8:42 am
Kenmoria wrote:...declaring don't count as active clauses.

by Kenmoria » Sun Jun 17, 2018 8:48 am

by Imperium Anglorum » Sun Jun 17, 2018 8:55 am

by Imperium Anglorum » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:01 am

by Kenmoria » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:10 am
Imperium Anglorum wrote:That's not the actual question. You say that Declares aren't actual operative clauses. So – each of those clauses where I cite the existence of a declaration – are they operative? Do they have force? In Humanitarian Transport, do you have to follow the Declares clause guaranteeing the right to safe passage of humanitarian cargoes? In First Responder Protection Act, can first responders be hindered on the job? And in Landmine Safety Protocol (which I linked), when the whole operative section is nested under a declares clause, does it have effect?
Declares are operative clauses. They are statements of legal facts specified by the Assembly. So when the Assembly declares that "Member states shall not utilize, purchase, manufacture, stockpile, or transfer in any way mines that do not retain at least one of the listed features", those states "shall not utilize, purchase, manufacture, stockpile, or transfer in any way mines that do not retain at least one of the listed features".

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:12 am
Imperium Anglorum wrote:Anyway, to the OP, see Minimum Standard of Living Act.

by Kenmoria » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:13 am

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:15 am

by Deltanium » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:20 am
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by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:21 am
Imperium Anglorum wrote:Anyway, to the OP, see Minimum Standard of Living Act.

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 9:24 am
Deltanium wrote:NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU I WORKED SO HARD FOR THAT TOP 5% WEALTH GAPS TROPHY AND U WANT TO TAKE IT AWAY?

by Araraukar » Sun Jun 17, 2018 10:39 am
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 10:49 am

by Araraukar » Sun Jun 17, 2018 10:54 am
Marxist Germany wrote: Changed it again
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.

by Bananaistan » Sun Jun 17, 2018 11:01 am

by Araraukar » Sun Jun 17, 2018 11:09 am
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.

by Marxist Germany » Sun Jun 17, 2018 11:28 am
Araraukar wrote:Marxist Germany wrote: Changed it again
OOC: And now it contradicts CoCR.
Also, put in a "Changelog" or save old drafts under spoilers, because right now it's hard to say what changes you have made and why.
EDIT: Also, mandating same income to everyone only ensures that some will die from poverty and some will live happily, since people's costs of living can differ vastly.
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