[Draft] Protection Against Open Water Acidification

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

"In clause 1, “co2” should be “CO2” to keep it in line with the rest of the proposal."

Fixed thank you, also added strength due to the addition of the environmental strengths

[Kenmoria]

"In clauses 7 and 10, you should decaptialise the second word to standardise it with clause 11."

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

"In clauses 7 and 10, you should decaptialise the second word to standardise it with clause 11."

Thank you fixed!

[Kenmoria]

"I wouldn't refer to the resolution where the committee is created in clause 2, as it could be a HoC violation, just mentioning the committee is fine."

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

"I wouldn't refer to the resolution where the committee is created in clause 2, as it could be a HoC violation, just mentioning the committee is fine."

Done thank you!

[Kenmoria]

"I would decapitalise the word “Concerned” in the “Deeply Concerned” preambulatory clause."

[Ransium]

Obviously not ever nation sees themselves as being RL analogous, but it seems silly to have a water acidification resolution that includes trying to address acidification of the oceans, but is so meek in it's approach towards towards anthropocentric CO2. IRL, the overwhelming source of acidification in the oceans presently and in the near term is CO2 and everything else is just a drop in the bucket. I've often felt that the best way to pass comprehensive CO2 regulations would be through the avenue of preventing ocean acidification and this resolution could be seen to effectively block that path.

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

Obviously not ever nation sees themselves as being RL analogous, but it seems silly to have a water acidification resolution that includes trying to address acidification of the oceans, but is so meek in it's approach towards towards anthropocentric CO2. IRL, the overwhelming source of acidification in the oceans presently and in the near term is CO2 and everything else is just a drop in the bucket. I've often felt that the best way to pass comprehensive CO2 regulations would be through the avenue of preventing ocean acidification and this resolution could be seen to effectively block that path.

Perhaps I could have edits that include more CO2 regulations, what do u suggest

[Ransium]

I suggest narrowing the scope of your resolution to acid rain prevention, trying to cover everything in a single proposal is complex and broad.

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

I suggest narrowing the scope of your resolution to acid rain prevention, trying to cover everything in a single proposal is complex and broad.

I will think upon that, and make changes if neccesary. THank you for your input ambassador!

[Kenmoria]

"Purely an aesthetic thing, but you could vary the sentence starters slightly. “Requires” for instance could also be “Obligates” or “Mandates”."

[Jarish Inyo]

Opposed. The Empire will manage it’s national resources as it deems best for it’s citizens. It will not support any control of said resources from an international committee.

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

Opposed. The Empire will manage it’s national resources as it deems best for it’s citizens. It will not support any control of said resources from an international committee.

Ah yes ambassador, I too prefer national sovereignty. It is however the fact that a nation cannot regulate another nation and waters are shared between nations, leaving one open to the actions of another

[Kenmoria]

"I would change the “of which” to a “that” in the “Strongly suggests” clause to create a better flow."

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

"I would change the “of which” to a “that” in the “Strongly suggests” clause to create a better flow."

Done thank u

[Kenmoria]

"I would change the full stop after “alike” in the “Alarmed” clause to a semicolon as the two sentences are deeply connected."

[Blue Line Metro]

The proposal should advise reducing of all fossil fuel power plants, not just those near water systems, as the pollution in the air eventually comes down in rain and cause acidification regardless of where it was produced

[Kenmoria]

The proposal should advise reducing of all fossil fuel power plants, not just those near water systems, as the pollution in the air eventually comes down in rain and cause acidification regardless of where it was produced

It is called, "Protection Against Open Water Acidification" and I believe that broadening its scope too much could result in the proposal not adequately dealing with the points it mentioned. While the move to widen its area of effect was firstly a good idea, doing it again could result in an unfinished idea.

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

"I would change the full stop after “alike” in the “Alarmed” clause to a semicolon as the two sentences are deeply connected."

Done thanks

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

The proposal should advise reducing of all fossil fuel power plants, not just those near water systems, as the pollution in the air eventually comes down in rain and cause acidification regardless of where it was produced

While I agree with the target of this comment I believe it will have to happen in another bill otherwise this one will lose focus

[Kenmoria]

"In the “Noting” clause, there should be an apostrophe after “populations”."

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

"In the “Noting” clause, there should be an apostrophe after “populations”."

done thank you!

[Kenmoria]

"You spelt “agriculture” wrong in the believing clause."

[Alsace and Lorraine United]

"You spelt “agriculture” wrong in the believing clause."

Spells aquaculture referring to the cultivation of seaweeds corals and fish farms

[Kenmoria]

"You spelt “agriculture” wrong in the believing clause."

Spells aquaculture referring to the cultivation of seaweeds corals and fish farms

"Ah yes, you are correct, ambassador."