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[Draft] Protection Against Open Water Acidification

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[Draft] Protection Against Open Water Acidification

Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Mon Apr 30, 2018 5:56 pm

Protection Against Open Water Acidification

| Category: Environmental | Area of Effect: All Businesses | Strength: Strong | Proposed By: Alsace and Lorraine United |

Observing that it is important to protect and preserve the bodies of water shared by the nations of the world.

Believing that the deterioration of international waters would cause industries such as fishing, waterborne shipping, arctic tourism, as well as aquaculture would be crippled, along with the systems that maintain the hospitable nature of international waters such as corals and seaweeds.

Deeply Concerned that the acidification of national waters, such as lakes and rivers, would similarly cripple fishing and tourism to the surrounding nations as their waters become less and less hospitable.

Noting that nations often utilize national waters for the main source of water due to civilian populations' sustenance as well as certain industries, creating a health risk for contaminated water.

Alarmed by the ever decreasing pH level of international and national waters alike; the result being more and more acidic waters.

Hereby,

1. Defines "contamination" for the purpose of this resolution as the act of raising CO2 content or lowering the pH level of water to unnatural standards through means of pollution or chemical additives.

2. Entrusts the IBWS to:
a. Keep Records regarding pH levels of both International and National Waters,
b. Study the effects of dropping pH levels on water dwelling lifeforms,
c. Make the findings of the aforementioned records known and accessible to the citizens of the nations under scrutiny.

3. Forbids the act of dumping materials or by-products of which would result in a considerable deterioration of international water quality except in the cases of:
a. Objects jettisoned from aircraft or watercraft in the interest of the life of the crew in emergency situations,
b. Objects too toxic or dangerous to be held upon solid land such as highly radioactive materials, chemical weapons, or explosive materials,
c. Objects such as these must be secured and confined within containers to minimize the risk of leakage or Compromisation.

4. Requires that member nations refrain from contaminating waters used as drinking sources for nations unless completely necessary to retain national security and structure.

5. Forbids waste disposal into open waters in any form unless an environmental impact report can be reviewed and approved by all relavent nations, as well as IBWS.

6. Requires electronic CO2 sensors to be installed in civilian water storage facilities to monitor the levels for CO2 as well as the facilities to conduct regular pH tests of water no less than once per week.

7. Strongly suggests that nations replace fossil fuel burning power plants that lie upon open water with clean running hydroelectric plants to lessen by-products that must be disposed of.

8. Requires that nations create recycling programs if they do not already exist.

9. Requires that nations educate civilians on the dangers of low pH levels within open waters as well as provide education on reuse of waste and recycling programs.

10. Strongly suggests that nations involve civilian environmental groups to assist in cleanup efforts.

11. Strongly suggests the use of low sulfur coal if coal use is required at all.






Protection Against Open Water Acidification

| Category: Environmental | Area of Effect: All Businesses | Proposed By: Alsace and Lorraine United |

Observing that it is important to protect and preserve the bodies of water shared by the nations of the world.

Believing that the deterioration of international waters would cause industries such as fishing, waterborne shipping, arctic tourism, as well as aquaculture would be crippled, along with the systems that maintain the hospitable nature of international waters such as corals and seaweeds.

Deeply Concerned that the deterioration of national waters, such as lakes and rivers, would similarly cripple fishing and tourism to the surrounding nations as their waters become less and less hospitable.

Noting that nations often utilize national waters for the main source of water for civilian populations sustenance as well as certain industries, creating a health risk for contaminated water.

Alarmed by the ever decreasing pH level of international and national waters alike. The result being more and more acidic waters.

Hereby,

Defines "contamination" as the act of lowering the pH level of water to unnatural standards through means of pollution or chemical additives.

Founds the Open Waters Protection Agency (OWPA), and extrusts it with the following tasks:
a. Keep Records regarding pH levels of both International and National Waters,
b. Study the effects of dropping pH levels on water dwelling lifeforms,
c. Make the findings of the aforementioned records known and accessible to the citizens of the nations under scrutiny,

Forbids the act of dumping in international waters except in the cases of:
a. Objects jettisoned from aircraft or watercraft in the interest of the life of the crew in emergency situations,
b. Objects too toxic or dangerous to be held upon solid land such as highly radioactive materials, chemical weapons, or explosive materials,
I. Objects such as these must be secured and confined within containers to minimize the risk of leakage or Compromisation.
Requires that member nations refrain from contaminating waters used as drinking sources for nations.

Forbids waste disposal into open waters in any form unless an environmental impact report can be reviewed and approved by both nations, as well as OWPA.

Requires electronic CO2 sensors to be installed in civilian water storage facilities to monitor the levels for CO2 as well as the facilities to conduct regular pH tests of water at no less than once per week.

Strongly Suggests that nations replace fossil fuel burning power plants that lie upon open water with clean running hydroelectric plants to lessen byproducts of which must be disposed of.

Requires that nations create recycling programs if they do not already exist

Requires that nations educate civilians on the dangers of low pH levels within open waters as well as provide education on reuse of waste and recycling programs.

Strongly Suggests that nations involve civilian environmental groups to assist in cleanup efforts.






Protection Against Open Water Acidification

| Category: Environmental | Area of Effect: All Businesses | Proposed By: Alsace and Lorraine United |

Observing that it is important to protect and preserve the bodies of water shared by the Nations of the world.

Believing that the deterioration of international waters would cause industries such as fishing, waterborne shipping, arctic tourism, as well as aquaculture would be crippled, along with the systems that maintain the hospitable nature of international waters such as corals and seaweeds.

Deeply Concerned that the deterioration of national waters, such as lakes and rivers, would similarly cripple fishing and tourism to the surrounding nations as their waters become less and less hospitable.

Noting that nations often utilize national waters for the main source of water for civilian populations sustenance as well as certain industries, creating a health risk for contaminated water.

Alarmed By the ever decreasing PH level of international and national waters alike. The result being more and more acidic waters.

Hereby,

Defines Contamination as the act of lowering the PH level of water to unnatural standards through means of pollution or chemical additives.

Founds the Open Waters Protection Agency (OWPA), and extrusts it with the following tasks:
a. Keep Records regarding PH levels of both International and National Waters,
b. Study the effects of dropping PH levels on water dwelling lifeforms,
c. Make the findings of the aforementioned records known and accessible to the citizens of the nations under scrutiny,

Forbids the act of dumping in international waters except in the cases of:
a. Objects jettisoned from aircraft or watercraft in the interest of the life of the crew in emergency situations,
b. Objects too toxic or dangerous to be held upon solid land such as highly radioactive materials, chemical weapons, or explosive materials,
I. Objects such as these must be secured and confined within containers to minimize the risk of leakage or Compromisation.
Requires that member nations refrain from contaminating waters used as drinking sources for nations.

Forbids waste disposal into open waters in any form unless an environmental impact report can be reviewed and approved by both nations, as well as OWPA.


Any changes before supmissions, specifically legality
Last edited by Alsace and Lorraine United on Tue May 22, 2018 8:16 am, edited 25 times in total.

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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Mon Apr 30, 2018 5:56 pm

Please post suggestions on how one might improve the bill

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Postby Zone 71 » Mon Apr 30, 2018 6:18 pm

OOC: I support the premise of this proposal and taking action to prevent ocean acidification. I wish you the best of luck in drafting this proposal and hope it passes. I do have some concerns about the proposal in its current state however.

Environmental proposals have an area of effect - not strength. They target certain industries, or all businesses. I suggest you revise that. While I'm not completely confident of what the area of effect should be, I would recommend "All businesses" to start out as your proposal seems to vaguely target many industries and corporate entities like manufacturing and possibly fishing with clauses that aim to generally prevent most forms of pollution in water.

Additionally, this proposal essentially does only two things: create the OWPA, and prohibit the act of waste disposal in international water except under certain circumstances. I believe more can be done to prevent open water acidification including taking more steps to decrease the CO2 concentration (from things like fossil fuels) of oceans. One of the biggest ways to do this is to reduce nations' reliance on fossil fuels and their carbon footprint. Educating the public on this terribly neglected environmental issue can also be a great step towards preventing ocean acidification.

This proposal is a great start, and hopefully it can take more steps to prevent water acidification, and eventually reach the GA voting floor. Good luck! :)

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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Mon Apr 30, 2018 6:22 pm

Zone 71 wrote:OOC: I support the premise of this proposal and taking action to prevent ocean acidification. I wish you the best of luck in drafting this proposal and hope it passes. I do have some concerns about the proposal in its current state however.

Environmental proposals have an area of effect - not strength. They target certain industries, or all businesses. I suggest you revise that. While I'm not completely confident of what the area of effect should be, I would recommend "All businesses" to start out as your proposal seems to vaguely target many industries and corporate entities like manufacturing and possibly fishing with clauses that aim to generally prevent most forms of pollution in water.

Additionally, this proposal essentially does only two things: create the OWPA, and prohibit the act of waste disposal in international water except under certain circumstances. I believe more can be done to prevent open water acidification including taking more steps to decrease the CO2 concentration (from things like fossil fuels) of oceans. One of the biggest ways to do this is to reduce nations' reliance on fossil fuels and their carbon footprint. Educating the public on this terribly neglected environmental issue can also be a great step towards preventing ocean acidification.

This proposal is a great start, and hopefully it can take more steps to prevent water acidification, and eventually reach the GA voting floor. Good luck! :)



Thank you so much i will take into consideration with what you said and will make the necessary changes

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Postby Kenmoria » Mon Apr 30, 2018 11:19 pm

"I would put some form of finishing punctuation on all of the sub clauses, rather than just leaving them ending with nothing."
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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Tue May 01, 2018 5:26 am

Kenmoria wrote:"I would put some form of finishing punctuation on all of the sub clauses, rather than just leaving them ending with nothing."



Thank you

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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Tue May 01, 2018 6:50 am

Zone 71 wrote:OOC: I support the premise of this proposal and taking action to prevent ocean acidification. I wish you the best of luck in drafting this proposal and hope it passes. I do have some concerns about the proposal in its current state however.

Environmental proposals have an area of effect - not strength. They target certain industries, or all businesses. I suggest you revise that. While I'm not completely confident of what the area of effect should be, I would recommend "All businesses" to start out as your proposal seems to vaguely target many industries and corporate entities like manufacturing and possibly fishing with clauses that aim to generally prevent most forms of pollution in water.

Additionally, this proposal essentially does only two things: create the OWPA, and prohibit the act of waste disposal in international water except under certain circumstances. I believe more can be done to prevent open water acidification including taking more steps to decrease the CO2 concentration (from things like fossil fuels) of oceans. One of the biggest ways to do this is to reduce nations' reliance on fossil fuels and their carbon footprint. Educating the public on this terribly neglected environmental issue can also be a great step towards preventing ocean acidification.

This proposal is a great start, and hopefully it can take more steps to prevent water acidification, and eventually reach the GA voting floor. Good luck! :)



Added to it anymore suggestions would be appreciated

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Postby Kenmoria » Tue May 01, 2018 8:21 am

"I wouldn't capitalise the word “By” in the alarmed clause."
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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Tue May 01, 2018 8:37 am

Kenmoria wrote:"I wouldn't capitalise the word “By” in the alarmed clause."



Fixed thank you

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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Wed May 02, 2018 7:49 am

OOC: bumping to receive further edits; not sure if it’s ready to submit or just got lost in the void

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Postby Kenmoria » Wed May 02, 2018 8:04 am

"“PH” should be “pH” instead, the first letter is never capitalised unless it starts a sentence."
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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Wed May 02, 2018 8:30 am

Kenmoria wrote:"“PH” should be “pH” instead, the first letter is never capitalised unless it starts a sentence."


Ah you are right thank you

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Thank you ambassador

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Postby Kenmoria » Wed May 02, 2018 12:36 pm

"I would number the active clauses, to make them easier to refer to and fit in with current formatting standards."
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Postby Masurbia » Wed May 02, 2018 1:59 pm

I don't see the point in this proposal. There are already many resolutions that protect water and curve pollution.

Restrictions On Hydraulic Fracturing
Toxic Heavy Metals Act
Uranium Mining Standards Act
Transboundary Water Use Act
Responsible Offshore Drilling

I'm also sure there are other committees to place this resolution under other than the Open Waters Protection Agency.
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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Wed May 02, 2018 2:40 pm

Masurbia wrote:I don't see the point in this proposal. There are already many resolutions that protect water and curve pollution.

Restrictions On Hydraulic Fracturing
Toxic Heavy Metals Act
Uranium Mining Standards Act
Transboundary Water Use Act
Responsible Offshore Drilling

I'm also sure there are other committees to place this resolution under other than the Open Waters Protection Agency.



Curbing pollution is but a by product of this resolution, other proposals do not take into account dropping pH levels just simply the cleanliness, which is important but pails in comparison to the consequesnces of low pH water, also this proposal deliniates between the regulations of shared open water and water that one nation controls. Very sorry this was not clear in the original document or that i did not specify enough it is still under draft and if there is anything i cna add that would make it perhaps more useful, important, or easily understood please let me know

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Postby Kenmoria » Wed May 02, 2018 11:26 pm

"I would format CO2 as CO2 instead, as that is the actual symbol."
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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Thu May 03, 2018 11:16 am

Kenmoria wrote:"I would format CO2 as CO2 instead, as that is the actual symbol."


I do not know whow to make the subscript

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Postby Zone 71 » Thu May 03, 2018 11:56 am

Alsace and Lorraine United wrote:
Kenmoria wrote:"I would format CO2 as CO2 instead, as that is the actual symbol."


I do not know whow to make the subscript


CO2
Code: Select all
CO[sub]2[/sub]

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"I would decapitalise the word “Contamination” in the defines clause, and place it in speech marks as it is being defined."
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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Thu May 03, 2018 1:26 pm

Kenmoria wrote:"I would decapitalise the word “Contamination” in the defines clause, and place it in speech marks as it is being defined."


done

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Postby Kenmoria » Sat May 05, 2018 3:27 am

"“Nations” shouldn't be capitalised in the observing clause."
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Postby Vim li cas kuv nyob ntawm no » Sat May 05, 2018 6:49 pm

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Postby Alsace and Lorraine United » Sat May 05, 2018 11:49 pm

Kenmoria wrote:"“Nations” shouldn't be capitalised in the observing clause."


Thanks!

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