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Postby Australian rePublic » Tue Apr 17, 2018 2:06 am

I have very little experience with resolutions. Please help :).


Reduce Unnecessary Food Wastage 
Category: Social Justice | Strength: Mild | Proposed by: Australian rePublic, Cute Puppies, Kenmoria
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The World Assembly,

Noticing that many organisations, who grow, prepare, sell and/or distribute food have lots of wastage because they order too much for the required amount, causing the excessive food to go to waste, 

Further, some farmers/retailers refuse to sell fruit and vegetables if they're considered "too ugly",

Recognising the fact that much of this wastage is still edible, and its waste is therefore unneeded and damaging,

Concerned over the many tonnes of food that unintentionally expires due to improper or incorrect stock rotation,

Worried for the many negative effects of such food wastage on WA member states, including:

a. Detrimentality to the environment. Food which ends up in landfill is detrimental to the environment, for example, some of the problems include producing methane, wasting fresh water which was used to create it, and wasting arable land, amongst many other environmental issues with misusing food,

b. Robbing the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin. Edible food being products that are still safe for sapient consumption,

c. Food production being a very labour-intensive task, which is in vain if the food is not eaten
This resolution suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage,

Hereby, 
Strongly encourages member nations to create local initiatives that seek to prevent the overproduction and disposal of viable and still-edible food including food banks and charities;

Urges member nations to inform their citizens about how to properly save and store leftovers for future consumption;

Obligates member nations to manage food surpluses and the excessive wastage of food through eco-friendly and constructive ways including but not limited to:Diverting food scraps to animal feed,Composting inedible food to create nutrient-rich soil,Use waste oils from food for fuel conversion and food scraps for the recover energy in industrial processes,Noting however, that nations are exempt from this clause, should they believe that said food poses a quarantine/bio-security threat;Extends the authority of the International Food Welfare Organization to:
Establish food banks and charities in member nations with their permission,Research the most practical and environmentally-friendly methods of food decomposition.

CO-AUTHORS: Kenmoria and Dmitry II

The World Assembly,

Noticing that many organisations, who grow, prepare, sell and/or distribute food have lots of wastage because they order too much for the required amount, causing the excessive food to go to waste, 

Further, some farmers/retailers refuse to sell fruit and vegetables if they're considered "too ugly",

Recognising the fact that much of this wastage is still edible, and its waste is therefore unneeded and damaging,

Concerned over the many tonnes of food that unintentionally expires due to improper or incorrect stock rotation,

Worried for the many negative effects of such food wastage on WA member states, including:

a. Detrimentality to the environment. Food which ends up in landfill is detrimental to the environment, for example, some of the problems include producing methane, wasting fresh water which was used to create it, and wasting arable land, amongst many other environmental issues with misusing food,

b. Robbing the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin. Edible food being products that are still safe for sapient consumption,

c. Food production being a very labour-intensive task, which is in vain if the food is not eaten
This resolution suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage,
1. Strongly encourages member nations to create local initiatives that seek to prevent the overproduction and disposal of viable and still-edible food including food banks and charities;

2. Urges member nations to inform their citizens about how to properly save and store leftovers for future consumption;

3. Obligates member nations to manage food surpluses and the excessive wastage of food through eco-friendly and constructive ways including but not limited to:
Diverting food scraps to animal feed;
Composting inedible food to create nutrient-rich soil;
Use waste oils from food for fuel conversion and food scraps for the recover energy in industrial processes;
Noting however, that nations are exempt from this clause, should they believe that said food poses a quarantine/bio-security threat

4. Extends the authority of the International Food Welfare Organization to:
Establish food banks and charities in member nations with their permission;
Research the most practical and environmentally-friendly methods of food decomposition.


educe Unnecessary Food Wastage
Category: Social Justice | Strength: Mild | Proposed by: Australian rePublic, Cute Puppies
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Noticing that many organisations, who grow, prepare, sell and/or distribute food have lots of wastage because they intentionally or unintentionally order too much food, causing the excessive foodto go to waste, often in a perfectly edible state, or a lack of proper stock rotation causes food to accidently expire. Horrified of the fact that food wastage is bad for many, many reasons. Some of these include:

a. Detrimental to the environment. Food which ends up in landfill is determental to the environment, as some, but not all, of the problems include producing methane, wasting fresh water which was used to create it, and wasting arable land is amongst many environmental issues with wasting food
(Source)
b. It robs the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin. Perfectly edible refers to food which meets the health and safety standards, and DOES NOT refer to food which has expired, rotted, moulded, is half eaten or is otherwise inedible
c. Food production is very labour-intensive task, which is in vein if the food is not eaten
This proposal suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage by:

1. Strongly encourages member nations to create local initiatives that seek to prevent the overproduction and disposal of viable and still-edible food including food banks and charities;

2. Urges member nations to inform their citizens about how to properly save and store leftovers for future consumption;

3. Obligates member nations to manage food surpluses and the excessive wastage of food through eco-friendly and constructive ways including but not limited to:
Diverting food scraps to animal feed;
Composting inedible food to create nutrient-rich soil;
Use waste oils from food for fuel conversion and food scraps for the recover energy in industrial processes;
4. Extends the authority of the International Food Welfare Organization to:
Establish food banks and charities in member nations with their permission;
Research the most practical and environmentally-friendly methods of food decomposition.



Noticing that many organisations, such as hotels, motels, pubs, RSL clubs, league's clubs, country clubs, taverns, bars, religious organisations, restaurants, supermarkets, flea markets, butchers, chicken shops, fish shops, bakeries, cake shops, fast food restaurants, quick dine restaurants, grocers, green grocers, megamarkets, take away shops, airlines, events, food stalls, food carts, vending machines, street food retailers, etc. who sell food have lots of wastage because they intentionally or unintentionally order too much food, causing the excessive food to go to waste, often in a perfectly edible state, or a lack of proper stock rotation causes food to accidently expire. Horrified of the fact that food wastage is bad for the following reasons:

a. It is detrimental to the environment. Food which ends up in landfill is determental to the environment, as some, but not all, of the problems include producing methane, wasting fresh water which was used to create it, and wasting arable land is amongst many environmental issues with wasting food
(Source)
b. It robs the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin. Perfectly edible refers to food which meets the health and safety standards, and DOES NOT refer to food which has expired, rotted, moulded, is half eaten or is otherwise inedible
c. Food production is very labour-intensive task, which is in vein if the food is not eaten
This proposal suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage by:

1. Strongly encourages member nations to create local initiatives that seek to prevent the overproduction and disposal of viable and still-edible food including food banks and charities;

2. Urges member nations to inform their citizens about how to properly save and store leftovers for future consumption;

3. Obligates member nations to manage food surpluses and the excessive wastage of food through eco-friendly and constructive ways including but not limited to:
Diverting food scraps to animal feed;
Composting inedible food to create nutrient-rich soil
Use waste oils from food for fuel conversion and food scraps for the recover energy in industrial processes;
4. Extends the authority of the International Food Welfare Organization to:
Establish food banks and charities in member nations with their permission;
Research the most practical and environmentally-friendly methods of food decomposition;



[spoiler=Second Draft]The General Assembly,
Noticing that many organisations, such as hotels, motels, pubs, RSL clubs, league's clubs, country clubs, taverns, bars, religious organisations, restaurants, supermarkets, flea markets, butchers, chicken shops, fish shops, bakeries, cake shops, fast food restaurants, quick dine restaurants, grocers, green grocers, megamarkets, take away shops, airlines, events, food stalls, food carts, vending machines, street food retailers, etc. who sell food have lots of wastage because they intentionally or unintentionally order too much food, causing the excessive food to go to waste, often in a perfectly edible state, or a lack of proper stock rotation causes food to accidently expire. Horrified of the fact that food wastage is bad for the following reasons:

a. It is detrimental to the environment. Food which ends up in landfill is determental to the environment, as some, but not all, of the problems include producing methane, wasting fresh water which was used to create it, and wasting arable land is amongst many environmental issues with wasting food
(Source)
b. It robs the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin. Perfectly edible refers to food which meets the health and safety standards, and DOES NOT refer to food which has expired, rotted, moulded, is half eaten or is otherwise inedible
c. Food production is very labour-intensive task, which is in vein if the food is not eaten
This proposal suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage by:
a. Encourage the managers of businesses and other organisations to donate excessive, but edible food stuffs to the poor, through financial incentives and/or by offering free collection of food stuffs. Recognising that health and safety takes precedence, however, these organisations must not accept food which does not pass the food hygiene standard
b. Realising that 1/3 of food is wasted because it’s too ugly to be sold at supermarkets. Therefore, encourage retailers (e.g. supermarkets) to sell fruit and vegetables which would otherwise be considered “ugly”, but still edible, at a discounted price. Produce wasted due to “ugliness” is still a source of unnecessary food waste, even after canning, crushing etc.
(Source)
c. Financially reward organisations who participate in reducing food wastage
d. Ensure that food hygiene and food safety standards are the first priority. This means that food cannot be sold or donated to the poor if it has been touched by anybody except a food handler, mouldy, partially digested, expired, inserted into one’s mouth, dropped on to the floor, fails to meet quarantine standards/legislation, poisoned, contaminated, or otherwise violates HACCP standards.
By reducing food wastage, the environment and the poor will benefit greatly


Reduce Food Wastage (Non-Binding)
Category: Social Justice | Strength: Mild | Proposed by: Australian rePublic
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The General Assembly,

Noticing that many organisations, such as hotels, league's clubs, religious organisations, restaurants and supermarkets who sell food have lots of wastage because they intentionally or unintentionally order too much food, causing the excessive food to go to waste, often in a perfectly edible state, or a lack of proper stock rotation causes food to accidently expire. Horrified of the fact that food wastage is bad for the following reasons:

a. It is determental to the environment
b. It robs the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin
c. Food production is very labour-intensive task, which is in vein if the food is not eaten

This proposal suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage by:
a. Teach the managers and staff of businesses and other organisations proper FIFO (First in First Out) rotation methods. This will also save companies money
b. Encourage the managers of businesses and other organisations to donate excessive, but edible food stuffs to the poor, through financial incentives or by offering free collection of food stuffs
c. Encourage retailers (e.g. supermarkets) to sell fruit and vegetables which would otherwise be considered “ugly”, but still edible, at a discounted price. This shall also provide a revenue stream for retailers, and solve 40-60% of food wasted by farms
d. Teach businesses and other organisations how to save money by not ordering too much food which cannot be sold
e. For the first six months, reward businesses and other organisations who actively take measures to reduce food wastage, and punish non-compliance thereafter
f. Establish a food wastage committee to enforce and assist in the implementation of such measures

By reducing food wastage, the environment and the poor will be better off
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Postby Grays Harbor » Tue Apr 17, 2018 5:33 am

Australian rePublic wrote:Reduce Food Wastage (Non-Binding)
Category: Social Justice | Strength: Mild | Proposed by: Australian rePublic
OOC: No such thing as a non-binding resolution under WA/GA rules and game mechanics. They either effect everybody, or they don't get passed, those are the options.
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I have very little experience with resolutions. Please help :)

The General Assembly,

Noticing that many organisations, such as hotels, league's clubs, religious organisations, restaurants and supermarkets who sell food have lots of wastage because they intentionally or unintentionally order too much food, causing the excessive food to go to waste, often in a perfectly edible state, or a lack of proper stock rotation causes food to accidently expire. Horrified of the fact that food wastage is bad for the following reasons:

a. It is determental to the environment
b. It robs the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin
c. Food production is very labour-intensive task, which is in vein if the food is not eaten
a. How is spoiled food detrimental to the environment? b. I really have issues with "lets feed The Poor garbage and leftovers.

This proposal suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage by
OK, lets see ...

a. Teach the managers and staff of businesses and other organisations proper FIFO (First in First Out) rotation methods. This will also save companies money
Inventory Management. It is the first rule of running any retail, include restaurants, business. The FIRST rule. Any business which doesn't understand this doesn't stay in business for very long. You are, in a way, mandating the WA teach classes to sailors that water is wet.
b. Encourage the managers of businesses and other organisations to donate excessive, but edible food stuffs to the poor, through financial incentives or by offering free collection of food stuffs
On the surface, not completely bad, but you may well contravene many Health and Safety standards.
c. Encourage retailers (e.g. supermarkets) to sell fruit and vegetables which would otherwise be considered “ugly”, but still edible, at a discounted price. This shall also provide a revenue stream for retailers, and solve 40-60% of food wasted by farms
"Ugly" vegetables are near always the ones used in the canning process, and other packaged foods and non-food items.
d. Teach businesses and other organisations how to save money by not ordering too much food which cannot be sold
You already said this, in section A. Again, "Inventory Control".
e. For the first six months, reward businesses and other organisations who actively take measures to reduce food wastage, and punish non-compliance thereafter
This is a bit extreme, and short-sighted. "We don't want that penalty! That bread is only a 'little' moldy. Send it out to the homeless shelter! Quick!"
f. Establish a food wastage committee to enforce and assist in the implementation of such measures
Ah, the Garbage Police.



By reducing food wastage, the environment and the poor will be better off

Yes, "The Poor" will learn the lesson that the garbage produced by the "Not Poor" is all they are worthy of. What a noble goal.
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Postby Cute Puppies » Tue Apr 17, 2018 8:19 am

OOC: I don't believe there is a GA resolution on food waste, and honestly, I think with some touch-ups, reformatting, and the removal and addition of clauses, this could be beneficial to the World Assembly.

I researched the topic a bit, and here's what I could find. Hopefully, you can use the information or links provided to improve your proposal.
Economic Impact of Food Waste
  • 1/3 of all food globally is wasted - 1.3 billion tons of food not consumed.
  • Tesco, a British supermarket chain, published that it alone put 28,500 tons of food to watste in the first half of 2013.
  • $250 billion is lost globally every year to cultivate, produce, and eventually dispose of this wasted food.
http://www.inquiriesjournal.com/article ... food-waste

Environmental Impact of Food Waste
  • When food is produced but not eaten, there is a massive carbon footprint left behind - around 3.3 Gtonnes of CO2.
  • The consumption of surface and groundwater resources of food wastage globally is around 250km3, which is equivalent to 3.6 times the consumption of water of the USA in the same time period.
  • Wasted food is an extreme source of methane, a potent greenhouse gas with 21 times the global warming potential of carbon dioxide
  • The massive amount of land used to produce food that may later be wasted leads to the land's degradation, adding undue pressure on the land.
  • Food waste is the single largest component sent to American landfills
  • 25% of all freshwater and 300 million barrels of oil are used to produce food that is wasted.
  • Agricultural production is responsible for 66% of threats to species in terrestrial systems.
http://www.greenfacts.org/en/food-wastage/


I'll be sure to add a post later about the solutions researchers have found to food wastage.
Good luck with the proposal. I'll be happy to help along the way!

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(OOC: Put [DRAFT] rather than "resolution idea" in the title.)
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Postby Masurbia » Tue Apr 17, 2018 1:11 pm

Australian rePublic wrote:a. Teach the managers and staff of businesses and other organisations proper FIFO (First in First Out) rotation methods. This will also save companies money

So you're going to teach EVERY single business, regardless of what they do, on this FIFO food preservation thing? How will that save money?
e. For the first six months, reward businesses and other organisations who actively take measures to reduce food wastage, and punish non-compliance thereafter

What kind of reward is being given out? A certificate? A gold trash can?
c. Encourage retailers (e.g. supermarkets) to sell fruit and vegetables which would otherwise be considered “ugly”, but still edible, at a discounted price.

You talk about saving money, but encourage grocery stores to sell discounted food...
f. Establish a food wastage committee to enforce and assist in the implementation of such measures

So basically a Health Inspector?
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Postby Kenmoria » Tue Apr 17, 2018 11:35 pm

"There needs to be a line break between “expire” and “Horrifed” to aid clarity in the first block of text. Also, the very last line of the proposal is unneeded and would work better in the pre-amble."
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Postby Edrarin » Wed Apr 18, 2018 1:46 am

I agree with Cute Puppies, with a bit more work and some changes to the structuring of this draft, it could go a long way in the GA and you may even have our support.
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Postby Araraukar » Wed Apr 18, 2018 8:20 am

OOC: Well it's good to see that you at least followed the advice from when you asked about this, and posted the draft here rather than submitting rightaway, but you seem to not have done your GA-specific homework very well. And there are several spelling errors.

Existing resolutions:
GA #52, Food Welfare Act
GA #64, Food and Drug Standards
GA #322, Minimum Standard of Living Act

Last few previous attempts at this or something very similar to this:
One.
Two.
Three.
Four.

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Postby Kenmoria » Wed Apr 18, 2018 8:22 am

"The NOTICING clause is entirely in one sentence, and should probably be broken up."
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Postby Cute Puppies » Sat Apr 21, 2018 5:57 am

OOC: Australian Republic, do you plan on pursuing a draft on good wastage?
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Postby Kenmoria » Sat Apr 21, 2018 9:52 am

"Also, I would scrap the last clause, it is nothing more than useless pre-amble."
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Postby Australian rePublic » Sun Apr 22, 2018 3:28 am

I have made significant changes and have posted a new draft. I don't really get the "Pre-amble" part. Anyway, thanks for your help!
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Postby Kenmoria » Sun Apr 22, 2018 3:31 am

Australian rePublic wrote:I have made significant changes and have posted a new draft. I don't really get the "Pre-amble" part. Anyway, thanks for your help!

(OOC: The preamble is just the part of the proposal without any effect. These are in your proposal in the first and last clauses, whereas the preamble is almost always (perhaps always) at the beginning.)
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Kenmoria wrote:
Australian rePublic wrote:I have made significant changes and have posted a new draft. I don't really get the "Pre-amble" part. Anyway, thanks for your help!

(OOC: The preamble is just the part of the proposal without any effect. These are in your proposal in the first and last clauses, whereas the preamble is almost always (perhaps always) at the beginning.)

Thanks!
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Postby Cute Puppies » Sun Apr 22, 2018 6:12 am

OOC: A proposal's preamble is like a pitch: it should be short and sweet, and provide a brief overview of the issue you would like to address, and why this issue concerns the World Assembly. Your preamble is certainly a good start, but is too long and excessive. And, I don't believe it's proper for to refer to real life statistics and media.

Here's what I would recommend in a preamble:

The World Assembly,

Shocked by the copious amount of food left unconsumed and disregarded;

Recognizing the adverse effects food wastage has on the economy and environment such as:
  1. Food wastage dramatically inflates the price of food;
  2. Uneaten, decomposing food leaves behind a massive carbon footprint;
  3. Wasted food is an extreme source of methane, a potent greenhouse gas with a significant global warming potential;
  4. The massive amount of land and resources used to produce food that may later be wasted leads to the land's degradation, adding undue pressure on the environment;
  5. Food waste is, for many member nations, one of the single largest components sent to landfills;
Further recognizing that a great portion of wasted food left in an uneaten and untouched state is perfectly edible and safe to eat, and could be used to supply starving populations and the less fortunate;

Desiring to establish minimal legislation and guidelines in order to efficiently deal with the harmful economic and environmental effects of food wastage, and use the surplus of food to feed the impoverished and needy;
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Postby Cute Puppies » Sun Apr 22, 2018 7:38 am

I also have suggestions for the clauses following "hereby" if you would like to hear them
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Postby Australian rePublic » Sun Apr 22, 2018 7:47 pm

Cute Puppies wrote:I also have suggestions for the clauses following "hereby" if you would like to hear them

Is there a way to co-author this?
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Postby Cute Puppies » Sun Apr 22, 2018 9:28 pm

Australian rePublic wrote:
Cute Puppies wrote:I also have suggestions for the clauses following "hereby" if you would like to hear them

Is there a way to co-author this?

Yeah. If you had a co-author, you would submit the finished proposal and credit the co-author at the end of the proposal. I would be glad to work on your proposal with you.

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Postby Australian rePublic » Sun Apr 22, 2018 11:33 pm

Cute Puppies wrote:
Australian rePublic wrote:Is there a way to co-author this?

Yeah. If you had a co-author, you would submit the finished proposal and credit the co-author at the end of the proposal. I would be glad to work on your proposal with you.

:)

What do you suggest from here?
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Postby Cute Puppies » Mon Apr 23, 2018 3:29 am

Australian rePublic wrote:
Cute Puppies wrote:Yeah. If you had a co-author, you would submit the finished proposal and credit the co-author at the end of the proposal. I would be glad to work on your proposal with you.

:)

What do you suggest from here?


I suggest you come up with a list of goals you have for this proposal. What do you want this proposal to accomplish? How will it be able to stop good wastage?

Edit: I have some suggestions for mandates that I will post once I'm able to get onto a computer.
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Postby The New California Republic » Mon Apr 23, 2018 6:31 am

Australian rePublic wrote:...violates HACCP standards...

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Postby New Keam » Mon Apr 23, 2018 7:53 am

There's a good idea, and something that the liberal nations (like mine) would probably rally for. The writing is going to need some spoofing up.

What if the bill was more geared towards setting up private-public partnerships that aid in working with private businesses and nonprofits to reduce food waste by feeding the hungry around the world? We can create a humanitarian program by empowering private business and nonprofits.
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Postby The New California Republic » Mon Apr 23, 2018 8:31 am

Australian rePublic wrote:c. Food production is very labour-intensive task, which is in vein if the food is not eaten

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Postby New Keam » Mon Apr 23, 2018 8:45 am

I offer a counter proposal instead:

The Food Waste Reduction Act
This Bill Recognizes:
A. Food Waste is a common issue throughout the world with 1/3 of food production wasted
B. Food deserts and famine exist throughout the globe
C. There are no policing mechanisms to enforce worldwide mandates
D. The reduction of food waste is done best through voluntary activism

To deal with these issues
A. Creates a voluntary public-private partnership between member states of the World Assemble along with public, private and nonprofit entities tasked with reducing food waste by using surplus food production as humanitarian relief to food deserts, disaster areas and other places where famine exists.
B. Creates a trust to fund this program using public and private capital donations.
C. Creates a committee to oversee the program and the trust, the membership of which is appointed by member states that voluntarily opt-in to the program.
D. The program and trust will be audited by an auditor appointed by member states that voluntarily opt-in to the program.
E. Membership to this program is voluntary and not mandatory.
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Postby Kenmoria » Mon Apr 23, 2018 8:46 am

"There really needs to be line breaks between each clause, otherwise the thing is very hard to read."

(OOC: I would put the sources at the end of the text to make it clear that they are not part of the proposal.)

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New Keam wrote:The Food Waste Reduction Act
This Bill Recognizes:
A. Food Waste is a common issue throughout the world with 1/3 of food production wasted
B. Food deserts and famine exist throughout the globe
C. There are no policing mechanisms to enforce worldwide mandates
D. The reduction of food waste is done best through voluntary activism

To deal with these issues
A. Creates a voluntary public-private partnership between member states of the World Assemble along with public, private and nonprofit entities tasked with reducing food waste by using surplus food production as humanitarian relief to food deserts, disaster areas and other places where famine exists.
B. Creates to fund this program using public and private capital donations.
C. Creates a committee to oversee the program and the trust, the membership of which is appointed by member states that voluntarily opt-in to the program.
D. The program and trust will be audited by an auditor appointed by member states that voluntarily opt-in to the program.
E. Membership to this program is voluntary and not mandatory.

(OOC: Why is this posted here? It should go in its own drafting thread.)
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