by He Qixin 2 » Sun Jan 21, 2018 12:37 am
by He Qixin 2 » Sun Jan 21, 2018 12:43 am
by Araraukar » Sun Jan 21, 2018 12:44 am
He Qixin 2 wrote:OOC: Category: Environmental, Industry Affected: idk I know this wording is bad, so please help me improve this. Also help me decide the industry affected. also give me better ideas; i think my ideas are somewhat dull.
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by He Qixin 2 » Sun Jan 21, 2018 12:44 am
by Araraukar » Sun Jan 21, 2018 1:02 am
He Qixin 2 wrote:This time, i promise to follow your feedback.
Seriously, i promise.
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by He Qixin 2 » Sun Jan 21, 2018 1:08 am
by Araraukar » Sun Jan 21, 2018 1:43 am
He Qixin 2 wrote:OOC: That's what I'm trying to do. I'm trying to garner feedback now, and edit whenever necessary.
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by He Qixin » Sun Jan 21, 2018 1:54 am
jacknjellify wrote:Watch Battle For Dream Island or be eliminated.
by Araraukar » Sun Jan 21, 2018 2:02 am
He Qixin wrote:*snip*
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by He Qixin » Sun Jan 21, 2018 2:03 am
Araraukar wrote:He Qixin wrote:*snip*
OOC: You could instead put the previous drafts into your second post in this thread: viewtopic.php?p=33317612#p33317612
jacknjellify wrote:Watch Battle For Dream Island or be eliminated.
by He Qixin » Sun Jan 21, 2018 2:04 am
jacknjellify wrote:Watch Battle For Dream Island or be eliminated.
by Kenmoria » Sun Jan 21, 2018 2:22 am
by He Qixin 2 » Sun Jan 21, 2018 2:26 am
Kenmoria wrote:"The second instance of "that" in the first clause in unneeded and "was" should be used instead of "were" as it is a singular issue."
by He Qixin 2 » Sun Jan 21, 2018 2:26 am
He Qixin wrote:The World Assembly:
Remembering that in World Assembly Resolution #344, "Minimum Standard of Living Act", that the issue of living standards was addressed;
Knowing that food was addressed as part of the minimum living standards;
Thinking that before this resolution was passed, food wastage was not addressed, and even not fully addressed after the passing of this resolution;
However knowing that, one of the purposes of this resolution was so that everyone, be it the rich and the poor, can at least get some food;
Implying that the rich may have been wasting food more than the poor, and not thinking about the poor before this resolution;
Also frightened that member nations may not have enacted food waste management laws yet;
Therefore thinking that the problem of food wastage should be addressed immediately;
Therefore, the World Assembly hereby:
1. Defines, for the purposes of this proposal, "food wastage" as (a) "food that is discarded or lost uneaten" and (b) "a waste of the labour, water, energy, land and other inputs that went into producing food";
2. Further specifying that such "wasted food" includes thrown away litter like unfinished apple bones, unfinished rice and noodles on plates, biscuits not finished in a packet, etc.;
3. Declares a new law in all member nations in the compulsory management of food waste, which states that WA members must:
(a) Mandates that organizations of member nations must follow the law and manage any sort of food waste done by anyone;
(b) Further mandates that member nations and their citizens manage waste through any, but not limited to, the following methods:
(c)(i) Planning food shopping and storing foods properly;
(c)(ii) Creating food banks which contain waste foods that can be donated to the poor;
(c)(iii) Educating people about the dangers of food wastage; and
(c)(iv) Creating a small network of businesses and non-profit initiatives to reduce food waste.The World Assembly:
Remembering that in World Assembly Resolution #344, "Minimum Standard of Living Act", that the issue of living standards were addressed;
Knowing that food was addressed as part of the minimum living standards;
Thinking that before this resolution was passed, food wastage was not addressed, and even not fully addressed after the passing of this resolution;
However knowing that, one of the purposes of this resolution was so that everyone, be it the rich and the poor, can at least get some food;
Implying that the rich may have been wasting food, and not thinking about the poor before this resolution;
Also frightened that member nations may not have enacted food waste management laws yet;
Further knowing the many other causes of food wastage;
Therefore thinking that the problem of food wastage should be addressed immediately;
Therefore, the World Assembly hereby:
1. Defines, for the purposes of this proposal, "food wastage" as (a) "food that is discarded or lost uneaten" and (b) "a waste of the labour, water, energy, land and other inputs that went into producing food":
2. Declares a new law in all member nations in the compulsory management of food waste;
3. Further specifying that such "wasted food" includes thrown away litter like unfinished apple bones, unfinished rice and noodles on plates, biscuits not finished in a packet, etc.
4. Mandates that organizations of member nations must follow the law and manage any sort of food waste done by anyone;
5. Further mandates that member nations and its own citizens manage waste through any of the following methods:
(a) Planning food shopping and storing foods properly;
(b) Creating food banks which contain waste foods that can be donated to the poor;
(c) Educating people about the dangers of food wastage;
(d) Creating a small network of businesses and non-profit initiatives to reduce food waste;
6. Clarifying that there are other methods in which food waste can be managed; and
7. Further clarifying that no legislation in the WA that require otherwise, that food waste must be properly managed.
*Replying for my sequel nation
by Araraukar » Sun Jan 21, 2018 3:10 am
He Qixin 2 wrote:*snip*
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by He Qixin » Sun Jan 21, 2018 3:13 am
jacknjellify wrote:Watch Battle For Dream Island or be eliminated.
by He Qixin 2 » Sun Jan 21, 2018 9:42 pm
by Attempted Socialism » Mon Jan 22, 2018 2:48 am
Araraukar wrote:[W]ith your past history on this forum, I would suggest actively working on this draft and replying to comments and not even thinking of submitting until the end of February.
You need to learn be patient and to find the balance between defending your proposal and integrating good feedback into it, so that's why I'm suggesting a bit over a month of drafting before even considering submitting.
People not posting changes to your draft a few days is not indicative of readiness for submission, just to reiterate. Given your particular history, I'd say Araraukars suggested option of thinking of submitting at the end of February risks being premature.He Qixin 2 wrote:uhh, any more changes?
edit: 100 posts! woo!
He Qixin wrote:i cant, im sorry
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by Araraukar » Mon Jan 22, 2018 8:46 am
Apologies for absences, non-COVID health issues leave me with very little energy at times.Giovenith wrote:And sorry hun, if you were looking for a forum site where nobody argued, you've come to wrong one.
by Kenmoria » Mon Jan 22, 2018 10:57 am
by He Qixin » Mon Jan 22, 2018 6:26 pm
jacknjellify wrote:Watch Battle For Dream Island or be eliminated.
by He Qixin » Mon Jan 22, 2018 7:45 pm
jacknjellify wrote:Watch Battle For Dream Island or be eliminated.
by Separatist Peoples » Mon Jan 22, 2018 7:54 pm
He Qixin wrote:Uhh guys, can you give me an "Industry Affected" for this proposal?
by He Qixin 2 » Mon Jan 22, 2018 9:21 pm
by Attempted Socialism » Tue Jan 23, 2018 1:33 am
You can't tag me, and since I haven't done any work on your draft at all, you shouldn't even want to tag me as co-author (EDIT: Since co-authors need to have done substantial work, otherwise it's branding and will get your draft thrown out for illegality).He Qixin wrote:Question: Can I tag you guys co-author?
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