DITCHED: Reduce Food Waste

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(OOC: Why is this posted here? It should go in its own drafting thread.)

The author has just posted it in its own thread. As I'm sure you know, discuss that proposal there and this proposal here.

[Cute Puppies]

OOC: Oof. Guess we got some competition. :^)

In other news, I hope to post a list of suggestions for mandates shortly. Tell me what you think of them, Australian Republic

[Cute Puppies]

Here are my suggestions for some of the mandates that should be included into the proposal:

1. Strongly encourages member nations to create local initiatives that seek to prevent the overproduction and disposal of viable and still-edible food including food banks and charities;

2. Urges member nations to inform their citizens about how to properly save and store leftovers for future consumption;

3. Obligates member nations to manage food surpluses and the excessive wastage of food through eco-friendly and constructive ways including but not limited to:

1. Diverting food scraps to animal feed;
2. Composting inedible food to create nutrient-rich soil
3. Use waste oils from food for fuel conversion and food scraps for the recover energy in industrial processes;

4. Extends the authority of the International Food Welfare Organization to:

1. Establish food banks and charities in member nations with their permission;
2. Research the most practical and environmentally-friendly methods of food decomposition;

[Australian rePublic]

Here are my suggestions for some of the mandates that should be included into the proposal:

1. Strongly encourages member nations to create local initiatives that seek to prevent the overproduction and disposal of viable and still-edible food including food banks and charities;

2. Urges member nations to inform their citizens about how to properly save and store leftovers for future consumption;

3. Obligates member nations to manage food surpluses and the excessive wastage of food through eco-friendly and constructive ways including but not limited to:

1. Diverting food scraps to animal feed;
2. Composting inedible food to create nutrient-rich soil
3. Use waste oils from food for fuel conversion and food scraps for the recover energy in industrial processes;

4. Extends the authority of the International Food Welfare Organization to:

1. Establish food banks and charities in member nations with their permission;
2. Research the most practical and environmentally-friendly methods of food decomposition;

This is great, thanks

[Cute Puppies]

Here are my suggestions for some of the mandates that should be included into the proposal:

1. Strongly encourages member nations to create local initiatives that seek to prevent the overproduction and disposal of viable and still-edible food including food banks and charities;

2. Urges member nations to inform their citizens about how to properly save and store leftovers for future consumption;

3. Obligates member nations to manage food surpluses and the excessive wastage of food through eco-friendly and constructive ways including but not limited to:

1. Diverting food scraps to animal feed;
2. Composting inedible food to create nutrient-rich soil
3. Use waste oils from food for fuel conversion and food scraps for the recover energy in industrial processes;

4. Extends the authority of the International Food Welfare Organization to:

1. Establish food banks and charities in member nations with their permission;
2. Research the most practical and environmentally-friendly methods of food decomposition;

This is great, thanks

Do you think any of these clauses would be good to include in the proposal?

[Australian rePublic]

This is great, thanks

Do you think any of these clauses would be good to include in the proposal?

Yes, all of them

[Cute Puppies]

Do you think any of these clauses would be good to include in the proposal?

Yes, all of them

Awesome.

[Cute Puppies]

When's the next draft coming out? I would love to suggest edits to formatting for the next one.

[Australian rePublic]

When's the next draft coming out? I would love to suggest edits to formatting for the next one.

Now

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Changed subject line to [DRAFT}, because this is a draft, not just an idea.

[Jarish Inyo]

Opposed. We will not tell the food industry what to do with its trash. Nor will we waste our citizens taxes to put any program to sort through trash.

[Kenmoria]

"There needs to be a semicolon after “nutrient-rich soil” in clause 3."

[Edrarin]

Noticing that many organisations, such as hotels, motels, pubs, RSL clubs, league's clubs, country clubs, taverns, bars, religious organisations, restaurants, supermarkets, flea markets, butchers, chicken shops, fish shops, bakeries, cake shops, fast food restaurants, quick dine restaurants, grocers, green grocers, megamarkets, take away shops, airlines, events, food stalls, food carts, vending machines, street food retailers, etc. who sell food have lots of wastage because they intentionally or unintentionally order too much food, causing the excessive food to go to waste, often in a perfectly edible state, or a lack of proper stock rotation causes food to accidently expire. Horrified of the fact that food wastage is bad for the following reasons:

"I suggest tuning down some example you have in this clause into categories such as with taverns, pubs and bars, they could all go together as establishments which sell alcoholic and other beverages. Do you understand what I mean?"

[Kenmoria]

"The last line should end in a full stop and not a semicolon."

[Cute Puppies]

I would strongly recommend changing the preamble. While it's an exceptional start, it's a bit excessive and long, and doesn't, in my opinion, effectively communicate why food wastage is such a terrible issue.

[Zone 71]

Any updates about the proposal?

[Australian rePublic]

bump for next draft

[Zone 71]

My thoughts on the preamble:

Noticing that many organisations, such as hotels, motels, pubs, RSL clubs, league's clubs, country clubs, taverns, bars, religious organisations, restaurants, supermarkets, flea markets, butchers, chicken shops, fish shops, bakeries, cake shops, fast food restaurants, quick dine restaurants, grocers, green grocers, megamarkets, take away shops, airlines, events, food stalls, food carts, vending machines, street food retailers, etc. who sell food have lots of wastage because they intentionally or unintentionally order too much food, causing the excessive foodto go to waste, often in a perfectly edible state, or a lack of proper stock rotation causes food to accidently expire.

This is an excessive and unnecessary list of organizations that have a lot of food wastage.

Horrified of the fact that food wastage is bad for many, many reasons. Some of these include:

a. Detrimental to the environment. Food which ends up in landfill is determental to the environment, as some, but not all, of the problems include producing methane, wasting fresh water which was used to create it, and wasting arable land is amongst many environmental issues with wasting food
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I don't believe you can explicitly refer to outside sources. Also, I would suggest changing the wording of this clause to better articulate the environmental consequences of food wastage. As it stands, the reasoning seems too vague and minimal.

b. It robs the poor of the ability to eat perfectly edible food which goes into the bin. Perfectly edible refers to food which meets the health and safety standards, and DOES NOT refer to food which has expired, rotted, moulded, is half eaten or is otherwise inedible

Like the previous clause, you should reword this to make it more clear.

c. Food production is very labour-intensive task, which is in vein if the food is not eaten
This proposal suggests that food hygiene, food safety and quarantine should take precedence, but in the situations where food is found to be perfectly edible, this proposal aims to reduce the prevalence of food wastage by:

"This proposal..." is not the best way to start off a clause, and is somewhat informal and unusual for the typical format of a GA resolution. Instead, simply say "hereby."

[Kenmoria]

"You're missing a blank line between clauses 3 and 4."

[Australian rePublic]

Uh... cute puppies, where are you?

[Zone 71]

Uh... cute puppies, where are you?

Sorry for not clarifying. I am Cute Puppies

[Australian rePublic]

Can I please have another draft, co-author?

[Zone 71]

Can I please have another draft, co-author?

What? You already posted a new draft. There's no need.

[Australian rePublic]

Can I please have another draft, co-author?

What? You already posted a new draft. There's no need.

The new draft is shit

[Zone 71]

What? You already posted a new draft. There's no need.

The new draft is shit

I already gave you the mandates, and suggested a new preamble originally, though I would prefer if you don't use all of it so this proposal still remains mostly your content.

Draft writing is hard, and I've never had a published proposal, but if you don't give up, and continue to work on the proposal with high hopes, you should be successful in making this proposal. You've made a number of issues on NS, some that I think I've encountered already. Your name and experience as a successful author should be helpful.