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[Czardas]

Colour has a way of drawing the eye. The reader will see first the translations, then everything else surrounding them. As such, the reader will not only experience your post non-linearly, but they will think in English -- viewing the translation as primary, the original text as secondary. If you're using foreign text that is untranslated in-scene, you want to draw attention to it; thus, it'd be better to keep translations in footnotes. That way it also doesn't break up the flow of the story -- inline translation often comes across as cumbersome for that reason.

That said, I see literally no reason at all for Spanish to be used here in the first place. Both characters can understand each other, the reader is meant to understand them as well and the rest of your post is in English. Since that isn't what you wanted help with, though, I won't comment further.

[Layarteb]

They are speaking to a third party who is the other RPer and it is in Spain which is the language of his country, hence the reason for it if that helps.

[Kagetora]

Just throwing in my opinion here, I can see how someone might want to do something like that, and while I personally wouldn't do it, I'd do it more like...

"I can't type in another language on this computer without changing settings"
"So I won't and you're left with a substandard example."

On the one hand, it doesn't use another color (which I don't like to do if I don't have to unless there's already color in the post from a quote or something) which solves Czardas' comment, and at the same time it preserves the formatting you introduced (albeit slightly different, it remains in essence the same format).

I disagree with Salz idea merely on the idea that it is trying to change a person's writing style needlessly. You could argue one or the other is better, yes, but there is no clear consensus one way or the other.

[Czardas]

They are speaking to a third party who is the other RPer and it is in Spain which is the language of his country, hence the reason for it if that helps.

I'd make the same objections to the other RPer, but meh. Not really my business. At least you're supplying translations for those of us who don't have Spanish-English dictionaries on hand, heh (always annoys me in Poe or whatever when the narrator stops to throw in three lines of untranslated French for no reason except to reference some obscure eighteenth-century poet no one cares about <_<).

Re Kagetora, I've seen two means of supplying translations in books. For block quotes the translation typically goes in square brackets, e.g.

... But I only selected this 'proportional' notation in order to allow a certain accommodation for the interpreter in the extremely dense and quick passages. [... Mais j'ai choisi cette notation "proportionelle" seulement pour permettre un certain accomodament de la part de l'interprete, dans les passages extrement denses et rapides.]

whereas for shorter words or phrases you usually see a footnote:

[...] he typically referred to this ideal as a Gesamtkunstwerk¹⁴, a term originally coined by [...]
[400 more words about german romantic philosophy to the bottom of the page]
————————————————————————
¹⁴ Ger. "total work of art"; "universal artwork"

Since paratextual translations are hardly ever provided for dialogue -- you sometimes see textual translations in the narration or thoughts of the characters (e.g. "Du bist eine haarig-gerochen Dirne!" yelled the man. I struggled with my rudimentary knowledge of German. He thinks I'm a what?) -- there's no widely accepted solution. Parentheses, square brackets or a smaller font size could all work if you want to keep your original formatting without the colours; I'm slightly less happy with putting the translation on the line below but mostly because I think it makes the text look like there's a line of ants marching along under it.

[Kylarnatia]

@Of The Arch ilands:

Thank you for being patient with me - I cannot really explain how fast the time passed me, and how I struggled to do anything on NationStates, let alone give you some feedback. Now it's the weekend however, so I have no excuse to leave it anymore. You've waited long enough, and as I've said, been a good sport :3

So, here's what I've got [We're going to go through this paragraph by paragraph]:

Granger stood looking out of his office window, watching as the white flakes of snow almost completely whited out his vision of Illania, the snow had been falling almost none stop for two weeks strait. Most of the country had ground to a halt and all of the attempts so far to do anything about it had failed.^[1]

“Snow continues to blanket the Confederacy as the countries roads grind to a halt once more.” The female voice of the Channel 17 news reporter Helen Marshall. “And Meteorologists predict that more is to be expected over the next week, the recent snow storms are the worst in the Confederacies recorded history. Many people are bunkering down in their homes hoping for the best whilst the government tries its best to tackle the difficult situation.”^[2]

Granger sighed, with the world’s economy as dire as they are freak happenings that locked down the country where potentially hazardous to the economy. The Confederacy had narrowly avoided recession several months ago through the fast actions of the Senate, but the freak snow storm’s where steering them right back into that abyss they had been struggling to stay out of.^[3]

Turning Granger looked to the two men and one woman sat in in the chairs next to his desk all were watching the news reporter. Taking the control he muted the wide screen TV and sat at his desk. “so ladies and gentlemen what’s the progress report?”^[4]

There was a brief pause of silence before Andy Maclhorne Chief of Civil Engineering spoke. “Well we now have every Snowplough out in force with round the clock shifts, alot of the local farmers have offered there services as well, and from reports have been clearing the minor roads around their areas. The first shipments of extra grit have finally come in and are being distributed around the country; we are predicting the Major cities and towns should have pretty normal road conditions by the end of this week despite the continuing snow fall.”^[5]

Granger nodded “Well done, hopefully it will have people back at work within the next couple of days it’s vital that we get the economy rolling again. Mary please tell me we have some modicum of public transport running?” Granger literally looked as if he was about pull his hair out, despite the roads being closed Public transport and the railways had been shut down due to the heavy snow fall also.^[6]

Mary cleared her throat, and leant forward. “Rail services are returning finally we have the main lines open, as of yesterday Thanks to the valiant efforts of the NorthWest Rail Services running specialised rail cleaners over the rails ever day to keep them free of snow. Intercity busses are still a no go im afraid.”^[7]

Granger seemed to relax a little the main Rail lines would at least help the country get moving if only at a crawl but it was something. “Okay, well with more snow expected We need to up the anty here I want every vehicle capable of fielding a plough on the roads, Call in the Territorial Army and the Regulars if you have to We need to get this country moving!”^[8]

[1]

• Sentence Suggestion: Who is Granger? Like, is he a transport official or the countrys leader?
• Sentence Suggestion: Illania? Sounds beautiful - but where is that in your nation and is it the capital or no?
• Sentence Fix: [...as the white flakes of snow almost completely blanked out his vision of Illania. The snow had been falling almost non-stop for two weeks straight.]

[2]

• Sentence Suggestion and Fix: I think you should have the reporters words in italics, just to make them stand out a little bit more because she isn't in the room itself [“Snow continues to blanket the Confederacy as the country's roads grind to a halt once more.” ].
• Sentence Suggestion: [Channel 17 News was on the wide screen television in the room, the female reporters tone high and attention grabbing as she continued to report on the recent snowfall...]
• Sentence Fix: [“Meteorologists are predicting more snow over the next week, making the recent snow storms the worst in the Confederacy's history. Many people are bunkering down in their homes hoping for the best whilst the government tries its best to tackle the difficult situation.”]

[3]

• Sentence Suggestion and Fix: I wouldn't suggest that the NS World Economy is 'dire' at the moment - in fact because Trade Markets are only operated by a few people here on NationStates - there's no way we can judge if the entire NS World Economy is 'dire' as a whole or not. Plus, the economic calculator built-in to the game, and those offsite, aren't very realistic or rather accurate. [Granger sighed with doubt. The nation's economy was fragile, so freak happenings that locked down the country where potentially hazardous.]
• Sentence Fix: [...however the freak snow storms where steering them right back into the abyss they had struggled to stay out of those six months before.]

[4]

• Sentence Suggestion and Fix: [Turning, Granger looked to the two men and one woman who sat in the chairs next to his desk. They were all watching the news on the television before them.]
• Sentence Fix: [“So, ladies and gentlemen, what’s the situation?”]

[5]

• PARAGRAPH Fix: [There was a brief pause of silence before Andy Maclhorne, Chief of Civil Engineering spoke. “Well we now have every snowplough out in force with round the clock shifts, a lot of the farmers in rural areas have offered there services, and from reports have been clearing the minor roads around their areas. The first shipments of extra grit have finally come in and are being distributed around the country. We are predicting the major cities and towns should have pretty normal road conditions by the end of this week despite the continuing snow fall."]
• Sentence Suggestion: Coming to the farmers thing - I've changed it to '...in rural areas' or rather suggested it to be that way because that's where they usually operate as it's quiet. It's very rare you see farmers near a big city unless they're there for trade. Believe me, I Iive in a rural county in the UK and it's full of farmers, go to one of the citys though and there's none in sight.

[6]

• Sentence Fix: [“Well done, hopefully it will have people back at work within the next couple of days. It’s vital that we get the economy rolling again. Mary, please tell me we have some mode of public transport running?”]
• Sentence Suggestion: You're going right by trying to explain how he feels by saying '...he was close to ripping his hair out.' and so on, but it just doesn't look like as if it's needed [Public Transport and the railways had been shut down due to the heavy snow fall also.]

[7]

• PARAGRAPH Fix and Suggestion: [Mary cleared her throat, and satforward. “Rail services are returning finally and we've had the main lines open as of yesterday thanks to the valiant efforts of the NorthWest Rail Services running specialised rail cleaners over the rails everyday to keep them free of snow. Intercity bus links are still a no go I'm afraid.”]

[8]

• PARAGRAPH Fix and Suggestion: [Granger seemed to relax a little more now knowing the main rail lines would at least help the country get moving if only at a crawling pace, but it was something. “Okay, well with more snow expected we need to up the anti here. I want every vehicle capable of fielding a plough on the roads, call in the forces and even reserves if you have to. We need to get this country moving!”]

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That isn't really the way to do it, but I needed to do it because I feared I wouldn't be able to make my words clear enough without showing you. Anywho, don't let this list demoralise you. As I said, it's only there to back up the summary I'm about to give you. I only started to do paragraph fix and suggestions because I was getting bored :/

Though on the whole, I generally think you wrote something good and I enjoyed reading it. These are just some of the things that I think will help you make your work better:

• Grammar, Spelling and Punctuation: These three things are perhaps, most important. I believe these were the three things holding you back. Take the time after you've written something to go over it and spellcheck it (seeing as you were using MS Word, you could have used the spellcheck tool to help you). Also think about how certain things are used e.g. semi-colons (;) are used to replace a connective.
• Sentence Structure: Sometimes you left 'holes' in your sentences where the wording just didn't make sense. Once again, take the time to read over your work and see if things need to be written much more clearly. Also, try to use wider connectives (e.g. instead of using 'but', use things like 'however' and/or 'on the other hand...'). However, also remember that simple words do just as good as they bring more impact, that being things like short sentences.
• Character and Place Detail: I think you could have expanded more on who the characters were, like for instance, Granger. As I said, who is he? You could have also given very brief descriptions of what they look like, just one sentence would do. A little detail on the city setting (basically what is Illania and what is its significance. Is it a capital or a key trade city?) would also do in a line. I know we were only limited to one page, and that's fair enough, but this is more for roleplaying generally. Giving a vast amount of detail paints a picture for the person you're replying to - though you don't always have to over do it which, I'm guilty for sometimes.

That's all I think that needs to be addressed. Mentors and Trainers, even general NS Players and Moderators, feel free to add on to what I've said or even clarify on what I've said (as I don't think I've done the best I could have done). Even disagree with me and give your own feedback, that's cool - whatever is best to help Of The Arch ilands improve.

[United States of Peace]

If I want someone to give me advice concerning a specific post, do i come here? I've writing out a Thread OP but having someone look over it before I post it would be nice.

So....Are you the people to ask?

[Yohannes]

If I want someone to give me advice concerning a specific post, do i come here? I've writing out a Thread OP but having someone look over it before I post it would be nice.

So....Are you the people to ask?

Yes. Feel free to post it here, and Layarteb or some other really good scenario writers would probably be more than happy to take a look at it.

[Santheres]

If I want someone to give me advice concerning a specific post, do i come here? I've writing out a Thread OP but having someone look over it before I post it would be nice.

So....Are you the people to ask?

Yes, like Yohannes said. It can also be posted in the "Have A Question?" thread, though, and personally I think it would be better there, since that's the sole purpose of that thread, whereas this one has multiple purposes. You'd get the same people replying to you, anyway.

[Alexiandra]

If I want someone to give me advice concerning a specific post, do i come here? I've writing out a Thread OP but having someone look over it before I post it would be nice.

So....Are you the people to ask?

Yes. Feel free to post it here, and Layarteb or some other really good scenario writers would probably be more than happy to take a look at it.

I presume my app has been forgotten.

[Yohannes]

Yes. Feel free to post it here, and Layarteb or some other really good scenario writers would probably be more than happy to take a look at it.

I presume my app has been forgotten.

Not really, in my case. I have voted my say to Jenrak. I am not sure though whether the other panel judges has voted yet.

[Kylarnatia]

Yes. Feel free to post it here, and Layarteb or some other really good scenario writers would probably be more than happy to take a look at it.

I presume my app has been forgotten.

Link? I don't think I've voted on it yet.

[Jenrak]

I presume my app has been forgotten.

Not really, in my case. I have voted my say to Jenrak. I am not sure though whether the other panel judges has voted yet.

They haven't, to my knowledge, so I'm just waiting.

[Cyrupe]

Oi. Jen. Give me a swift kick next time, will ya?

[New Azura]

I've sent a few telegrams out, inquiring about the status of the Trainers Program and whether anyone could send a prompt, if they were still looking / accepting new trainers, etc. etc. I figured I'd toss my name in here, for anyone that could let me know where to go or inquire next.

[Cyrupe]

@Azura

How Do I Apply for the Trainers?

The Trainers are done by an application process from the existing panel judges. Anyone wishing to apply must submit a Single-spaced post detailing a scenario no longer than 1 page, 12 pt Times New Roman font to this thread. For scenarios, applicants must telegram ONLY ONE of the current panel judges (Leistung, Yohannes, Rethan, Santheres, and Cyrupe), who will provide you, the applicant, with a scenario to RP out. You must provide the following information when posting your application:

the Trainer who gave you the scenario
the exact scenario you are RPing out
the application scenario post itself
any extra details and notes at the end that you may wish to add


Because we value flexibility, it is strongly recommended that you RP the scenario given to you. If you have a problem with the scenario and have a good reason, please notify the panel judge who provided you with the scenario to either provide you with a different one or to forward you to a different panel judge. Reasons for changing scenarios such as "I RP mainly / solely in FT / MT / PMT / PT, so I am very specialized" is a workable reason for changing, but simply "I can't do it", "I don't want to do it", "It's not the scenario I had in mind" will not. Ultimately, panel judges have the final discretion, NOT ME, as to whether they can or should change scenarios or not, so please do not telegram me if they are unwilling to change it. We want to ensure that applicants are experienced enough to deal with most of the problems or scenarios coming their way, rather than cherry picking their results.

Each panel judge will either post their evaluation, opinion and acceptance or rejection of your submitted application either in this thread or directly to me. Once a majority opinion has been formed (3/5 ayes or nays), I will either notify you of your status. If you have been accepted, you will be placed on the NSTrainer list. If you have been rejected, I will summarise all the criticisms from all panel judges for you, as well as provide my own opinion as to why you may have not been accepted.

Unless Jenrak decided not to tell any of us, the Trainers program is still accepting people. As for where to go next, only thing you can do is follow the how to apply section I quoted. Feel free to shoot me a telegram to obtain a scenario should the others not respond to a swift poking with a stick.

[New Azura]

Azura's Application to Become a Trainer:
The Trainer: Kylarnatia

Scenario Technology Level: MT

The Scenario: A massive internet group has recently tried to attack your governments main database computer. They failed, but have threatened to try again the following fortnight. The time has come. Roleplay your governments reaction as the final hour approaches.

The Application Post...
Scaeva paced back and forth in the control room, anxiously eyeing the video screen monitors set into the concrete walls of the bunker. Everything that could’ve been done had been done to prepare for any eventuality, and yet the ever-present fear of the unknown permeated the atmosphere in the crowded room. In front of the controllers dispatched to monitor the potential threat from the cyber-terrorist group, the guardian of the Anaximander Lineage had attempted to keep a strong face about himself. Yet as the hours had passed, his polished veneer had begun to crack, revealing the ashen, broken shell of a man who was nigh, even at the edge of Oblivion.
It had been touch-and-go over the last two weeks, ever since the Sons of Abaddon—an insidious group of hackers and revolutionaries—had gone public and claimed responsibility for the cyber attack that had almost penetrated Azura’s missile defense network. The technicians in charge of those systems had ensured the Achæon that the systems were never in any real danger. But then the terrorists had released dire warnings over the internet, threatening to bring an even greater attack upon the computer systems of the Azuran Empire. The country’s intelligence community had verified the threat as one to be taken seriously, and so began almost fourteen days of nervous apprehension in and amongst the corridors of power in Capodimonte.
We’re not prepared for this. We’ve done all that we can, and still it wont be enough.
Scaeva cautiously checked the main clock over the primary monitoring station in the room, noting with some alarm that they were under the one minute mark to midnight. He had personally spearheaded the military’s campaign to prepare for a cyber attack of epic proportions, yet he’d only come away from the experience feeling more despair than optimism. The systems in place were tactically outmatched the last time; it had only been through sheer luck that the analysts had entered the right keystrokes, or else Azura’s nuclear capabilities would have been brought offline for a most dangerous period of time…
Thirty seconds to go. Scaeva stopped pacing to and fro, beginning to become distinctly aware of his surroundings. His heart thumped audibly in his chest, as solitary beads of sweat trickled down his unshaved face. Anaximander took stock of those around him; gentlemen all, yet each with their own worries plastered across their youthful expressions. The officer nearest to Scaeva hadn’t even managed to button his jacket right; it was crumpled over his shoulders haphazardly, in a manner that would’ve brought an immediate citation for insubordination from a superior, had one been present. He was too concerned with wringing his hands, staring blankly at the clock with nary a sound made.
Ten seconds left, now. Scaeva crossed his arms in front of him, as if to hug himself as the final surly seconds slipped the bounds of time. The clock on the wall clicked off, until only five, then four, three, two, and one final second remained. The young prince closed his eyes tightly, holding his breath as the clock reached zero. A loud snap reverberated through the hushed control room, as the digital display switched from 11:59:59 PM over to 12:00:00 AM. Silence hung heavy in the room as Scaeva quietly exhaled slowly. For a moment, his posture relaxed as empty seconds passed. But a silent alarm suddenly tripped, shattering his hope for a respite from fear.
“Sir!” the officer beside him whispered: “Something‘s happening…”

Additional Notes:
At one time, I was an NS Mentor, back before I lost my ability to post here for several weeks. Regardless of my past affiliation with the program, I know deep down that I can help people here. I've done my best to help people, whether I've had a title under my account name or not. Regardless of the consideration given here, I will continue to do so. I only ask that you know that I submit this with the best of intentions. I've been through rough stretches, and I've made as many mistakes as I have done great things here. All I ask is for a chance to reprove myself.

Whether this opens a can of worms or not, I cannot say. But I've been talking with Milograd and Kylarnatia over the last few minutes, and I'll repeat here what I've told to them. I'm willing to help out as a Trainer, or as a volunteer helper w/o the title, or what have you. If that's all that I can do, then I will do it. I have no plans to leave NationStates anytime soon, thanks to an improved financial situation and a more wizened eye to the way things are in the world. If at all possible, at first convenience, I seek to reapply and be reinstated as a Roleplay Mentor.

[Kylarnatia]

@Azura:

Right, don't expect a cluster of paragraphs from me like I did give Of the arch ilands - because that was in a way, damn right silly. However, this is about you and you deserve some feedback. Before I give you my final decision, I just want to give you a quick few sentences.

In all honesty, I enjoyed the read. Really enjoyed it. For what I had given you, I didn't think it'd be enough, but you did just fine. Your use of imagery, in terms of describing the situation and how your main character felt was what made me enjoy it the most, and the fact - as I said - you worked from very little. You left it on a suitable cliff hanger, and you really didn't hold back on crippling yourself.

Most of all, I think you've got a great style of writing. I've seen your posts around the forums, and though I should be solely analysing this submission, I'm just going to say that they also give me a great amount of confidence that you'd be alright for a trainer. And knowing you personally, you've got a nice attitude and determination to do better every time - you're like a proper sports coach, just an easy example.

Though one point of advice: don't beat yourself up. From the extra notes you've given, and again, what I've seen you put around the forums - you seem to always judge what you do now to what you did the past. Don't take that personal, and what I'm saying might be a total pile of bull, but this is what I feel. I'm not going to tell you to let go of the past, as it is good to reflect on it, but I don't think it matters so much anymore, you dig? Your posts and your effort is as good as you make it.

Final point - AYE from me. You're a great guy, Azura, and you are definatly a helpful guy.

Peace,

- Kyle

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@Alexiandra:

Thank you for your patience, but you're still going to have to wait up I'm afraid. Sorry, but I've got an exam coming up, so I'm pretty much strapped for time. The only reason I could do Azura was because I didn't have to write much.

Sorry, but I will get to you.

[Cyrupe]

Azura

I really did enjoy your post. Pretty interesting theme -- certainly not one I get to see every day on NationStates. I've seen your writing beforehand, so what came out wasn't exactly a surprise. It was, however, something I really enjoyed.

You weren't given too much in terms of a plot, but what you made from absolutely impressed me. It was easy to follow, and did provide emotion. I could go on, but like Kyle I'm somewhat out of time.

Aye from me.

[-The West Coast-]

Saguaro Desert, Cochise County
2^1/2 miles outside 2 Guns
Feb. 16, 1861 (mod. cal. 2011)

"Where do you think yer goin', you goddamn yella' bastard?!"

The Chinaman stumbled through the abandoned churchyard, dodging random shots from his former employer on top of old Boot Hill. The old rancher caught him off guard and he'd taken shelter in the old church, the vagrants drinking inside, however, turned him in for a nickel.

He'd stolen the rancher's horse, fucked the boss' daughter and then tried to skip town late last night, only to be found by his enraged employer's hired muscle. The Chinaman bribed his way out of the drunkards' clutches early in the morning, when he encountered his boss. His horse reared back and looked ready to deal the Chinaman incredible damage.

"Run you little fuck!" the Chinaman quickly ran off the road and into the scrub desert. "Ó, mā, ó, mā - Oh shit, oh shit!" he tripped on his own feet and tumbled down a small hill through thorny brush ripping and tearing at his skin, hair and clothes. His long weaved hair caught on a thorn as he tumbled faster and faster and it tore a good amount of the Chinaman's scalp and hair from its place on his skull, "Ā tā mā de! - Fuck!

He landed heavily on the ground and rolled onto his side. He poked at his bloody skull, pulling out some loose hair and nearly fainting at the site of his blood. "Nah, nah, Chinaman, don't you die on me now, you got some explainin' to do." The Chinaman started crawling away from the nervous horse's clopping hooves inching closer to him, "No... Please..." The rancher laughed and his horse reared, "No? No the yellow bastard says, shit..."

The rancher calmed his horse and slid off it, pulling back his dirty frayed jacket and slipping his old Griswald from its holster. "The fuck did you do with my daughter, Chinaman?" Before he could answer the world exploded and the rancher was thrown off his feet.

The rancher's horse spooked in the massive burst of light and the following tremor and bolted into the desert. "Aww... What the hell is that?" Twenty feet from the Chinaman and the rancher a massive crater scarred the desert landscape. At the center of the dark crater was an alien object, resembling a beacon. "Oh thank you thank you God!" the Chinaman whispered under his breath as he slowly got to his feet. The rancher stumbled past him and stood bewildered at the edge of the crater. "What.. What is that..."

Can I get a mentor's opinion on this post? Thanks.

[Yohannes]

Aye to New Azura/Azura.

What Kylarnatia said is true, by the way. Let's forget about the past and move on.

[Durmatagno]

Judge: Rethan
Tech Level: MT
Scenario: An illegal arms dealer has been spotted in one of your coastal port cities (or a city near an airport if you're landlocked), and police are ready to make an arrest. Unbeknownst to your law enforcement officials, the arms dealer has security hidden amongst the patrons of the cafe where he is, including a dead man's trigger activated bomb. Roleplay the arrest and resulting consequences."
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Three hours ago the Anvill Police identified wanted arms dealer Brian Malone, he is responsible for over thirty thousand shipments of illegal ak-47s, made illegal by the amount of dangerous people ordering them in bulk, not counting what he had people ship in for him, currently the police have surrounded the café, where Brian is locked inside with other people, he has blended in with the crowd and has threatened through phone lines to blow the place up if the police don’t provide safe transport out of the country, follow us online for further updates while we go live to a new

Gordon shut the T.V off as he rubbed his temples, inside that building was one of the most dangerous mad men that had ever been inside the country and he had woman and children held hostage under a bomb threat. Not ten minutes ago the man had asked for a boat out of the country with 50,000 Durma Dollars, the people dealing with him had haggled it down to 20,000$ and where now securing a boat with multiple GPS trackers attached to various areas on the boat to track him down.

“Sir, I think we identified him, he’s the tall Caucasian male with black hair and a dragon tattoo around his eye, he’s on the west side of the building and on the top floor” the young officer said through the radio from his post across the street.
“Thank you Mitchell, as soon as you have an open shot, Tranq him and signal that you did and we will move in all at once and take him down, we would kill him but we think the bombs on a dead trigger.”

After ten minutes of waiting the signal was given, troops moved in, then no one knew what was going to happen, someone took a shot, then all hell broke loose, they lost track of the man, who took a break for it out the back door. A gunfight broke out as it turned out Brian wasn’t here alone; he was making a drug drop when the police had locked down the area.

Before the fight ended three officers were killed and five more injured, luckily during the fight the backup had caught Brian and cuffed him, the bomb disarmed and Brian locked in a cell for questioning, despite the fact a dangerous man had been taken off the street, rioters were lined up outside the station demanding the release of Brian and demanding that every active officer is punished severally for the one civilian life and the six gang members killed during the shootout. There only reason for Brian’s release was that they had been “to rough” during the arrest and failed to shut off the bomb “safely”.

We now await the trial of Brian Malone, the notorious mass murderer and arms dealer, however the rioters are starting to become violent, demanding that the man be released and that every officer involved in the arrest be arrested and prosecuted for inhumane treatment of a human being and there involvement in the deaths if seven people. Captain Gordon now goes no where without a armed escort as these insane rioters have threatened his life multiple times, yet because there are hundreds of them and we have not identified the source, no arrests have been made. Now we go to yesterdays crash on interstate eleven.
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Italics are for news reports
Bold was for Gordon to distinguish him from Mitchell

[DASHES]

Couple of questions I've had.

Is it considered acceptable for an MT-nation purchase products from an FT storefront, as well as field them?

Also, is the currency NSD equal to, lesser than, or greater than USD in value? How much exactly?

Thanks a lot, guys.

[Santheres]

Couple of questions I've had.

Is it considered acceptable for an MT-nation purchase products from an FT storefront, as well as field them?

Also, is the currency NSD equal to, lesser than, or greater than USD in value? How much exactly?

Thanks a lot, guys.

1) Not generally. If you have FT tech, you're FT, usually. You might find some players who are cool with you using your FT tech, but that's just the thing; they have to be okay with it, otherwise you shouldn't try. Don't try to force it on other players.

2) USD as in universal standard dollar is the same as the NSD, and the United States Dollar does not generally exist in the NSworld (though sometimes it does, for specific people and specific RPs). I'd just go ahead and consider them the same.

[Milograd]

Couple of questions I've had.

Is it considered acceptable for an MT-nation purchase products from an FT storefront, as well as field them?

Also, is the currency NSD equal to, lesser than, or greater than USD in value? How much exactly?

Thanks a lot, guys.

I'd advise against buying FT weapons from a FT storefront for a MT nation.

I'm pretty sure NSD and USD are actually the same thing. Iirc USD is used because "Nationstates Dollar" refers to the game itself which wouldn't make much sense in RP. Universal standard dollar sounds more pleasing and makes more sense in a IC sense.

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Acknowledged.

Thanks, I appreciate the information.